In the beginning, it sound like you were mumbling. The lyrics were mediocre. And needs a better hook.
Nice beat tho.
As a rap artist myself I can tell you right now that you have potential. You just have to work on a few things with your flow and sound. Did you edit and master the song? If so you really need to work on that the most because the quality of your voice was not good. Keep doing what you do though bro you can only get better.