[Approved] AfflictionCause/ Kakazu/ 1st Bio

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Alright guys, this is my first Bio so it is probably gonna be horrible but here we go.



Basic Information




Name: Kakazu

Nickname: Akatsuki's Treasurer

Gender: Male

Age: 91 Years of Age

Clan: /



Looks
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Kakazu wore a white hood with his face being covered with a black mask, leaving only his eyes visible when being looked upon. Underneath his mask would be a the stitching, thread material along his mouth.

He would wear the original Black Akatsuki robes with the Red Cloud pattern covering the Black Robes, also with his village forehead protecter.
His hair being a long dark brown color, it would come down his face slightly covering his eye when not wearing his white hood. His eyes would be a distinct green/red color. his Irides being green with a red sclera and no pupil. Wrapping around his forearm would be a stitching like pattern going around til they would meet together. Also along his lower forearm would be dark grey metalic rings that would form a complete circle rotation around the forearm along with other various stitchings on multiple parts of his body. He would also have the traditional Akatsuki ring along with the red nail polish on his fingernails/toenails.



Personality

Kakazu was basically a greedy, prideful, self righteous human being that only thought of himself. All he cares about is collecting numerous bounties to gain a huge cash reward. Hence the nickname Akatsuki Treasuer. Most of the time Kakazu would usually be quiet, thinking to himself until Hidan would speak up and start talking to Kakazu and annoy him which would lead to Kakazu attacking Hidan.

Every teammate Kakazu was put with, he killed, hence Hidan( Being Immortal) being his partner since he cannot die is the only person Kakazu can team up with. Kakazu admires Intelligent Shinobi and fighting the greatest and best. All the others he considers weak. Kakazu is also very smart, his brain thinks like Kakashi's and Shikamaru's but he is not quite on the level of Intellect as Shikamaru and Kakashi would be. Though he uses the best out of a bad sitation. Like when he


Village Info

Village of Birth: Takigakure

Village of Alliance: Kakazu was loyal to the village of Takigakure until later joining the Akatsuki.



Rank//Chakra Info


Ninja Rank: S-Jounin.

Specialty: None

Elements: Fire: Needs Training


Your Ninjutsu:
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)

(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.

(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.

(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).

(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)


Background Info
History:When he was still a loyal, elite ninja of Takigakure, Kakuzu took on a mission to assassinate Hashirama Senju, the First Hokage. This mission, however, ended in failure due to the might of Hashirama's Wood Release techniques. Despite the insurmountable danger faced on the mission, what awaited his return to his village was the stigma and harsh punishment associated with the failure of his objective. In response to this treatment, a wrong levied against a shinobi who had put life and limb on the line for his village, Kakuzu came to hold a violent hatred for his village as he escaped from imprisonment. In his flight from the village, Kakuzu killed the village elders, took their hearts, and fled with knowledge of the village's most prized forbidden techniques.[1] He made a living off bounty hunting on the black market, and tearing out the still-beating hearts of powerful shinobi to extend his own lifespan.[3]
Some time after his defection, he joined Akatsuki, and was given a number of partners, most of whom he killed, due to his short temper. This is why he was eventually partnered with Hidan, whom he could not kill because of his immortality.[4]

Also at some time in the past, he apparently encountered the Gold and Silver Brothers and witnessed Kinkaku's jinchūriki transformation.[5]


Other

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A couple funny ones. xd


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Theme Song and Background Music:
I like to listen to light rock, some heavy metal and rap and hip hop and some country so basically I listen to pretty much everything. :)

Battles:
Won: 0.

Lost: 0.


Alright guys and that's my Bio I hope you liked it, again it's my first so please don't hate. xd

~Approved~ next time you post your bio like that, I will decline it as you just messed around with the template. Have fun RPing.
 
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Chakra/Rank info ect..


Ninja Rank: S-Rank, missing-nin.

Specialty: Sowing/Stitching type Ninujutsu

Elements: Wind, Fire, Earth, Lightning, Water. (Water being seen only in Anime)

Ninjutsu: Kakazu had many different variations and types of Ninjutsu due to his many Nature types. On his back would be 4 different masks, each possessing a different chakra nature which is able to come out of his body with Thread/Stitching like blanket all around it with it wielding a different Chakra type.
You need to make some changes o_O

Your Ninja Rank is : S-Jounin

Elements: Just put any random element such as Fire and say needs training.
i.e: Fire - needs training

Your Ninjutsu is:
(Bunshin No Jutsu) - Clone Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:A clone made of the user that can move but(cannot use any jutsu)This clone is merely an illusionary projection of the user.
Note:The clone jutsu can be made with different elements and is a D-Rank jutsu under its own element(Mizu/Water Tsuchi/Earth Sumi/Ink)

(Bikoku Ninjutsu) - Shadow Stealth Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:This jutsu lets the user follow the target covert by concealing the users presence.

(Henge no Jutsu) - Transformation Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Henge no Jutsu is a Ninjutsu technique, which every ninja learns at the Ninja Academy. Henge allows the ninja to transform themselves into any person or object. This allows the ninja to move with stealth or to trick their opponents.

(Gokan Sakusou) - 5 Senses Confusion Disorder
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:N/A
The user throws an explosive kunai at their target and the mist spreads threw the air.This jutsu causes the opponent to be hit by attacks even though they think they dodged it or countered it.This effect lasts for 2 turns.

