A fantatsy Story Chapter12 Part 3

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Past chapters:
Chapter 1 : - -
Chapter 2 : - -
Chapter 3 : - -
Chapter 4 : - -
Chapter 5 : - - 3 (wait a minute there isn't a 3rd part for my 5th chapter) :sy:
Chapter 6 : - -
Chapter 7 : - - -
Chapter 8 : - -
Chapter 9 : - -
Chapter 10 : - -
Chapter 11 : - -
Chapter 12 : -

Here's a character backstory:
Gary: the pervert Protagonist, partially lost his memory, he tries to get his memory back by returning to the Empire, he's excelled at mixing elemental affinities with his katana sword beside summoning deities from another world.
Ame: the sweet imp-princess she tries to help Gary restore his memory, with her healing abilities and water element use.
Genji: the logical-speaking guy, he doesn't -like everybody else- what tribe he's, he got expelled from his village because of his appearence and ability to suck people energy and ability to control trees, he joined this journey to find out more about himself.
Eduna:a mysterious priestess she seems to know as much as Julius does, she joined the rebellion war against the tyrant.
Rose: the french speaking Fairy, she's more pervert than Gary she joined the group for fun, she has the power to charm any male, she has sensorial abilities, and wide magical abilities.
Ignius: a man who've been cursed by Julius into a hideous dragon-man he seeks to avenge from Julius.
Zhein: Gary's friend and adoptive brother who've been kidnapped but saved by the Tyrant' chancellor, he now on the good side.
Julius: the Tyrant Chancellor, he's a mysterious man, with mysterious motives, his powers are unique, he tries to bring peace without looking at the cost, he is revealed to be an ancient deity that wants to bring all world to nothingness.
Kalina: Gary's mother and the best known earth manipulator on the main land.
magia: the type energy that's used to cast magic skills
OK, :ghehe: this time I tried a different style in dialogues I wish you are not disturbed with it :flaw:
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The collaboration of Gary's deity techniques along with Avaloniir's ethereal authority succeded to trap Julius between two deadly spells, the colliding left a huge explosion, they're now waiting for the outcome of battle:
"We did" it! Gary shouted in joy…
"don't be hasty lad!" Avaloniir commented…
Julius emerged from the dust, bleeding from his eyes and mouth and his ginger red hair turned a bit gray:
"you have pushed me, to use it twice!" said Julius in anger, spitting blood…
"what the…how did he survived two planetary impacts?" the young man replied in confusion…
"the All creation rebirth…I can't believe he already performed it twice with a mortal body" answered the deity…
"heh …that's beyond your belief brother" said Julius…"and you are starting to loose your shine, Gary" noticing his deity cloak starting to fade…
"Genji ….use the seed!" shouted Gary…
"right now!" said the tree boy and entering a meditating stance…
Suddenly the seed Gary swallowed earlier started to produce a large amount of magia that restored Gary's deity form , the hero then set another Planetary impact, and rushed to his weakened foe, Julius on the other hand was too desperate that he used most of his arsenal from Genji's cells to create a large tree to absorb most of the damage:
"I'll be in deep trouble with that Genji creature around here" said Julius to himself, barely breathing…
The weak villian got hit by a ferocious elbow dash from behind, delievered by Avaloniir that pushes him straightly toward a shadowy dragon's skull, tied with its tongue, Julius is tightly trapped in Avaloniir soul torture technique, his soul was ripping apart slowly causing the ultimate pain a mortal can ever experience:
"Exoddius… my brother…I can end this suffer, if you gave up on your malice" …said Avaloniir in sadness…
"I swore that I'll bring the mortal world to end, and no pain in all creation can stop me " says Julius in challenge…
Julius shaked and with a great effort broke through the spell, he falls on the ground and barely he stood, he flied back to gain some distance…and a moment of silence had fallen upon the battle field, Genji, Zhein, and Rose joined:
" he's dead meat now!" commented Rose….
"Julius …please surrender we give you the chance to live it all came to end now…." Said Zhein…
"like ….NO! I'd rather be sent to hell than to give up to mortals!" …smirked Julius…"Genji can you tell us what your cells became under a hundread year spell" he asked Genji…
"everybody retreat!" Genji shouted in fear…
Julius's left shoulder mouth opened widely and spawned a beanstalk that immediately grown into a large tree which its roots attacked the heros in an instant tying them tightly, and started to drain magia from them:
