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I need advice and some help to make my villain better. My writing skills are super rusty. I decided to take a break and trust me I've written a lot of short stories and novel long stories as well. So please be patient with me.
Hero To Villain Story: Warning Long Story
So there it is. Sorry for making it long, but I really do need help. I'm embarrassed to say what this story is for. It's a AO3 story. :NO:
Villain's Name: Darius Bryson
Nationality: Mixed Race (African American/Caucasian)
Skin Color: Light Tan
Height: 6'2
Build: Well Built
Powers & Abilities:
Weather Manipulation
Weather Immunity & Empowerment
Nationality: Mixed Race (African American/Caucasian)
Skin Color: Light Tan
Height: 6'2
Build: Well Built
Powers & Abilities:
Weather Manipulation
Weather Immunity & Empowerment
Hero To Villain Story: Warning Long Story
Darius was one of the most recognized heroes as he worked with others to save people. He was also one of the most feared among villains. He became a villain after learning that a few of his superiors, who was made of government, military officials, and scientists were hiding a dark secret.
During the late 1950s, a villainous group called The Shadow Troupe formed out of five supers, who were experimented on by the government during the rise of supers around the world, which started around the 1920s. The leader, Kris Cutler aka Psionic, wanted to save his sister, who the government called a dangerous weapon and placed in captivity. His sister possessed all psionic abilities and could possible destroy the entire world without a thought. They labeled her with the name S-41 (41st Super to be experimented on) and told their heroes nothing about the truth. They even killed Supers before shutting the program down to hide it in 1946. They covered it up.
One of the heroes was Darius' father, James aka Bolt. He along with a team of heroes tried to apprehend the Troupe, but were outmatched and beaten senseless. The leader of the team, David aka Smash, was kidnapped. Psionic used his genius intellect to corrupt him with cybernetics and turn him into a killing machine. Smash killed his team members except James, who he almost killed in a fight between the two. His corruption got out of hand after James stunned him, which made the cybernetics go haywire. He turned on the Troupe, killing them and badly injuring Psionic. He went insane.
Smash was taken out by James while Psionic was locked away. One of the scientist reopened the case with Psionic's sister. He and his superiors wanted to make the perfect super soldier WHO THEY WANTED TO HAVE COMPLETE CONTROL OVER. They decided to use Psionic's cybernetics like he used on Smash and use it on his sister. James figured it out. But in the end, they failed after she went insane, destroyed the secluded lab area, and killed him. Thus, they locked her up in solitary prison that neutralizes her powers, and put her in a deep sedated sleep forever.
James and Smash were honored. Their deaths were covered up and blamed on Psionic. Darius learned the truth and attempted to assassinate those who were involved. He was defeated by Smash's son and imprisoned. But now, almost a decade later, he has escaped with a team of villains by his side, and he's coming after his children, who he wants to join his cause. He wants to finish what he started as everyone learns the devastating truth.
During the late 1950s, a villainous group called The Shadow Troupe formed out of five supers, who were experimented on by the government during the rise of supers around the world, which started around the 1920s. The leader, Kris Cutler aka Psionic, wanted to save his sister, who the government called a dangerous weapon and placed in captivity. His sister possessed all psionic abilities and could possible destroy the entire world without a thought. They labeled her with the name S-41 (41st Super to be experimented on) and told their heroes nothing about the truth. They even killed Supers before shutting the program down to hide it in 1946. They covered it up.
One of the heroes was Darius' father, James aka Bolt. He along with a team of heroes tried to apprehend the Troupe, but were outmatched and beaten senseless. The leader of the team, David aka Smash, was kidnapped. Psionic used his genius intellect to corrupt him with cybernetics and turn him into a killing machine. Smash killed his team members except James, who he almost killed in a fight between the two. His corruption got out of hand after James stunned him, which made the cybernetics go haywire. He turned on the Troupe, killing them and badly injuring Psionic. He went insane.
Smash was taken out by James while Psionic was locked away. One of the scientist reopened the case with Psionic's sister. He and his superiors wanted to make the perfect super soldier WHO THEY WANTED TO HAVE COMPLETE CONTROL OVER. They decided to use Psionic's cybernetics like he used on Smash and use it on his sister. James figured it out. But in the end, they failed after she went insane, destroyed the secluded lab area, and killed him. Thus, they locked her up in solitary prison that neutralizes her powers, and put her in a deep sedated sleep forever.
James and Smash were honored. Their deaths were covered up and blamed on Psionic. Darius learned the truth and attempted to assassinate those who were involved. He was defeated by Smash's son and imprisoned. But now, almost a decade later, he has escaped with a team of villains by his side, and he's coming after his children, who he wants to join his cause. He wants to finish what he started as everyone learns the devastating truth.
So there it is. Sorry for making it long, but I really do need help. I'm embarrassed to say what this story is for. It's a AO3 story. :NO:
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