To my friend

[Shame]

I struggle to succeed
To find the meaning
While searching for change.

Find myself looking
For thing's not to see
Will you be waiting if I stay.

This is the last time
Try not to bleed
I will not be waiting
Just to hear you complain.


Still playing around not sure if I like this one yet. Seems a little dark no idea why though.

 

[Commander Axe]

awesome.

 

[Tsuki]

Well, it is good but you can still improve as u said :y

 

[Awkward Linguist]

It's good.

 

[Shame]

Well, it is good but you can still improve as u said :y

Yeah I don't right much anymore just go through my old books of writing. Got a lot of old stuff.

Haven't chatted with you in a whhhile either.

 

[endo]

Not bad. It just needs a tiny bit of tweaking. Other than that you did a fine job young man

 

[Shame]

Not bad. It just needs a tiny bit of tweaking. Other than that you did a fine job young man

Thanks but I'm not really a young man.

 

[Yuka]

it was a very nice poem

 

[Shame]

it was a very nice poem

Thanks Yuka and cheer up.xd

 

[endo]

Thanks but I'm not really a young man.

LOL I was joking about the young man part. But nice job:ice: