[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - I

[Geezus]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Katon: Kudakasei no Jutsu - Fire Release| Shatterforce Technique
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: Gathering heat in between both hands the user focuses it until it cannot be condensed further. Manifested as a sphere of raw, glowing energy it is at first held at bay as if only for show. Then, given any cue, the user slams the sphere into the ground, causing it to explode with the power of pure heat behind it. The user is unaffected by this burst of power, but anyone within the radius of the blast suffers some unsettling consequences alongside the devastating concussive force it sends forth.
(No Fire Chakra next turn)
(Usable Two Times)

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

Doton| Magunityu-do [Earth Release| Magnitude]
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: By simply touching the ground with his palm, the user injects a great deal of Earth Chakra into the ground, a large crack runs straight th the opponent wherever they may be and who is thereby connected to the Earth and when it reaches them enters the chakra enters the body. Tthe target will first experiance high speed vibration like a personal earthquake, throwing their body off balance, a turn later if measure haven't been take to get rid of the Earth chakra inside the opponent, the vibration increase tenfold, shattering bone.
[No Earth two turns after use]
[Usable Once]

~Declined~ OP and unrealistic. You make it look as if the opponent was an empty vase for you to poor your chakra in. Also, while you can inject chakra into your opponent's body from a distance to use genjutsu, the idea of infusing a large quantity of chakra and then making it vibrate inside his body is too far-fetched to be accepted.

Ninken Inu Kuchiyose| Behīmosu - Ninja Dog Summoning - Behemoth
Rank: A
Type: Summoning
Range: Short
Chakra: 30
Description: Behemoth's size can clearly be categorized as huge beyond belief Comparable to the size of one the summons Jiraya can be seen riding upon often during his times of "research". Behemoth exhibits ferociousness unseen in many of the dogs of Mount Fang. His claws and teeth are clearly something many are often scared of upon seeing a simple glance. Using his abnormal strength, Behemoth power rivals that of the Raikage's which is why he is often depicted on many of the Raikage's attire such as A's belt. He only exhibits the use of one element, which happens to be wind, but twice per battle Behemoth can make soundwaves a residual effect after he uses certain techniques such as Wind Style: Pressure Damage, causing the opponent to be deafened by the piercing sound.

~Declined~ Make it S-rank, restrict it, and take away the sound jutsu part.

 

[~Depp~]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Yonseijinyajuu)- Four Saint Beasts

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Type: Puppets
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (If summoned)
Damage Points: n/a
Description: The Four Saint Beasts are puppets made by, The Mad Hatter. The Mad Hatter once said after making them "If used by the right puppet master, they coud take down a forest in a single night." Each of the four puppets have their own abilities, weapons, and appearence to match them, they all are able to detach most of their body parts from one another, with no visable joints to the opponent.

~~ First and Slowest but most durable of the puppets is, Genbu the Stone Beast, he is made from hardened wood wrapped in iron, covering every part of his body, standing 7ft, with a large shell covering his whole back like a tortois, that is able to pop open from his tail and stand like its connected to his neck; his arms positioned in a knuckle walk position like an ape; clawed toes like a dinosaur; the segmented tail of a snake and the spiked; tusked primitive face of an ogre with large white eyes with small black pupils, with a bold black kanji on his forehead standing for power 力.

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~~ Second is the most muscluer looking puppet and hairiest, Byakko the White Toger, Byakko is made of solid metal with hidden conpartments hidden under his fur like cover, standing just under Genbu, he takes the appearance of a large humanoid tiger with a mane-like sea green hair that flows down his back with light bluish fur with grey stripes on his arms, in both of his shoulders are hidden poles with 5 blades attached to the pole that spin able to cut boulders in half, also another set in his knees, with his two bottom canine teeth large enough to reach up his cheeks, in Byakko's throut is a hose that release blasts of water from it, he has a preloaded shuriken in his mouth, he is able to shoot them from his mouth, around the hose in his throut. He has yellow eyes with red pupils and a kanji symbol for beast on his forehead 獣. He wears a toga and what appear to be leg warmers in animal skins of the leopard, and has a red sash as a belt.

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~~ The Third and most human looking besides the greenish blue skin is Seiryu the Blue Dragon, Tall and slim, Seiryu is the only normal sized one of them all, while possessing pale green skin and black facial hair hiding holes in his head which will release wires from them able to perice through rocks and trees with ease. His blue martial arts robe is tied at the waist by a large white strap and features the image of a blue dragon wrapping around his shoulder. To match his robe, Seiryu wears a dark, blue cap covering just the top part of a symbol on his forehead for ice 氷, and on his feet he wears a simple pair of black shoes, from Seiryu's left arm has a chakra sheild installed in it, while in his right arm he has a powerful vaccum hose installed in his palm that is able to blow and suck.

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~~ Last and smallist of the Four Saint Beasts, Suzaku Ho-oh, Suzaku is made of a milable steel, has a lightning chakra that the user inject into Suzaku at the begining of the puppets useage, has long orange hair parted down the middle, with two red strands that are actually his antennae, which are able to launch at the opponent with a cord attached to them, having full control over the antena the puppeteer will use them to attack the opponent at free will, between the antennae is a kanji symbol for speed 速. Suzaku also has polls that will extened from his palms to the ground, will senbon loaded in each of his fingers that are able to be thrown by Suzaku waving his arm in the direction.

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~ Only Two of the Four Saint Beasts can be used in one turn.
~ Each of the Four can only use one of there weapons. each turn.
~ Can only be used by ~Depp~

Declined. I like the puppets but thier description needs more work. your last puppet with the lightning states that it has lightning chakra infused but you dont mention what it can do with it. you need to clearly list out the abilities of each puppet and separate them from the description of the puppet itself, because right now I have no clue as to what the full capabilities of the puppets are. Make sure that attacks involving one of the elements or vaccum count as a move in the turn, and give a comparative rank to the elemental attacks and shields

(Yonseijinyajuu)- Four Saint Beasts
Type: Puppets
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30 (If summoned)
Damage Points: n/a
Description: The Four Saint Beasts are puppets made by, The Mad Hatter. The Mad Hatter once said after making them "If used by the right puppet master, they coud take down a forest in a single night." Each of the four puppets have their own abilities, weapons, and appearence to match them, they all are able to detach most of their body parts from one another, with no visable joints to the opponent.

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~~ First and Slowest but most durable of the puppets is, Genbu the Stone Beast, he is made from hardened wood wrapped in iron, covering every part of his body, standing 7ft, with a large shell covering his whole back like a tortois, that is able to pop open from his tail and stand like its connected to his neck; his arms positioned in a knuckle walk position like an ape; clawed toes like a dinosaur; the segmented tail of a snake and the spiked; tusked primitive face of an ogre with large white eyes with small black pupils, with a bold black kanji on his forehead standing for power 力.

