サスケ - Rairen Uchiha

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“I chose Life over Revenge, so I could live to claim, *pause* claim Revenge.”

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Name: Rairen Uchiha
Nickname: Devil of Darkness
Gender:
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Male
Age: 17
Clan:
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Uchiha

Appearance | Personality:
Explained in the History ^_^



Village Information


"My honor is my loyalty." (Heinrich Himmler)

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Village of Birth:
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Konohagakure
Village of Alliance:
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Iwagakure
Unofficial Group Alliance:
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Yukigakure


Rank/Chakra Information


“I mastered the power that can tame DARKNESS.”

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Ninja Rank: S-Class Ninja
Specialty:

Fire:
Rairen being born in the Uchiha clan has a natural affinity to the fire element. Later on he was trained my Tsuchikage of Iwagakure in the element making him an expert. He now needs only 1 hand-seal for the fire element jutsus.


Elements:
Fire | A-rank
Wind | A-rank
Lightning | A-rank
Water | B-rank
Earth | B-rank

Ninjutsu | Needs Training
Taijutsu | Needs Training
Genjutsu | Needs Training

Sharingan:
The Sharingan, literally meaning "Copy Wheel Eye", is a Dōjutsu Kekkei Genkai, which appears in to some members of the Uchiha clan. The sharingan holds several stages, each one stronger than the previous one, obtained through continued use and training, up to a maximum of three (tomoes). As the Sharingan evolves, the user gains heightened abilities.

Abilities of the Sharingan:
(2T Sharingan Activated)
-See through the chakra flow. The Sharingan can tell if a person is under a genjutsu because the person's chakra flow would be irregular.
-Incredible clarity of perception, allowing them to easily recognize genjutsu and different forms of chakra
-Ability to memorize any technique that he or she witnesses, apart from other KG techniques. The user can memorize ninjutsu, genjutsu, and taijutsu with perfect accuracy, allowing the user to use the techniques as his own.




Background


“Love is an ocean wide but no one wants to share even a droplet.”

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Journey Through The Past​

Devil of Darkness: :devil:

Light was so strong that whenever I tried to open my eyes the flash of whiteness shuts them close. My head started spinning and my eyelids became heavy. It felt as if I was covered with a very thick coat of brightness, which was drowning me to the very end. It wasn’t an uneasy feeling; it was pleasant, very warm and fresh. The coat of brightness was comforting me and I didn’t wanted to be anywhere else, It was as if I was summoned to the heaven and all my burden was taken away from me. I decided to drown in this feeling and never wake up, but then I felt a shiver in my spine and a selfish occurred to me, it forced me to avoid the pleasant and copacetic feeling and look for something else. I wanted to witness the beauty of this place with my own eyes, the beauty that was drowning me to pleasure. I wanted to open my eyes and look at the world around me in which I stood. I tried again and the same flash tried to force me to accept the pleasure but this time I fought and opened my eyes. Everything around me was so bright that for a moment nothing was making any sense and the headache returned.
I didn’t quit; I fought the pleasure and looked for darkness in this brightest place. And then I heard the most enchanting and beautiful voice; it was a voice that I could give my whole existence to hear again. It was a sound, a chime. No! A giggle: ahh yes a giggle. It gave me even more strength to fight the light and pleasure and look for it, look for the source of the sound that enlarged my shrunken soul, that enlivened my dying spirit, and that enlightened my dim prosaic eyes. Then I saw her, the most beautiful creature that I have ever seen in my dry and dark life. I had no words to describe her beauty. She was smiling and that made me smile. Everything became clear around me but those details didn’t mater anymore. What mattered was a blonde creature who stood before me. I unconditionally bowed before her magnificent beauty, but I never saw down, my eyes were locked on her and I couldn’t look away. It was as if she took my sight and all that was left in my eyes was her image. Her golden hairs were blowing backwards by the warm air. Her eyes half closed but I could see the teal tint in them. Her delicate hands covered in bright silver and golden metal gloves. Her legs were half naked and a velvet creamy glow shined from her skin. She stood with her right hand on a silver and teal colored sword. When I was sure I have seen her beauty to the fullest I witnessed the charm, her angel wings. They opened and a flapped gently giving her stability and an altitude. A soft breeze touched my skin and I smelled the scent of flowers, millions of them there was not just one distinct scent, it was a mixture of countless fragrances all combined in a single aurora.
She offered her hand to me with a smile still on her face. I was afraid not to hurt her by holding her hand, so I hesitated. Then she with her eyes in an instant she explained me everything. Her eyes told me that the power I possess is just a small fraction of hers, and I mean no harm to her, and neither she means any harm to me. I would offer my life to such glory but then I realized that I was only asked a hand, so I held her hand she gently lifted me and I stood in front of her. Then I heard her voice more beautiful than her giggle and she spoke my name.
“Rairen”, she said with a smile still on her face. “I summoned you here, to lay down your new life today.” I was still in amazement and a shock, and then I tried to remember how I came here but nothing was coming back to me, she read my face and spoke again; “Don’t be afraid, you are safe with me. I won’t hurt you.” I was so lost in her words that I lost my voice and she spoke again “I know you don’t remember much right? But don’t worry I can help you see your past, but you are not here to witness what you have already done but to carve a new future.” I finally found courage to speak against such a beauty; I didn’t want to interrupt her talk. I wanted to listen to her for the rest of my life but something told me that I don’t belong here and there are greater things that awaits. I spoke, “My past?” mere words that didn’t made sense. She spoke again “Yes your past” I spoke again, questioning the lavish beauty “How do you know my name?” “I know everything about everyone, you are the first one to call us with such power.” She spoke as she was singing. “I called you?” my voice breaking. “You don’t remember anything do you? Here see if you wish. I will show you who you are!” She placed her sword back into a scabbard that was tied to her waist, and then she slammed her hands together releasing a powerful shockwave. It struck me and I was fainted. It felt like a moment when I opened my eyes again but I was in utter darkness. After few moments I saw a shine, just beam of light from a small hole. I leaned forward towards that hole and my body effortlessly tilted towards it. When I got near, I started feeling air pressure and it was sucking me in that hole. My body twisted and I was completely absorbed in, and then I could see and hear everything again. It came back to me. It came like a storyline of memories and I found that I was dead O_O


The Birth of a Devil:


