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Note: As some people seemed to be a bit confused regarding the timeline of The Legendary Sage of Konoha Return, which is the sequel to The Legendary Sage of Konoha, I decided to clear it out a bit on the 1st chapter; "The main event of The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns takes place 20 years after the event of The Legendary Sage of Konoha. So the current timeline is placed 20 years after Naruto and Sasuke's fight with Tobi, that were about to begin at the end of chapter 15 of the original."

The Legendary Sage of Konoha Series, Previous Chapters [In Chronological Reading Order]:

The Legendary Sage of Konoha;























--->
Kakashi Chronicles;




--->







--->

Sasuke Chronicles;







The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns;


The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns, Chapter 2:

Memory of The Past
~ Part 2​

Night had fallen across Konoha as the clock was slowly ticking towards 10 pm. In a house, someplace in the center of the village, a door went up and man, not too old of age, angrily walked inside, with his father and mother right behind him.

Minato: This is so ridicules! Why does aunt Kushina have to live in the sand village?!

Jiraiya: Minato calm down, we've already talked about this. Nothing to get this upset for.

Minato: I rarely see her because of it, and now that's she's pregnant, it's even more stupid than ever! It would be so cool to get to know and watch that kid grow up. I always wanted a little brother or sister, and now that I'll finally get a cousin, he or she will live halfway across the world, and I'll barely see them.

Miyuki: Your father is right, you can't always have family close to you. Besides, it's not that far to Suna, we could always pay them a visit.

Minato: Yeah, but with dad being Hokage and all, it's not like we can just walk out of the village and visit other places without doing all sorts of preparations and routines. It's always a mess!

Jiraiya: Like your mother just said, not everyone close to you can live around you all the time. And when two people from different villages meet up and falls in love, one of them will have to move, simple as that. Like Mito's mother, Temari; she moved here to Konoha instead of Shikamaru moving to Suna. And let's not forget about your mother, she moved here from Iwa.

Minato: But still... I had such a great time tonight! Everyone from the whole family was there, even Gaara... It would have been great to be able to see them more than three or four times a year. Besides mom, it wasn't like you moved here all by yourself, your whole family moved here together. The only family member who stayed behind was my great great grandfather, Onoki.

Miyuki: You're right about that, but I still had to adapt to a new village.
And if we hadn't moved here, I would never have met your father in the first place.

She said with a smile on her face as her hand joined with Jiraiya's.

Minato: ... True that, but... Ebizö could have moved here.

Refusing to come to sense, Minato still pressed the matter.

Jiraiya: No more ifs and buts, there's no reason to make a fuss over something like this. Besides, it's usually the woman who moves and not the man. You can't blame Ebizö. Kushina even wanted to move... Not because she didn't like it here, but because it was a totally new experience for her.

Miyuki: I know it might feel a bit different, being as she moved there only two years ago, but as time goes by, you will get more and more used to it.

Minato: Yeah I know... But I'm still finding it ridicules.

Jiraiya: I know how you feel on the subject son, but it's not like there's anything you can do about it.

Minato: Hah, you watch me! When I become kage someday, I'm going to make all of the villages come together as one country... and then, we won't have to bother with all the clearances and arrangements every time we're going to leave a village to visit another!

Jiraiya: Haha, you mean if... if you become Hokage one day son. You will have to surpass me first!

Jiraiya and Miyuki started laughing as Minato responded with a smirk on his face and said something that caught both his father and mother off guard.

Minato: Who said anything about becoming Hokage? Heh, you can keep the title dad, as I'm going to become sekaiteki-kage (Global shadow)! Just like...

Jiraiya: Heh, if you want to become sekaiteki-kage, you will have to beat me to it first!

Minato: Beating you won't be a problem!

Responding to Minato's mockery, Jiraiya fell right for his taunt.

Jiraiya: Fool! You think you have what it takes to surpass me already?!

Minato: You just wait and see dad, that's a promise!

Jiraiya: Haha, I'll keep you to it son.

He said as he rubbed his son's spiky blond hair.

Jiraiya: You know, with the spirit you show on the matter, you kind of remind me of how I was at your age. It's not like I always were this calm minded. I used to tease your grandfather a lot to get his attention.

A smile formed on his face as he reminisced the old days.

Minato: Yeah I bet... anyways, I'm off to bed now as it's getting late. See you guys tomorrow... Good night.

Miyuki: Yeah, sleep well.

Jiraiya: And don't forget to wake up in time for your training with your teammates and your sensei.

Minato: Of course I'll remember! Who do you think I am?

He said as he went into his room, slowly closing the door behind him.

Jiraiya: Sigh, what is there to be done with that kid...

Miyuki: Easy now... Here, sit down and clear your thoughts while I get you something to drink.

As she went out to the kitchen, Jiraiya laid down on the couch as he lifted his feet up and placed them on top of the table in front of him. He then intertwined his hands behind his head, thinking about the matter.

Miyuki: Here, take this.

Handing him a glass of water, Miyuki then sat down on the couch beside him. She slowly laid down and rested her head on his chest as he began to slowly brush her dark long hair with his left hand.

Miyuki: You know... He's right about one thing.

Jiraiya: Hmm...?

Miyuki: The whole family meeting up like this happens too rarely. We should get together like this more often.

Jiraiya: Yeah I suppose you're right, but it's not like everyone in the family has the time for this sort of gathering every week. I mean, it's not like we're some common family, now are we?

Jiraiya slowly took as sip of his glass with his right hand as he continued.

Jiraiya: Most of us have high ranking jobs, and just leaving the village takes time and planning. I didn't even think that Gaara would have time to come here today just for a birthday party.

Miyuki: Well your sister is surely a kind-hearted girl, so it's easy to get close to her.

She said as she moved to get even closer to Jiraiya. He followed up by kissing her forehead as the clock was closing in on midnight.

Jiraiya: What time is it anyways?... Oh, it's this late already.

Miyuki: Well yeah, this birthday party nearly took the whole day.

Jiraiya: Hmm... When I think about it, there's something I should take care of at the office before I go to bed.

Miyuki: You mean, like now?! Can't it wait until tomorrow?

She got up as she sat down on his lap, with her face toward his, trying to convince him to stall the work until the next day.

Jiraiya: Well I... I was suppose to get it done by today...

She crossed her arms around his neck as she leaned her head forward, closer to his, and kissed him passionately.

Jiraiya: I... If you put it that way... I guess it can wait.

Jiraiya put his glass of water down on the table and lifted her up in his arms. He carried her pass the living room and straight to their bedroom as the door closed behind them. Laying her gently down on their bed, he then pulled his shirt off as he began kissing her mouth, chin and neck with great affection. She rolled him over and got on top of him as she slowly began pulling her shirt off...

[...]

The sun stood high over Konoha as a ceremony on top of the Hokage mansion was just about to begin.

?: So this is it huh?

?: Yep, it seems that way Kiba.

Kiba: To think that the time has finally come.. It still seems a bit weird, Shino.

Shino: Who else would you have up there if not Naruto? He's...

Kiba: I guess Shikamaru could have been a good option too though.

?: You're right about that, but after all he did in the war, and the leadership he's shown, I guess Naruto's a good match for the position now.

Kiba: Heh, I guess you're right Choji.

Choji: Besides, I think Shikamaru will be better suited as an adviser to Naruto than the other way around. Shikamaru is way too lazy for being Hokage.

Kiba: Haha, I guess you're right.

?: So this is where you guys are!

Shino: Ino, Sakura, Tenten.

Ino: I guess everyone is getting ready, huh?

Tenten: Well, I still think we should have been allowed to stand up there with the rest, not here on the ground with the other civilians.

Sakura: There's no reason to make the place too crowded up there. Besides, it's only suppose to be Tsunade sama, Shikamaru, Kakashi, Gai, Hinata and the two elders up there.

Tenten: I guess you're right.

Ino: Look! There's Sai!

Sakura: ... And Lee, Neji and Temari too.

Ino: I'm going to head over there and talk with him.

Tenten: You sure aren't letting this one go, are you?

Sakura: *Giggle*... you know how she feels for him.

Ino: Hush!... Don't let him hear you!

Kiba: Haha, you should head over there now while you have the chance.

Ino: Humph!... I will, don't worry.

Sakura: Then what are you waiting for?

Ino: Alright, I'll head over there and talk to him.

She said as she grabbed Sakura's hand, dragging her with her over to the rest.

Shino: And there she goes, trying to...

Kiba: You think she will get his attention now?

Choji: Who knows... Hey Kiba, what's up with you and Tenten anyway?

Kiba: Ehhh?!

Tenten: !!

Taken completely off guard by Choji's question, both of them blushed and didn't know what answer to come up with.

Kiba: Ehm.. we... we've been..

Tenten: Dating, nothing more!

Shino: If you say so. Looks more like you're...

Choji: Look, something is happening up there now!

He said as he opened up another bag of chips, throwing the empty one away.

Tenten: I can't wait!

Shino (In thoughts): Why do they always interrupt me when I'm talking...

Rock Lee: I can't believe it's only been two days since Naruto and the rest returned from the kage meeting in Iwa, and now he's becoming Hokage... It's only like a week ago since the war ended. [Note - See Sasuke Chronicles 2]

Sai: I thought that since Sasuke got his name cleared after the meeting, he would return to Konoha?

Sakura: Well he decided to stay in Iwa as he thought it was a bit prematurely to return to Konoha now, and the Tsuchikage accepted that.

Ino: ...

Temari: Oh well, it can't be helped.

Neji: ...At least the war is finaly over now...

On top of the Hokage mansion, the two elders stood ready as Naruto walked in with Hinata and their baby in hand, while Shikamaru and Tsunade quickly followed. By the staircase, Gai and Kakashi watched closely as Naruto approached the handrail.

