behold of my great poetry!!!

[ThE ReFLEcTiOn]

i wrote this poem and thought you all should read it as it gives a certain lesson to everyone. please tell whether its good or not.

THE LITTLE THINGS

In this big hall
The little things wail and crawl
Life passes them by
But they still haven't tried
To take what was always theirs
Because they had no time to stand and stare
The little things cry
As the parasites eat them by
Their bones rot and smell
As they fall into the deep well
But there are somethings which stand as well
In the fight against that deep hell
If you are one of them then don't worry
You won't pass your life in a hurry
You will stand against everything
And won't live your life for nothing​

 

[Tobasco]

As someone who usually doesn't like poems: I like it!

 

[Reraru]

I loved it. Dattebayo!=D

 

[ThE ReFLEcTiOn]

I loved it. Dattebayo!=D

thanks alot. you know this is the first poem i have written.

 

[Reraru]

thanks alot. you know this is the first poem i have written.

Your most welcome and you can become a great poet. Dattebayo!=D

 

[kageking]

thanks alot. you know this is the first poem i have written.

For a first try this is not bad at all, keep at it!

 

[usag]

Good one, You should write more.

 

[BlacLord™]

Not too bad, although the grammar doesn't fit properly in places as a result of some of the rhyme being forced.

Just remember that poems don't need ​to rhyme.

 

[naeem]

=Di liked it

 

[Kishi Uzumaki]

Good poem indeed .