a new land in the meadows

[izinagi54]

journey across a plain in a meadow field
with a sword and shield n my hands
fo im searching for new lands

we will cross rivers
feasting on nothing but liver
of the fish we captured

we will never starved
for the land provided
we will never be short sighted
for our heads are raised high
to the skies in the meadow

we continue to march
we never slouch
our captain is a grouch
so we continue to march without a sound

our boots hits the ground
we raise are arms
as we slowly sway to the drums
we are here in a new home

- chris

 

[Killer Vision]

bro, it very good.xd +rep

 

[Zeref]

nice rep+ i like it

 

[miZu31]

You knw i love your poems

 

[Breed]

This was pretty good, better. But the grammar failed sometimes, you know? Let me know when you finish the next poetry.

 

[Rorasa]

you keep getting better everytime. nice job chris

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

As someone stated earlier about your grammar/spelling, if you proofread a little more it will be much better but overall it was pretty good and I liked it. I'm looking forward to the next release.

 

[xlilyx]

I love reading poems and I love this, wonderfully done Chris-Kun. =DD
If it's okay, may I give you some advice? I'm not very impressive in writing poems but as Breed and Kuroi Honoo have already stated, the only thing I noticed you could improve on is the grammar. However, I enjoyed it even if some spelling were incorrect, awesome work, please keep it up!