"heh …I like it when the table turns!" said Julius with laughter….
"shit! Why can't we just defeat him?!" Gary complained…
Suddenly unaware of the threating opponent, Julius turned to face a kick from Zhein, followed by a head dive in the stomach that broke his connection with the tree, which slowly withered:
"what how?" asked Julius …
"heheh …I guess you didn't expect me to use these" Zhein shows the two blades from Julius' lance…"ugh!" Zhein crumbled on his knee...
"it seems that you don't have the magia to surpass one teleportation" laughed Julius and approached Zhein…
Before he puts his hand on Zhein, a huge fire ball interrupted Julius, making him back off, it was Ignius who carried Ame and kalina on his back, Julius set to attack them but Eduna flash speed like stab hit him in the shoulder and started to electrify him:
"those are the eyes I want to see ….Marcelline" Julius smirked while holding the rapier and staring in Eduna's eyes ….
"I'm not Marcelline anymore! …" said Eduna in anger …"argh! …what are you doing!?" starting to pass out…
"nothing like draining vitality from an immortal…eh Marcelline?" he started to look younger and his white hair turned red again….
Eduna felt that he was absorbing her life force so she retreat and joined the full team…Julius gained his vitality again and ready for an upcoming battle, he clapped his hand but Eduna was faster:
"I summon the Sheme'yahazai of astrals!" shouted Eduna…
Sheme'yahazai chained with shining chains emerged to face her beloved one…
"I'm sorry Exoddius,for I failed you" said Sheme'yahazai in shame and depression…
"how do you feel after feeling the pain of loosing your beloved ones?" said Eduna with cruel snake like eyes….
"that's the Marcelline I used to know ….but rancid filth of mortals …you shall never be forgiven!" said the angered villian …
But before he does any move, Gary landed another planetary impact on Julius using what was left from his magia in it, his foe did the same, the two technique collided leaving a huge blast, Gary retreat back and from the dust emerged Julius:
"he can do …planetary impact as well?" Gary questioned…
"Planetary impact …how barbarian of you mortals to create such a brute spell out of my finest skill" Julius commented and rised his hands slowly…
" his magia is growing more than deity level!" said Rose and shaking from fear…
"you'll see what does a deity tier technique mean!" said Julius clapping his hands tightly….
The land fluided the sky cracked, every thing was going chaotic, the crack in the sky taken a regular ecliptic form, a small orb of light is seen in the center, it started growing and pulling rocks toward it until it takes a flaming rock like appearence, Julius changed his hand clap sign and blood started to leak from his eyes and nose, the fireball cooled down and started to spin around slowly attracting more rocks to the orbit growing larger and larger, the land lost it's solid form totally transforming into a fluid ocean of rocks, the sphere grown bigger than anything on earth into a planet size, the land solidified again, Julius face turned more old and his hair became totally white, he opened his hands slowly, and looked up to the planet he created:
"cough…this is it …the all creation rebirth at its finest" he commented on his creation…
"what the hell was that?" Kalina shocked…
"All creation rebirth ….the utimate weapon of Exoddius it's a technique beyond space, time, reality or illusion, it's can turn magia into full independant creation…." Avaloniir explained…
"hahahahaha ….welcome to the new born world of Exoddia!" Julius commented in laughter…
"no I won't let this happen!" Eduna charged at him….
Eduna got kicked in the stomache by a muscular cloacked man, that retreat to Julius side, then five more men descended to his side:
"Now what?" Gary complained…
" the seven scions of the Exoddia in attendance….!" Julius shouted along with the six men…
"seven scions …of Exoddia? …are you crazy Exoddius! Passing the limits of your authority!" Avaloniir said in anger
"Julius…what exactly have you became?" Kalina asked with fear…
"oh I almost forgot" he pointed at her …
Suddenly a short man of the six scions teleported behind Kalina and take her with him:
"mom! You son of the …" Gary angerily runs toward Julius...
"this is another story for another time Gary" he disappeared , along with the scions and Kalina…
Gary kneeled in despair and angered because of his shock, swearing that he'll save his mother even if it was the last things he does….
End of chapter to be continued​
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:hint:: who else thinks that Julius is the best troll eva?
 
