First of all, nice tag! Its visually pleasing
Alright, now for CnC, (I may be a bit off because I'm really uncomfortable atm in the predicament I'm in lol)
The first thing I'm noticing, is the size of the tag, its too large for this render, as there's alot of empty space that makes the tag look "dull", for lack of a better word.
Also, the background used for the piece doesn't work with the C4D's and the fractalic art used, so the blending looks off. It needs a different contrast, as you're having bright fractals on a bright background, so the entire tag looks off with the actual lighting.
The text is alright.The "beatrice" can use a different color, and possibly a different font, like Scriptina or something of the sort; the font "before the rain" just seems a bit off in this piece IMO.
You should also play around with more adjustment layers, it'll really help!
But I see potential in you! KIU!