~ Shell sheild on his back, that will pop open from his tail then stand as if its attached to his neck.
~ Two berrals in his throut, the first releases blasts of Fire, while the other release shells of senbon that once fired from his throut will release the senbon just like a buck shot.
~ Body is able to release thick triangle sword blades from around his shells edge, the blades can be used my the puppeteer, can be weilded just like swords.​

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~~ Second is the most muscluer looking puppet and hairiest, Byakko the White Toger, Byakko is made of solid metal with hidden conpartments hidden under his fur like cover, standing just under Genbu, he takes the appearance of a large humanoid tiger with a mane-like sea green hair that flows down his back with light bluish fur with grey stripes on his arms, in both of his shoulders are hidden poles with 5 blades attached to the pole that spin able to cut boulders in half, also another set in his knees, with his two bottom canine teeth large enough to reach up his cheeks, in Byakko's throut is a hose that release blasts of water from it, he has a preloaded shuriken in his mouth, he is able to shoot them from his mouth, around the hose in his throut. He has yellow eyes with red pupils and a kanji symbol for beast on his forehead 獣. He wears a toga and what appear to be leg warmers in animal skins of the leopard, and has a red sash as a belt.

~ 5 bladed poles installed in his shoulders and knees.
~ Water hose in his throut.
~ Shuriken shooter in his throut.
~ Large War hammer on his back.​

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~~ The Third and most human looking besides the greenish blue skin is Seiryu the Blue Dragon, Tall and slim, Seiryu is the only normal sized one of them all, while possessing pale green skin and black facial hair hiding holes in his head which will release wires from them able to perice through rocks and trees with ease. His blue martial arts robe is tied at the waist by a large white strap and features the image of a blue dragon wrapping around his shoulder. To match his robe, Seiryu wears a dark, blue cap covering just the top part of a symbol on his forehead for ice 氷, and on his feet he wears a simple pair of black shoes, from Seiryu's left arm has a chakra sheild installed in it, while in his right arm he has a powerful vaccum hose installed in his palm that is able to blow and suck.

~ Wires in his head, that can be freely controlled by the puppeteer.
~ Left arm chakra sheild of A-rank.
~ Right hand has a powerful vaccum hose that can blow and suck.
~ Dragon sword on the left side of his waist.​

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~~ Last and smallist of the Four Saint Beasts, Suzaku Ho-oh, Suzaku is made of a milable steel, has lightning chakra that the user injects into Suzaku at the begining of the puppets useage, giving suzaku an electical charge during battle. Has long orange hair parted down the middle, with two red strands that are actually his antennae, which are able to launch at the opponent with a cord attached to them, having full control over the antena the puppeteer will use them to attack the opponent at free will, between the antennae is a kanji symbol for speed 速. Suzaku also has polls that will extened from his palms to the ground, will senbon loaded in each of his fingers that are able to be thrown by Suzaku waving his arm in the direction.

~ Launchable antennae, attached by cords.
~ Polls in his palms. (just a poll that comes out of his palm able to be used as a sword.)
~ Senbon loaded in his fingers.
~ Dual blades on his back.​

~ Only Two of the Four Saint Beasts can be used in one turn.
~ Each of the puppets Elemental installments can be used, but count as a jutsu for the puppeteer, with a B-rank useage.

Animal Contract..... (didnt see anything about foxes in the Approved customs summons)

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Summoning Animal: Foxes
Scroll Owner: ~Depp~
Other Users who have signed contract: n/a
Summoning Boss if existing: n/a
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: n/a

~All Declined~ I've already warned people about this -___-. The limit is 3 jutsu per week, I will let anyone submit jutsu that have multiple summons or multiple jutsus included in them. If you want to submit all those beats, you'll get them approved individually and then submit the jutsu to summon them all at once. This is your only warning, next time I'm banning you from this thread for a week.

 

[-Blade-]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kuchoiyse: Toro)-Summoning Technique: Toro the great bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Toro is the boss of the bulls he is normaly agitated when summoned and would at times slap the user with his tail for summoning him. He is the bull associated with earth and is around 7ft tall his horns are able to shoot off and grow back in very short time like all bulls, he can stomp his hooves and increase an earth jutsu by 20 dp, and up 1 rank

(Kuchoiyse: Riko)-Summoning Technique: Riko the fire bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Riko is the bull associated with fire and has the same attitude as Toro, he also hates being summoned even more than Toro. He is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back. His ability it he can manipulate any fire jutsu and make it bigger adding 15 dp to any fire jutsu

(Kuchoiyse: Aero)-Summoning Technique: Aero the wind bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Aero is the bull associated with Wind and is more level headed than the other bulls he is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back, His unique ability is that he can disapear into the wind and strengthen the users wind jutsu by one rank.

(Kuchoiyse: Marina)-Summoning Technique: Marina the water bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Marina is the bull associated with water and is more level headed than the other bulls and also the only female bull she is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off her horns and grow back, Her unique ability is that she can Sink into any water source and increase its damage points by 10 points.

(Kuchoiyse: Zeek)-Summoning Technique: Zeek the lightning bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Zeek is the bull associated with lightning and is more level headed than the other bulls he is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back, His unique ability is that he can disperse into lightning and go into the clouds to enhance the users lightning so moves that need to send lightning into the air can be automatic since he is lightning in the air.

-Only two bulls can be summoned per battle
-Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
-Each bull lasts 4 turns
-After the bull has left the user cant summon it and is limited to only B-Rank of that element for 2 turns

~All Declined~ Place your restrictions under each individual submission and personalize those restrictions. I've seen some very OP stuff (+20 damage point for example) and all their abilities need to be restricted.

Resubmitting once again
Canges- restrictions are on each bull
-Changed the thing you said was OP

(Kuchoiyse: Toro)-Summoning Technique: Toro the great bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Toro is the boss of the bulls he is normaly agitated when summoned and would at times slap the user with his tail for summoning him. He is the bull associated with earth and is around 7ft tall his horns are able to shoot off and grow back in very short time like all bulls. His main ability is he can merge with the ground and boost earth attacks by 5 dp
-Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
-Every now and then the user will take 10 direct damage from him being summoned
-Toro stays on the field for 4 turns
-He may not be summoned until the battle has carried on 3 moves
-After he has left the field the user is limited to B-Rank earth for 3 turns

~Declined~ If he's your boss summon, make it S-rank and restrict him to 1 summon per match. Precise the added damage in the damage section of your jutsu. You can put the restriction on earth jutsu to S-rank for 2 turns, no need to be excessive about it . Lastly, merging with the ground need to count as a technique.

(Kuchoiyse: Riko)-Summoning Technique: Riko the fire bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Riko is the bull associated with fire and has the same attitude as Toro, he also hates being summoned even more than Toro. He is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back. His ability it he can manipulate any fire jutsu and make it bigger adding 5 dp to any fire jutsu
-Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
-Riko stays on the field for 4 turns
-He may not be summoned until the battle has carried on 2 moves
-After he has left the field the user is limited to B-Rank Fire for 3 turns

~Declined~ No free manipulation will be approved. For the rest, same as above.

(Kuchoiyse: Zeek)-Summoning Technique: Zeek the lightning bull
Rank:A
Type:Supplementary R
ange:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Zeek is the bull associated with lightning and is more level headed than the other bulls he is 6ft tall and is also able to shoot off his horns and grow back, His unique ability is that he can disperse into lightning and go into the clouds to enhance the users lightning so moves that need to send lightning into the air can be automatic since he is lightning in the air.
-Can only be taught by Blade Hyuga
-Zeek stays on the field for 4 turns
-After he has left the field the user is limited to B-Rank lightning for 3 turns

~Declined~ I'm sorry but that's a no-go. Turning into lightning and going into the sky? I will not accept that.