(Kawarimi no Jutsu) - Change of Body Stance Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description: Kawarimi no Jutsu is a basic Ninjutsu technique. When in danger the ninja will quickly substitute themselves with another nearby object. This can be a block of wood or even another person. This allows the ninja to quickly flee and hide while the original object takes the brunt of their opponents attack.

(Nawanuke No Jutsu) - Escape Skill
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:Using chakra the user can escape from being tied down(only works with non-chakra ropes).

(Kakuremino No Jutsu) - Magic Cloak Of Invisibility Technique
Rank:E
Type:Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:5
Damage Points:N/A
Description:The user will pull out a cloak that is pre designed for their use.Then by using ninjutsu they make the cloth blend into the background(Konohamaru used this to follow Naruto in episode 2 and got caught because he was holding the cloak wrong).Skilled ninja can see through this jutsu(Rank c and above)

- Also, because you are a S-Jounin you can only have 2 hearts.
- You have won no battles and lost no battles.
 

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Make sure you preview before posting so you can clean up your spoilers

Also, I think your ninja rank, elements, specialty, and ninjutsu is through the RP training and info.

Ex: You are a S-Jounin, shown below your avatar, so Kakuzu would also be a S-Jounin in the Ninja Rank catagory.

Good Bio overall. Clean it up and Probably make your text a tad smaller. Being that big sorta cramps things up, in my opinion.
 

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Make sure you preview before posting so you can clean up your spoilers

Also, I think your ninja rank, elements, specialty, and ninjutsu is through the RP training and info.

Ex: You are a S-Jounin, shown below your avatar, so Kakuzu would also be a S-Jounin in the Ninja Rank catagory.

Good Bio overall. Clean it up and Probably make your text a tad smaller. Being that big sorta cramps things up, in my opinion.
Yeah I'm new to this so it's all kinda confusing and stuff. xd. But thanks :D
 

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ok seems you asked me personally via vm to check this im going to (as much to my dismay) be brutally honest

firstly reading this it clearly shows youve never read the rp rules even in the slightest,the bio is perfectly fine up until village info,for one its village of birth needs to be correct,secondly you can only have(to my knowledge) two elements at s jounin,and neither of them have any abilities you may chose two(i think) but you have no training in them so you cant use the jutsu

now on to dark threads,as much to my knowledge you need only have basic dark threads that comes with the bio,meaning you have the ability to have dark threads,to my knowlegde you need to be taught the other jutsu(dont quote me on that im not a kakuzu bio expert)
you also have the basic academy ninjutsu meaning you only have Rank E jutsu you dont have any jutsu shown to be used in manga or anime
as for the hearts as the others said you can only have two and at which neither of them have anby jutsu because im pretty sure they need to be taught jutsu as well(altho i think your normal elemental jutsu can be used by them but their special techniques need teaching)
now you ninja rank for the bio is the same as your rank on the forum, S jounin
also you cant use the combination jutsu of hearts that needs ot be taught as well
the music isnt about kakuzu its just a song you like nothing else
being a first bio you have zero wins and loses
also none of your spoiler tags worked to use a spoiler tag you type [spoiler.][/spoiler.] without the . on each end of the IMG

and lastly,i know for a fact that my hidan bio required 1000 posts so to my knowledge a akatsuki bio(minus zetsu he is banned pain you need to win approval and itachi requires 1500 posts being uchiha) needs at least 1000 posts on the forum which you do not have

my final thoughs is this is rushed,un thoughout and just generally a mess,you need to go back and review the rp rules so you can understand better,then perhaps try again with the bio(sorry for being brutally honest)
 

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ok seems you asked me personally via vm to check this im going to (as much to my dismay) be brutally honest

firstly reading this it clearly shows youve never read the rp rules even in the slightest,the bio is perfectly fine up until village info,for one its village of birth needs to be correct,secondly you can only have(to my knowledge) two elements at s jounin,and neither of them have any abilities you may chose two(i think) but you have no training in them so you cant use the jutsu

now on to dark threads,as much to my knowledge you need only have basic dark threads that comes with the bio,meaning you have the ability to have dark threads,to my knowlegde you need to be taught the other jutsu(dont quote me on that im not a kakuzu bio expert)
you also have the basic academy ninjutsu meaning you only have Rank E jutsu you dont have any jutsu shown to be used in manga or anime
as for the hearts as the others said you can only have two and at which neither of them have anby jutsu because im pretty sure they need to be taught jutsu as well(altho i think your normal elemental jutsu can be used by them but their special techniques need teaching)
now you ninja rank for the bio is the same as your rank on the forum, S jounin
also you cant use the combination jutsu of hearts that needs ot be taught as well
the music isnt about kakuzu its just a song you like nothing else
being a first bio you have zero wins and loses
also none of your spoiler tags worked to use a spoiler tag you type [spoiler.][/spoiler.] without the . on each end of the IMG

and lastly,i know for a fact that my hidan bio required 1000 posts so to my knowledge a akatsuki bio(minus zetsu he is banned pain you need to win approval and itachi requires 1500 posts being uchiha) needs at least 1000 posts on the forum which you do not have

my final thoughs is this is rushed,un thoughout and just generally a mess,you need to go back and review the rp rules so you can understand better,then perhaps try again with the bio(sorry for being brutally honest)
Nah don't apologize my friend, it's that hard brutally honest stuff that I was hoping you would tell me about. And yeah... I don't exactly understand how the whole training and choose a an element thing work. :ghehe:
 

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Not a bad character choice. However, you have to remember your masks can only use jutsu up to the current rank you have and you can only use the elements of which hearts you have.

1 heart = 1 element
2 hearts = 2 elements
and etc
 
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