A fantatsy Story Chapter13 Part 1

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Past chapters:
Chapter 1 : - -
Chapter 2 : - -
Chapter 3 : - -
Chapter 4 : - -
Chapter 5 : - - 3 (wait a minute there isn't a 3rd part for my 5th chapter) :sy:
Chapter 6 : - -
Chapter 7 : - - -
Chapter 8 : - -
Chapter 9 : - -
Chapter 10 : - -
Chapter 11 : - -
Chapter 12 : - -

Here's a character backstory:
Gary: the pervert Protagonist, partially lost his memory, he tries to get his memory back by returning to the Empire, he's excelled at mixing elemental affinities with his katana sword beside summoning deities from another world.
Ame: the sweet imp-princess she tries to help Gary restore his memory, with her healing abilities and water element use.
Genji: the logical-speaking guy, he doesn't -like everybody else- what tribe he's, he got expelled from his village because of his appearence and ability to suck people energy and ability to control trees, he joined this journey to find out more about himself.
Eduna:a mysterious priestess she seems to know as much as Julius does, she joined the rebellion war against the tyrant.
Rose: the french speaking Fairy, she's more pervert than Gary she joined the group for fun, she has the power to charm any male, she has sensorial abilities, and wide magical abilities.
Ignius: a man who've been cursed by Julius into a hideous dragon-man he seeks to avenge from Julius.
Zhein: Gary's friend and adoptive brother who've been kidnapped but saved by the Tyrant' chancellor, he now on the good side.
Julius: the Tyrant Chancellor, he's a mysterious man, with mysterious motives, his powers are unique, he tries to bring peace without looking at the cost, he is revealed to be an ancient deity that wants to bring all world to nothingness.
Kalina: Gary's mother and the best known earth manipulator on the main land.
magia: the type energy that's used to cast magic skills
OK, :ghehe: this time I tried a different style in dialogues I wish you are not disturbed with it :flaw:
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Julius unleashed his final technique the one known to be the ultimate "All creation rebirth" creating his own sub-world along with six mysterious men whome he named "scions of Exoddia", seeming to loose his youth along with it, taken Kalina as a hostage and disappeared back to his realm, Gary was helpless because the latest battle had got the best of him, he kneeled in despair he wished to save his mother but he gave up on it, cursing his weakness:

"dammit! He took mom with him!" Gary said in anger…

"Gary…we can…"Ame tried to cheer him…

"shut up Ame!..haven't you seen what have this guy just done…he created a whole world! All by himself…I can't …nobody can stop him…it's the end …" he punches the ground and shed some tears…

All the group felt Gary's depression, Ame cried and ran away, Rose followed her to bring her back…

"Gary please …calm down" Zhein said putting his hand on his brother's shoulder…

"calm down! ….how am I supposed to calm down!? …he took my mother from me! The bastard can create worlds! How can I stop him? The world is going to end!" the desperate young man shouted in the face of his old brother…

Zhein punched Gary and scolded him "this is how you are supposed to calm down!...I can't believe after all what we've been into you just turned out to be a complaining crybaby!" he turned his back to his friend and jumped to sit on a high rock…it was really despair everyone didn't know what to do or where to go ….two hour or so had passed and the group drowned in silence, Genji tried to cheer his friend up:

"Gary…it's okay no need to be that sad we'll figure a way to save your mother" said Genji with a doubt accent…

"no we can't Genji…I promised your mother to protect you, but I can't anymore… you can just return to the mortal realm" said Gary with a sad voice…

Genji removed his hat to reveal a small blunt, he pointed at it "then how did you do it that night?" asked him…

Gary started to remember how he saved Genji from going berserk, and walked steps away from him…

"I'm sorry but that was a mistake..all what I've done was a mistake! I killed the tyrant but guess what… he was better than dooming the world by freeing a crazy world creating deity!" Gary cried …

"what kind of heros am I?I failed my clan, I couldn't help Tobi, I couldn't save Kyle, and now I couldn't save my mother…" ..he squeezed his punch and hit the ground…

"curses! Dammit! Why can't I do anything right? Why must I hurt you all with me? I'm nothing but a cursed fool!" he shed more tears…

"but you rescued my people" said Ame in a shy voice…

"and you thought me to believe in my powers" added Genji…

"you brought a meaning to my life, though you destroyed it later…eh homme pervers" Rose
commented in a sarcastic accent…

"you made me control my rage, and helped me remember that despite my appearence I still carry a human heart" Said Ignius…

"you gave me the sign of forgiveness from God…" added Eduna…

"you gained my respect as a master of my authority, you changed my view to mortals, you thought me why mortals can be better than us deities" Avaloniir stated, though he had some ignorance in his voice…

"but…" Gary tried to complain…but those nice moments with his friends rushed into his head "gah! I can't believe it! You can't be serious guys!..." Gary smiled coldly then collapsed from stress, Genji aided him, and put him on the ground gently…

"well …what's the next move" Rose asked, her stomach grumpled "oops, excusez moi, I'm a bit hungery after all the madness we had lately…don't you have any food here" she asked Avaloniir…

"foolish! We are deities we don't have needs like mortals!" Avaloniir answered…

"well I'll try to grow some fruit here but, I'm not sure that it'll work" Genji commented…

Genji puts his palms in the ground and tried to grow a vine, he succeded but when it came to
fruit, he couldn't "I'm sorry but it seems that I'm not able to spawn fruits" he apologized..

