a minato what if shippuden chapter 2

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kankuro: ( i guess i'll haveto take care of this one first then go after the other) ok then let the puppet show begin!

corw and anyt go flying forward with their arms reforming to reveal some kind of short blade sasori's tail blocks the stikes by making it go around him crow and ant start to rotate around sasori crow releases two kunai from his mouth sasori blocks it ant comes up from under the sand pushing sasori into the air it opens it's chest cavity and sasori falls in.

kankuro: sercert black move iron madien .

crows arms and legs come out and reveal blades they go trikeing into the oen hole in ant the head then lands next to aants.

kankuro: sand?

he opensthe chest to see that sasori had replaced himself with sand.

kankuro: a sand clone.

the tail comes up from uder the sand and tries to strike him kankuro jumps back the tail comes swipeing from the side hitting him in the side ofthe head and he hits the ground the tail then tries to strke down on him he brings slamander up around him self blockingsasoris tail he jumps out and relases a flame from the puppets mouth at sasori it does no damage. ant comes up from behind sasori and relases poison needles sasori dodges crow appears beside sasori and tries to strike him with it's blade sasori uses his tail to knock the puppet to the ground slamander coes up from under sasori and traps him insideof the puppet the paper bombs inside go off and slamamnder looks undamged.

sasori: that was new.

kankuro: !

the tail swipes kankuro in the rib cage from behind kankuro falls down and quikly jumps backwards landing on his feet.

sasori: it's been a while since i've had so much fun it's like i'm fighting a mini version of myself useing my hand me downs

kankuro: "hand me downs"? that must mean your sasori of the red sand.

sasori: that my name is known to even a punk like you i'm honered.

kankuro: you left the sand 20 years ago why do you return to us now?

sasori: whats the point in asking that when your clock has almost ran out.

the tail comes up from under kankuro and strikes him in the chest.

kankuro: ( why can't i get up? poisen he uses poisen in his attacks)

the tail goes right at kankuro he puts slamander in front of him but sasori aims for the joints breakings it's defensive powerhe then breaks all his puppets in half and into little pices.

sasori: since you want to live so badly i'll leave you be that poisen will kill you in 3 days you'll wish i had killed you.

crows hand comes up and manges to take a part of his mask.

kankuro: darn it i'm sorry gaara ( that direction the land of rivers.)

kankuro faints only to be found later by sand jounin who bring him back.

chiyo: sasori did this.

baki: you're sure?

chiyo: this is his poisen.

baki: well 3 years ago the leaf told us of his invasion and the poisen he used they gave us the anitode incase he should ever invade here.

chiyo: good that just means less work for us.

baki: we've still called in help from the leaf village.

chiyo: i don't trust allinces with forien lands.

mean while...

minato:team seven the kazekage has been kidnapped according to the sand village one of the confirmed attackers is sasori of the red sand i'm sending you to the hidden sand give them any back up they need/.

naruto: gaara we're coming.

later...

sakura: temari!

temari: huh?

sakura explains what happened to gaara.

temari: what gaara was!?

sasuke: according to the report that's the case.

sakura: will you come with us?

temari: of corse i will ( i was going there anyway >__>)

they start to dash froward naruto keeps getting ahead of them.

sakura: naruto stop breaking formation.

naruto: i can't take this anymore there's no reason to hide it i have the nine tailed deamon fox sealed inside of me. that;'s why their after gaara and me. we had so much in comon but he had to fend for himself alot longer then i ever did. i had iruka sensei dad you sasuke and kakashi sensei but gaara.

a picture of gaara is seen alone crying.

flash back...

gaara: i was born a monster... why do i exsit i used to ask myself... to live you need a purpose.

naruto:...

a tear goes down naruto face and he speeds up even more.

naruto: this time i'll be there for you gaara.

3 days later they arrive in the sand.

sand jounin: temari and the hidden leaf ninja baki wants to see you he's at the hospital.

baki: the squad from the hidden leaf.

temar: what hapopened to kankuro? and where gaara?

kankuro: it's ok temari i'm fine.

kankuro tells them that they are heading towards the land of rivers and gives them the sent.

kakashi: we just wait for my ninja hounds to find the sent now.

kankuto; ( naruto uzumaki...)

flash back...

gaara: i don't think of you as my brother at all if you get in my way i'll kill you

gaara: we really conneted in that battle naruto uzmaki changed me and one day i want to be like him.

gaara: one day i'd like to be important to some one else to and not as some weapon of terror but as kazekage.

now..

kankuro: naruto uzumaki please save my little brother.

naruto: huh?

ninja dog: whoo!

pukkun and another ninja dog apear.

pakkun: we found the sent.


kakashi: good now go to team guy and report they should be on the way to the sand.

pakun: understood

chiyo: i'm coming with you if a sand shinobi is needed i'm the one to go.'

they start dashing off into the woods chiyo explains what btailed beats are.

later...

chiyo: kakashi why is that boy trying so hard to save gaara?

kakashi: naruto is a jinchuuriki aswell he has the nine tailed deamon fox sealed withen him, gaara is the only friend who's felt the same pain naruto's felt it's not like he has feeling for the sand but he will go to any legth to save a friend.

chiyo: it was my jutsu that sealed the shukaku in young gaara i thought i was helping my village but i was putting it's very future at risk and now i find thatmy village's survival is in the hands of aone of the forien lands i never trusted i'v been wrong about so many things.

kakashi: your still quite young lady chiyo if you made a mistake all you have to do is correct it. i'm sure there's something you can still do.

chiyo: hahahaha ( still something i can do?)

