Don't Leave Me

[Craziie]

Dont' leave Me

Please, don't leave
I beg of you, don't leave me here
You are my last brother
I want to cherish you longer
You were suppose to be there for me
And never hurt me
You promised
When I had no one
You were there
Always
Never did you leave me
When everyone turned
You stayed
I've lost a brother already
Who I sworn to protect
but I failed
I cannot bare to see you turn
your back and walk away
You promised, didn't you?
Did you lie?
If you leave, I will be the only one
left
so Don't leave me, please
You're my brother and
I love you
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Storyline:This is about a girl's older brother leaving and her being the last child that her mother has with her. When her brother isn't with her, she feels lonely and hurt, so she doesn't want him to leave.


Little rusty on poems, been an ice age since I made one. =D
Anyways, tell me what you think.

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I think what most people know about loneliness is that even with a huge group of people literally being all around you. You still feel alone and no one is there, and if someone who leaves who is like your everything (family, gf/bf,friend) leaves. You just feel truly alone because they filled that empty seat when no one else would.
And that is how the girl in my poem feels.

Inspiration from: The song Medicine By Daughter

Thanks for reading my depressing poem,lol.

 

[Blinkie Uchiha]

I like it, listening to 'Medicine by Daughter' now : )

 

[Shichi]

It's good, I like it

:T_T: But It's Depressing, Panda-sama :T_T: Why So Serious? :NO:

 

[cigi]

yep, it great!

 

[Young Thug]

lame



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*virtual audience starts to boo*

 

[Strata Uchiha]

In real life, I can actually relate greatly to this writing passage.

Strata Uchiha approves of this message.

 

[LitAquarius]

I really liked this one. Good work.

 

[Οdin]

lame



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*virtual audience starts to boo*

Tell Yasu to come back... I miss her. u_u

 

[Tingun]

lame



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*virtual audience starts to boo*

This, and only this.

 

[Young Thug]

Tell Yasu to come back... I miss her. u_u

just make a tumblr and talk to her on there

 

[Craziie]

just make a tumblr and talk to her on there

Can we keep this thread on topic. That would be great.

Thanks.

Going through all this trouble... smh.

*Logs in*

Same goes for you. If you want to discuss the conversation further on. Do it in your own threads or your profiles. Not mines.

 

[Οdin]

just make a tumblr and talk to her on there

Going through all this trouble... smh.

*Logs in*

 

[Naijakid]

Its beautiful....I love it

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Listen my sister , Even i leave you
I'll always be in your heart
Never leaving your side
If you feel lonely
Call my name and close your eyes
You will feel I'm there
Closer to you

I can understand it for extent because my older sister move to another town after her marriage and we were pretty close .

 

[Noni]

Its nice but you must be clingy.