The Era of Blood - Act 2

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The Era of Blood

Act 2

Prologue Continued
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Flashback​
Kakashi bent his knee and positioned himself accordingly, raising his right arm whilst bending his left. The twelve year old blonde had been practicing his stances for three days without end, fuelled solely by sheer force of will and an unquenchable ambition to succeed.

His body ached and every muscle in his limbs begged for mercy and yet Kakashi persevered; a Hyomaru fights until their dying breath and never gives in to their bodily whims, no matter the pain. To struggle for success was a constant in his world and Kakashi was hell bent on mastering his stances before the week was done.

“Bend your knees further!” chastised Roriko Hyomaru, our blonde’s father and head of the Hyomaru household.
“A Lightning Essence user must be as fluid as water, yet as unpredictable as lightning. We must never show weakness for we are offence personified, attacking like a relentless storm that never abates! Your motions place you closer to a rock, rigid and unmoving! Pathetic! An insult to the Hyomaru Clan!”

Kakashi, ignoring his father’s harsh words adjusted his legs as instructed, concentrating his energy before leaping onto his opponent, a magical dummy of the highest calibre, unleashing a torrent of lightning infused attacks onto the contraption before leaping backwards.

The dummy however looked none the worse for wear having managed to successfully evade most of the blonde’s attacks, only a few meagre scratches and tears to indicate that Kakashi had even made contact.

“Hmph, what a waste. You fail to properly hit a mere training dummy; I do so hope your brother has more talent otherwise our clan’s future looks grim.” stated Roriko with a snarl, turning his back to a frustrated Kakashi and walking away.

The blonde however chose not to let his father’s taunts affect him, but rather use his words as motivation. The day when he can finally best his father in combat and prove once and for all that he was a worthy successor to the Hyomaru name; that was the goal Kakashi strove towards.

End flashback​
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Kakashi awoke to the sound of falling water and a throbbing pain shooting across his limbs. His head felt muddled and his vision was blurry, allowing him to see only a general mass of blurry figures around him.

Groaning ever so slightly, the blonde haired Hyomaru attempted to sit up only to be forced back onto his back by a surprisingly strong hand.

Flinching due to the force of the push, Kakashi’s arms instinctively shot up towards his attacker only for both his hands to be caught in mid-air by another figure. As his vision began to clear, Kakashi could make out the face of the person holding his hands, a dark-skinned girl with a stave fashioned behind her back.

“Fidgety fellow ain’t ya.” she stated with a grin.

His training kicking in, Kakashi attempted to pull his hands free of the girl’s grip, only to be forced down by the first figure, this time a man, a rather large man to be precise.

However, Kakashi was never one to back down due to being drowsy, or outnumbered, or outgunned. Shooting his legs up, the feisty blonde heel kicked the man in a blur of motion before wrenching his hands free and immediately charging into a sprint, attempting to place distance between him and his assaulters.

Though, sprinting it seemed was an option not yet available to his weakened body as the blonde immediately fell to his knees, smashing his chin onto the hard marble floor.

As he attempted to rise, a massive force pushed him down once again, the shadow of the man blanketing Kakashi’s form.

“You really are a Hyomaru aren’t ya.” stated the girl as she walked in front of the struggling Kakashi, “Don’t worry, we’re not here to hurt ya. Hell, in fact, we saved yo scrawny ass so you better be thankful!”

Kakashi however didn’t seem to be in an exceptionally thankful mood, his body still on the floor struggling against the force of the man’s arms.

“Hmm, this one’s not gonna give up without a fight…meh…Bertrand…do yo stuff.” ordered the girl with a sadistic smile.

Nodding obediently, the man named Bertrand proceeded to release the struggling Kakashi who immediately took the chance to once again attempt an escape. This time however, no hand pulled him backwards, but rather a force of indescribable quality that almost seemed to freeze his limbs in place.

The blonde struggled against the energy yet nothing he did could force it to relent. He hadn’t the energy or the essence left to summon an attack so fidgeting like a boy out for an unwilling haircut was the best the blonde could manage.