 

[TheGreyFox]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Solar flair(taiyou hirameki
Rank:C
Type: Defence
Range: N/A
Chakra cost:20
Damage Points: N/A
Descripton: The user creates a blinding light from his or her eyes useing charka blinding the enemey giving the user a chance to runaway or attack

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

Shogon armor summoning(yoroi summoning)
Rank: B
Type: Defence /summoning
Range:N/A
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points:N.A
Descripton:Before the user can use this jutsu he or she must make or get a set of armor for this jutsu To work if the user has armor the user puts a summoning tag on the inside therefor the user can summon the armor where ever the user is when the user is done he or she will be fully covered in armor as much as the user made or got.

~Approved~

 

[Selendrile]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Futon: Kaze no Kyanon o Shinratsuna)- Scorching Wind Cannon
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user manipulates the wind in front of them to form a large wind cannon. It begins narrow, then widens down its length, similar to a funnel. Using the jutsu, the user will launch a fire jutsu into the narrow part of the cannon. The jutsu then spins rapidly in the cannon, and gains strength because it is being fueled by air. This jutsu can also be used to defend against fire jutsu.
*Note: Can only be taught by HereticPassage
*Note: This jutsu increases B-rank and lower fire jutsu released into it by 1 rank
*Note: Can envelop B-rank raiton jutsu and below
*Note: Usable twice per battle

~Declined~ The jutsu in itself is good, but you're not allowed to manipulate two different chakra unless you've learned Yin Yang. So, you either make it count as two jutsus (also taking the same amount of time as two jutsu), or you take out the fire part. Also, what do you mean by "envelop raiton"? Blocking B-rank raiton?

(Katon: Ao ga no Hikō)- Flight of Blue Moths
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user cups both hands in front of their mouth, and blows super-heated fire chakra into their palms. Hundreds of moths erupt from the user’s hands, and spread out over the battlefield. These moths can be used to completely re-design the battlefield by incinerating all plants and trees, or to attack the opponent directly.
*Note: Can only be taught by HereticPassage
*Note: Cannot use katon for the next 2 turns
*Note: Lasts two turns after use if not immediately used

~Declined~ Hundreds of super heated flames shot at the enemy (or on the field)? OP.

(Katon: Kaen no Tenjō)- Flame Ceiling
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Mid/Long
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 50
Description: Performing one handseal, the user creates a flat square wall of flame above the opponent. Then performing another hand seal, the flame ceiling will then drop down pillars of flame quickly, similar to the bars on a cage.
*Note: Can only be taught by HereticPassage

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~Declined~ I like this one, but please explain how the damages are done. Is this a cage or will the pillar converge on the opponent?

 

[Punk Hazard]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Jiton: Ōgon no chēnsō (Magnet Release: Golden Chainsaw)
Type:Attack
Rank:A
RangeShort-Long
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user firsts uses Golden Skin, then release four tendril-like streams of Gold Dust from his back. The tendrils constantly flows in on itself, giving it the likeness of a chainsaw, allowing the user to slice and shred the enemy's skin
~Must have Rikerslade's permission and a Fourth Kazekage bio~
~Only usable twice per battle~
~Lasts as long as Golden Skin~

~Declined do not resubmit~ This is just plain OP. You are basically giving yourself 4 chainsaw tentacles that can reach up to Long-range, without any time limit or drawback.

Jiton:Ōgon no hifu (Magnet Release: Golden Skin)
Type: Defense
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user covers himself with Gold Dust, creating a second skin capable of defending against B-rank and lower and techniques
~Must have Rikerslade's permission to use~
~Must have Fourth Kazekage bio~
~Can only be used twice and lasts for three turns~

~Declined~ This is a rip-off of Gaara's technique, which as already been ripped off a dozen times.

 

[~Rihan~]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Doton: sodekuchi)- Earth Style: HandCuff
Type: Attack
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90
Description: The user grabs the oppents hand, and inserts Earth Chakra into them where he shape manupliates it to where Hand Cuffs made of earth form around the enemy's wrist.And as the match progresses the hand cuffs will form a ball of earth around the oppents hand, stopping him from forming any hand seals. And as the match progresses the ball continues to grow into a big ball that reduces the oppents movement.
-The user has to make contact with the enemy's hands
- No Earth justu for the rest of the battle
- Handcuffs absorb enemy's chakra and grows off of it.
- last the whole battle
- -Can only be taught by The Mightyy Kamina

~Declined~ Why is this forbidden? Really? There's no physical drawbacks whatsoever. Also, at what rate does the handcuff grow?

(Doton: tomaho-ku)- Earth Style- Tomahawk Barrage
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short- Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description:THe user gather alot of earth chakra into there foot, and once they have enough they bring there right foot up and stomp it on the ground. Makeing 10 big chunks over earth fly into the air, and as there in the air the user jumps into the air and shape manupliate them into 10 large tomahawk. Which the user then throws towards the enemy.
- The user can make any size of Tomahawk size form
- Can only be used 1 time in a battle
- no more earth justu's for one turn
- User can form the 10 big chunks of earth together to form one big tomahawk to be thrown at the enemy.
- -Can only be taught by The Mightyy Kamina

~Declined~ In your restriction you saw you can make the Tomahawk any size you want, and then you later say you can merge them all to form one big Tomahawk. Please clarify the size of the smalls one (make it fixed) and the size of the big one. Also, please be aware that I will not accept anything ridiculously big since you need to have the strength to throw it while being in the air.

(Kenjustu:hitoshirezu ): Hiten Mitsurugi-ryū Style- Dragon Hammer
Type: Attack
Rank: D
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 10
Damage Points: 20
Description: The user jumps into the air, and uses the momentum of the fall to strengthen a two-handed sword swing that brings the blade down on the opponent's head or shoulder.

~Approved~

 

[Yūsuke1]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Just figured that I should have some other non-sand related cjs lol

(Katon : Kaengorogoro Dangan) - Fire Style : Flaming Scatter Bullets
Type : Offensive
Rank : S
Range : Short - Long
Chakra Cost : 40
Damage Points : 80
Description : The user holds out his dominant arm in a figure of a gun and points it to the direction of the target point. Building up fire chakra into the tip of the finger sticking out as the gun shape would then cause a flame to take place on that specific area. By releasing the fire chakra, a barrage of flame bullets would then scatter flying all over the place in front of the user. The bullets can also be directed into a single point instead of scattering all over the place if the user chooses to. At any point of time, the user will make his hands go into a 'clap' formation causing all the flame bullets to be redirected towards the enemy from all the different angles it has travelled to but while the bullets are traveling separately, they are much weaker and can be destroyed easily.

• Usable three times per battle
• Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
• No S-rank fire jutsus allowed for the next turn
• The way how its used is similar to the picture below
• Requires a clap for all flame bullets to be redirected towards the target
• If the user keeps the fire within his hand for a long time, it will burn his hands instead

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~Approved~

(Suna : Kigenchuuseki Kangoku) - Sand Style : Rising Pillar Prison
Type : Offensive / Supplementary
Rank : S
Range : Short - Long
Chakra cost : 40
Damage points : 80
Description : In this technique, the user will first have to gather a high amount of sand which takes at least a full turn of churning for sand underground. Once the user has achieved that, he will slam both his hands onto the ground and then rise up with his hands also rising to the poins of having the pose of holding a championship belt. While the user rises, sand will also rise along with his at the desired location. As the sand rises, it takes on the form of a huge pillar with 5 meters in diameter and 10 meters in height. This pillar is fully constructed when the user has reach the highest point his arms can stretch up to, and to finish it up, the user clenches both his fists and the pillar will compress everything it has caught in its grasp. The pillar will end up having pieces of sand flying everywhere after the user lets go of his fist as the sand can't stay in place anymore from the compression it has faced.

