[CJ] Deviation and Sonelion Trade

[Deviation]

Aight man. Want to teach you this:

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(Raiton: Asahi) - Lightning Release: Rising Sun
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user dashes forward towards their opponent whilst channeling lightning-type chakra to their sword. The user unsheathes his sword and performs an upwards slash that releases a lightning shuriken that launches the enemy upwards and continues traveling past him. The user jumps in the air and performs several slashes with their sword, the final attack being the shuriken coming down and striking the enemy towards the ground ending in an explosion of lightning. The shuriken itself acts as a sort of boomerang, being willed by the user's chakra. This allows him to direct it's course in short range should the enemy be able to move but can only be done while airborne.
Note: Can only be used 3x per battle
Note: No Lightning Release techniques in the same turn

For one of yours:

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(Raiton: Jigoku No Haaku) - Lightning Release: Hell's Grasp
Type: Offenseive/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will perform four handseals while charging raiton chakra before slamming their hand on the ground or on a scroll while releasing the stored chakra in the form of three clones with dimensions of 3ftx1ft. These clones will charge at the opponent at slightly boosted speed before hugging the target(s) releasing their somewhat solid form, turning into raw lightning and shocking the selected target causing paralyses and a slight numbing effect.
Notes:
~ Can only be taught/used by Sonnelion
~ Requires one turn breaks between use
~ Clones cannot do anything besides charging the target and shock them
~ Paralyses lasts for at most 5 seconds, relative to the opponent’s chakra nature
~ Thrown free-form weapons have no effect on these clones
~ They cannot seperate further than 2 feet and are connected by a thin string of lightning chakra.
~ No lightning S rank or above in the following turn, useable 4 times

 

[Sonnelion]

Aight man. Want to teach you this:

Spoiler

(Raiton: Asahi) - Lightning Release: Rising Sun
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user dashes forward towards their opponent whilst channeling lightning-type chakra to their sword. The user unsheathes his sword and performs an upwards slash that releases a lightning shuriken that launches the enemy upwards and continues traveling past him. The user jumps in the air and performs several slashes with their sword, the final attack being the shuriken coming down and striking the enemy towards the ground ending in an explosion of lightning. The shuriken itself acts as a sort of boomerang, being willed by the user's chakra. This allows him to direct it's course in short range should the enemy be able to move but can only be done while airborne.
Note: Can only be used 3x per battle
Note: No Lightning Release techniques in the same turn

For one of yours:

Spoiler

(Raiton: Jigoku No Haaku) - Lightning Release: Hell's Grasp
Type: Offenseive/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will perform four handseals while charging raiton chakra before slamming their hand on the ground or on a scroll while releasing the stored chakra in the form of three clones with dimensions of 3ftx1ft. These clones will charge at the opponent at slightly boosted speed before hugging the target(s) releasing their somewhat solid form, turning into raw lightning and shocking the selected target causing paralyses and a slight numbing effect.
Notes:
~ Can only be taught/used by Sonnelion
~ Requires one turn breaks between use
~ Clones cannot do anything besides charging the target and shock them
~ Paralyses lasts for at most 5 seconds, relative to the opponent’s chakra nature
~ Thrown free-form weapons have no effect on these clones
~ They cannot seperate further than 2 feet and are connected by a thin string of lightning chakra.
~ No lightning S rank or above in the following turn, useable 4 times

A crimson cloud of smoke appears along with Lucifer on top of his ninken within, which you would see once the smoke clears.

Ok, I'm here sorry for the tardiness. I would like to learn your first since I forgot how the training method selected works.

 

[Deviation]

Tsunade just stares at the young man's entrance while she crosses her arms.

"Normally I use taijutsu but a sword is necessary for this technique. Now then this technique isn't that complicated but takes your utmost concentration and manipulation of your chakra."

*hands him a scroll with the technique*

"So analyze it for me and give me your opinion."

