[Adventure] Chapter 1- Neji's Journey (my first fanfiction) preview

[Lokus Hatake]

Neji woke up and a sudden urge to cry fell upon him. What was he thinking, how could he have done what he did. Then he realized why he jumped, why he leaped, why he sacrificed himself to save Hinata. This was why he was here, in a dark shallow room.Neji's tears couldn't hold. Who was he and how did that affect his destiny. In the Leaf he was the silent ,smart, brave ninja ,but in his heart he was a wimpy crybaby. The tears rushed like a waterfall. Why was he crying, because he died or because of his heart and what he had to live through. A light beamed out of nowhere. This light was so bright Neji's couldn't stand it. A figure showed up. Neji's tears just fell faster than ever before. The figure was his FATHER. Neji could barely talk. "So son ,how've you been" he said.

Please tell me if this story is good enough.

Thanks

Lokus Hatake

 

[SBL7]

It was alright, but keep it up.

 

[Lokus Hatake]

thank you very much

 

[jagdamba]

Quite gud. Make more intresting.

 

[Lokus Hatake]

thank you very much

 

[Klad]

Interesing... Keep it up. I will read it every ch.

 

[Hori]

wellmade fan fic :ls:

 

[Lokus Hatake]

thanks
your geat