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Yes! You did it! Now this is a story! Wow, that makes such a huge difference. Now the characters don't feel like robots, it breathes life into them and adds a whole new level to everything. ;) There's only one last thing that will complete this: spacing. It just makes it easier to read is all, and it's super easy to do. In fact, I can do it right now so you can compare between the two. :p ^_^

The collaboration of Gary's deity techniques along with Avaloniir's ethereal authority succeded to trap Julius between two deadly spells, the colliding left a huge explosion, they're now waiting for the outcome of battle:

"We did" it! Gary shouted in joy…

"don't be hasty lad!" Avaloniir commented…

Julius emerged from the dust, bleeding from his eyes and mouth and his ginger red hair turned a bit gray:

"you have pushed me, to use it twice!" said Julius in anger, spitting blood…

"what the…how did he survived two planetary impacts?" the young man replied in confusion…

"the All creation rebirth…I can't believe he already performed it twice with a mortal body" answered the deity…

"heh …that's beyond your belief brother" said Julius…"and you are starting to loose your shine, Gary" noticing his deity cloak starting to fade…

"Genji ….use the seed!" shouted Gary…

"right now!" said the tree boy and entering a meditating stance…

Suddenly the seed Gary swallowed earlier started to produce a large amount of magia that restored Gary's deity form , the hero then set another Planetary impact, and rushed to his weakened foe, Julius on the other hand was too desperate that he used most of his arsenal from Genji's cells to create a large tree to absorb most of the damage:

"I'll be in deep trouble with that Genji creature around here" said Julius to himself, barely breathing…

The weak villian got hit by a ferocious elbow dash from behind, delievered by Avaloniir that pushes him straightly toward a shadowy dragon's skull, tied with its tongue, Julius is tightly trapped in Avaloniir soul torture technique, his soul was ripping apart slowly causing the ultimate pain a mortal can ever experience:

"Exoddius… my brother…I can end this suffer, if you gave up on your malice" …said Avaloniir in sadness…

"I swore that I'll bring the mortal world to end, and no pain in all creation can stop me " says Julius in challenge…

Julius shaked and with a great effort broke through the spell, he falls on the ground and barely he stood, he flied back to gain some distance…and a moment of silence had fallen upon the battle field, Genji, Zhein, and Rose joined:

" he's dead meat now!" commented Rose….

"Julius …please surrender we give you the chance to live it all came to end now…." Said Zhein…

"like ….NO! I'd rather be sent to hell than to give up to mortals!" …smirked Julius…"Genji can you tell us what your cells became under a hundread year spell" he asked Genji…

"everybody retreat!" Genji shouted in fear…

Julius's left shoulder mouth opened widely and spawned a beanstalk that immediately grown into a large tree which its roots attacked the heros in an instant tying them tightly, and started to drain magia from them:

"heh …I like it when the table turns!" said Julius with laughter….

"shit! Why can't we just defeat him?!" Gary complained…

Suddenly unaware of the threating opponent, Julius turned to face a kick from Zhein, followed by a head dive in the stomach that broke his connection with the tree, which slowly withered:

"what how?" asked Julius …

"heheh …I guess you didn't expect me to use these" Zhein shows the two blades from Julius' lance…"ugh!" Zhein crumbled on his knee...