I heard a cry, a cry of a baby, my cry. I was there in my mother’s hand. This is the first time I am seeing her. She looked beautiful. My eyes are just like hers. *Tear rolled down my eye* She held me in her arms closer to her heart. I could hear her heart beating and I could feel the protective warm shield around me. A shield created by mother’s love. But it felt strange, it felt as if the shield was about to be penetrated and I felt that she knew it. She knew this was the only time she could see me. Then I noticed strange black markings on her arm. It was curse markings, I felt afraid. Even though I have lived these moments before but now I could feel the fear, it was all around me. Then I turned around to see who was around me; my father wasn’t there, there were three more people, an old woman and 2 young girls. They all stared us with suspicion. It felt as if they didn’t wanted to see me and they had fear buried in their eyes and it rose as they saw me. They didn’t want my mother to be there. They were looking in my eyes and then the youngest one spoke, “He even has those cursed eyes. He is not one of us.” Mother’s hands tightened around me. The old women said after noticing the protective hands of my mother around me “Your marks, they are there since he came in this world, I knew *pause, creepy old voice*, I knew this is a cursed child. You, you Liomi Uchiha, you are putting our existence in danger. Can’t you see? You gave a birth to a Devil. He will slaughter everyone once he gains control of his powers. You still have time kill him, let us do it!” My mother screamed at her and she went silent. I, I am a Devil. Tears rolled down my mother’s eyes and fell on the baby me. I felt the wetness on my cheeks. I wanted to show them that I am not a devil but I knew I couldn’t help but watch. I was a mere illusion in my own past. Then I heard a male voice, a voice I recognized in an instant. It was my father’s voice. He was not in my vision but in the deepest memories. He was shouting, shouting at some people about how my mother wont let him KILL me. How he can’t hurt her. I was pleased but broken. I was the reason to all troubles that my mother was facing. Then I felt a break in the shield that engulfed me. My mother felt it too she held me tighter. I heard the slashing of swords and spurting blood. He came covered in black cloth and blood, blood of my father and his clan. In an instant he slaughtered the three females in the camp, he killed all of the, and then came for my mother. His spoke in dark voice, looking at me “Sooo, its him. You gave birth to a perfect soldier. An Uchiha. He will be the assassin that my army needs. He is the missing puzzle piece. He will complete us. I will train him and protect him.” “I knew you will come, I felt it. Uchiha Madara!” my mother replied. “Don’t struggle you know you are destined to die here. I can do one thing for you I will let you name him.” She looked down at me, sobbing “Rairen…” and then without any mercy he stabbed my mother. The blood covered me and I started crying again. Within few moments she left me, she left me with three words, “I am sorry”.

Madara’s Apprentices: :hypertobi:

Memories flipped again and then I saw me as a kid. I was fighting, fighting against a wolf. I heard footsteps behind me and I knew I was watched… an unexpected fire raged inside me and I killed the wolf in an instant. They stepped forward, Izuna Uchiha and Madara Uchiha, my masters. “You did well kid.” Izuna said, “Thank you Izuna Sensei” I replied shyly and then bowed in respect. I didn’t remembered anything about that incident; all I knew was I was born to fight and Madara Uchiha is my master. He trained me. I worked hard, trained hard to prove him that I was the best in his army. The time went by and I got stronger. I activated my gifted eyes at a very young age. I was his weapon, a weapon that could kill anyone he named; I was entitled The Assassin and was always close to Madara Sensei to protect him with my life. There were two of us, two of his closest apprentice. One of us was not born yet. Sensei always talked about him. He said he would have exactly opposite powers then mine. He named him Nagato, and the one will possess the power of Rinnegan. I always got jealous when he talked about someone other than me. Then the time came, time when I got to prove my self. Different countries all around the ninja world hired us and other stronger clans to fight for land and power and soon the first Ninja World War took place!

The Hidden Power: :nexus:

Darkness covered my eyes again and I was pushed back from that hole. I wanted to remember what happened next but somewhere in me I knew what I did. The light appeared in a different place now and the same thing happened I got absorbed again. This time I saw myself as a grown strong warrior slaughtering hundreds of ninja in one blow. I saw that my eyes were different. When I was born I had red eyes, sharingan eyes, now they were even different. My powers were that my sharingan never left my eyes and now it was bolder. The more I used the stronger it get. I fought countless ninja’s, slaughtering them with no mercy, and leaving no one behind. I started feeling the surge of true power; the strength of energy, the ocular power, and soon darkness took me. It covered my heart and held me to the world. It ordered me to show those meres what strength of darkness could do.

Strength of Darkness: :kaito:

He, Madara Uchiha was always by my side. Influencing my powers and one day he gifted me another pair of eyes. He told me that just like his unique eyes I would be able to achieve eternity in power, and he was right. I implanted them and felt the energy I had never felt before. The thirst for power ended as if I had absorbed the power of universe. Millions of spikes tore my heart, burned light left inside me, and darkness took over entirely. Now my desire in life was different. I wanted to fight, and to kill. I fought the most powerful ninjas, removed whole clans from the face of earth and removed every ounce of their existence from this world. They were no match for the mighty powers I wielded. One genjutsu will seal their life, they begged for mercy, cried for death but I was ruthless and cruel and accepted no wish. I wanted more, I wanted a challenge and I wanted to test the ends of power. I wanted to test myself. Darkness told me to seek for the extent of its unlimited strength. I became ruthless, I became evil, and I became The Devil I meant to be. But then it showed me a path, a path of my decline and made the worst mistake of my life.

Sealed for good: :rag:

