copy ninja of konoha chapter 9

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COPY NINJA OF KONOHA CHAPTER 9
As Jiriaya used his summoning a toad no taller than Jiriaya himself wearing full body armor appeared.
Jiriaya: Gamasuke I want you to cover me while I summon the two great toad sages.
Gamasuke: the two great sages!!!! Is this opponent this strong even for you?
Jiriaya: no this time I am in hurry I cannot allow anything bad to happen to Naruto
Kakuzu: (making quick hand seals) “earth style: rock spear throw”
The rocks formed like a spear in his hand and he threw it straight at Jiriaya.
But the rock spear was swiftly cut into two before it reached half the distance. Gamasuke appeared before Kakuzu his right hand holding a long samurai katana.

Gamasuke: hurry up Jiriaya
The fire and the wind mask opened their mouths and sent a huge fire ball and a huge wind sphere.
The two jutsu merged together and a fire ball at least 10 times its initial size charged at Gamasuke.
Meanwhile Jiriaya was in his meditating pose with strange blood markings drawn around his face.

Gamasuke: shit Jiriaya I am sorry I can’t complete my task but I will make sure that nothing happens to you.
He drove his sword in the ground and said “toad ninja art: dance of the steel blade.”
The swords erupted around Jiriaya as the fireball engulfed Gamasuke.
The fireball hit the blades and issued a huge blast covering the entire field in smoke.
Kakuzu: little child to think that he can take on someone like me. It’s time to go and help ukito.
But as the smoke cleared three pairs of eyes were seen.
Kakuzu: what is this?
As the smoke cleared Jiriaya could be seen with his sage mode on ma and pa frog were on his shoulders.
Ma: ah Jiriaya boy it has been like a decade since you last called us to aid. You told that girls don’t like this form.
Pa: shuddup ma Jiriaya won’t have called us if he didn’t need any help.
Jiriaya: ( I wish they stop yelling at my ear)
Kakuzu: hmm impressive ability but you look horrible.
The fire and wind rag dolls had began fusing together as Kakuzu made quick hand seals.
Kakuzu: “earth release: mud dragon charge.”
A mud dragon erupted from the ground a charged straight at Jiriaya.
Jiriaya: Ma, are you ready.
Ma: I am ready, “wind release: destruction air.”
Fierce air current slashed the mud dragon in to pieces.
The fire and wind mask again used their combined jutsu but this time Jiriaya jumped up and dodged the raging fire ball as the jutsu exploded Jiriaya stood before Kakuzu.
Jiriaya: this time it’s my turn ma use your wind chakra, pa use your fire chakra I will supply the oil. So let’s do it. “sage art: goemon”
The oil burned with a heavy magnitude it was creating heat wave everywhere.
The water mask opened its mouth and used “water style: water dragon”
The dragon became smoke upon contact with the fire jutsu,

Kakuzu: shit seems like there is no other way if I don’t sacrifice one of my hearts.
The water mask appeared in front of Kakuzu.
Kakuzu: now for the collaboration jutsu, “water style: water gun jutsu.”
The torrent of water hit the fire slowing its progress but soon it engulfed the water mask and Kakuzu. There was a blast as the smoke cleared the water mask was seen shattered with Kakuzu panting on the ground.
Kakuzu: I have lived nearly a century fought countless shinobi but a power of this magnitude it’s unbelievable
Pa: so what kid I have lived longer than you have this is senjutsu the strongest technique of the toads.
Jiriaya: and he was calling me old, horrible.
Kakuzu: it’s time that I play a bit safe.
He made a hand seal the ragdoll like structure flowed in to him. His muscles bulged as the black threads came out of it, his green eyes narrowed as the two remaining masks came out beside his head.
He jumped up using the threads to bind him to the rocks, making three hand seals in a quick speed.
“Fire and wind style collaboration jutsu: destruction wave of dragons”
Huge fire came at Jiriaya taking the shape of a dragon then split in to three dragons.
Jiriaya: damn Kakuzu I am in a hurry. “Shadow clone jutsu” two clones appeared beside him
Now “sage art: rasengan barrage” the shadow clones jumped holding the huge sphere of chakra in their hands straight at the dragons they collided with a dragon each forcing the dragons back while real Jiriaya lunged straight at Kakuzu when the third dragon came at him.
Jiriaya: “sage art: ultimate rasengan” a rasengan at least 10 times the previous ones collided with the dragon forcing it back.
The dragon disappeared Jiriaya’s clothes were torn and burnt in places but ma and pa were already healing him,
The rasengan hit Kakuzu in the chest who was sent flying crashing through the trees.

