Check out my rap song

[NarutAwesome]

while most of us wait for judging or our person to respond I was wondering if you guys could help me with my new rap. It's meant to sound different. Its not gangsta rap like Chief Keef or heart felt rap like emimen. it's inbetween. something like jay-z and kanye would make. lol. I'm not comparing my self to them. nooooooooooooo. not even in the lightest sense. lol. besides chief keef cause he sucks

I havent heard a rapper rap about shit getting real before so its new. It's not finished yet. I have to finish the last 2 bars in verse 2 and I still have to do verse 3. so...

do it sound different?
how is it?
should I add and take off stuff?
The song is meant to sound tough. do it accomplish that?

here it is, enjoy

Spoiler

This shit just got real
3rd base for the steal
These boyz on the sidewalk
Cause I’m king of the hill
It’s a deal or no deal
I’m popping niggas like pills
If a bitch mess with me
No words, they get killed
I’m tired of these games
Man, ma flow so insane
Man, These boyz say that we’re brothers
But our blood aint the same man
And that’s word to the bitches
I’m stacking racks – all ma riches
I’m the illest you ever heard
So you know I’m the sickest
And ya’ll can talk to the hand
Cause ma money aint listening
Ya’ll boyz blinded by ma light
No, that’s ma gold glistenin’
So ya’ll should go home and pray
That I let ya’ll see another day
I make it rain like its April
Money trees growin’ in May

This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real

All eyes on me
Cause I’m king of the hill
And if bitches ask why
Cause this shit just got real

This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real

All eyes on me
Cause I’m king of the hill
And if bitches ask why
Cause this shit just got real

This shit just got real
Yo girl I’m go steal
These boyz at the last suppa
They aint getting no meals
I got they destiny sealed
I’m doing this for the thrills
I see so many fakes
Cause I’m the only one real
And what I say is true
Cause these lies don’t fit
Ask the the mirror on the wall
It’ll say that I’m the shit
And victory is a must
Talkin’ cash I’m in no rush
Cause ma money always come
Like a wait for the bus
I’m striking down like thunder
Cause ma nickname is zeus
And I got these niggas scared
Cause like a dog I’m loose

needs 2 more bars


This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real

All eyes on me
Cause I’m king of the hill
And if bitches ask why
Cause this shit just got real

This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real

All eyes on me
Cause I’m king of the hill
And if bitches ask why
Cause this shit just got real

verse 3 needed


This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real

All eyes on me
Cause I’m king of the hill
And if bitches ask why
Cause this shit just got real

This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real
This shit just got real

All eyes on me
Cause I’m king of the hill
And if bitches ask why
Cause this shit just got real

 

[Naruto No Kami]

make a video of it!

 

[Ōkami]

when a song has the line " This shit just got real" 31 times it's the very definition or repetitive

 

[NarutAwesome]

when a song has the line " This shit just got real" 31 times it's the very definition or repetitive

really bro

 

[Ciao]

isn't a rap just called a rap, not a 'rap song'?

 

[NarutAwesome]

isn't a rap just called a rap, not a 'rap song'?

lol, so true

 

[Ōkami]

really bro

ya really

 

[NarutAwesome]

ya really

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[The Demonic Kazekage]

its ok,but hard to really like cuz we dont have a beat to go along with the lyrics

 

[Jordanofthecloud]

Big Sean taught you well. For the chorus

 

[NarutAwesome]

Big Sean taught you well.

lol, what? ....thanks?