Check this out guys-Its awesome

[NarutAwesome]

WASSUP guys, so give my new song a listen called ILLUSIONS, I recorded this some time ago but I'm dropping it now. LIKE COMMENT AND SUBSCRIBE!!!!

Since I recorded this some time ago its really isn't my full potential. But I would still love feedback.

[video=youtube_share;rUe2SJXNIpQ]http://youtu.be/rUe2SJXNIpQ[/video]

 

[Punk Hazard]

Let a couple hours pass in between threads bro, posting them so quick might turn people off from your music.

 

[NarutAwesome]

Let a couple hours pass in between threads bro, posting them so quick might turn people off from your music.

oh shit I didnt think of it that way :/...thanks for lemme me know that lol,

 

[Troyg39]

Same thing I told you before man, you're trying to put too many words and syllables into these lines. It's messing up your flow plus it's making you slur your words. Lots of rappers are lyrically talented but aren't poppin because they lack delivery, flow, and sound. Slow it down a bit, work on conveying the same thought with less words (which will improve your overall ability to write rhymes) and work on keeping your flow as smooth as possible with the beat so that even when you switch flow, it'll be more fluid

 

[cigi]

Its alrite but too much echo bruh

 

[Biscoe Uzumaki]

Same thing I told you before man, you're trying to put too many words and syllables into these lines. It's messing up your flow plus it's making you slur your words. Lots of rappers are lyrically talented but aren't poppin because they lack delivery, flow, and sound. Slow it down a bit, work on conveying the same thought with less words (which will improve your overall ability to write rhymes) and work on keeping your flow as smooth as possible with the beat so that even when you switch flow, it'll be more fluid

^^^ True words.
OP I haven't listened yet but after I finish my own little session I will.

 

[Mugen Ryukyu]

Yeah I agree with troy, same thing I said on your "I feel that" thread.

 

[Biscoe Uzumaki]

the hook was nice everything just needs more clarity and that echo needs a solution.