 

[Sonnelion]

Tsunade just stares at the young man's entrance while she crosses her arms.

"Normally I use taijutsu but a sword is necessary for this technique. Now then this technique isn't that complicated but takes your utmost concentration and manipulation of your chakra."

*hands him a scroll with the technique*

"So analyze it for me and give me your opinion."

You have to quote otherwise it's a process coming back here and I don't know.

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ok

Looks at her chest as he receives the scroll before stepping backwards and sitting down to read the scroll. After about 3 minutes he begins to speak.

I would say that this is a good close combat ability but has a downside which is the amount of concentration it takes to perform as well as the fact that it is easily countered by the opponent if they can dodge the initial attack or stop it mid-way through. Also this has no defensive ability whatsoever. But the good side of this technique is that it is a combo that can easily lead into another move provided it isn't lightning. And although it isn't stated I would say it's safe to assume that the shuriken of lightning has some form of paralysis or the lightning explosion at the end.

 

[Deviation]

You have to quote otherwise it's a process coming back here and I don't know.

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ok

Looks at her chest as he receives the scroll before stepping backwards and sitting down to read the scroll. After about 3 minutes he begins to speak.

I would say that this is a good close combat ability but has a downside which is the amount of concentration it takes to perform as well as the fact that it is easily countered by the opponent if they can dodge the initial attack or stop it mid-way through. Also this has no defensive ability whatsoever. But the good side of this technique is that it is a combo that can easily lead into another move provided it isn't lightning. And although it isn't stated I would say it's safe to assume that the shuriken of lightning has some form of paralysis or the lightning explosion at the end.

No paralysis but that is a good idea I can use on a future update. Reason I say is it is tricky for it to be approved since paralysis is more restrictive.

Any questions?

 

[Sonnelion]

No paralysis but that is a good idea I can use on a future update. Reason I say is it is tricky for it to be approved since paralysis is more restrictive.

Any questions?

Nope, none at all since you cleared up the question already. Now lets move on to mine shall we.


Reaches behind him into a small pouch just above his spine to pull out the scroll containing the explanation of the jutsu as well as the breakdown. Once done he tosses it to Tsunade hoping she will catch is in time.

You know what to do analyze it and give your opinion.

 

[Deviation]

Nope, none at all since you cleared up the question already. Now lets move on to mine shall we.


Reaches behind him into a small pouch just above his spine to pull out the scroll containing the explanation of the jutsu as well as the breakdown. Once done he tosses it to Tsunade hoping she will catch is in time.

You know what to do analyze it and give your opinion.

Spoiler

(Raiton: Jigoku No Haaku) - Lightning Release: Hell's Grasp
Type: Offenseive/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will perform four handseals while charging raiton chakra before slamming their hand on the ground or on a scroll while releasing the stored chakra in the form of three clones with dimensions of 3ftx1ft. These clones will charge at the opponent at slightly boosted speed before hugging the target(s) releasing their somewhat solid form, turning into raw lightning and shocking the selected target causing paralyses and a slight numbing effect.
Notes:
~ Can only be taught/used by Sonnelion
~ Requires one turn breaks between use
~ Clones cannot do anything besides charging the target and shock them
~ Paralyses lasts for at most 5 seconds, relative to the opponent’s chakra nature
~ Thrown free-form weapons have no effect on these clones
~ They cannot seperate further than 2 feet and are connected by a thin string of lightning chakra.
~ No lightning S rank or above in the following turn, useable 4 times

This is a rather interesting jutsu I've come across. But first the critiques...

• Time (such as counting seconds) is irrelevant in our rp.
• One turn break in between use should not have to be there (IMO)
• 2 feet is too small tbh as short range is up to 5 meters (1 meter = 3.2 feet)
• Love the paralysis part though and pretty creative the way they work

Don't restrict yourself too much but that knowledge comes with experience. I appreciate you trusting me with this jutsu.