• Can only be used three times per battle
• Can only be used by a Gaara biography or sand user
• Must have been churning for sand for at least a whole turn
• No other sand techniques can be performed the turn used and after
• If the user makes any other hand movements apart from the ritual, the pillar automatically loses its structure and falls to the ground

~Declined~ First of all, the description is sloppy. I had to read it several time to understand it, you really need to re-read and re-write some part of it. Secondly, is it an empty cylinder that will form around your opponent and compress itself once close your fists? If so then what's different between your jutsu and desert burial? I think you overdid a jutsu that already exist with less restriction, it's up to you if you want to to re-submit it.

(Raiton : Gekiikazuchi kenraikou) - Lightning Style : Playful Thunder & Lighting
Type : Offensive / Supplementary
Rank : S
Range : Short - Long
Chakra Cost : 40
Damage Points : 80
Description : The user does 2 handseals then puts forth both the left and right hands to the front, a flash of light is emitted from the left hand, which will cause the opponent to look away fully, while a lightning bolt is released on the right hand, hence the jutsu starts. In this technique, thunder and lightning who always travels with each other in a single unit towards the sand direction, are now separated thus going in different directions. Thunder was the one who made sounds and and now by causing uproars, it would draw the opponents attention to the sound thinking the attack was coming from there and then lightning would always strike the opponent when he looked away.

• Usable only three times per battle
• Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-
• No lightning jutsus S-rank or above as long as this jutsu is active on the field
• As long as the lightning is still kept active, it counts as a jutsu in the user's turn
• The sharingan is able to match the speed and is able to find the lightning before it strikes

~Declined~ Look at the bold part, you can't predict how your opponent will react, take that part off. Also, I'm not sure I get the point of your technique, do you want to separate the sound from the lightning to confuse your opponent? Clarify and re-submit, however be aware that to really confuse him, the sound would have to come from another point on the field, independent of the direction it's going (it's a 360 propagation).

 

[Nagato..]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

I remember we discussed this over PMs that removing any affiliation makes it a new submission..


(Meiton: Fōsu o isogu) - Dark Release: Rushing Force
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user will need to perform 5 handseals & focus his dark release chakra into his hand(s) waving either hand towards the ground at an arc or angle towards the ground sending the dark release energy infront of him causing dark release to hit the ground sending a wave of dark release energy and earth to rise and rush along the ground towards the opponent within seconds.

Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
Note: This technique is 7 meters wide and 4 meters in height.
Note: No Dark Release techniques for the following turn.
Note: Must Be of at least Kage ranked.
Note: Can only be used by Nagato..



~Declined~ I'm not quite sure I picture how shooting something toward the ground would end up going toward the opponent and up to long-range at that.

Well due to not only the size of the technique but its rank, I dont see why it wouldnt be able to go into long range, but I will correct a few things to make it fit appropriately as I didnt mean shooting it directly towards the ground. I reworded everything kinda.


(Meiton: Fōsu o isogu) - Dark Release: Rushing Force
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long [Short-Mid] If shot near the ground
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: After performing the handseals Bird → Rat → Tiger → Dog the user will waive either hand in a fast motion towards his opponent at an arc or angle releasing unfocused dark release energy from his hand infront of him causing dark release energy to be forcefully shot out as a wave of dark release energy that is very large advancing towards the opponent within seconds. Due to its raw power and size if waived near the ground it causes earth to crumble and rise rushing along with it.

Note: Can only be used 2 times per battle.
Note: This technique is 7 meters wide and 4 meters in height.
Note: No Dark Release techniques for the following turn.
Note: Must Be of at least Kage ranked.
Note: Can only be used by Nagato..

~Approved~ Made it 2 times per match.

New submission


(Fuuton: Kaze Gaizā) - Wind Style: Wind Geysers
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: After sending their chakra deep into the ground, the user performs the bird handseal causing super-heated air to forcefully erupt from the ground in various areas, in what would look like small water geysers, but they are flowing with super-heated air. The concentration of heat burns the skin on contact. The air flows upwards at high speeds.

Note: Can Only be used 2x per battle
Note: Each geyser is 6 ft in diameter, and they fill up to one range with about 3 meters in between each geyser zone.
Note: If used at short range, the user must defend as well
Note: They blow out wind from the geysers for two turns.
Note: No wind techniques for 2 turns & while this is still active.

Feel free to edit

~Declined~ Similar techniques already exist.

 

[Lord of Kaos]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Customs for the week of 10/24/2011-10/30/2011​

1. (Riptide) ɸ Anaklusmos
Rank: S
Type: Supplmentary
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The legendary weapon used by Heracles himself, Anaklusmos, otherwise known as Riptide, is Percy's greatest weapon. Riptide is an indestructible katana molded in the depths of Atlantis by Poseidon himself, stolen by Heracles and later recovered and granted to Percy Jackson. As a reword for saving the earth from the Titan Lord Kronos, Poseidon recrafted the sword once more, this time allowing it to take a new form. Riptide draws its power from the ocean, which is why it works well for Percy. In its dormant form, it is a disposable ballpoint pen that reads "Anaklusmos" on the side when not in use. Once the pen is uncapped or clicked, it transforms into one of it's two forms: Sword Form or Trident Form. Its sword form blade is about 2 feet and a couple of inches,the hilt only 4-6 inches. It's second form takes on the form of Percy's fathers Trident, with the staff's length being 4 feet and the two end prongs being 1 foot long themselves with the middle prong being slightly longer. In sword form, Riptide increases the user's water jutsus by +10 damage points if channeled through the sword. It is almost impossible to lose as it is enchanted to appear in Percy's pocket if it is somehow lost. In trident form, the user gets the same boost as mentioned before and the user is able to cause an A-rank Earthquake as well as A-rank tsunami when the earth or water is struck with the trident. If the trident some how becomes lost, it is enchanted to appear on the user's back. Riptide is very territorial and will only obey Percy. If grasped by someone other than him, Riptide will revert to it's pen form and a turn later, return to Percy's pocket, regardless of it's previous location on the field.
*Takes an entire turn to reappear if lost somehow*
*Trident's earthquake/tsunami effect lasts only one turn and can only be used thrice a battle. Counts as one of the user's three jutsus per turn*
*Cannot use both forms in one turn (i.e cannot use a jutsu with the sword than use the trident's effects/jutsus and vise-versa)*
*In trident form, if the earthquake/tsunami effect is used, the user can only use 4 water jutsus through the trident before it reverts to pen form. Takes a turn wait before it can be used again*
*Can only be used by Lord of Kaos*

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~Declined~ I know you want to make it similar to the movie, but take out the part about it magically appearing in your pocket or on your back. Secondly, make it +5 to water. Lastly, restrict the abilities more clearly. What's with the 4 water jutsu thingy before it reverts back to a pen? I thought you could only use those abilities 3 times. If not, then make it 3 times overall (earthquake and tsunami combined (and elaborate on the size of the wave you're summoning, a tsunami sounds like overkill)).