Gai: Who would have thought that we would see this day Kakashi... This is the third time we participate in such a ceremony, since Hiruzen Sarutobi was Hokage. To think that time has flown by so fast, and yet here we stand. The war is finally over, and Naruto is about to take position as the 6th Hokage. We're getting older and older while the next generation flourishes beside us. What are we going to do Kakashi?

Kakashi: ...

Gai: ...

Kakashi: Huh, did you say something?

Gai: What?! You weren't listening to what I said at all?!

Clearly disappointed after such a speech went unheard, Gai lowered his head in shame.

Gai: Uhh....

Kakashi (In Thoughts): Seeing Naruto like this... Damn it takes me back. This is just like when Minato became the 4th Hokage, it's like history repeating itself.

Gai: What's on your mind?

Kakashi: Doesn't Naruto remind you of someone right now?

Gai: Huh?... Well... Now that you mention it. He's almost identical to his father with the Hokage robe on.

Kakashi: Mhm...

Tsunade: So Naruto, this is it. Ready to address the people for the first time as Hokage? This is what you always dreamt of isn't it?

Naruto: Hehe, yeah...

Tsunade (In thought): Nawaki... Dan... The time has finally arrived. Naruto's dream... your dream...

Shikamaru: Geez... So many people down there. I don't know if I like being this much in the spotlight.

Naruto: Well you'll be my adviser, alongside Tsunade, after all, so the people will have to get to know you too, sooner or later.

Shikamaru: Yeah I guess. But I still find it troublesome to be shown off like this.

Tsunade: Deal with it, geez.

Homura: So are you ready Naruto? Remember that being Hokage is not anywhere near what you've done before.

Koharu: This is a job of great responsibility, not to be taken lightly. You are responsible for this village now, and your acts will be deflected upon it, both small and major.

Naruto: Yosh.

Tsunade: Geez, what is it with the two of you and always being so careful and serious. Naruto knows about all that already.

Koharu: You were always one to take your job easy slug princess, Tsunade. It's time to have a Hokage that can take it serious.

Tsunade: Humph!

Homura turned around as he grabbed the Hokage-hat that was stationed on a pillow, carried by a shinobi standing next to him. Then he proceeded.

Homura: This, together with the rest of your robe, symbolize your title as leader of this village. With it, you will claim the title of Hokage.

Naruto bent his head forward as Homura put the hat over his head. It hanged on his back by a snore that were lined from one end to the other as Naruto turned himself towards Hinata, gently handing their baby over to her, before turning his eyes towards the people again to address them.

Koharu: With this, you will now be the 6th Hokage of Konohagakure.

Naruto: ...

Hinata: You... you can do it Naruto... Your son and I are so proud of you!

Tears of joy were falling down her cheeks as Naruto smiled back at her. He then stretched his right arm out, pointing towards the crowd.

Naruto: Behold! Right here before you... stands your new Hokage!

The crowd roared out in applause as both Koharu and Homura clutched their face with their hands.

Tsunade: *Grind* Haha, I guess something never change with age nor title.

[...]

*Two Years Later*

?: So I guess this sums up the meeting?

In Suna, the kage meeting had been going on for the last two hours as Gaara was just finished with his final documents.

Naruto: *Yawn* Finally! These meetings drain my energy.

Gaara: Yeah i know, but you will get used to it soon enough. This is your first kage meeting as Hokage after all.

Mei: All meetings can't end in a battle you know. The last couple of times have been special, mostly because of the war. We haven't really had a peaceful meeting like this since at least before the Joint Shinobi Alliance was formed.

A: Yeah, and who can forget the last meeting we had at the end of the war, two years ago.

Onoki: It was really hectic having to go straight from the end of the war, to deciding Sasuke's fate.

Naruto: ...

A: So how is he holding up anyways. He hasn't been scheming anything, has he? Because he knows what I told him when we departed from Iwagakure, and he will be sorry if he does anything he shouldn't.

Naruto: Ahhh, you're worrying to much, you need to learn how to relax.

Naruto leaned himself backwards as he lifted his feet up and placed them onto the Kage table, joining his hands behind his head.

A: What did you say?!

Onoki: Calm down Raikage sama... Sasuke hasn't been up to anything. In fact, he's spent a lot of time in Iwa since that time. He's even become very good friends with my granddaughter, Kurotsuchi.

A: Well you shouldn't let him get too close, or else it might end bad for her.

Onoki: What?! I know you still view him as garbage, but he has really changed and kept true to his promises.

A: There got to be some other reason behind why you're suddenly praising him so much, Humph!

Onoki: Well maybe there is, but he's still changed.

Mei: Oh, so what other reason?

Onoki: I...

Naruto: ...

Onoki: Well the two of them are expecting children together.

A: What?!

Mei: Oh really?

Gaara: Well I guess that at least means he won't try to do something he will regret.

Shocked to hear this, Naruto fell of his chair as he crawled back up again and slammed his hands onto the table.

Naruto: Why haven't I heard of this before?! Are you for real?

Onoki: ...Yes I am.

Naruto: Hehe, I'm glad on his behalf. You better be sure to tell him that when you arrive home back in Iwa.

Onoki: Yeah I will... anyways, before we end this meeting, there is something I'd like to announce.

Gaara: Oh?

Onoki: As you all know, I've been a kage for a very long time now, and, after countless urges from my granddaughter, I've finally decided to find a successor.

Naruto: Oh really?

Mei: How great.

A: Not that we don't want you here anymore, but it was about god damn time you did old man.

Onoki: Humph! I could still have been Tsuchikage for at least a few more years... But, I feel that the time is right now.

Gaara: So who will be your successor?

Onoki: As you all know, he was the commander of the second division during the war.

Naruto: ?

A: You mean Kitsuchi?

Onoki: Yeah that's him.

Gaara: He's your son-in-law, right?

Onoki: That is also true.

Mei: So when will he take over?

Onoki: He will take over by the end of next month. So in other words, this is the last time I'll be participating in a kage meeting.

He said with a smile on his face, although you could see that he also were a little saddened by it.

Naruto: Old man...

Onoki: Don't you worry though, I have my faith in him. He's going to be a great Tsuchikage. Beside, it was about time our kage-number got closer to yours, bwuhahaha.

Naruto: Heh, still a long way to go until your village reaches my number though.

A: Humph! Having a higher number on your kage title means nothing. Being as you're the 6th Hokage, while Onoki is the 3rd Tsuchikage, can only mean that his village has been more stable and haven't switched around kages all the time.

Naruto: What?! The only reason we have had this many Hokages is because of how long our village has existed. Besides, most of the Hokages have been succeeded upon their deaths. At least they went out in a glorious way!

Pulling his tongue out to even further provoke A, Gaara had to interfere between the two of them before a battle broke out. His sand slowly retreated inside his jar as the two of them calmed down.

A: Hah, your way of boasting is just too much like your father!

Naruto: At least I don't boast without cause!

Mei: Now now, both of you, no need to argue.

Gaara: Geez... I guess Naruto got the action of this meeting as he wanted.

The rest of the kages started laughing as Naruto couldn't disagree on that one.

Naruto: Hehe, I guess you're right.

A: This is it then. If nobody else have anything to add, I guess this meeting is over.

Gaara: That's all I had to say at least.

Mei: Same here.

Naruto: Yep, guess that sums it up.

Onoki: Then it's time we all headed back to our villages. Kazekage, thanks for your hospitality.

Gaara: Always a pleasure. Thank you all for coming.

As the five kages rose from their chairs and proceeded to walk out of the meeting room, the sun in the distance fell beyond the mountain cliff as day became night.

[...]

*Three Years Later*

?: Take this, Fuuton Rasengan!

?: That's it, almost there Konohamaru!

In the outskirts of Konoha, two men were having a full fledged fight, as birds scattered in all directions.

Konohamaru: I'm not done yet Naruto kun, kage bunshin no jutus!

Naruto: Oi, hang on a minute, not so fast! We're only training after all!

Konohamaru: Hehe, I've only just begun. What, are you going to chicken out?

Naruto: What did you say?! I'm Hokage now, idiot, I would never chicken out!

Konohamaru: Gehehe, then prove it... Here I come!

Naruto: Geez... always getting over your head... Kage bunshin no jutsu!

Charging at each other with great speed, thousands of shadow clones clashed together with Fuuton Rasengans in hand. Smoke filled the scenery as a loud cracking noise came from their impact. As the smoke settled, only Konohamaru and Naruto stood standing as all of their clones had disappeared.

Naruto: You're starting to get a hang of it Konohamaru... but you still have a long way to go before you'll be able to use the Rasenshuriken. You've mastered the Fuuton Rasengan, but you still need to master Sage Mode before you'll be able to create and throw a Rasenshuriken.

Konohamaru: *pant* *pant* I know that... but I will master it, no matter what. As you can see, my Fuuton Rasengan is already stronger than yours.

Naruto: Heh, is that so? Why don't you charge up the best one you can and clash with me again. Then we'll see!

Konohamaru: Alright! Fuuton Ras...

?: Time out!

Konohamaru: Eh?!

Naruto: ...

?: Oi, Naruto-chan and Konohamaru-chan!

Naruto: Fukasaku?? What are you doing here? I didn't summon you?

Out of nowhere, Fukasaku suddenly stood beside Naruto as if summoned by him.

Fukasaku: No time to explain, the Great Honourable Geezer has summoned you for a prophecy concerning you.

Naruto: What? But I've already had my prophecy told long time ago... Isn't there suppose to be only one per person?

Fukasaku: Well this seem to be different case, just come with me, both of you.

Naruto: Alright, let's go.

In a poof of smoke, they were gone...

Fukasaku: Here we are.

Naruto: Let's go hear out the old geezer then.

Fukasaku: Wait... before that, Shima has prepared her specialty.

Konohamaru: Oh really?! How nice!

Naruto (In thoughts): Sigh, I guess you haven't tasted her specialty Konohamaru...

Shima: Naruto-chan... oh, and Konohamaru-chan too! What a nice surprise! Here, dig in!