It pulled me back and the light hole disappeared again, but now I wasn’t in darkness, instead; it was red, blood red. It came again now a red hole and sucked me in. I saw the war scene again and then I heard and witnessed the nightmares I saw after I accepted the dark powers, the power of Mangekyo Sharingan. The war continued and I searched years for a worthy opponent. Clans fighting each other for recognition and power, countless deaths, blood everywhere. It was making no sense. I had achieved the point where no one was worthy to battle me. They were scared, Senjus were scared, and then I made that mistake. I challenged my Sensei. I challenged my master to test my strength. I challenged Madara Uchiha to fight me and show me what I was capable of. I saw him sitting on that old throne, Uchiha throne just like a king, wearing that same “God Like” expression. He knew what I intended and he knew I was coming for it. He saw me, smiled and closed his eyes. It was as if the lord of uchiha was searching for words to speak, and then in that same dark voice he spoke “You are no match for me Rairen. I created you. Return and show me your strength in the real battlefield. Don’t make your home a battlefield. Don’t make me hurt you.” I laughed; an evil laugh, and he knew what my answer was. There was nothing more to discuss. He stood with his brother on his left. I saw his right side and it was empty, I felt my presence there but the thirst of power was more than the loyalty to my master. Izuna stepped forward to offer me a fight, but he stopped him. We fought, our weapons clashed while rain poured on us heavily. Sky was crying and so was my inside. Two tremendous warriors of the Uchihas wanted to tear down everything. We wanted to reach our extremes. I felt the joy of battle and power. It was flowing through me. I wanted to make it last longer and reach my extremes. Our audience, our clan, kept their distance as they saw the mighty fight for power. We fought days destroying every part of the place. I felt my end was near. And then he showed me, showed me what I had never seen before. He activated the power that he possessed, the power that tamed darkness, the power of curse, and the power of a true devil. After that, in an instant it was over. He didn’t kill me, he couldn’t kill me because he created me and wanted me back. He knew the death would be an easy punishment for me. I wasn’t afraid to die, so he chose for me to live. Live without the powers, which were never mine. He took my eyes. He sealed away my powers but I wasn’t left blind. Somehow my true sharingan, my natural eyes rejected to leave me, he tried but failed so he sealed them inside me with a powerful curse. And I spent rest of my life trying to find a jutsu, an antidote or something that could break the seal and return me my powers. Return me the true light of Uchiha. Returned me my sharingan. I lost hope in life; it was then, when I saw her…


Love of Life:
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The redness created in the slowly disappeared as I looked in her eyes. It was clear again, no even more beautiful then before. I wanted to stay in this memory forever. I was 22 when I lost my heart to a girl. She was the leader of medical ninjas. I stopped searching for cure of my eyes; instead I had a new mission and a new hope. I wanted her. I wanted her more than anything in my life, more than the power I had before. I have never seen something more beautiful than her. She had long black and red hairs. The first day I saw her, she wore a blue dress. Her eyes were gray and had a green tint to them. Her lips were beautiful. She had a medical seal on her left arm. Her gentle hands always holding a long red weapon, and on her waist she tied a belt with scrolls. I was walking towards her and couldn’t stop looking at her. She was with her friends. As we got closer my heart raced, I felt nervous. She made an assassin feel nervous. Then she saw me, with those gray eyes, smiled and took away my breath, she took everything I had. After that day I met her everyday at the same place. We started talking, I told her everything about me. She fell in love with me too, that’s what it seemed like. We together were in eternal happiness. The war around us became meaningless and we decided ran away from all the misery, searching for peace and we found it in a place far away from Uchiha’s range.

Hurt of Betrayal: :|

Darkness returned as I went pass the memories. I knew I was coming close to the end. But I knew it was great, I would accept death because I had her by my side and she had me in her arms. Then I came across a day when my world started to brake away. The elite magical ninja, my love, broke the seal of my eyes and my powers returned, they meant less to me now because I had much more powerful desire. She started acting different after the day I recovered my eyes. She insisted me to train to fight again for our clan and I kept reminding her that this is what we ran away from. We ran away from our identity as an Uchiha. I was afraid if I try the darkness will take over me again, but here I had her, I had a life and I was living it. One day she came to me… She was crying and sad. I held her in my arms and hugged her; she won’t explain the matter. I held her tighter, closer to my heart trying to feel her pain. Then I felt a different feeling a feeling of betrayal. She stabbed me in my heart. I held her tighter and she whispered in my ears. “I m sorry but you are of no use now. You will not fight so we don’t need you. It is time for you to die. I would like you to know, I never loved you.” *pause* “I m sorry” I heard again. Tears rolled down my eyes. I was in intense pain. The schimitar didn’t hurt; it was the pain of betrayal. It was intense. I wanted to leave the world but it held me there to suffer. It held me; my love held me and I found out that its love that was hurting. I whispered my last words, a farewell to her “I’m still in love with you”, closed my eyes and waited for death. It came and took me away.

Devil Reborn:

I returned into that same condition. It was still hurting and I felt a rage a rage to escape the darkness around me, but there was no end to it, it was infinite and then another memory took me. I was resurrected. I saw new faces and new powers. I wanted to see them but my body and my powers wont obey me. I had all my strengths with me. I had my true eyes and the power I mastered. Then I saw him again. Once again I stood against my rival, my master Uchiha Madara. He smiled at me, I wanted to fight him but it seemed like we were ally and our opponents were some untrained ninjas, new Kages. I wanted revenge so I rebelled against the jutsu that held me. It took everything to fight it and I wasn’t getting anywhere. It constantly asked me to surrender, but I didn’t, I kept on fighting with it. It was then when I saw her face again in front of my closed eyes, it was like a dream and then I heard that same dark voice “You are still weak, you are no match for me Rairen. Return!” I gathered enough spiritual strength to ask heaven, to plead it: kill me or free me.

Heaven’s Genjutsu:

They listened me. I saw new memories, memories from another eye and another person more angelic. She felt my scream… She saw my urge and pleads tearing the seven skies and asking her to bring me back. She had never seen such strength in one’s prayers. She knew what she had to do and with a single handsign she summoned me to the heaven. And I was back to my memories again. It was that light again and then I saw her, the angel.

Revenge or Life:

I heard that enchanting voice again, “Release!” she said and I opened my eyes in front of her. She stood like an imaginary figure, perfection shining from every part of hers. “Now I shall give you your choices. One, You can have your powers back, the darkness you possess will be returned to you with same strength and freshness, or two, you could choose to start again. Start again to live a life you deserve. You can seek revenge or you can seek life. Rairen Uchiha I grant you to carve your life again. Choose wisely.” She extended her hands and held two scrolls. They started levitating towards me, one was blood red that said REVENGE, and the other bright white that said LIFE, “Open one” she said, her voice stern now but still kept the beauty.

I opened it and there was light all over me she disappeared smiling, and a strong wind started rotating around me. It was getting dark and the red scroll rose before me showing me that it still exists and I could earn what I deserved but I, I rejected it again, and it turned into sparkles and got mixed in the wind around me. As the wind blew, I wandered what powers I will have in the new life. Something in me still wanted to seek the darkness but to protect life. Now I wanted to master dark strength and suck it all in so that no one else has to suffer what I suffered.
I stepped back on to the earth with same body, same life, memories, younger (about 17), powers drained out from my body, and it felt empty. But I knew one thing that I was still an UCHIHA.

*Note: All the powers mentioned above were added just to make the bio fun and give it a real story. I’m not trained in any of the things above. All these powers were drained out of me as stated above, I will keep adding them in the story below once i get training. Now shall we continue with the story ^_^*

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“The moment when the world around you feels like ending and dullness surrounds you, is the moment when you search for light.”