Also this jutsu was put on hold a while back, I'm just checking up on this jutsu so it technically shouldn't count as a submission.




~Declined~ Let's not play with words here, the Liger was accepted, it covers for both Tiglon and Liger.

Yeah, this is the first time I ever made a custom weapon so it's going to take me some time before I can make them good lmao. And the four jutsu thing was a typo. >_< I meant 3.


2. (Riptide)♆Anaklusmos
Rank: S
Type: Supplmentary
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The legendary weapon used by Heracles himself, Anaklusmos, otherwise known as Riptide, is Percy's greatest weapon. Riptide is an indestructible katana molded in the depths of Atlantis by Poseidon himself, stolen by Heracles and later recovered and granted to Percy Jackson. As a reword for saving the earth from the Titan Lord Kronos, Poseidon recrafted the sword once more, this time allowing it to take a new form. Riptide draws its power from the ocean, which is why it works well for Percy. In its dormant form, it is a disposable ballpoint pen that reads "Anaklusmos" on the side when not in use. Once the pen is uncapped or clicked, it transforms into one of it's two forms: Sword Form or Trident Form. While in one form, the user can "click" Riptide to return it back to it's original pen form and "click" it once more to turn it into the desired form (However, the same restrictions apply to this). Its sword form blade is about 2 feet and a couple of inches,the hilt 4-6 inches. It's second form takes on the form of Percy's fathers Trident, with the staff's length being 4 feet and the two end prongs being 1 foot long themselves with the middle prong being slightly longer. In sword form, Riptide increases the user's water jutsus by +5 damage points if channeled through the sword. In trident form, the user gets the same boost as mentioned before and the user is able to cause an A-rank Earthquake as well as A-rank tsunami the size of a house when the earth or water is struck with the trident. Riptide is very territorial and will only obey Percy. If grasped by someone other than him, Riptide will revert to it's pen form.
*Trident's earthquake/tsunami effect lasts only one turn and can only be used thrice a battle. Counts as one of the user's three jutsus per turn. Must be a wait period of at least two turns before the user can cause an earthquake/tsunami again.*
*Cannot use abilities of both forms in one turn (i.e cannot use a jutsu with the sword than use the trident's effects/jutsus and vise-versa).*
*In trident form, if the earthquake/tsunami effect is used, the user can only use 3 water jutsus through the trident before it reverts to pen form. Afterwards, the user cannot use any of the trident's abilities for the duration of the fight other than simply turning into a trident.*
*Cannot create a tsunami and earthquake the same turn.
*Can only be used by Lord of Kaos.*


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~Approved~

3. (Riptide's Return)♆Anaklusmos' Nostos
Rank: A
Type: Supplmentary
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: During battle once Riptide somehow becomes out of the user's possession, be it by theft or is used as a projectile, Percy makes a one-hand handseal (index finger and middle finger pointed up with the other two fingers balled up with the thumb over those two) and then pulls out a summoning scrolland wipes blood across it or touches his summoning seals and summons Riptide back to his pocket. However, the enemy does not know this. As Percy touches the scroll, water erupts from the scroll and fills the area of short range of Percy with water, not doing any damage though. If Percy touches his summoning tattoo, he can direct the small water from his hand, still with not enough force to do damage. Percy can also choice to have Riptide appear in his hand if it's in sword form or on his back if in Trident form though if one of these options are used, Riptide can only be summoned twice a battle with a wait period of three turns in between.
*Can only be used three times a fight at the most.
*Can only be used by Lord of Kaos.
*After using, it takes a wait period of at least 2 turns in between before it can be used again.
*If the enemy is holding Riptide when this jutsu is in use, obviously they will be able to tell that it's not in their position any longer.
*If summoned into the user's hand or on his back, these two additional restrictions apply:
-Can only be summoned twice the entire fight
-Requires a wait period of at least three turns before it can be used again.

~Approved~ Well done.

 

[Gitanshu]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

DESCRIPTION

New Taijutsu Style

NERVOUS SYSTEM ATTACK
Well its completely new type of taijutsu which neither requires handsigns just as normal taijutsu in this the user attacks at the nervous points of opponent as these nervous are responsible for reflexes respond to a stimuli and speed , by applying proper pressure at proper points the use can affect the opponents speed and other type of senses
DIFFERENCE BETWEEN CHAKRA POINTS & NERVOUS POINTS
As we know that chakra points are responsible for regulating the flow of ones chakra but whereas this art it responsible for either increasing or decreasing the speed and sense of any given person by attacking their nervous points.

(Taijutsu: Osoi Undoushinkei) - Slow Reflexes
RANK-B
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra Cost-30
Damage Points-60
Description-In this the user gets at the back side of the opponent and quickly strike one point on the spinal cord and one at right hand side of the neck these points are responsible for respond and reflexes of an human as we know so this attack affects the opponent’s reflexes which get considerably slower than the normal
~Must be taught by gitanshu~
~lasts for 4 turns~

~Pending~ I'll need you to be a lot more precise with this kind of technique. You're basically disabling your opponent with this one since in our RP, speed is everything. If I'm ever going to accept this, you need to restrict it somehow and be clear on whether or not hitting only one point as any effect.

 

[Migualon J.J.]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Re-submiting (again xd)

(Tekken No Suitaru): Style Of Iron Fist

Type: Supplementary
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 100 (-10 each turn it is active)
Damage Points: N/A (-20 to the user when activating and -10 each turn it is active)
Description: The user focuses incredibly high amount of chakra into his legs and arms so that his strength increases on the level that of Godaime Hokage Tsunade Senju. While in this state the user can´t use any Ninjutsu or Genjutsu. The user can use Tekken Techniques tho (will be submitted later if this style is approved). When the user leaves the state of Tekken, the user can´t move, he can only stand on 1 place and he cannot use any jutsus of S-rank and Forbidden rank. When the user is in the state of using Tekken Style, the user´s muscles are under huge pressure and cause him great pain. It doesn´t change users speed.

Notes:
Can only be used once per battle
Lasts only for 3 turns
User cannot use ANY Ninjutsu or Genjutsu techniques when he´s using Tekken Style
After 3 turns, the user can´t move from the place he´s standing because of muscle exhaustion
No S or Forbidden Rank jutsus by the user for 2 turns after the Tekken Style has ended
Can only be taught by ~Mig J.J. Quiksilver~

||Approved|| Nice.


(Buzzard Kuchoiyse No Jutsu: Ra) Buzzard Summoning Technique: Ra

Rank: S
Type: Summoning
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 60
Damage: Depends on used jutsu
Description: Ra is one of the two Buzzard elders in the Buzzard Realm. Unlike other summonings, Ra is the the strongest Buzzard known thus far. His sheer size and golden armor makes him look godly to those who don't know him. Ra's size is half that of Gamabunta but his wing span stretches past Gamabunta's width meaning he could crush almost anything under him. He is actually worshipped as a deity to the low ranking Buzzards. Ra is capable of using Genjutsu up to S-rank. Ra's best know ability is being able to use all S-rank and below Lightning based techniques and the ones that require hand seals can be done by the summoner. The armor like feathers Ra has is sturdy enough to be unaffected by techniques of B-rank and below.