Konohamaru: Thanks!

Naruto: Ugh...

As Naruto, Konohamaru and Fukasaku seated themselves, Shima served the dishes.

Konohamaru: Wait... what?! Bugs and worms?!

Fukasaku: What did you expect? Let's eat!

[...]

*10 minutes later*

Naruto: Great toad geezer, you have summoned me?

Great Toad Sage: Yes I have... now... I will bestow upon you, your prophecy...

Naruto: ...

Great Toad Sage: Hmm but first... Who were you again?

Naruto: Ehh?

Shima: You senile old geezer, this is Uzumaki Naruto!

Fukasaku: Shima have you gone insane?! You can't talk to him like...

Shima: Humph! He never remembers anyone or anything... He won't remember that I said this tomorrow anyways!

Fukasaku: Geez...

Great Toad Sage: Now now... Uzumaki Naruto... Hmm...

As the Great Toad Sage was making his mind up, Konohamaru leaned over to Naruto's ear and whispered something into it.

Konohamaru (Whispers): Is he always like this?

Naruto: (Whispers): I'm afraid so...

Fukasaku: Hey, no whispering under Great Honourable Geezer's prophecy!

Naruto: Ehehe, sorry.

Great Toad Sage: Hmm?!

Shima: What is it geezer?

Great Toad Sage: ... Who were you again??

Naruto, Konohamaru, Shima and Fukasaku (In Unison): Ahhhhh!

Hanging their heads in disappointment, the Great Toad Sage finally went on.

Great Toad Sage: Oh, now I remember... The young fellow beside you, Sarutobi Konohamaru?

Konohamaru: What, how do you know my name?

Great Toad Sage: This prophecy... is for both of you.

Naruto: ...

Konohamaru: What?

Fukasaku: This can't be?!

Great Toad Sage: I see... a war...

Naruto: War?! But the war has already ended five years ago?! The only ones left are Kabuto and Zetsu, and their forces were annihilated during the 4th Great Shinobi war? There is no way they can muster a force big enough to start a new war, not without Tobi and him controlling the beasts?! Does this mean that Sasuke in fact didn't manage to kill Tobi back then... and that the reports that came in through... Suigetsu's Intel after he surrendered with Sasuke... If Tobi really can move his souls from one body to another, then this must mean that he's not dead after all... !!

Great Toad Sage: This war is different... I see an isolated war. Three shinobies separated from the rest, trapped within a... hmm... Something big, that forces them to fight to the death. One man will prevail, while the two others... will die. One with a pure heart, another with an evil intent, and the third... A man who seeks redemption... This man is someone you know.

Naruto: !!

Konohamaru: Huh?! One of us will die?!... Wait, no... you meant... if this man is someone we know, someone who seeks redemption... then he will fight this man with evil intent, alongside one of us? Neither Naruto or I seeks redemption...

Naruto (In thoughts): There is no doubt... Even though Sasuke killed off Tobi's body, he managed to move his soul to another one...

Great Toad Sage: A vicious chakra emerges, that hasn't existed for a long long time... A great sacrifice that brings redemption upon this lost soul's heart, and a new... ?!

Fukasaku: What do you see Great Honourable Geezer?!

Naruto: Hang on a minute!

Great Toad Sage: This man will tie past with future and become... complete.

Konohamaru: Tie past with future?

Shima: What do you mean complete?!

Great Toad Sage: Hmm... It's unclear, but this man will then meet several people from the past, people he knows... And together move on towards the future.

Konohamaru: From the past? You mean like Edo Tensei?

Naruto (In Thoughts): So Tobi and Kabuto will rally up for a final battle... What does all of this mean?

Great Toad Sage: Meeting those from the past will call upon an important choice by this man. Then...

Fukasaku: Then what?

Naruto: Old geezer, who is this man? Is it...

Great Toad Sage: Hmm... That's all that I can see... but something else is coming into view.

Shima: What is it?

Great Toad Sage: Uzumaki Naruto... You will bring upon the period of the Three Great Toad Sages.

Naruto: The Three Great Toad Sages?

Great Toad Sage: And you will be their spiritual guide towards...

The great toad sage paused for a second, before he continued.

Great Toad Sage: ... Hmm... It's a bit unclear, but this Sarutobi kid will be the first of the three you will guide.

Naruto: Spiritual guide? What does that even mean?

Konohamaru: I will?! Then that means... I will master Sage mode!

Surprised and happy at the same time to hear this, Konohamaru started jumping around in excitement for a bit, before settling down again.

Fukasaku: Spiritual guide... the period of the Three Great Toad Sages...

Shima: Tie past and future... become complete...

Naruto: Vicious chakra that hasn't existed for a long long time... a great sacrifice, a man who seeks redemption, someone we know, making an important choice...

Konohamaru: Trapped in a battle to the death, meeting people from the past...

Everyone went silent for a bit as the Great Toad Sage concluded his prophecy.

Great Toad Sage: When the three new sages are ready, when your legacy is ready, you will be ready, Uzumaki Naruto. That is all...

Naruto: ... Ready for what? Who are the other two?

Great Toad Sage: Only time will tell... Now, I need my rest...

Fukasaku: The Great Honourable Geezer has spoken his prophecy.

Shima: What, but there got to be something else? None of this makes any sense at all...

Konohamaru: Naruto, you know what this means?

Naruto: Right... a war is approaching.

[...]

Back in Konoha, Naruto and Konohamaru went to the Hokage mansion as Kakashi, Gai, Sakura Tsunade and Shikamaru joined them. After a brief report, the seven of them started deciphering the prophecy Naruto and Konohamaru had just been foretold.

Tsunade: Geez... Looks like we haven't heard the last from Tobi and Kabuto after all.

Kakashi: It's only a matter of time before they'll return. The only question is, when will that be and how strong will their forces be? What about the seven beasts that went missing during the war. Does Tobi still have them in his possession?

Shikamaru: Either way, we need to take some precautions.

Naruto: Exactly... I think this calls for a kage meeting.

Sakura: Good thinking, I'll notify the bird tower to send out letters right away.

Naruto: Very well...

Leaving the room, Sakura headed straight for the bird tower as Naruto continued.

Naruto: I've already thought out some steps to start with... First of all, I'm thinking of reopening the Anbu root.

Tsunade: Are you serious?

Naruto: Yes, but instead of it being a stand-alone division, I was thinking of fusing it with the Anbu and selection an Anbu Leader.

Shikamaru: Not bad coming from you Naruto.

Gai: Haha, it wouldn't be the first time Naruto comes up with a good plan after he became Hokage.

Naruto: This was an idea I had in mind even before this prophecy and I already talked to Sai about it. But in the end, he politely declined the job, so I was hoping you would take the job, Konohamaru?

Konohamaru: Wha... me? But I don't have any experience with the anbu?

Naruto: Well you don't have to if you don't want to, but both Sai and Yamato has volunteered as support, being as their experience with the Anbu and the Anbu root organization are quite exceptional. They should be able to give you some good advises. Besides, you will be working closely with me.

Konohamaru: Well I guess I can't refuse then.

Naruto: Then it's settled... Moving on, I was thinking of putting together a personal defense squad.

Kakashi: A defense squad?

Naruto: Yes, two six-man-teams consisting of Sakura, Sai, Shino, Neji, Rock Lee and I, together with Konohamaru, Shikamaru, Tsunade, Yamato, Kakashi and Gai as backup.

Kakashi: Sounds like a plan.

Naruto: Alright, we'll discuss things further as soon as the rest of the kages arrives later today. In addition to Shikamaru and Tsunade, I would like you to attend the meeting as well, Konohamaru.

Konohamaru: Right.

[...]

*Later that day*

On the other side of Konoha, while the Kage meeting was under way, Kakashi had went to meet with Yugao Uzuki.

Kakashi: You wanted to talk?

Yugao: Yes... I...

Kakashi: Maybe we should sit down?

Kakashi and Yugao proceeded to a bench that was nearby as they both sat down.

Yugao: Kakashi... You know, time goes by and we're not exactly getting any younger.

Kakashi: What do you mean?

Yugao: Well over the past weeks we've been going out, I think... no I have...

Not able to get out what she wanted to say, Kakashi interrupted her.

Kakashi: I think I know what you mean.

Yugao: You do?

Kakashi: Well ever since Gai got married last year, I've kind off been the last one not to... ehehehe...

He said as he scratched the backside of his head.

Kakashi: Well what I'm trying to say is that It's mutual.

Yugao: !! So you're feeling the same?

Kakashi: Yes. I've known you for years now, ever since we both were in the anbu and...

As Kakashi spoke, Yugao laid her finger on his mouth, telling him to be quiet, as her finger slowly, but gently proceeded to slide down his mask, exposing the rest of his face. She leaned over to him as an intense and passionate kiss followed.

[...]

Kitsuchi: Then this settles it, we will have to tighten security in the villages and around the boarders. I expect full cooperation from all of you.

A: Right.

Mei: As much as these security upgrades seem reassuring, I just can't help shake this feeling off that we will just have to wait for them to strike, without being able to do anything about it. Our search squadron has been looking high and low for the past five years, but still nothing.

Gaara: Hmm...

Naruto: Yeah, but if this prophecy turns out to be true, we better be as ready as we can.

Kitsuchi: I see in the latest report that you made this month, Naruto, that Konoha has been thinking of upgrading the school system? Taking everything we've learned into consideration, I don't think that's a bad idea. Care to elaborate some on how it will work?

Reaching out for the document, Naruto shared his thoughts on the matter.

Naruto: Well it's quite simple really, as of now we have the shinobi academy, where young shinobies graduated to Genins, before having a test with a sensei to see if they're really ready for it. Then they train in a three-man squad with their sensei guiding them, going on missions and such, before eventually taking on bigger tasks, like the Chunin exam, and so on...

A: ...

Mei: Go on.