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Back to The Present​

A New Life: :versu:

I came back as bright sparkles of life stream, which took the shape of my body and there was I. Back to place from where it all started. It looked different now, a lot calmer, and peaceful. I could see the faces of the great hokages carved in a mountain. I saw their faces too… Hashirama and Tobirama; respected and loved. I had no place to go and no one to be with. I wonder on the streets for days and stole some food from different shops. I had no skills left, it felt like I knew how to do everything but all the experience was drained out from me and I was left empty. Then I met new people, new friends, new enemies, and new senseis. They were all there to help me, to help me grow, and find my way through this life. I was welcomed, and loved. I was welcomed to the village that my master created. I was welcomed to Konoha. I decided to start again, to end my search for previous powers and to start over. Lili-chwan was the first one to help me find my way. She taught me Wind Element, and reminded me how fun it was when the wave of wind left your body and filled the air around you with your chakra. I started feeling the fraction of power of wind I owned. Then Kaien.. sensei showed me how I used to roar with the powers of lightning and how I could make the fire burn the battlefields. Scary Yamato sensei taught me how purity of water freshened my soul. It was coming back to me, but now I wasn’t an assassin I was a ninja of konoha. Battles now became fun and joyful because we fought them to learn how to protect a life, how to protect our home. Then I met, ; she lived in her own dream world but always confused it with the reality. She reminded me how my craziness was fun, ; she was like my sister, always there for me, ; a limited addition, Christine ( ); a life threatening but lovable friend to have, ; a brother who showed me how to respect art, ; a rival who reminded me how much I missed the scent of victory xP. Life became interesting; I had friends to protect, home to live, and a place to be where people knew me.

Devil or Angel:
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Time passed and I started forgetting about my past, my nightmares stopped, because love was around me. In fact it became so vague, like a dream or nightmare you had and then woke up. I even doubted if it all ever happened and it ceased being a reality, nothing more than uncontrolled twitches of my brain and in the end I considered it like that. My destiny took a new route and it felt that I was pure, like an angel. My heart believed that the devil inside me has died.
Another ordinary day, I woke up and got dressed. I prepared breakfast. It was then when I felt them. They were around me. I didn’t knew who were they but I knew they came for me. My senses became sharp and I turned towards the window and shot a wind sphere blowing up the window and getting one of them. His face was covered in a mask, an anbu mask. They attacked, I tried to defend myself but it was no use, they overpowered and outnumbered me and within seconds they got me. My eyes became heavy and fell on the ground. “A Genjutsu!”
I tried to open my eyes and found myself dragged into a room lit beautifully with hundreds of candles. In the middle of the room there was a throne, a throne made up of wood carved beautifully into swords. He sat there. “It is him, Master ”, one of the masked man said who was holding my right hand. Then the other one spoke, he was holding my left hand, “We have been tracking him from weeks. He entered the village without being noticed by the field. Some of our own people trained him without knowing who he was. He calls himself Rairen, Rairen Uchiha.” I saw him rising when he heard my name. spoke, “How did you break in? Answer!” both masked men released me and I fell on the ground. I sat on one knee, one arm on my other knee and my fist on the ground, head bowed down, and looking at the wooden floor I spoke: “I was born here… I wont be able to explain my story no mater what you do” breathing heavily “Master , accept me as a member of this world. Accept me as a human, as a ninja. Let me be like an angel, let me believe that the devil in me died, I belong here, this is my home” *pause* now staring in eyes I asked, “What is your answer?”...* a brief pause* I could see that memories were flashing in his mind. The pause became more and more toxic as the time went by. It was killing me. Every piece of my body was clinging to hope, but hope was never at my side. I saw a spark in his eyes and that was when i knew his answer. It was a simple "NO"... I felt as if spikes protruded my heart. I was shaking and he could see it. I had a smile on my face, the same old evil grim. I was once again reminded that there is no such place as home for me and that i am the Devil who belonged to the darkest corner of this world.

Farewell Konoha:
They kept me in a dungeon for days, but I didn’t spoke a word about my existence. The only thing that was in my mind was that I will be accepted and it was all making sense to me. I had a new life but the same denial, and the same chaos. I wasn’t different at all. I wasn’t accepted at all. After several days I was released from the dungeon into an open world. They didn’t let me back in the Village. I didn’t even get to say farewell to my new friends. “Friends…” I thought, does this mean anything to me?

A Home?
No matter how many times they denied my existence or pierced my heart, I will not give up. I will seek a home if it exists, I will make one if it didn’t exist. I was determined and ready to fight back. I set for a journey in search of a place called “Home”. After days of traveling I came across a traveler who was badly injured. He looked very poor and was beaten badly by robbers. I treated him and within few days he recovered and then he asked me to come with him as a “Thank you” for what I did for him. He took me to his village, the small Yukigakure. Or as some people say The Village Hidden In The Snow. It was the coldest but the most beautiful place I have seen in my entire life. Everything was frozen. That person took me to the Yukikage of the village and after showing my strength to the Yukikage I was made in-charge of the small Anbu group of the village. I started feeling different again, like I was being accepted and everything was now welcoming me. I made the best friend in the Anbu group. He was a determined ninja, a ninja who would give life to make someone laugh. His name was Blizzard Kurosake, a brave shinobi, cold as ice and furious as fire. It’s not his bravery that fascinated me. It was his eyes; he had the same eyes as me, very cold, hurt, and deep. He had suffered the same fate as I did but never gave up and was finally one of the recognized shinobi of the entire village. I took him as an inspiration of my life and it helped me live every moment smiling.

Akiza | The Sage of Sharingan
During this journey I met the black rose Uchiha. She was one of those few people who possessed the power that once I had. She had also tamed darkness and had full control on it. She heard my story and accepted to train me. She used all her strength to get me to near death and activate the powers of my eyes. I saw sparks appearing from the ground and then I placed my hands on the ground and feet and lift me up with full force, while Akiza’s clones try to stop me a lightening from above shocks me down and I fell back. My eyes going dim....... I then see light, which pierced through me leaving me completely helpless. I tried to move my arms; I tried to get up from the ground. But the pain is so strong that I couldn’t make through.. Then I heard Akiza’s voice calling me.. Calling me to use the pain as a weapon. I couldn’t make up of what she was saying.. It started to feel numb around my arm, which was penetrated by a spear. Then it spread throughout the body. It felt like the world is ending and I was finally in peace... But then I hear a voice, a voice within me. It shouts at me telling me to fight back. It pleaded me to fight! I slowly started feeling the world around me again. My eyes still closed. I feel my energy focused to the point where I was hit by your spear. I told myself "This is not a time to give up, I have aims and dreams to be fulfilled. I have a whole new world to see. A power to witness. A power to control. A Power..." The next instant I felt the energy around my wound dispersing. It was the pain that dispersed and traveled towards my eyes. I felt it in my veins taking all the agony, the wrath, and the anger with it. Most of all it took the Urge for Revenge. It circled around my eyes and I feel it. I feel the power that I was searching for. It’s been so long since I have felt this way. My muscles tighten up and rose, eyes still closed. I could feel that I have achieved my goal. The very next instant I open my eyes again charging at your clones. Now their attacks a lot clear, their moves predictable, their speed match-able And I was effortless. I could see everything. I could feel a new strength or maybe it was an old returning strength. I now possessed the sharingan again.

Toku | Tsuchikage of Iwagakure:
My life was bright again and days were passing by. But it wasn’t soon when the devil knocked again. A neighboring village Aragakure attacked Yukigakure and the battlefield was a huge vast land near the outskirts of Iwagakure. Both Blizzard and me gave everything we had to protect Yuki and it was soon when we showed our true strength to enemies and friends. Together we were undefeatable, my eyes and his ice were unmatchable. I was the ultimate attack and he was the ultimate defense. The war ended in a month because Iwagakure got involved and both villages were not powerful enough to fight Iwagakure. But that wasn’t the end of our story Tsuchikage of Iwa came for Blizzard, and me and we got recognized as shinobi of Iwagakure. The Rock Tavern became a home for us where I met the great ninjas of Iwa: Toku The Kage o.o, Loki the black snow master, Mathias the monster of the sea, Selendrile the clay master, Professor Sarutobi the illusionist, Kryptic the shadow master, Darui the lightening master, Serpent the other Uchiha (Snake), Howard, Nagato, Zero and others. It felt like I have finally found a home.



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Destination For The Future​

Lust For Blood:
Jinbei: It was a long and boring day in the boundaries of Iwagakure. Despite the numerous missions going on and the various tasks being completed by the ninjas, the inhabitants of this great and legendary village weren't left behind; they worked the ground with great effort and passion, seeking to achieve great-quality merchandise to sell to the villagers, who would seldom decline the fantastic offers the farmers would implement.

Although it seemed to be a very active day, the same didn't apply to the high-ranked shinobi Jinbei. Being the second-in-chief, he was exempt from the dull, pitiful duties a regular ninja was forced to complete and thus he would spend most of his time doing activities of his liking, such as reading, meditating and lately, even teaching. However, the Iwarian's wild side wouldn't survive chastity for long. It was only a matter of time before he would do some reckless research or mishaps.

Having finished his usual house duties, he mounted his horse effortlessly. Her, a beautiful, white-skinned animal of the finest caliber, let smoke come out of her nostrils as he was climbed by her master. However, such a gracious animal had to possess a befitting name and with this thought in mind, Jinbei named her Sunfire. It was, doubtlessly, a most adequate name for this extraordinary being. The sun rays would reflect against her skin when she was galloping, and in addition to her fiery and uncontrollable hair, would give the appearance of a horse sent from heaven itself.

Jinbei's attire, which consisted of a flamboyant loose piece of cloth, was his preferred choice when taking a ride for it allowed him to connect with the animal and even nature itself. Regardless, being aware of the risks, he decided to be on the safe side, and took ahold of a medium-sized bow - a present from his student Mathias- and carefully placed it in his back. In spite of it being not his weapon of choice, he liked using it but he was never able to determine why.
On the right side of his hip a sharp-edged steel sword, with a crimson red hilt that vibrated every time Jinbei grabbed it could be found. He deposited two scrolls to his left side of his hip, which contained different weaponry along with other important things he may need under difficult circumstances. Finally, he inserted a can, full of exquisite arrows, to the animal's side and stripped it.

He tightened his grip on the horse's thongs and then, after a weak hit, the horse begun moving at an extremely high speed. Sunfire blasted through the stable's gates, her body moving fluidly with the cold, harsh winds that habituated the place. As the great shinobi disappeared in the distance, becoming but a dot in the horizon, a child inquired his mother about the tattoo on Jinbei's back. Her mother took a quick look, grinned and replied in a calm, sweet tone : "That's the Sarutobi clan mark". The boy smiled as he gazed up with admiration, his hunger for answers had been satiated.

With no definite mission, his only pursue were his whims. His journey was no more, for the only thing he was searching for was fun and some unexpected event to take place in the outskirts of one of the big villages of the ninja world. He settled for the spine, a gigantic, natural forest full of livid sentient beings. The current Tsuchikage, Toku, had completely forbidden the entrance to the forest in consideration for the villager's safety. The number of people who had dared venture into the deadly jungle was low and the number of people who had made it back alive was almost nonexistent. Nevertheless, Jinbei remained true to his exploring nature, and ignored every warning. After all, what was the worst thing that could happen ?....

Rairen: I could hear the sounds of nature; chirping of birds, dripping water from the trees after a rainy night, damp breeze brushing the grassy field, wooden buckets being carried around by villager and the very joyful chit chatting of the children playing out side. It all seemed as a part of nature to me. These things contributed heavily to the art of the world’s beauty. But I was still not ready to start this new day. No matter how much I tried to forget my past it still burned in me. The agonizing pain making it hard for me to live every day and every moment of my life. I wanted to start a new life being part of this art. I wanted to love someone again but my heart was broken in so many pieces that I couldn’t put them together. “Will I be able to love someone again”, a question I asked myself every moment. I wanted to get out of this melancholy and the darkness that surrounded me. I wanted to search for light and brightness, and carve my name on it removing the terrifying memories of past.
It was late. The sun was up and shinning bright. It was now becoming uncomfortable to keep my eyes closed and seek for answers. The only thing that made me happy now was returning the favor of people who were with me. To serve Iwa with my life because it has given me a place to live, a place I could now call my home, a place to return and seek answers. I now lived to serve Iwa but my dark side still burned in me, torturing me every day and night. It was trying to be free again. The darkness was as such that someone has placed a mirror in front of me showing the reality to my eyes, which was impossible to believe. I am still the devil that this world feared of. I am still an Uchiha, the one who tamed darkness. And now it was returning back to me. “An Uchiha” I repeated…