“Struggle all ya want blondie, ya ain’t escapin’ from Bertie’s essence…it’s among the strongest when it comes ta capturin’ and restrainin’.” stated the girl with a smirk.

Nevertheless, Kakashi continued to struggle.

Deciding to ignore the antics of their prisoner, the duo began to exit the room, an invisible force pulling Kakashi along with them.

“I understand that ya may be confused with yo current situation but the master will make sense of it all for ya, kay blondie.”

“I’M NOT BLONDIE!” hollered an irritated Kakashi at the top of his voice. “WHO THE HELL ARE YOU TWO!? WHERE AM I AND HOW IN KAMI’S NAME AM I STILL ALIVE?!”

The girl simply stared at the fuming Kakashi for a moment after his outburst, a look of annoyance to her toned face, “Hmm….not exactly the tone of voice ya should use on the people that saved your worthless hide eh blondie?” stated the girl icily before continuing on her way.

Kakashi attempted to retort but immediately found his mouth forced shut by the same force restraining him, annoyingly leaving him with no option but to silently allow his so called rescuers to take him wherever they pleased.

The blonde Hyomaru glanced around at his surroundings as he was led by the duo, taking in all he could about the compound he was in so that he could plan an eventual escape.

Kakashi wasn’t exposed to much when it came to sights as during his jail walk, or jail drag as the situation was, he was mainly kept within a singular, extremely long passage without much to note of the outside.

White marble walls, old and cracked with simple decorations adorning them lined up on either side. A few lamps and such provided a bare minimal amount of lighting to make the passageways traversable during night though, judging from the amount of sunlight filtering in through the large, rectangular windows, Kakashi judged that it was currently day.

Strange rune-like markings or insignia’s were etched decoratively into the walls in even intervals. The fact that the markings seemed somewhat familiar to the blonde was intriguing to the Hyomaru scion, though he couldn’t quite place where he’d seen them before.

After a few tedious moments of being dragged through the seemingly never-ending passage, the blonde was led into a large, expansive courtyard filled with all varieties of dazzling plant life. A blast of fresh air hit Kakashi, knocking out the exhaustion in his limbs and somewhat invigorating his mood and energy, though not nearly enough to allow him to summon lightning.

However, what struck the blonde most was the scenery in the distance. Overlooking the edge of the compound were the peaks of several icy capped mountains, their crow’s peaks jutting into the skies like a stairway to heaven.

A tug on his restrained body informed Kakashi that his escorts had stopped, an enormous red oak wood door barring them from further progress. Two of the same insignia’s he’d seen before were etched onto either one of the two massive doors, their light red outlining almost flowing as the sunlight cascaded off its surface.

The doors swung open mere seconds after they’d arrived, a small, fragile looking old man wearing the variety of robes often seen on elderly monks stepping out, a look of amusement donning his wizened face.

“Ahh, the young Hyomaru, welcome, welcome, Bertrand, Gaia, you may both leave now. I’ll be taking our young friend here into my custody for the remainder of his stay.” stated the elder with a smile.

“Yo sure about that oji-sama, the little brat is kinda fidgety. He’ll probably try n’ escape as soon as Bertrand releases his essence.” stated the girl named Gaia with a scowl directed towards an indifferent Kakashi.

“Oh, don’t fret young one, I've placed my faith in Kakashi-kun. You won’t try and escape now would you?”

The blonde merely scoffed at the idea, trying to cover up the fact that that was exactly what he had planned on doing, though he wasn't too sure right now.

Even if he did escape, where would he go? He had no home, no family and leaving the presumable safety of whatever compound he was in would leave him vulnerable to an attack by the Ghoul that had been so relentlessly chasing him and nearly killed him previously at the sewers.

Still lost in his thoughts, Kakashi was surprised to find that his two escorts had already left whilst he was thinking, the force that had been keeping him restrained no longer active.

Ahead, the old man made his way up the marble steps that led to the two large doors, his hand motioning towards the young Hyomaru to follow.

Kakashi gazed backwards, towards the passage he’d entered through, wondering whether he could escape before turning his gaze back at the old man, now just before the two doors, a smile on his wrinkled face.