Naruto: Shikamaru and I have been working on a system to get the best out of each student's ability before, meanwhile and after they graduate. We call it the three academies of genjutsu, taijutsu and ninjutsu, with each one specializing in the different genre. We're already in the try-out period and Hatake Kakashi, Maito Gai and Yühi Kurenai have been selected as the academy teachers...

Shikamaru: The point is that each shinobi can learn their specialty as fast as possible, with the students attending classes before they become genins, when they're training with a sensei and later on. A student will either focus on one class, or attend them all.

Kitsuchi: I see...

Mei: So is this really necessary? Will it help the students or take away their focus from training with their three-man squad and their sensei?

Shikamaru: Like Naruto said, it's in the try-out stage yet, so we won't know before at least a two months' time, whether it will have a good effect or not.

Tsunade: If you want, we could give you copies of the schematics of the system?

Kitsuchi: We'll look into it and maybe do some testing of our own.

Naruto: Sure.

Mei: Hmm... If it actually works, this might prove useful for both the alliance and for preparing new shinobies the best way possible.

Gaara: Agreed, this seems like a good setup, coming from Shikamaru and Naruto... Raikage, you've been surprisingly silent about the matter. Normally you go against anything Naruto says.

A: Humph! For once I actually agree with Naruto, this system looks to be a huge improvement, especially since Shikamaru stands behind it as well.

Killerbee: A is okay with what Naruto said, looks to me like their disagreement is dead. I will have to nod with my head as Naruto is way ahead, yeah!

A: I guess this sums up everything then.

Gaara: Looks like it.

Mei: Then we'll stay on alert for any intel regarding Tobi or Kabuto.

Kitsuchi: Right.

Naruto: Thanks for being able to respond to my call this fast, have a safe trip ho....

A: Before we go, there is something I'd like to announce.

Gaara: ?

Getting up from his chair, A walked over to the window and looked outside as some leaves flew by. He then turned around and slowly removed his kage-hat as he approached the exit, before halting beside where Killerbee were seated.

A: Ever since Onoki retired as kage, I've been thinking through a couple of things... After some back and forth, I've decided to step down.

Mei: What?! Why?

A: No special reason... Without further ado, here's the new raikage.

Pressing the kage-hat towards Killerbee's chest before letting go of it, A went out the door.

Killerbee: ?!

Naruto: Aha! Congrats Bee!

Killerbee: I..

Confused on what just happened, Killerbee stood up from his chair. Bidding the rest goodbye, he, together with the rest of the Kumo escort, quickly followed after A.

Gaara: I had no idea he wanted to retire?

Kitsuchi: Hmm... Maybe his arm injury is worse than he initially thought...

Mei: Or maybe he just wanted to hand over the job to Killerbee... Either way, I guess this concludes this meeting, thanks for the hospitality Naruto, Shikamaru, Tsunade...

Nodding in agreement, the rest of the kages got up from their chairs as the meeting came to an end.

~ End Chapter 2​

Naruto and Sasuke vs Tobi continues next chapter!

Additional note: For those who didn't get the order of things, everything that happened in the past in this chapter, took place before the Chunin and Jonin exams in chapter 1. Let me know if you're still wondering about something.

Fun fact: The Kakashi x Yugao scene was written over a year ago.
 
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It was Totally confused untill i read it twise and also looked at previous chapter:p
Now on chapter, i was waiting 4 it from long time. And its awesome. I really enjoyed it a lot. Thanks 4 make such a large chapter, i love long ff:)
Story was totally cönfusing at starting:p but not now:p Ur little romatic scene are awesomexd
"Jiraiya put his glass of water down on the table and lifted her up in his arms. He carried her pass the living room and straight to their bedroom as the door closed behind them. Laying her gently down on their bed, he then pulled his shirt off as he began kissing her mouth, chin andneck with great affection. She rolled him over and got on top of him as she slowly began pulling her shirt off..." :zise:
bro!what happend aftr that??xd i really want 2 knowxd plz show this part too:D{well u can pm it 2 me too if u dont want 2 post publicallyxd}
its nice 2 see old n orignal characters again:) i really enjoyed kage meetings n naruto's hokage part:)
Kakashi's kiss is also nice<3
Old toad sage part is also very nice but its a bit confusing:p(like a good suspence).
Overall its a very good chapter, nice comeback bro:)
Now going 4 read chap 3rdxd
 
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good story, bro
Thanks.

Really nice bio bro.
It's not a bio, lol.

Tl;dr sorry
KK.

cool story bro.. literally
Thanks.

Look nice. Will try to read to read this. :)
I'll be looking forward to it :p

I was totally confused until i read it twice and also looked at previous chapter:p
Now on chapter, i was waiting 4 it from long time. And its awesome. I really enjoyed it a lot. Thanks 4 make such a large chapter, i love long ff:)
Story was totally cönfusing at starting:p but not now:p Ur little romatic scene are awesomexd
"Jiraiya put his glass of water down on the table and lifted her up in his arms. He carried her pass the living room and straight to their bedroom as the door closed behind them. Laying her gently down on their bed, he then pulled his shirt off as he began kissing her mouth, chin and neck with great affection. She rolled him over and got on top of him as she slowly began pulling her shirt off..." :zise:
bro!what happend aftr that??xd i really want 2 knowxd plz show this part too:D{well u can pm it 2 me too if u dont want 2 post publicallyxd}
its nice 2 see old n orignal characters again:) i really enjoyed kage meetings n naruto's hokage part:)
Kakashi's kiss is also nice<3
Old toad sage part is also very nice but its a bit confusing:p(like a good suspence).
Overall its a very good chapter, nice comeback bro:)
Now going 4 read chap 3rdxd
Haha, being as the story jumps back and forth through present and past, you kind of have to read it carefully, but then again, when it's this big, you only want to skip through it :p

Haha, well I had to pull the plug there as I couldn't make the scene into a porn movie, it's a family forum after all lol xd

Thanks for reading, your comments are always welcomed;)
 

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I love your long ffs:)
Thanks :p And I hate short ones, lol, although writing chapters this long is a bit tiring.

And btw who is wife of gai??
I don't know:p But yeah for real, I don't know, she's just "wife" as of now. However, maybe I'll give her a character to play later in the FF, we'll see;)
 

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F*ck, that was lengthy...How did that not exceed the post-limit? It took me longer than any of your other chapters U_U Perhaps, V disabled the post-limit during recent updates of the NB server. :shrug:

Anyways...

That was one heck of a read. Not one of your best but it still contained lots of mini and big informations. If we consider it as a chapter that acts as build-up and plotholes-filler, well, I'd say, it was bang-on!

I'll get on certain points first as always before getting on points I liked/disliked.

This is so ridicules! Why does aunt Kushina have to live in the sand village?!
Lol, I don't know if you remember that but in your last chapter, I pointed out how come Ayame is still with her father and not with her husband. And here, you wrote a well-wrote sequence of how woman moves with their husband. Oh yeah, the doses of comedies was very well done in this sequence. More on that later...

Besides mom, it wasn't like you moved here all by yourself, your whole family moved here together.
Whole family? :| So, Sasuke also returned to Konoha? That means he didn't die from Tobi's battle either??? Or is it only Kurotsuchi who moved to Konoha? But why will she move to Konoha if Sasuke didn't survive?

Damn, since I read the sequence on the 'Prophecy' part, this is getting on my nerves. Argh...:crazy:

Heh, you can keep the title dad, as I'm going to become sekaiteki-kage (Global shadow)! Just like...
...Just like...grandpa~ Right? :p:)xd:p So, Naruto didn't die either from Tobi's battle. :| What the hell...?

I like the concept of sekaiteki-kage btw. Sounds like King Kai from DBZ who supervises all the Kings. Lol, not only your story has lots of Kishi-feel to it but you also seem to sport glimpses of DBZ like Kishi, so often does. Hmmm...now that's something, isn't it? xd

Hey Kiba, what's up with you and Tenten anyway?
Wait wut...xd Now, add me to the 'caught off-guard' list :p Btw, did you mention who Neji ends up with or did I forget it?

Kakashi: Huh, did you say something?
Never gets old...xd

Naruto: Behold! Right here before you... stands your new Hokage!
Reminiscent of my first chapter; though much better cause I really don't match the way you did the multi-characters interactions that preceded the ceremony.

A: There got to be some other reason behind why you're suddenly praising him so much, Humph!
Onoki: Yeah, he's banging my grand-daughter lol xd Problem?(Sorry, couldn't resist :p)

Great Toad Sage: ... Who were you again??
Fuuuuuuu, this also never gets old xd

Speaking of which, I pretty laughed/smiled throughout this chapter. Got to be one of the chapters that tickles the most the funny bone.

One man will prevail, while the two others... will die. One with a pure heart, another with an evil intent, and the third... A man who seeks redemption... This man is someone you know.
As I said above, this is driving me crazy with speculation.

As Kakashi spoke, Yugao laid her finger on his mouth, telling him to be quiet, as her finger slowly, but gently proceeded to slide down his mask, exposing the rest of his face. She leaned over to him as an intense and passionate kiss followed.
She saw his face. O_O Blasphemy :p And you're getting naughty - 2 kisses in one chapter. Hehehehe :p
It's good you reunited both of them though. Who did Gai ended up with btw?

Okay, points I liked...

1. A development of Minato's personality. We got to know his stubborn, defiant and little cocky nature that resembles that of Jiraiya, Naruto and Ero-sennin Jiraiya. It was also done in the midst of a pretty hilarious interactions that made it pretty sweet.

2. Romantic scene between Jiraiya and Miyuki; though I wished it was longer and a little more intense in words. I got a feeling, you chickened out to describe it further in the fear of NB rules' parameters.

