A Poem

[Toruk-Makto]

Got inspired by Lord xd , i took some help though lol

rate and comment please

Your back hits the bed,
as you feel the silk inthread,
as you feel the softness like inside a coffin
your eyes start to fade, your falling to be frogotton,
your mind starts to sink, your fadding to the inbetween,
your heart begins to flutter, your beggining to connect,
you start to see the images, the images they float in your head,
they start to create, the craft and they strait, the oblivion starts to earse,
from your head cased mind, your thoughts start to die, your heart starts to siece,
you feel yourself deeper, within this oblivon plane, and as you lay there, still lifeless in a dream, you maybe start to think, you perfer to remain, inside this lifeless dream​

 

[Lord of Kaos]

Got inspired by Lord xd , i took some help though lol

rate and comment please

Your back hits the bed,
as you feel the silk inthread,
as you feel the softness like inside a coffin
your eyes start to fade, your falling to be frogotton,
your mind starts to sink, your fadding to the inbetween,
your heart begins to flutter, your beggining to connect,
you start to see the images, the images they float in your head,
they start to create, the craft and they strait, the oblivion starts to earse,
from your head cased mind, your thoughts start to die, your heart starts to siece,
you feel yourself deeper, within this oblivon plane, and as you lay there, still lifeless in a dream, you maybe start to think, you perfer to remain, inside this lifeless dream​

Going on a whim here, but if I were to name it, I'd call it "Lifeless Dream".

I like it. Though the spelling errors make it hard to make out in places but besides that, it's pretty good. ^_^

 

[Toruk-Makto]

hmm Thanks i'll try more hard next time

 

[Lord of Kaos]

hmm Thanks i'll try more hard next time

No, you misunderstood. I'm saying it was very good, it just had a few spelling errors. If those weren't there, it'd be perfect then.

 

[Don Nizzy]

not too bad can do better but thumps up

 

[Toruk-Makto]

No, you misunderstood. I'm saying it was very good, it just had a few spelling errors. If those weren't there, it'd be perfect then.

yes i got ur point thanks for reading it .. NExt time i will be more careful with
Spelling errors

 

[Igneel]

everybody started to write poems ... LOK you are trend setter .... nice

 

[Toruk-Makto]

everybody started to write poems ... LOK you are trend setter .... nice

yes thats a great thing i believe

 

[Lord of Kaos]

yes i got ur point thanks for reading it .. NExt time i will be more careful with
Spelling errors

I'm sure they'll get even better with time. ^.^

everybody started to write poems ... LOK you are trend setter .... nice

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[Igneel]

I'm sure they'll get even better with time. ^.^

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you know i was joking don't youxd

 

[Lord of Kaos]

you know i was joking don't youxd

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[Toruk-Makto]

I'm sure they'll get even better with time. ^.^
thanks

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thanks

you know i was joking don't youxd

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lol

 

[Piccolosan]

I like the theme, but too many starts lol

 

[Toruk-Makto]

I like the theme, but too many starts lol

yea i knw i'll try to make it better next time