Notes:
Can be forced to be summoned back to it´s land if hit by 80 damage points
Can only be used/taught by Migualon J.J.
Must have signed the Buzzard summoning contract
All his techniques are considered as 1 of the 3 techniqes per turn
The user cannot use S-rank or higher techniques of different element than Lightning while Ra is on the field
He stays on the field for 3 turns

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||Declined|| Several things wrong with this. Incorrect chakra cost, All genjutsu and Lightning Jutsu up to S-rank as well as all of the other elements A-rank and below? Lolno. Try again.

Re-Submitting (once again xd)


(Buzzard Kuchoiyse No Jutsu: Ra) Buzzard Summoning Technique: Ra

Rank: S
Type: Summoning
Range: Short-Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: Depends on used jutsu
Description: Ra is one of the two Buzzard elders in the Buzzard Realm. Unlike other summonings, Ra is the the strongest Buzzard known thus far. His sheer size and golden armor makes him look godly to those who don't know him. Ra's size is half that of Gamabunta but his wing span stretches past Gamabunta's width meaning he could crush almost anything under him. He is actually worshipped as a deity to the low ranking Buzzards. Ra's best know ability is being able to use all S-rank and below Lightning techniques and the ones that require hand seals can be done by the summoner. The armor like feathers Ra has is sturdy enough to be unaffected by techniques of B-rank and below.


Notes:
Can be forced to be summoned back to it´s land if hit by 80 damage points
Can only be used/taught by Migualon J.J.
Must have signed the Buzzard summoning contract
All his techniques are considered as 1 of the 3 techniqes per turn
The Summoner cannot use A-rank or higher techniques of different element than Lightning while Ra is on the field
He stays on the field for 3 turns

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*i removed Genjutsus

~Approved~

 

[Rodukaime Namikaze]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Fuuton: Amatsu Oshi) Wind Release: Heavenly Push
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost:30
Damage:N/A
Description: After doing the Ram handseal, the user concentrates their wind chakra to the palms of their hands. The user can then release strong gusts of wind to avoid incoming attacks on the ground or in the sky. The user moves quickly due to the gust of wind. The user points their palms to where they want to get away from with this technique.

Note: Technique can only be used twice.
Note: Cannot use any wind jutsu in the same turn.
Note: Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze.

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
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(Fujin Inu no Jutsu) Female Dog Technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range:N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This is a very rare technique in which a kunoichi can summon great amounts of strength and has an angry red face with a red aura surrounding her. This can only happen under three conditions; 1) The kunoichi is being harassed. This is any type of harrasment. 2) The kunoichi feels the opponent is very overpowered. 3) The kunoichi is fighting another kunoichi.
Once activated, the female gets 10+ damage points to all her attacks and can perform jutsu faster. However, once a kunoichi is done using this technique she falls and collapses.

*Jutsu lasts for 5 turns.
*Jutsu takes a full turn to activate and does not count towards the 5 turns.
*Only Kunoichi can use this technique.
*Jutsu can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze

~Declined do not resubmit~ No.
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(Uchiwa no Jutsu: Sondaime Hoshi Bakuha) Fan Technique: Third Star Blast
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: When using her Giant Fan, Temari will open her fan to the third star and swing her blade towards her target, making a big blast of wind. When the wind heads toward the target, the blast will separate into three blasts. The blast in the middle will keep going towards the target while the other two will head around and hit the target to it's left and right sides. The three blasts hit at the same time with such force that it will break bones and make deep cuts on the target.

*After performing jutsu, Temari cannot use any Fan Techniques for the next turn.
*Usable only once.
*Only Temari can use this.
*Can only be taught by Rodukaime Namikaze.
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The girl one is not trying to make fun of the opposite ***. Sorry if I offend anyone.

~Approved~

 

[Akisha]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Ice Release: Ten Thousand Blades Dance = (Hyouton: Juuman Ha Odori)
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra cost: 50
Damage points: 90
Description: The user will begin by performing a single hand seal and then creates an opening within the sky that seems like 2 circles. The circles are extremely big, large enough to cover the whole battle field. The first one is representing the wind chakra and the second one the water chakra. Combining the 2 chakra natures the user makes the air around the opening extremely cold, making ice form into the atmosphere. Then by using shape manipulation the user forms thousands upon thousands of countless small thin but incredibly sharp blades of ice that almost look like light blue sakura petals. In a matter of seconds the blades will rain down through the opening piercing through the opponents’ body ripping them to shreds.
Note: Can only be used once per battle
Note: The user will take 20 damage due to the large amount of chakra used for the technique.
Note: The user needs to concentrate his chakra for 1 turn in order for the spikes to be fully formed.
Note: No Ice for 2 turns after this technique is used.
Note: No S rank or above water or wind for the following turn.
Note: Can only be taught by Akisha.

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~Declined~ This jutsu doesn't have any restriction to justify it being forbidden. There are no physical drawbacks. Secondly, does this jutsu covers the whole field of simply the center of both superposed disk?

Ice Release: Adventure Slide = (Hyouton: Adobencha Waku)
Rank: C
Type: Offensive/Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 30
Description: The user will concentrate his Hyouton chakra into the ground and will create a thin layer of ice that appears wherever the user wishes. The ice can be used for several purposes. For example, the user can use it underneath his opponent while walking or running, making him lose balance and fall. Or the user can use it on the whole battle ground, limiting the speed of non ice users as they would fall if they run too fast, although being an ice master, the user can run on ice freely without loosing balance.
Note: Can only be taught by Akisha

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.


Ice Release: The Ice Castle of Heaven = (Hyouton: Aisu Kyassuru no Tentou)
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary/Defensive/Offensive
Range: All
Chakra cost: 50 (+10 for each turn to sustain the castle)
Damage points: 60 (because the ice spikes produced from the castle are A ranked)
Description: The user begins by performing 5 handseals and then slams his hands on the ground, releasing extreme amounts of Hyouton chakra. Doing so, the user makes a huge ice castle rise from the ground. The castle is extremely big and has the user’s chakra influenced in it so that every time the opponent hit’s the castle, it regenerates. The user also gains the ability to sense everything that is happening in the castle, as his chakra is spread all over the place. Once inside, the user can manipulate the surrounding ice as a defense. With a single hand seal he can make a shield out of the ice that can stop techniques up to A rank (including). The user can also with the same hand seal, release the ice at the opponent, forming spikes of ice with the strength of an A rank technique that move extremely fast.
Note: Can only be used once per battle.
Note: The user must constantly send his chakra into the castle so that the special effects work, so he can not use any ninjutsu or genjutsu while the castle is active.
Note: The castle lasts for 5 turns.
Note: The ice spikes that the user is using are A-ranked
Note: No Ice techniques for 3 turns after the end of this technique.
Note: No S rank wind or water for 2 turns after the end of this technique.
Note: After the jutsu is over, the user's speed and reactions are decreased.
Note: Can only be taught by Akisha.



About the last jutsu. I worked on it for like half an hour and I really really like it and I think it's not OPed and approvable. Please do not label it with a Declined. Do not resubmit, i'm ready to take as much time as i must to get this approved.

~Declined~ It's not a matter of how much time you want to spend on it, I'm declining this because Zanji has/had a very similar jutsu where he would create a maze of ice that could be controlled and altered (similarly to yours). The only difference between the jutsu I have in mind and yours is that your jutsu comes in the form of a castle. (Btw, if it wasn't Zanji, it might be Akira).

