Black Despair

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Black despair Part 2 "Hostage"

BLACK despair

PART TWO
"HOSTAGE"

[Setting change: Underground sub-department]

Narrator: The child did not sit well with the abductor and so he began to kick and scream. This action proved to be naïve as the assailant knocked him out via strike at the neck area. The sly assailant then entered a nearby village. However does it, in an infiltration manner even though he resides in that very village. The two finally arrived and this cunning male began to make his way through vast divisions with the passed out child in arms.

[Setting change: Elder leader’s chamber]

Assailant #2: This is where your life is decided…

Narrator: Was said to the child in a low tone and yet to his surprise the child gradually opened his eyes. *thump* *thump* *thump* Faster and faster did the distressed child’s heartbeat, in which quickly filled in the silence that surrounded the two. He then began to have a panic attack. Heavy panting and commotions just right before the closed door which held his fate *knock*

Assailant’s elder leader: Come in

Character Insight - Elder leader:

● A main character
● Gender: Male
● Hair color: Unknown
● Eye color: Unknown
● Face: Partially masked

Assailant #2: I brought this child and I think he might be a spy

Narrator: Still with everlasting commotion made it difficult for the assailant to contain.

Assailant #2: Ryuuta came to the conclusion that I should bring him to you and he decided to stay a little longer

Elder Leader: I see…(In thought) By the looks of it, this child does not seem the type however even if he is a spy incognito, I can turn this around into my favor

Character Insight - Assailant #1’s identity revealed:

● Name: Ryuuta (a code name given to the shinobi Torune in present time) (added)
● Classification: ANBU (added)
● Occupation: ANBU Root shinobi (added)
● Affiliation: Konohagakure, Root (added)
● Hair color: Black (added)
● Eye color: Unknown (due to a mask with built-in glasses) (added)
● Face: Porcelain animal mask (only in missions) (added)
● Family: Aburame Ichizoku (added)
● Weapons: Tantou, kunai (added)

Narrator: He stood a foot away as he faced the elderly man with bandages covering his forehead as well as his eye and had a hand placed atop a wooden cane that leaned against a cathedral-like chair. The child’s body would not cease in trembling. An eerie stare via the elder seemed to pierce the child in which was how he felt as if that elderly man could transparently see right through him. A wooded cane then arises in the young child’s direction.

Elder leader: I have decided your fate

Elder leader: (Continued) I will recruit you into my organization

Assailant #2: (In thought) This child has just been given a second chance at life

Narrator: Rising to his feet, the elder took a few steps towards the child and prepared to use his sealing technique whilst the frantic child took several steps backwards and bumped into the assailant. When the child slightly turned his head, the elder grasped his neck and in doing so initiated a sealing technique. Black bar-like lines began to envelop the child’s body as it almost instantly immobilized him. A single distinct seal eventually formed upon his tongue. This certain seal stretched from the back of his tongue and ended mid-way leaving space between seal and the tip of his tongue. Its appearance had distinct shapes containing three solid lines initially followed by two broken lines. Afterwards, the full body sealing started to fade in place thus had been a success. Dropping to his knees, drenched in sweat, the child spit up from the intensity of having his body incapacitated for that brief moment.

Elder leader: …Release him

Assailant #2: Yes sir

Elder leader: You may now leave us Kou and guard the entrance

Character Insight - Assailant #2’s identity revealed:

● Name: Kou (a code name given to the shinobi Fuu in current time) (added)
● Classification: ANBU (added)
● Occupation: ANBU Root shinobi (added)
● Affiliation: Konohagakure, Root (added)
● Hair color: Auburn (added)
● Eye color: Pale yellow (added)
● Face: Porcelain animal mask (only in missions) (added)
● Family: Yamanaka Ichizoku
● Weapons: Tantou (added)

Kou: Yes sir

Narrator: He did as asked, bowed and exited.

Elder leader: I have just placed a seal on your tongue that will leave you paralyzed and unable to speak should you ever attempt to leak out any at all intel about me or my operations

Elder leader: (Continued) I will now commence in notifying you with what will be needed to support me Danzou your leader and my organization; Root

Character Insight - Elder leader’s identity revealed:

● Name: Danzou (known as Shimura Danzou in current time) (added)
● Occupation: Root Leader (added)
● Affiliation: Konohagakure, Root (added)
● Hair color: Black (added)
● Eye color: Black (added)
● Face: Masked (forehead and one eye covered) (added)

Organization insight - Root revealed:

● ANBU subsidiary
● Founder: Danzou
● Purpose: Village’s protection
● Priority: Secrecy
● Activities: Training, missions in the dark

Danzou: (Continued) You will be living, fed and trained here. Your personality, any personal connections and your name will all be stricken from the person you are currently known as and most importantly is to hold our secrecy with the upmost regard

Danzou: (Continued) This is all expected of you whilst living here and if you ever resist know this…

Danzou: I will not hesitate to have you erased from existence

Child: *panting*

Danzou: I can assure you that this new life will offer you structure and with your help, my organization will help keep this village out of harm’s way

Danzou: (Continued) I am more than sure that you will choose the right choice, so what is your answer?