I shook the thought out of my head and got up. A small room was so well lit by the sun that it almost made impossible for me to open my eyes. The whole place was a simple wooden structure with nothing but a bed in it and everything else scattered around. I walked couple of steps grabbing a long red leather cloak from the ground and wrapping it around my body. The cloak was very old but made with pure fine leather. It had a black belt just below the waist area, and a few pockets at the bottom. It was torn at many places by sword cuts revealing my pale skin, some parts showing scars but other looked smooth and shiny. Then I walked towards the door and when I was about to open it I heard a child asking about a mysterious man with such excitement and regard. Then I heard a female voice replying that child’s question, "That's the Sarutobi clan mark". When I heard it I was fell in a sudden shock, an unusual dilemma: It was as if my inside was shook by a very strong power. I had to choose between something, and I didn’t even know what my options were. Memories accompany these strange feeling and they flashed in my brains as I heard the footsteps of the horse fading. Darkness covered my eyes and I was blind for a moment; I saw everything again like it was happening in real. Then I remembered Konoha, a place that was once mine. When the thought of Konoha flipped in my mind, a sudden urge pleaded me to accept what I have been rejecting for such a long time, it showed me the power I used to love and the scent of blood that I missed. Before I could think anything else I was out of the door running before the horse with a sword in my left hand. Not just an ordinary sword, it was The Frozen Fang, a sword bestowed upon humans by the heavens themselves, and my chakra was channeling in the silver sword making its length even longer and a part of it touching the ground tearing it as I ran towards the sound of a magnificent horse. I didn’t care about the crowd that was starring me as I dashed by them. All I had in mind was the thirst for power and the scent of blood.

Jinbei: Jinbei gazed upwards, searching for any indications of a sudden weather change that might compromise his unusual adventure into the unknown. Many thoughts and memories solemnly flashed in his mind. He wondered how much time had passed since he had actually felt like this and came to the realization that it had been some time indeed.

Jinbei Sarutobi was no more than his alias, for his real name remained hidden to the townspeople to procure their safety and his. For them, people who only heard tales of the fantastic Iwarians but had never experienced their strength firsthand, relating this man to the old Iwagakure shinobi, said to be Toku's companion even prior to the ascension to Tsuchikage from the latter. The rumors about this man were numerous; he was an enthusiastic, cunning individual, who ( at times ) was reckless. He was one of Iwagakure's founding members and had worked under the command of mythical figures, such as Nero and even Bishamon himself. However, it seemed this man had a downfall. He was a highly lethargical individual, who had unworldly habits so gross, that would make even the strongest man feel ill. In fact, at one point the great Iwarian figure had been offered the spot as Tsuchikage, but he declined out of sheer fear of the paperwork. His activity slowly, but surely, was diminished, until he disappeared one chilly night...

That man was indeed Jinbei Sarutobi. He was better known as Jinbei, Jinbo or just Kiyoshi. Only a handful of people knew much about this man, mainly because he didn't trust many of the villagers. He always kept himself in the shadows, aiming to help the village without seeking to be recognized as a warrior. After all, he remained true to what the great Roku Kiyoshi had taught him. Jinbei's early years had been rough and were probably the cause to his madness. To be sent to war when he was only 6 years old had been a cold-hearted decision from the higher-ups.

Nevertheless, the now not-so-young male sought to leave all behind and start anew. He had never been power-hungry, so it was rather easy for him to begin a calm, lovely life in the outskirts of the country. It had been his desire ever since he came back from the bloody war.

All of a sudden, Jinbei snapped out of his thoughts and realized it was already dusk. Time flies when you are having fun, huh ?, he thought. He looked around, trying to determine his position but in every direction he looked, all he managed to gaze were strong, long and green trees. "This must be the so-called spine.." he muttered in a weak, yet grave voice. He leashed Sunfire's reins and instructed her to slow down. He was sensing a presence not so far behind them, who was following their every step. She obeyed and slowly came to a halt.

"Tsch..." he grunted in disdain " Okay, let's give our guest something he won't forget "

He detached the arrows from the horse and located them in his back whilst simultaneously gripping the bow, taking it out for a ride which hadn't happened in a long time. In a quick and illegible motion, he ordered Sunfire to hide behind some bushes and she should remain there until further notice. He rapidly deposited a letter with some inscription to it in the middle of a clearance and hide in one of the highest branches he could find, remaining out of sight from any traveler or animal. He snatched the bow from his back and deftly fit an arrow in the string. With his unaccustomed fingers, he pulled back the string and waited for the stalker to show up.

He was half-hoping it was an animal, for his hunger was growing deep within him. He hadn't eaten anything in almost an entire day and his stomach wasn't content with this. However, he wouldn't rush to attack, as it may be the only chance he will have.

If the human was being guided by his nose, then he would surely notice the powerful scent that emanated from Jinbei's scroll. He had impregnated his odor to it to lure the being into the clearance, where he would take it down with a well-placed arrow. He wasn't aiming to kill, but to incapacitate. He was become impatient, but he calmed himself by thinking what great meal he would enjoy once he was done. Time transpired and soon enough, some noises could be heard.

Rairen: Wind was opposing my motion trying to make me loose my speed but the desire to beat it grew even more. I was now fighting the nature and the art that once I used to praise. It took all my will and energy to run as fast as I can to catch up with the horse. My heart was racing faster and faster as time passed. My steps splashed the water on the track from the rain last night, and my senses became sharp visualizing every single droplet that touched the air. The world around me was slowing down and I felt myself opening a whole new set of hurtful memories. A part of me wanted to stop and return to the people I served, but a more dominant part reminded me that it was all fake and this is my true desire; A lust for blood. It was as if someone has wrapped me in the cloak of darkness and has thrown me into the valleys where rivers of blood flow. Once again the devil inside me won and I was left helpless.

