I took some advice from Rei and devlin2010...
I decided to make this chapter shorter, the next chapters are going to have the same length as Chapter 1.
Please, let me know what I'm doing right and what I'm doing wrong.
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If you haven't read the previous chapters, here it is:
Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:
Konoha 10 PM…
Natsumi was sitting on the roof of the Uchiha compound. She hugged her knees as tight as she could, while trying to forget what she saw nearly 17 hours ago. She heard that Naruto was in the village but she was certain that he was taking care of some official business. Hearing footsteps inch close to her, she turned to see the brother that she hadn’t seen in two years.
“Naruto-niisan” The girl jumped up and embraced her brother in a tight hug.
“Its been too long Yami-chan. You’ve grown so much, geez what has Shinji and Hinata been feeding you?” Naruto said to try and lighten the mood.
“Naruto-nii I…”
“Its not your fault.” Naruto broke the embrace and walked behind Natsumi, “There was nothing you could do. It doesn’t matter now; we can’t change the past so we will move forward. We’re leaving after everything is over.” Naruto informed the girl as he looked off into the distant moon.
“What are you going to do nii-san? I know you are planning a course of action. That being the case I want in.”
Naruto shook his head, “Natsumi… you’re not getting involved in this. This is something that I will deal with.”
Natsumi voice elevated, “But I’m stronger now and I’m one of the best in Light. Not only that I can…”
Naruto quickly turned around with a look of contempt on his face and yelled out “I said you’re not getting involved and that’s final!”
Narrowing her eyes, “I’m not some little kid that needs you to protect her. I’m a warrior niisan. Trained by the Greatest Shinobi ever and I’m one of three people in the whole world who is a master of the ‘Heavenly Sword’ sword style. Do not write me off as someone who can’t take care of herself.”
“I said you’re not getting involved, that’s that.” Naruto turned away from the girl and disappeared in a colorful display of lights. Natsumi on the other hand remained on the roof of the Uchiha compound clenching her fist. Naruto still thought of her as some little kid. She wanted so much to prove to him that she was an able warrior. “Nii-san I will show you that I can help. I’m not the same little girl.”
Morning 9 AM…
Morning in the Leaf Village was usually sunny and peaceful. However it was as if the Gods themselves were mourning the lost of a friend. The sky was masked in clouds while rain fell from the heavens. On the head stone there was a picture of Jiraiya with a big goofy smile. Tsunade, who was standing facing everyone, in front of Jiraiya’s coffin, held all of her emotions inside, well what was left. She cried most of last night when she was alone.
Looking up at all who gathered, she noticed a few shinobi from various villages, even a few leaders. She began her speech.
To Be Continued…
Next Chapter: "The Golden Legend: The Next Generation"...!
I appreciate it if you leave comments and thanks
I decided to make this chapter shorter, the next chapters are going to have the same length as Chapter 1.
Please, let me know what I'm doing right and what I'm doing wrong.
Your opinion is very IMPORTANT!
If you haven't read the previous chapters, here it is:
Chapter 1:
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Chapter 2:
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Chapter 3:
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One action can change the future...
For when one stands in destiny's way...
The hourglass ticks...
Chapter 4
The Golden Legend: The Return
For when one stands in destiny's way...
The hourglass ticks...
Chapter 4
The Golden Legend: The Return
Konoha 10 PM…
Natsumi was sitting on the roof of the Uchiha compound. She hugged her knees as tight as she could, while trying to forget what she saw nearly 17 hours ago. She heard that Naruto was in the village but she was certain that he was taking care of some official business. Hearing footsteps inch close to her, she turned to see the brother that she hadn’t seen in two years.
“Naruto-niisan” The girl jumped up and embraced her brother in a tight hug.
“Its been too long Yami-chan. You’ve grown so much, geez what has Shinji and Hinata been feeding you?” Naruto said to try and lighten the mood.
“Naruto-nii I…”
“Its not your fault.” Naruto broke the embrace and walked behind Natsumi, “There was nothing you could do. It doesn’t matter now; we can’t change the past so we will move forward. We’re leaving after everything is over.” Naruto informed the girl as he looked off into the distant moon.
“What are you going to do nii-san? I know you are planning a course of action. That being the case I want in.”
Naruto shook his head, “Natsumi… you’re not getting involved in this. This is something that I will deal with.”
Natsumi voice elevated, “But I’m stronger now and I’m one of the best in Light. Not only that I can…”
Naruto quickly turned around with a look of contempt on his face and yelled out “I said you’re not getting involved and that’s final!”
Narrowing her eyes, “I’m not some little kid that needs you to protect her. I’m a warrior niisan. Trained by the Greatest Shinobi ever and I’m one of three people in the whole world who is a master of the ‘Heavenly Sword’ sword style. Do not write me off as someone who can’t take care of herself.”
“I said you’re not getting involved, that’s that.” Naruto turned away from the girl and disappeared in a colorful display of lights. Natsumi on the other hand remained on the roof of the Uchiha compound clenching her fist. Naruto still thought of her as some little kid. She wanted so much to prove to him that she was an able warrior. “Nii-san I will show you that I can help. I’m not the same little girl.”
Morning 9 AM…
Morning in the Leaf Village was usually sunny and peaceful. However it was as if the Gods themselves were mourning the lost of a friend. The sky was masked in clouds while rain fell from the heavens. On the head stone there was a picture of Jiraiya with a big goofy smile. Tsunade, who was standing facing everyone, in front of Jiraiya’s coffin, held all of her emotions inside, well what was left. She cried most of last night when she was alone.
Looking up at all who gathered, she noticed a few shinobi from various villages, even a few leaders. She began her speech.
To Be Continued…
Next Chapter: "The Golden Legend: The Next Generation"...!
I appreciate it if you leave comments and thanks
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