Okay guys,i just got this idea today and decided to start this fanfic about the Akatsuki. Sorta like X-men origins but NB style 
. Feel free to comment on it or vm me if you must. Remember this is my first idea/try so all criticisms are welcome.
Akatsuki Origins: The Height of Epicness I-The Genesis
......*Wind blowing*
.............Location-....Paradise.....
???: ...aaah....i feel so peaceful with you by my side...especially so far from that hell hole.
May: You know you're the best right?! Even Yusuke fades in comparison to you!
???: I know, my precious...
May: Oh my hero....don't go anywhere today....stay with me...
???: u know i would lay here all day if it were up to me, but i have to go and do my hero stuff ...u know, thats the reason we're deeply in love.....MY hero stuff...
May:................
???: May??...why arent you talking.?
May in a deep voice: Get UP!
???What??
May in a deep voice: I said GET UP lazy bones!!!
*splash* splash*
Kiri: I said GET UP lazy bones!!!
???: arghhh..what-da-...
*rubs eyes enough to see the Kiri-sempai
*Correction...Location-....Hell....aka Yugakure Shinobi Academy*
Kiri: Good. You're finally up....
???: *glances around*. where's everybody......and....hey why am i the only one who was awoken with Water!!!
Kiri: You mean Suiton,You know very well you're supposed to use its traditional name here....am gonna let it slide this time *smirk* cuz you're in so much trouble as it is...
???: You're lying, am not in any trouble....I finished all my chores yesterday.....*thinking to self*Did I???
Kiri: *turns and makes for exit, now grinning*
Kiri: Oh...and you are the only 1 i woke with water cuz you're the only 1 who's an hour late for senseis test today...
???: *eyes widen* WHAAT!!*quickly puts on sparing attire*
Kiri: Hes probably taken them through the warm-ups and they're checking the register now before they start.
???: they've not STARTED YET!!!
*dives through the open window while tightening his belt*
Kiri: Yesss they havent....but u probably wont make it down the 300 steps in time...'
*silence...*
Kiri: are you listening to me?!
*turns around to see an empty room and an open window....*pfft.
???: *running hurriedly*runs past staircase of 300 steps...*....hope the guys listened to me when i said not to throw it away.....
*heavy breaths...* gotta be faster than that.
...Finds a sleigh parked in front of a clearing leading down the hill.... Yesss.....i knew this thing would be of some use even in the summer....
*sits inside sleigh*
???: Here goes nothing....
*uses one leg to push sleigh down the somewhat smooth clearing...*
*wind hitting his face as sleigh moves full speed downwards...*
[l]If i dont make it in time am dead for sure...[/l]
*bump.bump*
[l]how the HELL did i sleep for song!!![/l]
*bump.bump*
Damn my name....H? that means am like the 8th person or something
*Bump.bump*
it shoulda startrd with Yor something....Yes thats the big tree that marks the end....i made IT...
*bump.bump.bump.bump*
....o ooh...how the hell am i gonna stop this thing ....and theres a cart at the end too.
*As soon as the sleireachthe end he jumps grabbing unto a branch of the huge as tree as the sleigh slams into the cart sending wood flying everywhere
..........
*Drops from the branch and heads towards he test area*
at least am not dead...yet...
sensei: No.13-Gobi?? present
???: *panting heavily as approaching arena*
sensei: No 14-Huey ???....present.
???: *quick steps*
sensei: No 15-......HIDAN???
....*no answer*....
sensei: Hidan??!
Hidan present sir...i mean sensei...i just went outside to perform the ancient water release from body technique....my bladder was full to the brim.
*everyone giggles....*
sensei: Silence!!...moving on
*Hidan falls in line at the back of one of the columns*
....senseis voice drowns into the background....
Hidan: * glancing around the room....*
Narrator/Hidan: My name is Hidan......am not telling you my surname cuz i dont know it myself. I never knew my parents so thats that. I'm 18 years and soon to be a complete shinobi by my village standards....Right after i ace this test of cuz....My village didnt actually take delight in making warriors, we were more of a peaceful art and religion folk......until we heard of the upcoming war....now i have to spend my time here instead of countless other things i could be doing.
*Hidan's eyes fall on a girl 2 columns to his left...
Thats May, the most beautiful girl i know.Nice blond hair which goes down to her shoulders, sparkling green eyes and a smile that can kill. Who wouldnt admire such a beauty
*As Hidan is taking his eyes off May he spots someone immediately behind her*
Pfft....thats Yusuke, a scumbag, no good brat who's been a thorn in my side for ages....He gets all the advantage everywhere he goes cuz he's supposedly 'cool'....all the girls are after him, he almost always tops the class in every assignment.....His name is even last in the register!!!People say hes quite skillful....i say he's just naturally gifted,thats all.......
............in all we are 16 in this class but only 1 will immerge with an award. The rest will just obtain either a pass or a fail
*Hidan draws back into reality..
sensei: .....and the final match will be between Hidan......and Yusuke....
