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[NarutAwesome]

So I'm doing a "written free verse" on this beat, lemme know how it sound, I wrote it last night so it may not be the best yet lol, i still have a lot to go lol

if u read it along with the beat you'll be fine

starts at 0:28

[video=youtube_share;DNBHVlobUeE]http://youtu.be/DNBHVlobUeE[/video]

My shit be rolling in the deep, got that adele type flow
no key to lock the game, face recognition code
give ya ears freezer burn, damn, ma words be so cold
snitches get stitches, haters act like they aint even know
cuz I'm on, I stay on like a one way light switch
rappers like bathrooms, different toilets but same shit
no pen in ma hand, rewrite history real quick
killing rappers in the game, thats that hunger game type shit
spit fire but flow cold,soooo guess I'm bi-polar
lyrical beast that eat rappers, got that eating dis-order
killed the mic and the verse, damn, on trial for murder
killed the game and players, now I'm on trial for slaughter

I got too many niggas scared. tryna break ma lyrical barrier
when I’m an aircraft carrier, you’re a toy manchester terrier
expose your exterior, you fake, look in the mirror
fuk the filter, this picture couldn’t get any clearer
wipe the floor with ya face, mr. myagi, no janitor
wings in ma back like an angel, I’m forever sinner
I’m forever a killer, I’m forever a reaper, been through hell and back, now watch me walk out the fire

I don’t need a fifth of vodka cuz I’m already gone
so this slur in ma flow, is just ma natural zone
eyes red like the devil, no sir I’m not stoned
it since I came out the womb, the rap throne was ma home
born king to put it bluntly, i’ll fight for my country
pull yo verse out the beat, shoot it up with this magazine
niggas all washed up, I’m nasty like dirty laundry
haters say I’m an ass, so ma flow be going donkey
when I’m done with the mic, its hot as hell like a torch
you wanna bring shit to ma game, then step up on ma court
I’m not talking bout scissors, when I say you aint make the cut
cuz in this rapping sport brah you aint getting play time that much

dogs barking shit but they nurtured so give those balls to these rappers
cuz they acting like pussies, I got them whipped like a master
finna go into war, mic as a sword and the hammer of thor, poseidon's trident and the devils pitchfork cuz til I die I’ll to protect the people I’ll die for

 

[Fair Warning]

Hmm, seems like every other thread you make is exactly like this.

And the rap aint bad, but it could use less...product placement

 

[NarutAwesome]

Hmm, seems like every other thread you make is exactly like this.

And the rap aint bad, but it could use less...product placement

yeah, still working on more metaphors, i feel u but thats just the general stuff, i gotta dig in deeper now

 

[Katkot]

Rap music is dead since 90's ...


R.I.P rap music U_U

 

[Hypemaster]

I like it so far brah

 

[NarutAwesome]

Rap music is dead since 90's ...


R.I.P rap music U_U

from that quote u must not know rap at all, smdh, ignorance is bliss sometimes i guess

 

[Dribbles]

This guy is correct, but he's not very nice.

No one is interested in straight rap anymore, you'll only find the "less-educated" part of the world's community thoroughly listening to it, but other then that it's really stale now. 90% of it is vulgar garbage and the other 10% has so many ups and downs when it comes to quality that it's not worth searching for good material.

You have talent, I can't deny that. But you should really put your talents into something that more people will appreciate. ( If you want praise, or any recognition that is )