 

[Ushiro]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Genjutsu: Osoroshii Kumo) - Illusion: Menacing Spider
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: A genjutsu where the target finds himself in a dark forest bound to a web. A large spider looms over him and begins to drain him of his bodily fluids which puts him through enough mental trauma to render him unconsious. Up to four opponents in the same area can be affected by the illusion but only one can be "drained" at a time. Those in the illusion are oblivious to what is happening around them
-Usable 3 times per battle
-Opponent stays unconsious for a turn

~Declined~ OP. The fact that you're oblivious to what's happening makes this jutsu unstoppable to those who don't have an automatic way to get out of a genjutsu (chakra seal of some sort).

(Fuuton: Ori Kūki no Jutsu) - Wind Release: Air Weaving Technique
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Defence
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user imbues wind chakra into the air and creates numerous threads from it. These threads are very durable and difficult to see since they are thin and somewhat transparent. They can be manipulated to form various objects such as nets or rope that can restrain targets. Doujutsu can clearly see the wires. A fire jutsu of B-rank or above can destroy these threads.
-Usable 3 times per battle

~Declined~ There's a limit to how far we can push the physical properties of a fluid-like medium. The very properties of wind (in the narutoverse) would make that jutsu devastating since you'd be able to cut through your opponent with those threads. I don't see how you can get this one approved but I'll let you resubmit it.

(Kage Oni Hikō)- Shadow Demon Flight
Type: Supplementary/Attack/Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: While Shadow Mask is active, the user can create wings made of shadow from the shadows on his skin. These wings have a demonic look to them and allow the user to fly through the air. They can be manipulated for a variety of purposes such as surrounding the user for defense, wrapping and crushing a nearby target, or impaling a target with spikes found at the end of the winds.
-Usable 2 times per battle
-Lasts as long as Shadow Mask is active
-Can protect the user from S-rank and lower ninjutsu that aren't light based
-Can only be used by a Nara clan member

~Declined~ Not only was the whole concept done over and over again with every possible element, making this one a rip-off, but I wouldn't allow this one simply because I find the idea of shadow being tangible to the point of pushing air and allowing you to fly. I know we've seen Shikamaru use shadows to pierce his opponent, but I still think you're abusing the concept a bit too much

Looks similar to this:

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This is based on the previously approved technique below

(Kage Masuku)- Shadow Mask
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: The user creates a pattern of shadow all over his skin that lets him perform shadow jutsu originating from the shadows on his body. This allows jutsu such as Shadow Sewing to be used in mid-air.
-Lasts for 3 turns
-Can only be used by a Nara clan member
-Can only be used twice per match

 

[BusinessManTeno]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

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(fenikkusu yaiba) Phoenix Blade
Rank-S
Type-Attack/Support
Range-Short-Mid
Chakra Cost-40
Chakra Damage-80
Description- The Phoenix sword is said to be made out of phoenix feathers. and phoenix bones. only 2 are left in the world. This sword Fire does not burn physically but rather mentally (in a good way) once the sword is activated. the fire from the sword enters your body as a ..... BOOST. it imply your cells. making your speed increase by +10 (Like sauske was vs gaara). Also Adds wind to every b rank and lower jutsu you use the phoenix blades surrounds you in fire type aura. making you immune to any B rank or lower fire jutsus also.

-Note: Can not use A rank or above fire
-Note: IF in affect for longer then 3 turns. your strength and speed weakns by -2
-Note:Once you deactivate it. cant use any fire jutsus for 2 turns
-Note:A rank and S rank winds double on me since im coated in fire technically
-Note:Only use by Teno757

~Declined~ Take out the part where it affect you mentally. Take out the part where it gives you a +10 boost in speed (not only is it against the rule to use the speed chart as a reference, but +10 is ridiculously OP). What does it mean to "add wind to every B-rank"? I think you're stacking abilities and the fire immunity is the cherry on top. You really need to work on that one. Lower the abilities and fix what I said above.

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(magunetto-youshiki gekitai) Magnet style: Repulse
Rank-A
Type-Attack/Supplamentary
Range-Short-Long
Chakra Cost-50
Chakra Damage- (Half of the users attack)
Description: As i do 2 hand signs. the magnetic field in my body surrounds me. making any iron or metal to be reflected. meaning while its in affect no Iron sand. gold sand. nor kunais, shirukens etc can get near me. not only that but it sends the attack back to the person who attacked me but with half the damage
-Note:Can only repulse A rank and below iron and gold sand
-Note:Stays in affect for 3 turns
-Note:Can only use B rank or lower jutsus while this is in affect
-Note:Can only use 2 jutsus insted of 3 while its in affect
-Note:Only use/taught by teno757

~Declined~ 2 reasons why it doesn't work:

1st: The fact that you're making a magnetic field around you to repulse ferro-magnetic metals doesn't mean that your opponent can't "push" his metal jutsu (iron or gold) with a greater magnetic force. Your jutsu is A-rank, so it will cause an A-rank magnetic field, if you opponent use an S-rank attack, it will be strong enough to reach you while being slowed down.

2nd: How could every metallic attacks sent toward you be sent back at your opponent? It doesn't make sense if you consider that iron sand users and gold release users can make their attack come from behind you by simply manipulating the metallic particles. Even simpler, let's say I thwo a kunai at your face from a position slightly lower then your face. Considering every magnetic field follows an elliptic shape (see image below), then the kunai would be repulsed, but it would be very hard to know where it would go. Since we don't want to leave anything to chance in our RP, you can't assume it'll go back toward your opponent.

Hope everything was clear.

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(magunetto-youshiki kane adauchi) Magnet style: Devistating Metal Retaliation
Rank-S
Type-Attack
Range-Short,Mid
Chakra cost-45
Chakra Damage-90
Descrpition- I do 3 hand signs. as i do that. i then throw throw a kunai infuse with magnetism on the ground right in front of the enemy. as it does that. it then reacts to the enemy and the magnetic spot. maken the whole area where the enemy at magnetize. as that happen i then do 3 more hand signs. once i do that a magnetic force field appear around the enemy and that whole spot. making all the metal inside the earth in the force field break off into tiny sharp piece and goes crazy. cutting up the oppenent deeply in the force field. for 3 seconds.

-Note.Can only be used once
-Note.Cant Use magnetism Release for the whole battle
-Note.Once i use that attack the cells in my body weaker making all B rank jutsus and below double the damage on me for 2 turns
-Note.Can only be used or taught by teno757


EDIT or take out anything u see fit please

~Declined~ After my little explanation on magnetic field in the submission above, just believe me, this jutsu wouldn't work. It's unrealistic.

 

[Tvqxeqlapcfr]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Roshida Mode (Roshida Mode)
Type: Summoning Mode
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user marks their eyes and face with blood so that it appears as tears of blood. Within one turn, the blood turns black and the user has ented a mode known as Roshida Mode. The user's weight decreases slightly, and they appear to wear a cloak of brightly or darkly colored feathers. (See image below)
~Lasts for up to five turns.
~Usable three times per battle.
~Users must sign the hummingbird contract.
~After use, the user's speed and jumping ability is decreased slightly due to the adjustment in their return to normal weight.