3. The Prophecy! I must applaud you for your ingenuity (yet again...). Including a prophecy was great move from a writer's point of view. Helped you explained lots of events that occurred and obviously, dots that still remain to be joint together. And from a reader's point of view, it's fantastic sequence as it keeps you guessing and speculating all round. For me, the best part of this chapter; one that makes it stand-out. I love the idea of 3 Great Toad Sages but obviously, what's more intriguing to me - is what I mentioned above :p

4. Uh, multi-characters interactions. Yeah, I know that I always says that (just like I always praise Kuroi's language) but seriously, both of you keeps bowling me in those sections. So, yeah, brilliant once again. Can't pin-point one though; all different sequence were very good.

5. How you filled numerous mini-plots in your story! Like Kakashi-Yugao's love professing, Konohamaru's training and how he becomes Anbu leader, Onoki and A's respective power pass ect... Especially, A giving the hat was epic. No asking, no questions, no time wasting, just bloody take it lol. Poor Killer-Bee, now, I wonder if he actually wanted to become Raikage.

Points I disliked:

1. The abrupt transition from a *** scene to a flashback. It felt really out-of-place to me. Seriously, should have been more smooth.

2. Well, not a really a dislike but I wished you didn't end this chapter in past-mode. Though, perhaps it's related with C3 if I go by title...:shrug:

Time is running out now. So, I'm going to read C3 by late-night or early-morning tomorrow.

All-in-all, I liked this chapter for its well-done interactions and hilarity. The Prophecy sequence also added lots of intrigue, so it's an A+ on hype meter too. Well-done chapter :)
 
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F*ck, that was lengthy...How did that not exceed the post-limit? It took me longer than any of your other chapters U_U Perhaps, V disabled the post-limit during recent updates of the NB server. :shrug:

Anyways...

That was one heck of a read. Not one of your best but it still contained lots of mini and big informations. If we consider it as a chapter that acts as build-up and plotholes-filler, well, I'd say, it was bang-on!

I'll get on certain points first as always before getting on points I liked/disliked.



Lol, I don't know if you remember that but in your last chapter, I pointed out how come Ayame is still with her father and not with her husband. And here, you wrote a well-wrote sequence of how woman moves with their husband. Oh yeah, the doses of comedies was very well done in this sequence. More on that later...



Whole family? :| So, Sasuke also returned to Konoha? That means he didn't die from Tobi's battle either??? Or is it only Kurotsuchi who moved to Konoha? But why will she move to Konoha if Sasuke didn't survive?

Damn, since I read the sequence on the 'Prophecy' part, this is getting on my nerves. Argh...:crazy:



...Just like...grandpa~ Right? :p:)xd:p So, Naruto didn't die either from Tobi's battle. :| What the hell...?

I like the concept of sekaiteki-kage btw. Sounds like King Kai from DBZ who supervises all the Kings. Lol, not only your story has lots of Kishi-feel to it but you also seem to sport glimpses of DBZ like Kishi, so often does. Hmmm...now that's something, isn't it? xd



Wait wut...xd Now, add me to the 'caught off-guard' list :p Btw, did you mention who Neji ends up with or did I forget it?



Never gets old...xd



Reminiscent of my first chapter; though much better cause I really don't match the way you did the multi-characters interactions that preceded the ceremony.



Onoki: Yeah, he's banging my grand-daughter lol xd Problem?(Sorry, couldn't resist :p)



Fuuuuuuu, this also never gets old xd

Speaking of which, I pretty laughed/smiled throughout this chapter. Got to be one of the chapters that tickles the most the funny bone.



As I said above, this is driving me crazy with speculation.



She saw his face. O_O Blasphemy :p And you're getting naughty - 2 kisses in one chapter. Hehehehe :p
It's good you reunited both of them though. Who did Gai ended up with btw?

Okay, points I liked...

1. A development of Minato's personality. We got to know his stubborn, defiant and little cocky nature that resembles that of Jiraiya, Naruto and Ero-sennin Jiraiya. It was also done in the midst of a pretty hilarious interactions that made it pretty sweet.

2. Romantic scene between Jiraiya and Miyuki; though I wished it was longer and a little more intense in words. I got a feeling, you chickened out to describe it further in the fear of NB rules' parameters.

3. The Prophecy! I must applaud you for your ingenuity (yet again...). Including a prophecy was great move from a writer's point of view. Helped you explained lots of events that occurred and obviously, dots that still remain to be joint together. And from a reader's point of view, it's fantastic sequence as it keeps you guessing and speculating all round. For me, the best part of this chapter; one that makes it stand-out. I love the idea of 3 Great Toad Sages but obviously, what's more intriguing to me - is what I mentioned above :p

4. Uh, multi-characters interactions. Yeah, I know that I always says that (just like I always praise Kuroi's language) but seriously, both of you keeps bowling me in those sections. So, yeah, brilliant once again. Can't pin-point one though; all different sequence were very good.

5. How you filled numerous mini-plots in your story! Like Kakashi-Yugao's love professing, Konohamaru's training and how he becomes Anbu leader, Onoki and A's respective power pass ect... Especially, A giving the hat was epic. No asking, no questions, no time wasting, just bloody take it lol. Poor Killer-Bee, now, I wonder if he actually wanted to become Raikage.

Points I disliked:

1. The abrupt transition from a *** scene to a flashback. It felt really out-of-place to me. Seriously, should have been more smooth.

2. Well, not a really a dislike but I wished you didn't end this chapter in past-mode. Though, perhaps it's related with C3 if I go by title...:shrug:

Time is running out now. So, I'm going to read C3 by late-night or early-morning tomorrow.

All-in-all, I liked this chapter for its well-done interactions and hilarity. The Prophecy sequence also added lots of intrigue, so it's an A+ on hype meter too. Well-done chapter :)
[Going to divide up the different "paragraphs" with " * "]

* Always love reading your reviews:zonder:

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* I have no idea mate xd It seems like they extend the limit all the time, in fact, I have no idea what the limit is nowadays.
It turned out way longer than I initially thought it would, exceeding chapter 1 in length. The main reason why Chapter 1 and 2 became this long is because most of the "present time" focus (which takes place 20 years after chapter 15 of the original), really comes from the abandoned Jiraiya Chronicles that I scrapped, while the whole Great Toad Sage Prophecy and Naruto training Konohamaru scenes, from the past in this chapter, was my original ideas for a possible Konohamaru Chronicles. So if they had been made, we would be talking about material for 6 chapters, which basically is trimmed down and crammed into two now.

Originally when I decided to scrap those ideas I had for those Chronicles, I had picture this FF ending on chapter 15 with a cliffhanger. But then the urge to continue got to me, so I had to fill out the "flesh" of the sequel a bit, or else it would have been right on the fight, and after "peace was achieved," I would have to end the FF, not getting a chance to explore the characters like Jiraiya, Minato and so on, because there wouldn't be a point having chapters, like chapter 1 and 2, at the end of the FF after all the fighting is over, as there wouldn't be anything to look forward to other than to find out all the details possible I guess. And readers here at NB seem to be pretty spoiled on Action :p

I felt that I had to get those out of the way before focusing fully on the Tobi vs Naruto and Sasuke fight from chapter 3 and onwards. Dragging this format on for much more than 2 chapters would have ruined the point if you ask me, as I always try to not have more than two chapters in a row without fighting, but with only talk. Besides, 3 is a good number to get back into the action on :p
Now that I've got those two "gap filler" chapters "out of the way," I won't need to cram as much stuff into each chapter and thus, they will be shorter from now on, like Chapter 3 is (One notable exception to this might be chapter 5 though :p). I personally thought it was fitting to get done with everything that happened before the start of the actual FF, as many points, that now has been detailed more, had been refereed to throughout the lifespan of my FF, if you get what I'm saying.

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* Well yeah, that's exactly my take on it with these two chapters, as I've filled out the 12 years "gap" that was between Sasuke Chronicles 2's events (which is/was very close to the timeline of the current manga) and the first chapter of the original (The Legendary Sage of Konoha). With this though, I've set up a new "gap" to fill, and that's the gap between the end of the original, and up to the current present time in the first two chapters.
I was originally thinking of doing a "The Godfather part 2 take" on this sequel FF, by jumping back and forth through time and follow two storyline at once, but I figured that from chapter 3 and onwards until chapter 10 or so, it's better to stay in the past.

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* Haha, still going on that :p Well I never said she was married in chapter 1, but if she was, that doesn't mean that she couldn't be married with one from Konoha and still live in Konoha and work at the ramen shop ;)
Thanks and KK...

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* In chapter 1's comments, I requested for more hawk eyes to spot all the details, before you showed up. And damn, you pull it off again! :p
This probably seem very confusing now, but that's exactly the point, Kishi style :cool:
Did Sasuke die or did he survive? You could say that if he moved back to Konoha, of course his family would come along. But then again, Miyuki, Sasuke's daughter, got married to Jiraiya. If Sasuke died, would Kurotsuchi stay behind or move as well? Good questions indeed :p And the prophecy... Muhaha:mugi:
All I can tell for now is that it's already been lined out long time ago, and it's planned for a full "reveal" in one of the latter chapters, on how, why, with whom and what for, did Miyuki's family move to Konoha.

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* Who knows? Could be Mei or Gaara as well.
Hmm... Maybe he didn't? What did the prophecy say?:rolleyes:
Too bad I never watched DBZ or any of the Dragonball series for that matter. Although, that sounds like an interesting connection :p

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* Haha, I like experimenting by teaming up cannon characters in my FF, as you probably already know from past experience :p
Nah, he probably ends up with a Hyuuga or some random chick, I dunno. Same with Shino, Choji and so on :p
But I can confirm that Sai and Ino ends up together, and yes, Tenten and Kiba does as well. Not to forget Kakashi and Yugao, and Gai and his wife (which Kyon already questioned the identity of earlier), although I'm not sure if they will play any big roles as "couples" like the already established ones, if any at all. We'll see.