"it seems that you don't have the magia to surpass one teleportation" laughed Julius and approached Zhein…

Before he puts his hand on Zhein, a huge fire ball interrupted Julius, making him back off, it was Ignius who carried Ame and kalina on his back, Julius set to attack them but Eduna flash speed like stab hit him in the shoulder and started to electrify him:

"those are the eyes I want to see ….Marcelline" Julius smirked while holding the rapier and staring in Eduna's eyes ….

"I'm not Marcelline anymore! …" said Eduna in anger …"argh! …what are you doing!?" starting to pass out…

"nothing like draining vitality from an immortal…eh Marcelline?" he started to look younger and his white hair turned red again….

Eduna felt that he was absorbing her life force so she retreat and joined the full team…Julius gained his vitality again and ready for an upcoming battle, he clapped his hand but Eduna was faster:

"I summon the Sheme'yahazai of astrals!" shouted Eduna…

Sheme'yahazai chained with shining chains emerged to face her beloved one…

"I'm sorry Exoddius,for I failed you" said Sheme'yahazai in shame and depression…

"how do you feel after feeling the pain of loosing your beloved ones?" said Eduna with cruel snake like eyes….

"that's the Marcelline I used to know ….but rancid filth of mortals …you shall never be forgiven!" said the angered villian …

But before he does any move, Gary landed another planetary impact on Julius using what was left from his magia in it, his foe did the same, the two technique collided leaving a huge blast, Gary retreat back and from the dust emerged Julius:

"he can do …planetary impact as well?" Gary questioned…

"Planetary impact …how barbarian of you mortals to create such a brute spell out of my finest skill" Julius commented and rised his hands slowly…

" his magia is growing more than deity level!" said Rose and shaking from fear…

"you'll see what does a deity tier technique mean!" said Julius clapping his hands tightly….

The land fluided the sky cracked, every thing was going chaotic, the crack in the sky taken a regular ecliptic form, a small orb of light is seen in the center, it started growing and pulling rocks toward it until it takes a flaming rock like appearence, Julius changed his hand clap sign and blood started to leak from his eyes and nose, the fireball cooled down and started to spin around slowly attracting more rocks to the orbit growing larger and larger, the land lost it's solid form totally transforming into a fluid ocean of rocks, the sphere grown bigger than anything on earth into a planet size, the land solidified again, Julius face turned more old and his hair became totally white, he opened his hands slowly, and looked up to the planet he created:

"cough…this is it …the all creation rebirth at its finest" he commented on his creation…

"what the hell was that?" Kalina shocked…

"All creation rebirth ….the utimate weapon of Exoddius it's a technique beyond space, time, reality or illusion, it's can turn magia into full independant creation…." Avaloniir explained…

"hahahahaha ….welcome to the new born world of Exoddia!" Julius commented in laughter…

"no I won't let this happen!" Eduna charged at him….

Eduna got kicked in the stomache by a muscular cloacked man, that retreat to Julius side, then five more men descended to his side:

"Now what?" Gary complained…

" the seven scions of the Exoddia in attendance….!" Julius shouted along with the six men…

"seven scions …of Exoddia? …are you crazy Exoddius! Passing the limits of your authority!" Avaloniir said in anger

"Julius…what exactly have you became?" Kalina asked with fear…

"oh I almost forgot" he pointed at her …

Suddenly a short man of the six scions teleported behind Kalina and take her with him:

"mom! You son of the …" Gary angerily runs toward Julius...

"this is another story for another time Gary" he disappeared , along with the scions and Kalina…

Gary kneeled in despair and angered because of his shock, swearing that he'll save his mother even if it was the last things he does….

This just reads better, and it barely took me a minute to do.

Great job, I'm so impressed. The story is so much better now and it makes me want to read it. ^_^ I don't even know what to say...I'm speechless...I guess I could say that it's great again. xd Did I mention that it was great?

Great chapter, bro! :D But the other dialogue was better :)
-_- That's because you don't like this style for some reason...and I can't figure out why...xd
 
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