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THE ABOVE IS A COMPLETE REMAKE. I am not basing this off the earlier, declined tech, but am creating from scratch. Bolding is useless, as the entire jutsu would be bolded. Thank you.

~Pending~ Where are the abilities of your technique? Also, your weight decreased and yet you say your speed and jumping ability also decreased...not sure I get the logic.

Spoke with Izuna, I think I get what he would like changed. Basically, I added a simple "ability" and clarified on the weight. If possible, please leave for Izuna.

Roshida Mode (Roshida Mode)
Type: Summoning Mode
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user marks their eyes and face with blood so that it appears as tears of blood. Within one turn, the blood turns black and the user has ented a mode known as Roshida Mode. The user's weight decreases slightly, and they appear to wear a cloak of brightly or darkly colored feathers. (See image below)
~Lasts for up to 4 turns.
~Usable once per battle.
~Users must sign the hummingbird contract.
~The user can summon Hummingbird summon without sacrificing blood and with only 1 hand seal.
~During use, the user's speed and jumping height increases due to their decreased weight. The user can also use Roshida Jutsu whle in this mode.
~After use, the user's speed and jumping ability is decreased slightly due to the adjustment in their return to normal weight. The user will feel drained after use.

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~Approved~ Made it 4 turns, once per match and made is to you need to use 1 hand seal to summon hummingbirds.

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Messenger's Jutsu (Messenger's Jutsu)
Type: Summoning's Jutsu
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 5 For every weapon that hits
Description: Messenger, the hummingbird summon, carries an opened scroll in his hands or beak. From the scroll erupts numerous wepons that were stored prior to the battle, including senbon, kunai, explosive tags, etc. When the brd is done, he drops the scroll on the opponent and it opens, to reveal a plethora of explosive tags that explode when within range of the target.

Just so we're clear, "Messenger" is the bird's name.

~Declined~ Restrictions?

Roshida Jutsu: Sight Beyond Roshida Jutsu: Biyondo kōkei
Type: Summoning Mode Jutsu
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user focuses chakra in their eyes, greatly enhancing their sight and perception. The user can see and trace chakra to a point, as well as sense chakra around them. The users accuracy increases as a result.
~This jutsu is weaker than all of the Three Great Dojutsu, as well as the sight granted by Sage Jutsu.
~This jutsu can only be used by hummingbird summons or humans in Roshida mode.

~Declined~ Nothing related to eye enhancement or remotely close to doujutsu will be approved.

Red Secret Technique: Human Puppet Act (Reddoshīkurettotekunikku: Ningen no ningyō-hō)
Type: Puppetry
Rank: S
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Sasori forcibly entangles the target in his chakra strings to the point that movement of their own accord is restricted, then forces the target to complete actions they otherwise wouldn't.
~Unlike Genjutsu, the user if fully aware of their surroundings. Because of this, they cannot be forced to perform a jutsu that requires chakra, but can be forced to use Taijutsu or Weaponry. If said Taijutsu is beyond the users and/or the target's knowledge (they have not been trained in it) it cannot be completed. The same applies to weaponry.
~This jutsu requires the full attention of the user. If the user is distracted or preoccupied, the target can escape.
~Like normal chakra strings, they are not visible to the naked eye.
~Requires a Sasori Biography.



Note to self: On page 328.

~Declined~ I like the whole Doflamingo concept, but this one is OP. You can control your opponent up to long-range, that's basically a 1 move pwn. Work on the ability in itself, make it less potent.

 

[-Naruto-]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Summoning Animal: Mountain Hawk-Eagle
Scroll Owner: -Naruto-
Other Users who have signed contract: None as of now
Summoning Boss if existing: None as of now
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract: None as of now

~Declined~ Both Hawks and Eagle are already taken.

 

[AJisRaw]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Here is one:

(Raiton:Ikazuchi Hibana Bakudan)-Lightning Style: Lightning Spark Bomb
Type:Attack
Rank:A
Range: Mid Range
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The user gathers lightning chakra around him/her and then releases tiny sparks and after 2 turns, they are fully attached to the opponent and at anytime,The user can form tiger seal and make the sparks expload, the opponent would need to get out of range before this could happen or just use a jutsu that could burn away the sparks, if the opponent can't do that then the user could kill the opponent.
Note: The User Can Only Use This Jutsu Three Times A Battle
Note: Can only be used by SinRival or any people taught this jutsu by her.

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~Approved~

Re-approved

(Raiton:Sutatikku)-Lightning Style: Static Robots
Type: Attack/Defence
Rank: A
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description: The User creates huge lightning robots that can shock anything it touches. They can be destroyed by getting hit by a s-rank wind attack, If they touch a living being, they will automatically paralyze or even kill if combined with another attack. After 5 turns they will turn back into sparks that can be used with other attacks.
Note: Can Only Be Used twice per battle
Note: Can only be used by SinRival and people taught by her
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~Declined~
Lightning Robots?O_O Re work the jutsu. And remove that kill part^^ Robot-o is the jap word.xd


No Japanese Word For Robots

(Taijutsu:Hakabakashii Sochi)-Taijutsu Style: Rapid Step
Type:Attack
Rank:S
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points:80
Description: When then user activates byakugan and uses this jutsu, the user will recieve double the accuracy and speed and so the user then appears behind the opponent and do multipal hits, then suddenly dissapear and quickly appear at the side and do multipal hits, then keeps on going and when using other attacks they'll be harder to dodge and be in a same match up to sharingan.
Note: This lasts 2 turns
Note: Can only be used twice per battle
Note: Must Have Byakugan and be taught by SinRival

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~Declined~
Remove the sharingan part. Resubmit

Pwnage jutsu

 

[bansal]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

This week's cj-

Plz edit anywhere for approving the justus

(Doton: Kitai Funbo) - Earth Style: Danger Grave
Type: Supplementary
Rank: D
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 10
Damage Points: N/A (10 due to instant fall)
Description: User claps his hands and creates a pothole/pit upto 5m raidus and of 5m depth instatly anywhere in battlefield.
Note: Can only be used 6 times per battle as it is a D-rank technique.
Note: Can only be taught by bansal.

~Declined~ Nothing is instantaneous in our RP, otherwise it would be OP. I'm ok with the whole jutsu, you just need to re-word it a bit.

(Suiton: Cheetah's Kakyaku) - Water Style: Cheetah's Paw
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: User creates a coating of dense water around his feets and gives it the shape of cheetah's paw, so that he can run smoothly and fast on any kind of surface, and thus speed of user increases by 1 level.
Note: Coatind lasts for 4 turns.
Note: Can stand or run on fire and lava easily but time period of coating decreases by 1 turn.
Note: Can only be taught by bansal.

~Declined~ It's against the rule to make any reference whatsoever to the speed chart.

(Ninjutsu: Insutanto Shifuto) - Instant Shifting
Type: Supplementary
Rank: D
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 10
Damage Points: N/A
Description: After focusing chakra in both the feets, user clicks his one feet to another feet instantly and forcefully, so that he shifts 4m from his original position in a blink of an eye.
Note: Can only be used 6 times per battle as it is a D-rank technique.
Note: Can only be taught by bansal.

Plz edit anywhere for approving the justus

~Declined~ Similar jutsu already exist and this is pretty much a rip off of shunshin no jutsu.