“What if he didn’t won? What if there is no such thing inside me? What if the real me is Devil itself and I have been denying the truth for so long?” So many questions still remained unanswered and untold. But now I was feeling the urge for power getting more and more intense. I was finally accepting the Darkness and feeling the power that I once owned. Now a greater force was controlling me and leading me to my desire.
I followed the U shaped footsteps till they led me to The Forbidden Forest entrance. I didn’t give it a second thought and with extreme force jumped onto the tree, disobeying the first law. This was nothing compared to the sins I have committed. “A law, huh!” All the love in me was fading and leaving my inside. It called me again and again but I turned my face away and ignored its plead, instead I cling to a stronger power: a power of hatred and revenge, a power I have been denying for centuries, it was time I claim my revenge.
I flew pass trees by trees towards a straight direction and then with a long jump I came back again on to the ground. Now walking slowly but with equal anger and desire. The grip on my sword became tighter and the chakra coming from it grew even longer. I was looking down on the straight track of the forest created by trees bowed down making a magnificent shadowed pathway, sun glimmering from the gaps between branches. It now got darker and darker as if I had traveled time. Clouds were covering the sky and within no time it started raining. Now the sky was crying too… It took me back in the days. A strange feeling reminded me that I was once again living the same life. And I didn’t want to return this time. I want to walk along with it and follow the path until death defeats me or I captivate it. Blood splattered in front of my eyes showing me the forgotten memories. Swords clashed in the rainy forest. I could hear the sound of metal so loud as if it was real. And then I saw myself standing in the middle of the battlefield, eyes blood red with visions like angel. I could clearly feel every mind and read every move of the weak ninjas. All of them were weak to me. I saw myself once again and it showed me a reflection of a devil. Dark fog surrounded my body illuminating the bright red color of my eyes. I then moved and with a single effortless strike slaughtered the whole clan. I then saw a small child; he was standing in a few feet distance holding a kunai in his shaking hands. I could read his mind but I knew it wasn’t weak; he looked me with those cold and sharp eyes and took possession of my strength. I knew he was not one of those who I just killed. He was different, very different.I could not gather enough strength to raise my sword on to him. I left him there and walked away, with a last look I turned around and saw a smile of victory on his face. It crushed me but I didn’t returned.
Raindrops fell on my face making me return into the present. No one shall know my identity, I promised and walked to confront my enemy. The desire was still strong as I raced towards the very center of the forest. I saw some tracks and a scroll in the middle of pathway. There was a very strange pungent smell coming from somewhere around. I walked towards the scroll slowly trying to be sharp around the surroundings. It was a red scroll with gold lining around it. I picked it up from the ground with my right hand still holding the sword on my left. And then I slowly opened it and it said: "If you're reading this, it's too late...Booyah!”
The next instant everything was quick and sudden. I released two wind hurricanes one pushed the scroll as far as for me and the other was aimed for the ground that lifted me up in the mid air and then I covered my eyes with the sword to defend against ashes. The blast blew my hairs back and with a thrust i was sent away. The flames were out of range and were not able to reach me. I then got my balance and dragged my feet on the ground making the dust rise until i stop moving backwards.

Jinbei:It was dark. Not only because the night was finally covering the sky, the first start already present in the limitless pitch black sky, but because some sort of apprehensive mist was also casted on the field. This is not a jutsu Jinbei analyzed but it does have a strange feeling to it. I don't like where this is going...

His maroon eyes pierced through the mist like a cat's in the obscure darkness, yet they retained his signature kindness and hospitality. As he was during his usual scout, his gaze suddenly rested in a small opening in between two big trees as if expecting to see a beast come out of it. He didn't even flinch, all emotion had been erased from his now cold, demanding sight calculated meticulously all movement in that zone. To him, it was all simple math; his sensing had picked up an unusual disturbance in the close proximity and his senses were seldom wrong. This, of course, wasn't going to be the exception.

A silhouette of what seemed to be an average man could be seen in the distance, his strong arms pushing aside all sort of bushes as his head jerked constantly, seeking something. Sarutobi found no village identification on the man and deducted he was no shinobi or he was in an infiltrating mission, in look for something. Quickly, he readied his bow and fitted an arrow. He also took out two arrows with explosive tags attached and stabbed them to the tree for a more rapid grab if needed.

The silhouette steadily advanced through the jungle, and what used to be just a shadow became an easily identifiable individual. By looking around, the man spotted the clear in the forest where the scroll had been placed and sped forward. He grabbed the scroll, but as he read, his eye opened in awe and surprise. Seconds before Jinbei could shot his arrow, a sudden burst of wind coming from his fist elevated him into the air, which forced him to reclaimer his bow and take aim again.

Without any signs of doubt, he let loose on the string and the arrow darted at supernatural speed, aimed at his shoulder. If it were to hit, the projectile would easily incapacitate the use of his whole arm, leading the fight to an end in case ninjutsu was required. He showed signs of being a ninja, but what does he want in here ? If he were from Iwa, he would be on duty. I'll knock him out and interrogate him.

His train of thought didn't prevent Jinbei from continuing his assault, though. Right after the first arrow was shot, the other two that had been prepared followed immediately thereafter. The new arrows were aimed at his torso and leg, so that if he were to try and escape with the same jutsu, the explosion would still deliver enough damage to slow him down enough to be captured.

"Checkmate" Jinbei muttered in a weak, vicious voice. In case of a response, he slipped another arrow out of the container and nocked it. He took aim, as his adrenaline lightened his eyes.


Rairen: After the second wind blast I realize that I was completely possessed with my desire. It was now time to think everything through, and with my strategic capabilities it was all clear to me in a split second. “Facts: One I knew he was around me but unaware of my real identity, Two the text on the scroll states that he likes to play before the actual hunt, Three the blast was just a diversion to check my initial abilities and the actual attack lies somewhere around me, Four It will be long ranged, probably darts, arrows or senbons, through which he could attack on the desired location, trying to disarm my further actions, Fifth If he could go this far using a bomb to ambush an attack, he won’t hesitate to kill me.”

“A simple game of calculations, huh!” I smiled as I see an arrow coming towards me with majestic speed; it tore through the wind trying to reach my arm. My sword still held near my eyes (vision not blocked) I tilted the sword to an angle covering my left shoulder with wind chakra on extreme rage extending the sword capabilities beyond anyone’s reach. Time slowed down drastically making me witness every molecular action. The bomb exploded but the arrow already made it through the explosion. It came for me like a lion hunts its prey.

“I was the prey” the thought was uncomfortable but true. This was the second time I had a feeling like that. The first time was when I saw that kid in the war trying to oppose my existence, and now this new, unknown enemy who just awakened a devil. I was not afraid at all instead I was excited. It’s been a long time since I enjoyed my life or a battle this much, and I knew it was just getting started. “A prey” I thought again. “Lets show him that a devil can never be hunted”.

The arrow pierced through the initial sword’s chakra and clashed with the metal body. The arrow, no a lion charged my sword, the energy traveled through it into the Heavens Sword, trying to tear its way through but that wasn’t the case. Instead the impact returned in the arrow itself and it started to break in pieces. The energy was not enough to pass through the Strength of Frozen Fang, so it tried to push my body backwards in the mid air and I accepted it, then the impact returned in the arrow itself trying to find a way out of it. It didn’t find any so it destroyed the arrow itself. My body swung in the air downward now I was completely horizontal, floating in the air.

