[Predictions] 663 gaara and sasuke vs madara

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sorry for any wrong spelling



as the jubi begin to it stage to be complete madara is ready to battle sasuke and gaara

madara tell zestu to tell black zestu to get his other eye now

as zestu leave sasuke fire his susanoo arrow but was to late

madara looks at sasuke and gaara and sasuke and gaara look at madara

sasuke: gaara is time to end his life

gaara: thinking (easier said then done)

gaara: sasuke ill use my sand to block his attack and distract him, u go for attacks only don't waste your charka

as sasuke run toward madara for an attack, madara jumps down from jubi head to ground

madara: do u think you two can kill me, when even hashirama couldn't

sasuke: ill end your life(as he enter his susanoo) and fire few arrow toward madara

madara: dodge the arrow with ease but then see his feet get caught buy sand

gaara: it wont be easy this time

as sasuke get close to madara for an attack but madara uses his susanoo (stage 1) to escape the sand

gaara: just as I thought, sasuke now

sasuke: uses his fire just toward madara and the he fire his amaterasu arrow toward the fire justu

madara: u thing that his enough to fin..!!!!!!!!!!!!

as gaara grab madara susanoo leg and (does the same thing as he first saw edo madara) gaara gets madara out of his susanoo, as madara is about to get hit buy sasuke attack he smile

cut to hashirama

hashirama dawn u madara you have gone to far this time

hashirama: tell his brother and 3rd hokage to leave him and help sasuke and gaara

2nd and 3rd hokage: thinking these rod are just too though

hashirama: don't worry about me help those kids madara is playing with them, he well kill them when the jubi is complete again

2nd and 3rd: what do u mean

hashirama: madara is buying time and he is only using his clone fin...............

2nd and 3rd:!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

cut to real madara who his on jubi head but cant be seen buy any one else

madara: so you figure it out hashirama, but is to late

cut to clone madara vs sasuke and gaara

as the attack hit madara the only thing can be seen fire covering madara but madara cant be seen

gaara: uses his sand coffin to cover the flames with his sand so madara cant escape

gaara: thinking (this was too easy)

suddenly the sand is push back and madara is seen with his stage 2 susanoo

sasuke and gaara:!!!!!!!!!!!

gaara: ( how did he escape )

madara: do u two really think that I needed to dodge that weak attack

sasuke: enter his complete susanoo

madara: look at sasuke then he give him a I don't care face

sasuke: gets mad

gaara: sasuke don't let him get you

sasuke calms down a bit as he looks at madara

madara: boy(sasuke) I decided to kill you first

sasuke: shut the hell up (as he run toward madara)

gaara uses his sand hand to stop sasuke

sasuke: don't get in my way or ill kill you

gaara: calm down you well only making thing worse if you go in with out a plan

sasuke: I do have a plan, ill kill this despicable uchiha, it was because of you

madara: so you believe it was because of me every uchiha is dead, but your brother (zestu may know and could have told madara) should have killed you

sasuke: don't u ever say his name

madara: you should consider your self lucky to be killed by my hand

sasuke: rush toward madara

gaara: shit as he uses a sand wall to block sasuke way

sasuke: get out of my way gaara I well not say it again

gaara: sasuke you cant fight him like that, your were the smart one of those 2 remember

sasuke: calm down for a bit again

madara: time sure as change, you sure are a weak uchiha and I kill weak uchiha they are a disgrace to my clan

upon hearing those words sasuke rush in for an attack

madara: smile (come and die)

as sasuke get close to madara for an attack

sasuke: fire a amaterasu orbs at madara but madara absorb the attack and is about to hit sasuke with his susanoo sword

gaara: shit, as he start to move his hand to block madara attack, he see a shadow figure behind him

???: you two made too easy....!!!!

then the shadow figure get hit with a lighting fist

A: you should watch you back

as the shadow figure turn in to wood and say you are to late

sasuke: shit, I don't have time to dodge the attack

then suddenly sasuke vanish

madara: you all always cause my more trouble tobirama

tobirama: u need to listen brat

sasuke:...

tobirama: u two need to work together we all fall

gaara: thanks riakage

A: so let kill him

3rd hokage: their his no point in fighting a clone

A,gaara, sasuke: are shock

gaara: so where is the real madara

tobirama: im guessing he is still on top of the jubi head

as the real madara walk to see everyone on the ground and the see madara on top of the jubi head connect to jubi

madara: your are too late and you call your self kages

as zestu appear beside madara and give him his other rinnegan

madara: finaly this world is mine (as he put his other rinnegan in his other eye place)

as the ground shake, lighting can be heard and the jubi roar

the end
 

sealingscroll

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if you know there will be mistakes. please fix before you hit submit thread. just my opinion.

organize it a bit better and you will be set golden. :D.

I liked it. 3.5/5. made my head hurt though from the errors and dis-organization. again I liked it. I see this occasionally. go over before submitting and fix. even after submitting to make it easier for people to read so they can continue reading and not stop half way through.

^ advice.
 

ssjsage

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if you know there will be mistakes. please fix before you hit submit thread. just my opinion.

organize it a bit better and you will be set golden. :D.

I liked it. 3.5/5. made my head hurt though from the errors and dis-organization. again I liked it. I see this occasionally. go over before submitting and fix. even after submitting to make it easier for people to read so they can continue reading and not stop half way through.

^ advice.
This guy said it all. It was a great follow up prediction just the mistakes in spelling and grammer made it a hard read
 

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The prediction was mediocre.

Reason: I didn't understand half of it due the wrong spelling and/or lack of separation between dialogue or actions. Apologizing is not enough, you need to improve and correct these issues, you need to learn from your mistakes.
 
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