An alright poem :D

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You stand in front of me,
Pretending to be solid,
But you are nothing
more than smoke and--Mirrors


You said you'd never
Leave, that you would
care for me forever.
But now you claim you-- Cannot

Say that you've been
Called away. When you
Go, who will I turn to
When it all crashes down?--Tell

me who. Then tell me
How I can believe in
Anyone again, if all your
Promises have been------Lies.
 
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You stand in front of me,
Pretending to be solid,
But you are nothing
more than smoke and--Mirrors


You said you'd never
Leave, that you would
care for me forever.
But now you claim you-- Cannot

Say that you've been
Called away. When you
Go, who will I turn to
When it all crases down?--Tell

me who. Then tell me
How I can believe in
Anyone again, if all your
Promises have been------Lies.
Like :)
 

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Praise the Lord, this is probably the first poem I read on NB with actual punctuation and enjambment.

What I liked the most was the first stanza, and the final message of Mirrors Cannot Tell Lies, even though you first condemned the usage of mirrors, but when the final message was formed, you praised them.
 

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Praise the Lord, this is probably the first poem I read on NB with actual punctuation and enjambment.

What I liked the most was the first stanza, and the final message of Mirrors Cannot Tell Lies, even though you first condemned the usage of mirrors, but when the final message was formed, you praised them.
LOL And youre the first person I see on NB who knows what enjambement is:)
 
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