It was dark around me and I imagined a window right above my head, shining light on my floating body. It was burning the power inside me and I loved the feeling. I have never enjoyed a feeling like that since forever now. “Its been a long time master” I called him, “would you like to witness a new height of my power” I replied to a imaginary voice that was never heard. “We will fight again, master. And the victory will be mine”, “mine…” it echoed in my head as I came back to the forest. The time hasn’t pass by. I then saw two arrows. One was aimed for my leg and the other for torso. Since I was completely horizontal they flew in the open air above and beneath me and stabbed the closest tree that came in their possession. Before this I saw the floating tags around them and I instantly knew that it was the same trick.
“As expected, after disabling my arm he will aim for my leg making me unable to walk or run and then the torso for me to suffer pain and accept defeat. He doesn’t know a very important fact; he is up against an Uchiha.”

After the arrow passed, I swung my sword in 360 degrees, spinning myself to the closes tree, I gripped one of the branch and with another swing I was at the far right corner of the area, away from the arrows that with a blast exploded a second ago. Our vision is now completely blocked. Its time to revise my plan:
“If he is as smart as I think, he might have calculated by know that the time took for the arrows to blast is more than he expected so that means they didn’t get me. In-fact now I know his last location without even using my Sharingan. I will keep it a surprise weapon since all my strength is still locked inside my eyes, which is still unknown to him. Judging by the type of his play, he is a trusted, old and experienced Iwagakure ninja looking for a little fun. But he will never let his comrades get hurt even if it’s an animal. Time to lure him out” That clicked and stopped my trail of thought and at the same moment I heard a beautiful cry of a panicked horse. “How careless of you my friend…”

I darted towards a futile horse expecting him to do the same. I caught her glance before him, it seemed like I was closer to the horse. I hid in the tree. “Time to wait for my friend to arrive” chakra poured in my hands as I was waiting for his arrival to protect the horse, ready for the real show to begin. *smirk*

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The fight was furious, and neither of them accepted defeat. They fought tirelessly consuming every ounce of energy left in their bodies. They developed an unusual bond that converted the fight into a never dying friendship. This is when Rairen found a place where he can stay as a Devil and still be accepted, and he knew there is no other place for him in this world like Iwagakure, A Home.



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“The love is lost, beauty and light have vanished from garden of delight. The dreams are gone,
midnight has come, the darkness is our new kingdom."


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(Sono Touketsu Kiba) The Frozen Fang
Rank: A
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: This sword is developed with Silver and Ice chakra. Some Myths state that this was made by the Angels themselves and gifted to Earth. The sword is 1.5 Meters long and shaped like a Persian Scimitar. It is sharped edged at the bottom and top. Some carvings are also done on one side of it which says "The Frozen Fang".
This Sword has ability to conduct Wind Chakra to increase the Area of Attack-By 3 Inches width and 5 Inches Length- and Sharpness. To use this ability User holds the sword in the hand and inserts its wind chakra in it. When both sword and chakra are connected blue chakra can be seen around the sword allowing the user to slice cut and stab etc.

*Can Only be Wielded by -Blizzard-*
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“Whenever death may surprise us, let it be welcome if our battle cry has reached even one receptive
ear and another hand reaches out to take up our arms.” (Che Guevara)


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Won: Infinity
Lost: Meh...


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[ ] Updating Previous Biography

Updates:
- Fire A-Rank
- Earth B-Rank
- Sharingan 2 Tomoe
- History Finally Finished

Other:
- Sorry if i didn't mention you, it got too long

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- Selendrile (For the design of my bio)
- Jinbei (For an epic battle)
- Mathias (Recheck and Tips)
 
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Alright, the three biggest bio's on NB are all from Iwa O_O
Holy crap we have a lot of spare time @__@
Awesome bio, I liked the first person style for once.
 

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Hrm, the use of first person perspective was truly brilliant, including the romantic speech style, kind of Shakespearean style. I may do that for my future bios, though not as long as this one.

Some of the information you put though was a bit too unnecessary, it was clear you were trying to exceed max caps in any way possible :p

The story was nice, though it was pretty heavy on the eyes. I would recommend you to divide the huge parapraphs into small ones, just to facilitate reading (as if you didn't expect people to read it).

When I was reading I saw you using powers you currently had and I was like "Oh tricky guy" then I read your note about you losing your powers and stuff, it was quite clever, similar to my Kuroi bio.

I really liked it overall, it was interesting an quite poetic.

If I would give you a score, I would give you a 9/10.
Why? Because there is no such thing as perfection, I know you can improve this exponentially (even though is pretty darn good).

Thumbs up U_U
 

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Didn't even read a paragraph of the History. The physical appearance is good and it seems to have a well put together story. Great Job. ^^

Btw, the background couldn't fit in the first post?
 

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Hrm, the use of first person perspective was truly brilliant, including the romantic speech style, kind of Shakespearean style. I may do that for my future bios, though not as long as this one.

Some of the information you put though was a bit too unnecessary, it was clear you were trying to exceed max caps in any way possible :p

The story was nice, though it was pretty heavy on the eyes. I would recommend you to divide the huge parapraphs into small ones, just to facilitate reading (as if you didn't expect people to read it).

When I was reading I saw you using powers you currently had and I was like "Oh tricky guy" then I read your note about you losing your powers and stuff, it was quite clever, similar to my Kuroi bio.

I really liked it overall, it was interesting an quite poetic.

If I would give you a score, I would give you a 9/10.
Why? Because there is no such thing as perfection, I know you can improve this exponentially (even though is pretty darn good).

Thumbs up U_U
I loved your comments, criticism and many thanks for reading it. I will look forward to improve it in my next update. about the limit, i exceeded it awhile ago but i couldn't end the story in that limit. I deleted a lot of stuff, for example the story of people of Iwa and Yuki, as you might have noticed that i got into rush at the end of the first post. I will try to make it better by summarizing the last sub title "Lust for Blood" but right now i cant afford to put more time, so i will keep it that way. I prefer 1st person because it makes the reader really involved in the story, and it means alot to me if even small number of people read it. ^_^ Thanks again.

Didn't even read a paragraph of the History. The physical appearance is good and it seems to have a well put together story. Great Job. ^^

Btw, the background couldn't fit in the first post?
Thanks, i think the banners are pretty huge thats why it doesnt fit the post. But too tired to make any changes. I have to work on my other bio now lol. :p
 
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