Hidan: *Thinking* Whaaaaat!
.......................t.b.c...................................
. Feel free to comment on it or vm me if you must. Remember this is my first idea/try so all criticisms are welcome.Akatsuki Origins: The Height of Epicness I-The Genesis
......*Wind blowing*
.............Location-....Paradise.....
???: ...aaah....i feel so peaceful with you by my side...especially so far from that hell hole.
May: You know you're the best right?! Even Yusuke fades in comparison to you!
???: I know, my precious...
May: Oh my hero....don't go anywhere today....stay with me...
???: u know i would lay here all day if it were up to me, but i have to go and do my hero stuff ...u know, thats the reason we're deeply in love.....MY hero stuff...
May:................
???: May??...why arent you talking.?
May in a deep voice: Get UP!
???What??
May in a deep voice: I said GET UP lazy bones!!!
*splash* splash*
Kiri: I said GET UP lazy bones!!!
???: arghhh..what-da-...
*rubs eyes enough to see the Kiri-sempai
*Correction...Location-....Hell....aka Yugakure Shinobi Academy*
Kiri: Good. You're finally up....
???: *glances around*. where's everybody......and....hey why am i the only one who was awoken with Water!!!
Kiri: You mean Suiton,You know very well you're supposed to use its traditional name here....am gonna let it slide this time *smirk* cuz you're in so much trouble as it is...
???: You're lying, am not in any trouble....I finished all my chores yesterday.....*thinking to self*Did I???
Kiri: *turns and makes for exit, now grinning*
Kiri: Oh...and you are the only 1 i woke with water cuz you're the only 1 who's an hour late for senseis test today...
???: *eyes widen* WHAAT!!*quickly puts on sparing attire*
Kiri: Hes probably taken them through the warm-ups and they're checking the register now before they start.
???: they've not STARTED YET!!!
*dives through the open window while tightening his belt*
Kiri: Yesss they havent....but u probably wont make it down the 300 steps in time...'
*silence...*
Kiri: are you listening to me?!
*turns around to see an empty room and an open window....*pfft.
???: *running hurriedly*runs past staircase of 300 steps...*....hope the guys listened to me when i said not to throw it away.....
*heavy breaths...* gotta be faster than that.
...Finds a sleigh parked in front of a clearing leading down the hill.... Yesss.....i knew this thing would be of some use even in the summer....
*sits inside sleigh*
???: Here goes nothing....
*uses one leg to push sleigh down the somewhat smooth clearing...*
*wind hitting his face as sleigh moves full speed downwards...*
[l]If i dont make it in time am dead for sure...[/l]
*bump.bump*
[l]how the HELL did i sleep for song!!![/l]
*bump.bump*
Damn my name....H? that means am like the 8th person or something
*Bump.bump*
it shoulda startrd with Yor something....Yes thats the big tree that marks the end....i made IT...
*bump.bump.bump.bump*
....o ooh...how the hell am i gonna stop this thing ....and theres a cart at the end too.
*As soon as the sleireachthe end he jumps grabbing unto a branch of the huge as tree as the sleigh slams into the cart sending wood flying everywhere
..........
*Drops from the branch and heads towards he test area*
at least am not dead...yet...
sensei: No.13-Gobi?? present
???: *panting heavily as approaching arena*
sensei: No 14-Huey ???....present.
???: *quick steps*
sensei: No 15-......HIDAN???
....*no answer*....
sensei: Hidan??!
Hidan present sir...i mean sensei...i just went outside to perform the ancient water release from body technique....my bladder was full to the brim.
*everyone giggles....*
sensei: Silence!!...moving on
*Hidan falls in line at the back of one of the columns*
....senseis voice drowns into the background....
Hidan: * glancing around the room....*
Narrator/Hidan: My name is Hidan......am not telling you my surname cuz i dont know it myself. I never knew my parents so thats that. I'm 18 years and soon to be a complete shinobi by my village standards....Right after i ace this test of cuz....My village didnt actually take delight in making warriors, we were more of a peaceful art and religion folk......until we heard of the upcoming war....now i have to spend my time here instead of countless other things i could be doing.
*Hidan's eyes fall on a girl 2 columns to his left...
Thats May, the most beautiful girl i know.Nice blond hair which goes down to her shoulders, sparkling green eyes and a smile that can kill. Who wouldnt admire such a beauty
*As Hidan is taking his eyes off May he spots someone immediately behind her*
Pfft....thats Yusuke, a scumbag, no good brat who's been a thorn in my side for ages....He gets all the advantage everywhere he goes cuz he's supposedly 'cool'....all the girls are after him, he almost always tops the class in every assignment.....His name is even last in the register!!!People say hes quite skillful....i say he's just naturally gifted,thats all.......
............in all we are 16 in this class but only 1 will immerge with an award. The rest will just obtain either a pass or a fail
*Hidan draws back into reality..
sensei: .....and the final match will be between Hidan......and Yusuke....
Hidan: *Thinking* Whaaaaat!
.......................t.b.c...................................