Danzou: A Life serving me or death?

Child: I..I….I want to live!

Danzou: I knew you would accept the correct choice

Danzou: (Continued) Kou!

Kou: Yes?

Danzou: I have informed him and I want him transferred to an unoccupied room

Danzou: You will be his guide for tomorrow

Kou: Understood

Third part will be released next week, same day, titled Imprisonment (Look for it!).


















 
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i was suprised...
i never would have guessed that the story will lead
to where it is now...maybe some action next chapter..
and may i say again
your writing style is unique in someway
but i cant put my finger on it...
nice vocabulary,but besides that nice job...
 

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Wow pretty good if i do say so myself. I find myself waiting to see whats going to happen next and then throwing Danzo in there, mixing it up and revealing just enough to keep me reading. Can't wait til next weeks addition!
 

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i was suprised...
i never would have guessed that the story will lead
to where it is now...maybe some action next chapter..
and may i say again
your writing style is unique in someway
but i cant put my finger on it...
nice vocabulary,but besides that nice job...
Thanks for your compliments and yes this Fanfic is about Root and what not lol It is my very first and so I thought why not start myself off with something out of Naruto for now and in the future after I have learned and practiced would I expand myself towards an original Fanfiction. There definetly could be action in the following part and then I guess we?ll see ^.^

Wow pretty good if i do say so myself. I find myself waiting to see whats going to happen next and then throwing Danzo in there, mixing it up and revealing just enough to keep me reading. Can't wait til next weeks addition!
Thanks again for your support! Yes there are some old faces lol I indeed hope that I can continue to excite and entertain my viewers with my Fanfic. Thanks ^.^​
 

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Wow - very good and surprising ^^
I never would have guessed, that you take a part of naruto - very nice!
Just carry on! ;)
 

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Oh:eek: Had no idea that it would lead to this. Nice to see that you`re following in your rival Kenshin`s track starting of with something Naruto related. I`m sure that you`ll someday pass him;)

I must agree with some of the other comments. Great vocalbury and nice story so far, looking forward to the next part;):D

Prediction: The child is definetivly SAI!:p;)
 

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Oh:eek: Had no idea that it would lead to this. Nice to see that you`re following in your rival Kenshin`s track starting of with something Naruto related. I`m sure that you`ll someday pass him;)

I must agree with some of the other comments. Great vocalbury and nice story so far, looking forward to the next part;):D

Prediction: The child is definetivly SAI!:p;)


same here:D
 

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Wow - very good and surprising ^^
I never would have guessed, that you take a part of naruto - very nice!
Just carry on! ;)
Thanks, yes I thought I would go Naruto with my very first Fanfic but it is practice for when I do something original ^.^

great part two :) Just when I read the sealing technique part I figured out it was connected to Danzo and Root
Yeah, I gave away many identities and it is only the second part but there are more surprises on the way :D

Agree.. I'm liking this one as well.
Arigatou ^.^

surprising. i also thought that it's not in the narutoverse. nice.
Wow, I am astonished that I was able to stray away from anything Naruto-related even though my Fanfic is tied to that manga : )

Oh:eek: Had no idea that it would lead to this. Nice to see that you`re following in your rival Kenshin`s track starting of with something Naruto related. I`m sure that you`ll someday pass him;)

I must agree with some of the other comments. Great vocalbury and nice story so far, looking forward to the next part;):D

Prediction: The child is definetivly SAI!:p;)
True, I thought why not Naruto just as Kenshin did. He continued climbing up afterwards and I was like maybe that is a good start for me as well. Thanks, that would be some kind of feat to surpass him. Thanks again and of course I will not concur with your prediction however, everybody will just have to continue tuning in for answers ^.^​
 

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Kuroi so far your first work surpasses my first work. You are in the good trail to follow the best there is in this forum.
Thanks for your support Kenshin-dono as it is always appreciated -.^

yeah this dude got talent.
Arigatou! ^.^

Part 3 is out;):

Arigatou for the advertisement lol XD

I really love it!!
Nice story with a unique kind of story technique
Arigatou gozaimasu as I am pleased to see that my work is complimented ^.^​
 
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