His masks shattered as he tried to stand up.
Kakuzu: damn I have never been pushed this bad.
Jiriaya lunged at him again but this time he had to change his course in the mid jump as several ice spikes came at him.
Jiriaya: “sage art: landscape demolition”
Sending his earth style chakra Jiriaya raised spikes of rocks in wave to the point where the ice spikes were originated from.
Ukito dodged some of the spikes for the rest he knew he can’t dodge touched his hand on the ground.
Ukito: “frost release: arctic sphere”
a sphere of solid ice covered him that repelled the oncoming rock spears.but the rock spears pierced even the ice dome though not doing much damage
Jiriaya: that guy is strong to be able to block my attack even when he is such a mess. It’s really worthy of the name of shinobi.
Kakuzu: Ukito what the **** has happened to you. Your left side is completely torn, not even the host of 5 tailed demon could do this to you.
Ukito: Kakuzu I have never faced a power like this, my ice attacks melted upon contact even my s ranked attacks could not harm him, he is truly a monster.
Kakuzu: shit even I cannot help you in this situation my hearts are all destroyed, we need to retreat pain Sama will need to do something about them.
Ukito: we both cannot escape Kakuzu, you go I will hold them off.
Kakuzu: that’s suicide Ukito don’t be mad.
Ukito: so be it I choose to do suicide,” ice release: frost cleaver”
A cleaver made of solid ice formed around his hand he lunged at Jiriaya who dodged his blade and kicked him in chest before ukito could recuperate appeared behind him and punched him shattering a lot of bones.
Ukito: (coughing up blood) I know I must die I am not going to stop until I take you out. Making rapid hand seals with one hand “frost release: chimera strike”
the chakra shaped into a huge chimera like beast and raged on to Jiriaya.
Jiriaya: bring it on “sage art: demon fire blast”
A huge blast of fire infused with the wind chakra of both ma and pa toads hit the chimera.
As the heat melted the ice it repaired again it looked like a stale mate until a red chakra tail grabbed ukito from behind dispelling the chimera and dragging him into the ice barrier he had made himself.
Jiriaya: thank you ma and thank you pa but this time I must do it myself.
The toads vanished as Jiriaya focused the nature’s chakra around him to sense what was going on he got a glimpse of Naruto in three tails as he slammed a red odama rasengan in to ukito..
Jiriaya: I see Naruto you have grown into a really powerful jinchuriki but can you control it.
Next chapter: the jinchuriki’s test.
chapter 8:

part 7:
part 6:
chapter 5:
chapter 4:
chapter 3:
chapter 2:
chapter 1:
blood:gift of kiyoshi:
blood: gift of kiyoshi part 2:
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Nice chapter n nice fights but jiraiya can beat both of them without sage mode. Looks like u r underestimate jiraiya. So there is no need of sage mode here.
Btw nice chaptr,nice job,keep it up bro.
 

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not to offend you bro but its kinda hard to see each characters personality. for eg: "Kakuzu: that’s suicide Ukito don’t be mad." kakuzu is a cold bast**d and wouldnt care less if ukito wanted to kill himself or not. what you should not try to do is to give off your own personailty within the characters. if they are mean, cold and dark, they will have to say things that will portray that. but other then that, the fight simulation is epic. :) +rep
 

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Thanx for the review @kyon i knw jman can do that bt when i did that people didnt like it they wanted to see jman having trouble stil in sage mode he just pwned them and @plat4nam kakuzu was a cold hearted bastard bt here i twisted it a bit making a bit more human.bt be assured you are gonna see hs dark side pretty soon.and ukito being a non cannon character wanted hm to be like deidara a bit.
 

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This was a good chapter for you.

Criticism I have are the battle dialouge between the characters. Kakuzu showed too much concern for Utiko. The fact that he acknowledged Utiko's sacrifice in the way you he did, was too much for his character. A response I'd expect from Kakuzu would be more along the lines of an insult for his stupidity in suggesting something, and then shouldering it off like he didn't really care. Like it was said before, Kakuzu's character isn't that way. Even if you wanted to give him a human atmosphere, it's altering the character as set down by Kishi. That's the think with utilizing actual characters from the main story, from what we've seen, we have those guidlines to follow for abilities and peronalities. On a lesser note, the banter with the age isn't needed. I mean in the last chapter it was used. In a conversation in battle, where each participant would toss insults at each other, it would change from one to another it wouldn't remain on one note. You had Kakuzu bring up his age and then Pa went right back at him, but you did that a little with Jiraiya and Kakuzu in the previous chap.

On a technical note, I'm not sure that Jiraiya could produce Oil. I believe it's specific to the toads. As far as I remember it's been the opposite way around where the toads provided the oil and Jiraya provided Katon jutsu, although it was probably just a typo.

Things I liked, the way you demonstrated the battle. Kakuzu and Jiraiya's battle to be more precise. You did a pretty good job with that overall, and I really don't have anything negative or critical to say about it. You strayed the focus away from Kakashi, which also struck me as a plus. Just like in the real Naruto series, despite it being about him there are moments in the series where it's not about him. It takes the focus off of the same old character and plot line and goes to another one. Jiraiya's fight with Pain in Shippuden, even though it had a lot to do with the main plot, it didn't have much to do with Naruto at that current moment. It wasn't about him getting stronger or about him and Sasuke. It was about the transition into war, discovering Akatsuki. The way you did this turned it away from your initial focus of Kakashi mastering his Mangekyou (Which is what I assume that is) and turned it over to Jiraiya's development of Naruto during the time interval, which I believe is a very important gap that has been left out in the main series, giving a lot of creative writers like yourself a lot of liberties and creativity with it.

Overall a very good chapter
 
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