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* Haha, it was actually the first time I used that "phrase" from the manga/anime between Kakashi and Gai, in my FF. The reason being that as they get older, they get more close and less rival obsessed, but due to this being pretty much in the past and close to the manga, I decided to have a go at it xd

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* Yeah, I remember that I had your take on Naruto becoming Hokage in mind when I wrote this, but I couldn't remember all the details, so I was just hoping my version wouldn't be too similar to yours, making me seem like a copy-cat, lol. I don't know about that... Maybe I'll re-read that part after posting this reply, to freshen up on how it was.

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:lmao::rofl: Epic win, I can totally picture Onoki telling A that xd

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* Yeah, I was trying to cram in as much funny Manga stuff as I could remember in this chapterxd

Oh you think so? Well I didn't really try to be too funny in this one, guess it just turned out like that with some of the scenes, lol.

- Side note, damn this reply is almost becoming a chapter long, lol. Am I halfway through yet? I hope not, as I love reading your reviews :cool:

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* Hehe nice, making me think that it wasn't such a bad idea after all to decide to include this kick ass long scene-idea that was intended for a possible Konohamaru Chronicles. Helps the suspense for the outcome of the battle:cool:

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* If you read the fun fact at the end of this chapter, i actually wrote this scene over a year ago, together with some other scenes that are coming up in future chapters, before I even had finished chapter 14 and 15 of the original. Due to that, I noticed the difference of my writing skill and format back then and now, and thus had to "polish it" a bit, but all of the actual details happening was decided long time ago. Even told Sun about it after I had written it, lol, good to finally have been able to show this scene to the "world."

Yes she did O__O I don't know if you've seen the pics, but there are some pics of Kakashi with some of his face revealed I think, drawn by Kishimoto himself. Haha yeah, it couldn't be helped I suppose :p
The only thing that I had in mind was if people would actually recognize her and not think that she's a made up character like for example Miyuki.

As I mentioned briefly above and in my reply to Kyon earlier, as of now she's just a "wife," as in not a character. So not even I know who Gai ended up with in my FF, lol.

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1: Hehe I'm glad you liked this part, as one of the main points... or actually, the main point of even having this future storyline is to build upon Naruto's "Legacy" and how Jiraiya is as a Hokage, how he handles the job-family in counter to how Naruto handled it, etc, as well as exploring those characters like Minato and Miyuki, which I think is very fun. The closest I've gotten to anything original, lol, and it also helps establish the fundamental ground-lair for the possible 2nd sequel I've been thinking about doing, if i ever get that far, where Minato will be the main character.

Although I didn't intend to make this part of the chapter funny, I must say that you better laugh in the beginning of chapter 3, lol. You better -_- JKxd

2: Haha, you're not the only one that wished it was longer, but like I mentioned to you earlier, taking it further would be dangering the line between lawful and breaking the law, so yeah, maybe I chicken out a little, lol. I don't see how I could have gone any longer without... well yeah, describing a *** scene (which would be totally fine on film, but I guess it's against the rules here, or I dunno. Maybe I didn't want to take it further, lol). I must say that this is the most embarrassing scene I've ever written, so I fully understand if it seemed a bit stiff in the lack of passion, as, well, writing scenes like this isn't really my strong point, and I went back and forth several times before I settled with this outcome and how it was written:lmao:

3: Okay I take what I said previously back, definitely glad I choose to keep this idea and incorporate it into the sequel :p

4: Thanks yet again, I personally liked the whole Hokage ceremony with all the characters actually interacting meaningfully and not just saying random things (well some random is fine but), plus, I got to work on some of the "unknown" couples :p

5: Yeah, like I mentioned before, I thought that the way of the past scenes are in order fitted my writing quite good, instead of doing them chronologically, which would have lead to like 3 kage meetings in row in the same chapter, lol. Yes, I felt it was necessary to end it with showing both A and Onoki stepping down, which leads to and explains how they were kages during Sasuke Chronicles, but then Killerbee and Kitsuchi/Sasuke being kages at other times. You have a keen eye to details as always:p There was a wide variety of stuff happening, and one of the points I liked as well was explaining how Konohamaru became Anbu leader, how the defense squad from chapter 3 of the original was formed, as well as finally showing the root to the Gen,nin and tai-jutsu academies being founded, like briefly hinted at in chapter 1. The Three Toad Sages are actually more of ending plot, so you may have to wait a while before you get to find out more about what that's all about.

Haha, glad you liked that part with A and Killerbee. I was actually starting to get really tired and bored of writing at that point, so I thought up a way to "quickly" end the meeting and the already over-sized chapter.

There are still some other points I could have talked more about, that was mentioned under the prophecy, but this post has already become way too long, and thinking that you're probably going to reply to it, I think I will leave it at this. Those few other points are more general and way too far into the future to discuss.

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1: I understands, I originally had thought of ending the scene with the door closing behind them, which would have made way for a more smooth scene change, but then I was tempted to take it a bit further, and that made it a little too hard to end without it seeming abrupt. If I was to show this scene in animation or film, the scene would probably have faded slowly out there or something, that's at least what I pictured.

2: Very good point. I was initially planning on having chapter 1, 2 and 3 begin and end in the future, like chapter 1 did. But then I figured out that there wasn't any point jumping back to the future after "finally" going back to the fight between Tobi, Naruto and Sasuke. But I still needed to open chapter 3 up with a scene from the future to "trigger" the past, and the idea for that scene I had was really thin. It was like the final scene from the future (for now) and I couldn't split in it half. So it was a choice between having that scene at the end of chapter 2 or at the beginning of chapter 3... I think you will understand why I chose the latter when you read the next chapter.

Right, I'll be looking forward to it, as well as a reply to this post and on your own chapter :)mugi:), if that ever is going to happen due to its length xd:p
 
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[Going to divide up the different "paragraphs" with " * "]

* Always love reading your reviews:zonder:

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* I have no idea mate xd It seems like they extend the limit all the time, in fact, I have no idea what the limit is nowadays.
It turned out way longer than I initially thought it would, exceeding chapter 1 in length. The main reason why Chapter 1 and 2 became this long is because most of the "present time" focus (which takes place 20 years after chapter 15 of the original), really comes from the abandoned Jiraiya Chronicles that I scrapped, while the whole Great Toad Sage Prophecy and Naruto training Konohamaru scenes, from the past in this chapter, was my original ideas for a possible Konohamaru Chronicles. So if they had been made, we would be talking about material for 6 chapters, which basically is trimmed down and crammed into two now.

Originally when I decided to scrap those ideas I had for those Chronicles, I had picture this FF ending on chapter 15 with a cliffhanger. But then the urge to continue got to me, so I had to fill out the "flesh" of the sequel a bit, or else it would have been right on the fight, and after "peace was achieved," I would have to end the FF, not getting a chance to explore the characters like Jiraiya, Minato and so on, because there wouldn't be a point having chapters, like chapter 1 and 2, at the end of the FF after all the fighting is over, as there wouldn't be anything to look forward to other than to find out all the details possible I guess. And readers here at NB seem to be pretty spoiled on Action :p

I felt that I had to get those out of the way before focusing fully on the Tobi vs Naruto and Sasuke fight from chapter 3 and onwards. Dragging this format on for much more than 2 chapters would have ruined the point if you ask me, as I always try to not have more than two chapters in a row without fighting, but with only talk. Besides, 3 is a good number to get back into the action on :p
Now that I've got those two "gap filler" chapters "out of the way," I won't need to cram as much stuff into each chapter and thus, they will be shorter from now on, like Chapter 3 is (One notable exception to this might be chapter 5 though :p). I personally thought it was fitting to get done with everything that happened before the start of the actual FF, as many points, that now has been detailed more, had been refereed to throughout the lifespan of my FF, if you get what I'm saying.

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* Well yeah, that's exactly my take on it with these two chapters, as I've filled out the 12 years "gap" that was between Sasuke Chronicles 2's events (which is/was very close to the timeline of the current manga) and the first chapter of the original (The Legendary Sage of Konoha). With this though, I've set up a new "gap" to fill, and that's the gap between the end of the original, and up to the current present time in the first two chapters.
I was originally thinking of doing a "The Godfather part 2 take" on this sequel FF, by jumping back and forth through time and follow two storyline at once, but I figured that from chapter 3 and onwards until chapter 10 or so, it's better to stay in the past.

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* Haha, still going on that :p Well I never said she was married in chapter 1, but if she was, that doesn't mean that she couldn't be married with one from Konoha and still live in Konoha and work at the ramen shop ;)
Thanks and KK...

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* In chapter 1's comments, I requested for more hawk eyes to spot all the details, before you showed up. And damn, you pull it off again! :p
This probably seem very confusing now, but that's exactly the point, Kishi style :cool:
Did Sasuke die or did he survive? You could say that if he moved back to Konoha, of course his family would come along. But then again, Miyuki, Sasuke's daughter, got married to Jiraiya. If Sasuke died, would Kurotsuchi stay behind or move as well? Good questions indeed :p And the prophecy... Muhaha:mugi:
All I can tell for now is that it's already been lined out long time ago, and it's planned for a full "reveal" in one of the latter chapters, on how, why, with whom and what for, did Miyuki's family move to Konoha.

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* Who knows? Could be Mei or Gaara as well.
Hmm... Maybe he didn't? What did the prophecy say?:rolleyes:
Too bad I never watched DBZ or any of the Dragonball series for that matter. Although, that sounds like an interesting connection :p

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* Haha, I like experimenting by teaming up cannon characters in my FF, as you probably already know from past experience :p
Nah, he probably ends up with a Hyuuga or some random chick, I dunno. Same with Shino, Choji and so on :p
But I can confirm that Sai and Ino ends up together, and yes, Tenten and Kiba does as well. Not to forget Kakashi and Yugao, and Gai and his wife (which Kyon already questioned the identity of earlier), although I'm not sure if they will play any big roles as "couples" like the already established ones, if any at all. We'll see.

