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(Raiton: Hiken: Tsubame-Gaeshi) - Lightning Release: Concealed Sword: Swallow Return
Rank: S-Rank
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: Swallow Return is a forbidden sword technique that requires extreme precision, first in lightning chakra control and second in swordsmanship. It's a technique to where three concurrent arching blades close on the enemy from all sides to create a pseudo prison. While the user downplays it as simply successive slashes, it is actually using lightning chakra to the highest potential to overload one's arms and sword to increase speed and cutting ability. It starts with the user raising his sword above his shoulder, channeling lightning chakra to the nerves in the arms and to his sword. Once the user has done that, he performs a flashing slash from his right to his left, followed by two seemingly simultaneous, over-lapping flashes that appears to disregard the concept of time and space, producing a slash attack that arrives from three different directions due to the increased reflexes of one's arms. The user then lifts his sword as it gathers all his lightning chakra towards the blade and delivers another downwards slash resulting in an explosion of chakra, damaging the opponent.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle
Note: Unable to use A-Rank or above Kenjutsu & Lightning for the following turn
Note: User's arms are slightly numbed afterwards
Note: Must have lightning as a specialty
(Raiton: Hiken: Tsubame-Gaeshi) - Lightning Release: Concealed Sword: Swallow Return
Rank: S-Rank
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: Swallow Return is a forbidden sword technique that requires extreme precision, first in lightning chakra control and second in swordsmanship. It's a technique to where three concurrent arching blades close on the enemy from all sides to create a pseudo prison. While the user downplays it as simply successive slashes, it is actually using lightning chakra to the highest potential to overload one's arms and sword to increase speed and cutting ability. It starts with the user raising his sword above his shoulder, channeling lightning chakra to the nerves in the arms and to his sword. Once the user has done that, he performs a flashing slash from his right to his left, followed by two seemingly simultaneous, over-lapping flashes that appears to disregard the concept of time and space, producing a slash attack that arrives from three different directions due to the increased reflexes of one's arms. The user then lifts his sword as it gathers all his lightning chakra towards the blade and delivers another downwards slash resulting in an explosion of chakra, damaging the opponent.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle
Note: Unable to use A-Rank or above Kenjutsu & Lightning for the following turn
Note: User's arms are slightly numbed afterwards
Note: Must have lightning as a specialty