The blonde waited hesitantly, a light breeze ruffling his unkempt hair and clothes. Gazing up towards the sky, Kakashi imagined his mother and father in heaven, wondering what they'd want him to do.

A few moments of silence passed, the smile never wavering from the elder's face as Kakashi continued weighing his options. Finally, clenching his fists, the blonde took a step forward towards the two giant doors, deciding to accept the so called hospitality of his rescuers for a few more days until his energy recovered.


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Authors Notes
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Second chapter is up! Yes, this really is a streak of productivity for me considering my usual total laziness. Damn, it's awesome! xd
Anyways, this chapter was a little longer than I'd have liked and I know that puts off a few people but I really couldn't find a good place to cut it off...so, yeah.
I do realize that this chappie is probably a drop in quality when compared to my previous, but I did this really quickly cuz I had to go out and yet I wanted to post a chapter today, so yeah, the next chapter will be a metric ton of awesome! xd
Anyways, most probably, next chapter I'll have an explanation up about the whole Essence thing and Kakashi's parents and what not.
Until then, peace!​
 
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His body ached and every muscle in his limbs begged for mercy and yet Kakashi persevered, a Hyomaru does not give in to his bodily aches, be it pain or disease. A Hyomaru fights until their dying breath, and Kakashi was hell bent on mastering his stances before the week was done.]

This is the only passage I had some problems with. First sentence mainly, use a semi colon (;) instead of a comma there, and maybe group the phrase "A Hyomaru fights until their dying breath" with that. And don't repeat/call him a blonde so much, that's a bit repetitive. Maybe use another physical feature mixed in a few times to keep it fresh. Other than that, another excellent going. Keep it up!
 

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I thought It was an amazing Chapter Nice-work although Kakashi being held captive by a band of Strangers seemed a little over the top but never the less he'll eventually come up with a way to escape because he always Does he's just clever like that! between his hair is silver Not blonde but if he did have blonde hair he'd get a lot more attention from the ladies then he normally would anyways keep up the good work :)
 

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I thought It was an amazing Chapter Nice-work although Kakashi being held captive by a band of Strangers seemed a little over the top but never the less he'll eventually come up with a way to escape because he always Does he's just clever like that! between his hair is silver Not blonde but if he did have blonde hair he'd get a lot more attention from the ladies then he normally would anyways keep up the good work :)
:hint: Its not actual Kakashi. Its an OF, I was thrown off at the beginning too :ghehe:
 
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I thought It was an amazing Chapter Nice-work although Kakashi being held captive by a band of Strangers seemed a little over the top but never the less he'll eventually come up with a way to escape because he always Does he's just clever like that! between his hair is silver Not blonde but if he did have blonde hair he'd get a lot more attention from the ladies then he normally would anyways keep up the good work :)
This is an original fic meaning my Kakashi isn't the same as the Kakashi from Naruto. For example, my Kakashi is a blonde and much more...um...power-hungry than the more laid-back, calm Kaka-sensei we all know and love. xd

Great chp. Glad to know he survived. Things are getting interesting.
Thanks again for your comments, I really love it when people enjoy my works. I'll make the next chapter a ten-ton wall of awesome just for you peeps. xd

His body ached and every muscle in his limbs begged for mercy and yet Kakashi persevered, a Hyomaru does not give in to his bodily aches, be it pain or disease. A Hyomaru fights until their dying breath, and Kakashi was hell bent on mastering his stances before the week was done.]

This is the only passage I had some problems with. First sentence mainly, use a semi colon (;) instead of a comma there, and maybe group the phrase "A Hyomaru fights until their dying breath" with that. And don't repeat/call him a blonde so much, that's a bit repetitive. Maybe use another physical feature mixed in a few times to keep it fresh. Other than that, another excellent going. Keep it up!
Keep those critiques coming bro, I love your support!

Thank you all for your continued support and critiques, I really appreciate it. I'll have another chapter up sometime around Thursday as Tuesday and Wednesday have been particularly busy for me.
 
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