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* Haha, it was actually the first time I used that "phrase" from the manga/anime between Kakashi and Gai, in my FF. The reason being that as they get older, they get more close and less rival obsessed, but due to this being pretty much in the past and close to the manga, I decided to have a go at it xd

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* Yeah, I remember that I had your take on Naruto becoming Hokage in mind when I wrote this, but I couldn't remember all the details, so I was just hoping my version wouldn't be too similar to yours, making me seem like a copy-cat, lol. I don't know about that... Maybe I'll re-read that part after posting this reply, to freshen up on how it was.

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:lmao::rofl: Epic win, I can totally picture Onoki telling A that xd

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* Yeah, I was trying to cram in as much funny Manga stuff as I could remember in this chapterxd

Oh you think so? Well I didn't really try to be too funny in this one, guess it just turned out like that with some of the scenes, lol.

- Side note, damn this reply is almost becoming a chapter long, lol. Am I halfway through yet? I hope not, as I love reading your reviews :cool:

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* Hehe nice, making me think that it wasn't such a bad idea after all to decide to include this kick ass long scene-idea that was intended for a possible Konohamaru Chronicles. Helps the suspense for the outcome of the battle:cool:

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* If you read the fun fact at the end of this chapter, i actually wrote this scene over a year ago, together with some other scenes that are coming up in future chapters, before I even had finished chapter 14 and 15 of the original. Due to that, I noticed the difference of my writing skill and format back then and now, and thus had to "polish it" a bit, but all of the actual details happening was decided long time ago. Even told Sun about it after I had written it, lol, good to finally have been able to show this scene to the "world."

Yes she did O__O I don't know if you've seen the pics, but there are some pics of Kakashi with some of his face revealed I think, drawn by Kishimoto himself. Haha yeah, it couldn't be helped I suppose :p
The only thing that I had in mind was if people would actually recognize her and not think that she's a made up character like for example Miyuki.

As I mentioned briefly above and in my reply to Kyon earlier, as of now she's just a "wife," as in not a character. So not even I know who Gai ended up with in my FF, lol.

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1: Hehe I'm glad you liked this part, as one of the main points... or actually, the main point of even having this future storyline is to build upon Naruto's "Legacy" and how Jiraiya is as a Hokage, how he handles the job-family in counter to how Naruto handled it, etc, as well as exploring those characters like Minato and Miyuki, which I think is very fun. The closest I've gotten to anything original, lol, and it also helps establish the fundamental ground-lair for the possible 2nd sequel I've been thinking about doing, if i ever get that far, where Minato will be the main character.

Although I didn't intend to make this part of the chapter funny, I must say that you better laugh in the beginning of chapter 3, lol. You better -_- JKxd

2: Haha, you're not the only one that wished it was longer, but like I mentioned to you earlier, taking it further would be dangering the line between lawful and breaking the law, so yeah, maybe I chicken out a little, lol. I don't see how I could have gone any longer without... well yeah, describing a *** scene (which would be totally fine on film, but I guess it's against the rules here, or I dunno. Maybe I didn't want to take it further, lol). I must say that this is the most embarrassing scene I've ever written, so I fully understand if it seemed a bit stiff in the lack of passion, as, well, writing scenes like this isn't really my strong point, and I went back and forth several times before I settled with this outcome and how it was written:lmao:

3: Okay I take what I said previously back, definitely glad I choose to keep this idea and incorporate it into the sequel :p

4: Thanks yet again, I personally liked the whole Hokage ceremony with all the characters actually interacting meaningfully and not just saying random things (well some random is fine but), plus, I got to work on some of the "unknown" couples :p

5: Yeah, like I mentioned before, I thought that the way of the past scenes are in order fitted my writing quite good, instead of doing them chronologically, which would have lead to like 3 kage meetings in row in the same chapter, lol. Yes, I felt it was necessary to end it with showing both A and Onoki stepping down, which leads to and explains how they were kages during Sasuke Chronicles, but then Killerbee and Kitsuchi/Sasuke being kages at other times. You have a keen eye to details as always:p There was a wide variety of stuff happening, and one of the points I liked as well was explaining how Konohamaru became Anbu leader, how the defense squad from chapter 3 of the original was formed, as well as finally showing the root to the Gen,nin and tai-jutsu academies being founded, like briefly hinted at in chapter 1. The Three Toad Sages are actually more of ending plot, so you may have to wait a while before you get to find out more about what that's all about.

Haha, glad you liked that part with A and Killerbee. I was actually starting to get really tired and bored of writing at that point, so I thought up a way to "quickly" end the meeting and the already over-sized chapter.

There are still some other points I could have talked more about, that was mentioned under the prophecy, but this post has already become way too long, and thinking that you're probably going to reply to it, I think I will leave it at this. Those few other points are more general and way too far into the future to discuss.

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1: I understands, I originally had thought of ending the scene with the door closing behind them, which would have made way for a more smooth scene change, but then I was tempted to take it a bit further, and that made it a little too hard to end without it seeming abrupt. If I was to show this scene in animation or film, the scene would probably have faded slowly out there or something, that's at least what I pictured.

2: Very good point. I was initially planning on having chapter 1, 2 and 3 begin and end in the future, like chapter 1 did. But then I figured out that there wasn't any point jumping back to the future after "finally" going back to the fight between Tobi, Naruto and Sasuke. But I still needed to open chapter 3 up with a scene from the future to "trigger" the past, and the idea for that scene I had was really thin. It was like the final scene from the future (for now) and I couldn't split in it half. So it was a choice between having that scene at the end of chapter 2 or at the beginning of chapter 3... I think you will understand why I chose the latter when you read the next chapter.

Right, I'll be looking forward to it, as well as a reply to this post and on your own chapter :)mugi:), if that ever is going to happen due to its length xd:p
As I said in my review, it was a brilliant addition to add that prophecy part in this chapter. Even if the length acted a little as a detriment but nonetheless, the whole sequence and build-up fitted better here than it would have done in a Chronicle.

The fact is that I get the same remarks too. Most people tend to keep bugging me to get over with the build-up parts and to start the action part. They really are spoil on the action part, no doubt on that :p Personally, I could read how you depict your multi-characters' depiction all day long. :p

On timeline factor and presentation, your FF might be the most crazy on NB right now. It keeps traveling back and forth and I'm actually really looking forward how you'd keep doing that...

Well, I wasn't going to point that out but actually, your take on 'how women compromises in marriage' freshened that part in my mind. Anyways, let's leave it...

Lol, well, as I know you, you always leave lots of mini-points and if I miss them, it can get very confusing on a latter stage. So, I usually try to keep copy/paste all points that flash in my mind while reading...
But anyways, Sasuke/Naruto case really perplexes me now. In fact, it perplexes me even more after I read C3 and heard about Mu/Itachi. What did you end up doing with these two lol? :p

Actually, you're leaving lots of teasers before this "full" reveal... U_U Don't tease your loyal readers too much. :mugi:

Gaara came to a birthday party? :| I don't think you made him the sekaiteki-kage thus...That title seem to hold lots of prestige and responsibilities. You never gave me limelight to Mei either; I'm doubtful that you made Mei either.

Knowing you, it has to be Naruto. But then again, your damn prophecy "One man will prevail, while the two others... will die."

Right now, it looks like you killed Naruto and Tobi and opted to make Sasuke the prevailing man. U_U Perhaps, Sasuke became sekaiteki-kage on Naruto's last insistence...and thus, his whole family moved to Konoha. Right now, it's what I think but I'm getting a feel that you'll end up trolling us all :p

I'm surprised you never watched DBZ though...seriously..

I would have think that you'd team up Neji and Tenten though. In fact, Tenten always had some kind of interest in Neji... Meh ~ also, most readers surely care more about Neji than Kiba, if you get my point xd

Nah, it wasn't similar like mine but I think the aura felt the same...I think that's because we both will like the ceremony of Naruto's induction to be somewhat heart-warming and emotional yet so jovial. It's the kind of emotion that we got induced with over time, by reading/watching Naruto. In a way, we'll all like Naruto to lift the Hokage hat someday while most villagers admire him and all his friends watch how much he's grown.

Thanks...Actually, Onoki can tell abrupt things at times :lmao:

It was pretty hilarious at most parts...

As I said, the Prophecy needed to be in THIS chapter. Moreover, the little points (I noticed) clicked better since the Prophecy was said in same chapter. If it was in another one, I might have ended forgetting those points.

Nah, those pics of Kakashi's face are all fan-made. None of them are drawn by Kishi or someone from his entourage.. :p Though, it isn't that hard to guess his face since a manga character has pretty sharp facial features that are easily to distinguish.

I did laughed at C3 indeed...

Well, depiction of a *** scene can be done properly with correct artistic expression. So, I did wished that you made it longer but I do fully understand your reasons of not doing so..

On the points I disliked and about the sudden transition to flashback, well...I maintain that you should have done something. In fact, the Point No.1 and No.2 are kinda linked. You were unable to get back in present mode since the transition was abrupt...

For example, the door closing in was a pretty good idea. Another idea will have been to make Jiraiya go into his thoughts post the love-making sequence. Like seeing the moon from the window or seeing his wife's sleeping face or seeing the sky or going to take some fresh air.... In short, something more subtle that transiting from a scene depicting carnal pleasure to a scene from the past...
 
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Awesome chapter as always, Michael.

Really enjoy reading the longer posts because it gives the reader more time to actually feel like they're reading a story instead of reading a summary. I felt the switch from present to past could have been more smooth though (The spot where Jiraiya is heading to bed), other than that I really have no complaints (Not that I ever have any complaints).

Going to read Chapter 3 sometime tonight, will post in that thread my review on it :) I apologize for being brief on this thread, busy morning lol.
 
