Hey guys, I've always been interested in writing, but I haven't really written for fun until recently. This was among my first short stories I've written and I was hoping for some feedback or criticism :3. Sorry if this sucks, I don't know what the quality level of the writing base is like and I might have fallen far below it x.x
It's a short (really short) story, so sorry if those aren't really supposed to be here :s.
Tonight he was different, but I couldn’t put my finger on it. There was something about the way he walked over to me that gave it away, he had a fire in his eyes. His determination to confront me wasn’t going to be stopped by anyone standing in his way, I could recognize this by the way his eyes never left mine. He made his way over to my table and sat down next to me, practically on top of me.
“Care for a dance?” A slight grin was on his face. I felt a shiver go through my body as he whispered it into my ear. I couldn’t smell any alcohol under his breath; I had a puzzled look on my face. I was hesitant to reply, as I was about to do so, he began kissing my neck from top to bottom. I rose out of my seat immediately, red was appearing on my cheeks, and he soon followed. We made our way to the dance floor and he grabbed my hand from behind. I turned and put my arm over his shoulder.
His feet moved swiftly and strongly, it was difficult for me to keep up, but a challenge never stopped me before. He spun me out and brought me back in, still moving to the rhythm of the music. He dipped me down quickly and went in for a kiss on the lips, I pushed him off of me and stood back up. He had a confused look on his face followed by a quick grin, the fire in his eyes were brighter than ever. He quickened his pace, and soon the entire room began to make a circle around us to watch us dance.
I wasn’t going to let him dominate me like that, I pulled out my arms to spin him out, he didn’t realize what I was queuing at first, but he quickly caught on and reluctantly spun out. I had the control now, I quickened my pace, I want to challenge him. Our steps were much faster, much more fluid than earlier. He followed my footsteps and had visible trouble keeping up. I dipped him and went in for a kiss, in which he pushed me away as well. A smile went across my face as I understood what this meant; he was up for a challenge as well.
Before anything else could happen, the song ended. We stood still, both of us breathing heavily. We both had slight smiles of satisfaction on our faces as we went to kiss each other; the crowd cheered.
I didn’t realize what he was trying to accomplish until later that night whilst laying in my bed. It wasn’t about him coming over to me, controlling me on the dance floor. It wasn’t about him showing his dominance in our relationship, or him trying to get into my pants. It was him giving me a challenge. He was testing to me see what I had, to see if I could persevere and turn a confusing situation around for the better. And that’s why I love him.
It's a short (really short) story, so sorry if those aren't really supposed to be here :s.
♫Come Sway With Me♫
Sorry, couldn't think of a good title
Sorry, couldn't think of a good title
Tonight he was different, but I couldn’t put my finger on it. There was something about the way he walked over to me that gave it away, he had a fire in his eyes. His determination to confront me wasn’t going to be stopped by anyone standing in his way, I could recognize this by the way his eyes never left mine. He made his way over to my table and sat down next to me, practically on top of me.
“Care for a dance?” A slight grin was on his face. I felt a shiver go through my body as he whispered it into my ear. I couldn’t smell any alcohol under his breath; I had a puzzled look on my face. I was hesitant to reply, as I was about to do so, he began kissing my neck from top to bottom. I rose out of my seat immediately, red was appearing on my cheeks, and he soon followed. We made our way to the dance floor and he grabbed my hand from behind. I turned and put my arm over his shoulder.
His feet moved swiftly and strongly, it was difficult for me to keep up, but a challenge never stopped me before. He spun me out and brought me back in, still moving to the rhythm of the music. He dipped me down quickly and went in for a kiss on the lips, I pushed him off of me and stood back up. He had a confused look on his face followed by a quick grin, the fire in his eyes were brighter than ever. He quickened his pace, and soon the entire room began to make a circle around us to watch us dance.
I wasn’t going to let him dominate me like that, I pulled out my arms to spin him out, he didn’t realize what I was queuing at first, but he quickly caught on and reluctantly spun out. I had the control now, I quickened my pace, I want to challenge him. Our steps were much faster, much more fluid than earlier. He followed my footsteps and had visible trouble keeping up. I dipped him and went in for a kiss, in which he pushed me away as well. A smile went across my face as I understood what this meant; he was up for a challenge as well.
Before anything else could happen, the song ended. We stood still, both of us breathing heavily. We both had slight smiles of satisfaction on our faces as we went to kiss each other; the crowd cheered.
I didn’t realize what he was trying to accomplish until later that night whilst laying in my bed. It wasn’t about him coming over to me, controlling me on the dance floor. It wasn’t about him showing his dominance in our relationship, or him trying to get into my pants. It was him giving me a challenge. He was testing to me see what I had, to see if I could persevere and turn a confusing situation around for the better. And that’s why I love him.