???: sasori deidara you did not cover your tracks well.

deidara: well as i said the jinchuriki proved more powerful then i thought hm.

sasori: deidara your a bumberler and a fool.

deidara: and like those explosions of your where settle my friend hm!

zetsu: two sqauds are on there way if we don't do something they might find us.

kisame: i'll take this might guy we have some unfinished bussince to take care of.

???: and the other group?

zetsu: i say we send tobi

tobi: really mr zetsu? oh boy.

???: well tobi can go. tobi make sure you distract them for long enough we don't want them getting here before we finish the sealing jutsu.

tobi: don't worry boss tobi is a good boy.

deidara: could you shut it tobi! just go. ( i swear i'm glad sasori my man is my partner or i'll be stuck with that moron i swear if he becomes my partner i'll tear my hair out)

kakashi: stop every one.

sasuke activates his sharingan naruto and team get ready.

kakashi: it seems they don't want us getting close.

tobi: hey konoha folk!

naruto: this is an akatusuki?

tobi: ( now's my chance to get the nine tails.)

sasuke: ( there's something off about this guy)

sakura: ( :confused: )

kakashi: ( mask? he must be) madara uchiha.

naruto: what the guy who attacked the leaf 16 years ago?

chiyo: the very man who could control the ninetails.

madara: found out already i should have known the fourth hokage would spread the word around.

naruto: i'll kill you.

naruto poofs and appears behind him.

naruto: rasengan.

naruto fases threw madara madara garbs naruto's ankle and throws him onto the ground.

kakashi tries to strike him with lighting blade he goes right threw him naruto's ankle spils threw his hand.

kakashi: he has to be tangable to strike he can't strike while he's intabable we have to strike as he strikes.

naruto dashs back and so does kakashi.

guy: sorry i don't remember you.

kisame: no wonder you're called a beast you iq is certinly sub human.



next time um..

tell me how it was if you liked it press thankyou.
 

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Really been liking all these chapters, the only suggestion i would make would be to link the previous chapter when you post these, Im usually not around when you post them and it would help a lot in navigating through each chapter if i could just click a link to go to the previous chapter.
 

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I don't like the title of this Fanfic! It's too long, and you have to wrhite it like this if you like this title: A Minato what if Shippuden + that it does't make sence!! ''a minato what if shippuden''?? What that means?!
 

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I don't like the title of this Fanfic! It's too long, and you have to wrhite it like this if you like this title: A Minato what if Shippuden + that it does't make sence!! ''a minato what if shippuden''?? What that means?!
:|:| it means a minato what if stroy and it's poart two that's why shippuden was added i didn't ask if you liked the d*** title i asked how the d*** chapter was :|
 

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:|:| it means a minato what if stroy and it's poart two that's why shippuden was added i didn't ask if you liked the d*** title i asked how the d*** chapter was :|
I want to say that, in a Fanfic you have to write with ni mistakes:|, Starting from the title...and ''a minato what if''??? what does that means??
I'm just saying that in a fanfic you have to write with no mistakes!:|
 

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I want to say that, in a Fanfic you have to write with ni mistakes:|, Starting from the title...and ''a minato what if''??? what does that means??
I'm just saying that in a fanfic you have to write with no mistakes!:|
gtfo out my thread and stop spaming i know i make garmmer mistakes sometimes it just slips and i forget about it. now stfu and get out of my thread unless your going to coment on something other then the title and the grammer.
 

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gtfo out my thread and stop spaming i know i make garmmer mistakes sometimes it just slips and i forget about it. now stfu and get out of my thread unless your going to coment on something other then the title and the grammer.
Hey shut up, he's right. Accept critics if you want to be a FanFic writer otherwise if you don't learn from your mistakes don't bother writing FanFictions!
 

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Hey shut up, he's right. Accept critics if you want to be a FanFic writer otherwise if you don't learn from your mistakes don't bother writing FanFictions!
i'm tellling him to stop spamming i was told about my grammer and my title is long i know that. what he is giving is grammer advice i already know about the mistakes i try to fix it. the crictssim i'm looking for is the stroy line and how it is. ( in this case t's the name stroy line almost the same anyway) i'm writeing to let people know what could have happened so there's no other title for it.
 

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i'm tellling him to stop spamming i was told about my grammer and my title is long i know that. what he is giving is grammer advice i already know about the mistakes i try to fix it. the crictssim i'm looking for is the stroy line and how it is. ( in this case t's the name stroy line almost the same anyway) i'm writeing to let people know what could have happened so there's no other title for it.
i'm not spaming!! i'm telling you that if you want to write a fanfic you have to write it clearly! ...i'm NOT spaming...for the title and grammar mistakes...i'm right!! don't be mad!
 

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i'm not spaming!! i'm telling you that if you want to write a fanfic you have to write it clearly! ...i'm NOT spaming...for the title and grammar mistakes...i'm right!! don't be mad!
ok i under stand there is grammer mistakes and the title sucks ( and is to long but i'm writeing this to let people know what could have happened there's no other name to put in it) the grammer i try not to but i make small mistakes while typing i try to fix it what i'm saying is i already know these things if you want to point out other things that need working on that i don't already know about go ahead buti know very well my grammer when typing cen get miessed up.
 

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I don't really like the story. It's basically The Kazekage Rescue Arc with Minato, Tobi, and Sasuke.


The majority of this was the exact same from the actual manga. It was like reading the manga, but you added in a couple small things.

I rate it 3. It's not original. You kept almost everything the same, but added in three characters who weren't in the arc. My two cents.
 

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@above i know :p it"s a what if and not every thing changes just because minato lived but don't worry once we cacth up with the manga it will be going completly differt
 

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luv it this is totally what would happen!!!
:hint: i will look forward to the next
and i hope you win fanfic writer of the month if u ever enter
do u plan to?
 
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