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Ah, I see you have been tying things up and introducing some new information in this chapter :) I loved the fun fact, it was also a nice reminder that you took forever and one with this release :p Well, I can't blame you though, tying things up while giving new info is always tedious, besides, with what the manga has been portraying you may have been forced to change your ideas to adapt to it. I can say this chapter was almost worth the wait with the sole reason that it wasn't the long-awaited end of Tobi vs Naruto and Sasuke. Now I'm off to read that one, too :D
 
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1: As I said in my review, it was a brilliant addition to add that prophecy part in this chapter. Even if the length acted a little as a detriment but nonetheless, the whole sequence and build-up fitted better here than it would have done in a Chronicle.

2: The fact is that I get the same remarks too. Most people tend to keep bugging me to get over with the build-up parts and to start the action part. They really are spoil on the action part, no doubt on that :p Personally, I could read how you depict your multi-characters' depiction all day long. :p

3: On timeline factor and presentation, your FF might be the most crazy on NB right now. It keeps traveling back and forth and I'm actually really looking forward how you'd keep doing that...

Well, I wasn't going to point that out but actually, your take on 'how women compromises in marriage' freshened that part in my mind. Anyways, let's leave it...

4: Lol, well, as I know you, you always leave lots of mini-points and if I miss them, it can get very confusing on a latter stage. So, I usually try to keep copy/paste all points that flash in my mind while reading...
But anyways, Sasuke/Naruto case really perplexes me now. In fact, it perplexes me even more after I read C3 and heard about Mu/Itachi. What did you end up doing with these two lol? :p

Actually, you're leaving lots of teasers before this "full" reveal... U_U Don't tease your loyal readers too much. :mugi:

5: Gaara came to a birthday party? :| I don't think you made him the sekaiteki-kage thus...That title seem to hold lots of prestige and responsibilities. You never gave me limelight to Mei either; I'm doubtful that you made Mei either.
Knowing you, it has to be Naruto. But then again, your damn prophecy "One man will prevail, while the two others... will die."
Right now, it looks like you killed Naruto and Tobi and opted to make Sasuke the prevailing man. U_U Perhaps, Sasuke became sekaiteki-kage on Naruto's last insistence...and thus, his whole family moved to Konoha. Right now, it's what I think but I'm getting a feel that you'll end up trolling us all :p

I'm surprised you never watched DBZ though...seriously..

6: I would have think that you'd team up Neji and Tenten though. In fact, Tenten always had some kind of interest in Neji... Meh ~ also, most readers surely care more about Neji than Kiba, if you get my point xd

Nah, it wasn't similar like mine but I think the aura felt the same...I think that's because we both will like the ceremony of Naruto's induction to be somewhat heart-warming and emotional yet so jovial. It's the kind of emotion that we got induced with over time, by reading/watching Naruto. In a way, we'll all like Naruto to lift the Hokage hat someday while most villagers admire him and all his friends watch how much he's grown.

Thanks...Actually, Onoki can tell abrupt things at times :lmao:

It was pretty hilarious at most parts...

As I said, the Prophecy needed to be in THIS chapter. Moreover, the little points (I noticed) clicked better since the Prophecy was said in same chapter. If it was in another one, I might have ended forgetting those points.

7: Nah, those pics of Kakashi's face are all fan-made. None of them are drawn by Kishi or someone from his entourage.. :p Though, it isn't that hard to guess his face since a manga character has pretty sharp facial features that are easily to distinguish.

I did laughed at C3 indeed...

Well, depiction of a *** scene can be done properly with correct artistic expression. So, I did wished that you made it longer but I do fully understand your reasons of not doing so..

8: On the points I disliked and about the sudden transition to flashback, well...I maintain that you should have done something. In fact, the Point No.1 and No.2 are kinda linked. You were unable to get back in present mode since the transition was abrupt...
For example, the door closing in was a pretty good idea. Another idea will have been to make Jiraiya go into his thoughts post the love-making sequence. Like seeing the moon from the window or seeing his wife's sleeping face or seeing the sky or going to take some fresh air.... In short, something more subtle that transiting from a scene depicting carnal pleasure to a scene from the past...
[Numbered the paragraphs in your post, so that you can see what and what I didn't reply to.]

1: Yeah, maybe you're right about that one :p Guess we will find out when the story of a chronicle will be displayed in the main FF later on (Kakashi and Gai vs Akashi), whether the element of the story fits better in a chronicle or the main story.

2: Well that's a good thing, as I find it quite interesting writing chapters like this, although I'm not sure if they tire out the fans that only wants battle, battle and more battle xd ;)

3: Haha yeah, like I mentioned before, The Godfather part 2 inspired me a lot on choosing that format. Although it will be pretty much straight forward from now on.

4: Yeah, that's a trick that I also use when reading others' FFs, makes it easier to remember what you wanted to discuss.
Brief sum up on the matter, as it might be confusing if you didn't pay attention in Sasuke C 3 and this chapter.
In Sasuke C 3, we saw that Sasuke had two kids, Miyuki (10) and Mu (Newborn), but a Itachi was never mentioned. Then latter on, I got a wicked idea for a storyline, but for it to happen, Miyuki needed a brother her age, so I decided to add this line in this chapter;
"Onoki: Well the two of them are expecting children together."
As in, more than one, meaning Sasuke and Miyuki had twins. I know this is very stretched out, as you could very easily miss that point. Then you ask, where on earth were Itachi during Sasuke C 3? Well, I'm going to apply a background story for that when we get that far (think around chapter 10).

5: To take a quote from this chapter to answer this one;
"Great Toad Sage: Only time will tell... Now, I need my rest..." Lol, JK xd
Well you could speculate a lot, like, why is Jiraiya Hokage, can you be Hokage and Sekaiteki-kage at the same time, other than being married to Jiraiya, why would Miyuki's family live in Konoha (Kurotsuchi, Mü and Itachi) and is Sasuke there too, etc?

6: Haha, that's exactly why I chose them, to catch everyone off guard xd I like Ino and Sai as a pair though, mostly due to some funny things regarding the two of them in some anime episodes.

7: I was referring to this one;

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8: Both good points, and I agree. Although when I write chapters as crazy long as this, it's almost impossible to make them 100% perfect :p

Side note - The points I didn't reply too are mostly points that I either agree on and feel the same take on, removing the need to reply on them or that they don't really need a reply, lol, or we'll never get done replying to each other xd

Awesome chapter as always, Michael.

Really enjoy reading the longer posts because it gives the reader more time to actually feel like they're reading a story instead of reading a summary. I felt the switch from present to past could have been more smooth though (The spot where Jiraiya is heading to bed), other than that I really have no complaints (Not that I ever have any complaints).

Going to read Chapter 3 sometime tonight, will post in that thread my review on it :) I apologize for being brief on this thread, busy morning lol.
Thanks ^^ Good to see that I still manages to keep some of my old readers, being as you really need to be a veteran one to keep up with the story :p

Yeah I know :p The worst part is that I never intend them to be this long, but due to the reason that I have to have these parts into this chapter, they will just have to be. If I wanted, I could have stretch the content of chapter 1 and 2 over, like 4-6 chapters or something, but that would just make it seem dragged on and even longer before the battle starts. So in one way, you could say that lining them up like this is a strategic choice as well as the best choice, lol ;)

Yeah, I think the switch from future to past in the 1st and 3rd chapters are better, and like me and Escorp talked about, I could, maybe should, have moved it to the past on the part I had originally thought out, when Jiraiya carried Miyuki to the bedroom and closed the door behind him. Even so, what happened afterwards, causing a bit of a rough switch, got me some great laughs writing.

No problem, I'll see you there (or here if you decide to reply I guess... alright, both :p).

Ah, I see you have been tying things up and introducing some new information in this chapter :) I loved the fun fact, it was also a nice reminder that you took forever and one with this release :p Well, I can't blame you though, tying things up while giving new info is always tedious, besides, with what the manga has been portraying you may have been forced to change your ideas to adapt to it. I can say this chapter was almost worth the wait with the sole reason that it wasn't the long-awaited end of Tobi vs Naruto and Sasuke. Now I'm off to read that one, too :D
Yeah, I've finally filled in the gaps between the manga and the start of this FF. Looking back, a lot of stuff happened indeed.
Although with this, I've opened up a new gap to fill... What happened between the end of chapter 15 to the current timeline in the sequel? That's up next :p

Yeah, more of them coming up later as I basically wrote a lot of small fragments on "sequel story" in July last year (about 5 I think), which was before I finished chapter 14 and 15 of the original. I even wrote a fragment of an upcoming chapter, which is almost the same size as chapter 3 is, when I stopped (chapter 11) :p
Haha, true :p For example, I wonder how the Naruto vs Sasuke fight would have ended up in my FF, if I wrote it after "Itachi's crow" was revealed in the manga. I remember that the fight ended with the crow being a bunshin of Itachi, or something, coming out of Naruto and disabling Sasuke's EMS, and that he turned Sasuke from bad to good. From the later manga, we all know that was far off target, lol, although Itachi planned that crow to use kotoamatsukami on Sasuke, to make him change his path, so it wasn't that far-fetched after all ;)
 
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Re: The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns, Chapter 2

*Looks at Escorps comments* @_@ *Thinks at the one I'll give*

Oh'well nice chapter even though I prefer the ones that come after. But the story has a very good flow.
 
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Re: The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns, Chapter 2

*Looks at Escorps comments* @_@ *Thinks at the one I'll give*

Oh'well nice chapter even though I prefer the ones that come after. But the story has a very good flow.
Haha, it's hard to match his walls of text, lol. But even the shortest post is welcome :p

Yeah, the two first and partly the 3rd one is mostly build up as the action doesn't start before the next one. Personally though, I think this one is one of my favorites written wise, but I agree with you that some of the following chapters are better; chapter 5 for example (but again, that might just be me, lol).
 

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Re: The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns, Chapter 2

Liked that you recreated a scene long forgotten in the Naruto series, the golden moment where Kakashi totally ignores Gai's emotive and concise speeches.

I'm quite enjoying all these Kage Meetings and the exchange of words rather than fists but I'm sure I won't get to enjoy that anymore with the following chapters.xd
 
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