Beastly Lyricism

[Shade Dracova]

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I wrote a rap trying to concentrate more on my punchline, and make them a bit deeper. Tell me what you think.

 

[SamuraiClownSenju]

Bout to listen. i am an audio engineer I'm a bit critical.

 

[jiraiya lives]

can you battle rap

 

[SamuraiClownSenju]

You have potential. Just work on your diction and annunciation. I like the delivery line the most. try over a beat.

 

[SamuraiClownSenju]

can you battle rap

audio battle? 60 seconds a piece ?

 

[jiraiya lives]

audio battle? 60 seconds a piece ?

no I was just asking

 

[Shade Dracova]

You have potential. Just work on your diction and annunciation. I like the delivery line the most. try over a beat.

I dont think I could find a beat to match it if I tried. lol

 

[Two]

no flow mayn :/ lyrics are aight tho

 

[Shade Dracova]

no flow mayn :/ lyrics are aight tho

Can someone please tell how I can improve my flow! Everyone has been saying though I see no wrong in my flow. =/

 

[Two]

Can someone please tell how I can improve my flow! Everyone has been saying though I see no wrong in my flow. =/

well i mean practise over a beat fir one.. cos i know that nobody could put a beat over that acapella you're saying it all as one sentence and not fitting that tempo that alll music has..it sounds more like spoken words than rap...spit over a beat till it sounds smooth [=

 

[SamuraiClownSenju]

no flow mayn :/ lyrics are aight tho

get me ya email my guy

 

[Two]

ayy but fam you said " i'm the creame of the crop like cheese in a pot" me and my bro started bussin up wtf does that mean!! but other than that i like xd

 

[Shade Dracova]

ayy but fam you said " i'm the creame of the crop like cheese in a pot" me and my bro started bussin up wtf does that mean!! but other than that i like xd

Cream of corn looks similar to melted cheese in a pot. A little silly. I know

 

[Lord of Kaos]

I'd say to start writing to songs instead of just writing. Otherwise, your verses will not sound natural when you place them on songs. Sometimes it works, here it didn't really do so.

 

[Shade Dracova]

I'd say to start writing to songs instead of just writing. Otherwise, your verses will not sound natural when you place them on songs. Sometimes it works, here it didn't really do so.

I have tried it though I enjoy this a bit more. Thank all for your comments. All of will be taken into consideration.