Aizen Uzumaki

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Rough Draft(Please add what I need to fix)

Basic Information
Name: Aizen Uzumaki
Nickname: Aizen
Gender: Male
Age: roughly 25
Clan: Uzumaki

Looks: Tall (6,4), long black hair, in shape, likes to wear robes just like sasukes group, hawks, or the akatsuki.

Personality:pretty relaxed, and chill, he hates violence, but will fight when attacked,even though he trys to talk it out most of the time. He refused to kill anyone, almost never gets mad, but when he does, the earth beneath him shakes from the immense chakra.

Village Info.
Village of Birth: Land of Whirlpools
Village of Alliance: Hidden Sound

Rank//Chakra Info.
Ninja Rank: SS
Specialty: Military genius, Insane Chakra, Rinnigian
Elements:Earth,Dark,Light,water,fire,and air
Your ninjutsu: Unknown for now


Background Info.
History:as a child was found by an member of the anbu and saved from being killed by a group of bandits at the age of 13, along with a boy and girl he was protecting(both age of 10). The anbu was a Root ninja sent by danzo to the village of sound to learn they're motives, but as he was doing recon, he discovered three young children surrounded by a group of rogue ninja, he rushed in, not thinking, to help the children, but as he got close enough, he noticed that all the bandits were dead, the oldest child(Aizen) was standing their with a kunai and covered in blood, looking untouched by any of what just happened. Then the anbu was paralyzed by the intense chakra coming from the child infront of him. (I'll add more if needed, plus fix the story a bit, I already wrought it out for some fan fiction but had to re-write and edit it to work with yalls rules) Longer back, on how he's an uzumaki but was never discovered, his parents both died in the war before the kyuubi was put into naruto, he and his parents lived on the outskirts of the Land of Whirlpools, in secret and solitude, but they were discovered by rogue ninjas(same from the group who Aizen later killed) Aizen espaced as his parents fought them off, and were murdered. Aizen took residence out in the village of sound until the rogue ninjas discovered were he was again.

Other: Not sure what to put here

Picture:

-without the horns in the hair, or symbols around the neck-

Theme Song and Background Music:
- theme(I know its madara/obitio's but I really enjoy it.)


Battles

Won:1?
Lost:?
-Yet to be decided-

This is just a Rough draft! please tell me what all I need to fix/add, because I know this isnt good enough yet :/
 

Tayhlor Uchiha

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I stopped reading after seeing : long black hair
 

Ōkami

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need 50 posts and have to follow the bio format and list the basic ninjustus....and Aizen? really?
 

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Make it more interesting for readers & in looks too!! :hint: Otherwise its okay for a first timer!! :)
 

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I Suggest Adding a Splash color to your Bio and some pictures of the character to give your viewers an idea of what he or she looks like that should help spice things up a bit
 

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need 50 posts and have to follow the bio format and list the basic ninjustus....and Aizen? really?

Because using the name "Aizen" isn't allowed.

As for the bio itself, you do need 50 posts as other have said. When that happens which shouldn't take too long if you go post in other sections, you start as a Genin rank. Remove your specialties, as they're generally saved for things you've mastered which comes further down the RP career. You can just put a single element you want to learn instead of all these other ones. You can also add these jutsu to your Ninjutsu list as you get them auto.
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)

(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.

(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.

(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).

(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)
But apart from that, it look good. :)
 
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