"what? What kind of tree boys are you?" Rose complained….

"well how about this?" Zhein thrown an apple at Rose …

"eh? Zhein! Where did you find it?" Rose bite the apple asking…

Zhein slashed with his newly forged blade, and a lot of apples and water jugs appeared, his
friends were surprised, but their hunger delayed the question to what after the dinner…

"burp! Oops excusez moi!" Rose apologized …"but seriously Zhein where did you find all this?" she asked…

"thanks to these blades" Zhein rised them "I finally figured how they work" he added…

"how is that?" Genji asked…

Zhein rised his left blade"this side opens an entrance to Julius' pocket dimension" he rised the right one "and this one opens the exit, Julius was able to use both abilities simulatingly due to being one swallow lance, but after seperating them, the left side leads to a small realm that has gates which leads to almost everywhere,then I used the right side to go to the castle's stock and bring all the food to the pocket world again, to send it here…"

Rose was confused "wow that's too much to understand!" she commented…

"I'll try to build a shelter" Genji suggested, and using his wood ability he formed a hollowed tree, with grassy floor" well that's the best I can do" he said…

The group gathered in their "beds", Ame remembered something:

"lady Eduna you didn't tell us why you can use Tyrant techniques?" she asked naïvely…

Zhein, Gary,Rose and Genji were shocked to know this thing:

" am I missing something here? Eh mamie" Rose asked with a disturbing grin…

Eduna was a bit uncomfortable but she calmed "alright I guess I'll have to tell you"

"I can tell them if you want" Avaloniir said…

"no it's fine" she unzipped her cloak to reveal her emperial knight armor, the group were shocked "true I'm an emperial soldier but hear my story then judge me"
Eduna started to reveal her story "I'm Marcelline Evermor , the last descendant of the branch family of the royal tribe"

"then you and the tyrant are like cousins right?" Gary commented…

"No… I'm Marcelline Evermor the XVII" she said looking at the floor in shame…

Zhein was surprised "no way! that makes you about a hundread years old!" he exclamated…

Eduna completed her story "yes I'm hundread thirty three years old woman, I'm cursed to be immortal for eternity as a judgement of my deeds"…

"what deeds? How can you live so much? and you still look young?" Gary asked in surprise…

"it all will come Gary… calm down" said Eduna with a voice like she was crying…a moment to gather herself then completed telling her story "I lived in the era of Ezel the XVII as his niece, I was the strongest sorceress there is, I was the one who brought all the dark arts to the family making ruling the world easier, but it all changed when he tamed the Ophiuchus, his greed exceeded all limits, and his madness pushed the world to its end, of course this foolish woman was enjoying this along with her uncle, until the day they appeared…" she stopped…

"the legendary twin branches…" said Zhein…

"true the descendants of the great Zhein, Zidane and Aiden Miridia…before they seal Ophiuchus again they fought against me, I used every bit of dark magic on them but it seems they defeat me" said Eduna remembering the scene:

*"agh!...dammit! cursed Zheinian!" said young Eduna while kneeling on her knee…

"you gained my respect as a warrior…you are gifted from God with great skills…but you didn't follow the right path" said Zidane with cruel looks, rising his hand to the sky summoning the seventh deity as he appears in a large orb of light "Exoddius …may you judgement fall upon her" he shouted…

he seventh deity, sent a beam of light that covered Eduna, and drawn a seal on her stomach, then the twins left the battle field, leaving Eduna to think of what she had done*


"I witnessed the emperor loosing his battle, but I didn't care so much, I left the empire and roamed in the land for years, I didn't know whare to go, I was lost, until I met him" said Eduna while smiling …

"the guy you loved!" Gary interrupted her…

"yes…he was… what can I say? Heins was a peaceful man, he was the priest in the town of Seikana, he took care of me, he made me gain faith again and look to this world as a new woman, by time I became a devoted woman as well, but…" her facial expression changed again…"I couldn't hold myself…the empire attacked the village a decade later, I couldn't tame my dark side so I slaughtered those soldier mercilessly, I enjoyed the view of the blood and gore, I got driven by rage, and I've been possessed by those evil feelings, the people of Seikana feared me as if I'm a demon….but again I owe it all to Heins he helped stood by my side and used his holy arts to seal that evil….decades passed, Heins died and so all the generation I lived with, alas I was cursed to be immortal, I've seen people I loved vanish, while I only was there, I felt pain and trauma, but I never lost faith that this is only a test of forgiveness from God, I became Eduna the priestess and continued what Heins started in seeking peace without arms, waiting for a sign of forgiveness and so it was I met the new branches Zhein and Gary, and I knew that the day has come to fulfill my duty….finally" and so Eduna completed telling her story…
To be continued​
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I'm very surprised that this time I wrote chapter that didn't contain any fights in it :lmao:
 
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Well done. Sure there's grammar issues, but this is nice. The spaces make it even easier to read. In fact, I could read this faster because of them. It would take me twice as long or more if the spacing wasn't there. ;) That's good since you want the reader to feel the flow. You don't want to make reading a challenge. The mark of a good writer is that they can make their story easy to read while still being complex. That's hard to explain, but you get the general idea. ^_^
 
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