Just one more for the night;

[MetalDuck]

In your brilliance, you became the only voice you trust
If it's true then I'm dead, right where I stand
Was the plan always this vicious?
You thought that your faith would carry you home
But it left me there in the waiting room alone
As I planned what to say, to the ones I'd be leaving
All praise and honor seem so far away
I never saw this coming, you can lose what you found

Careful, careful watch your mouth
You're talking like your such the innocent
These words will be the death of you
This I swear this I know
The blame will find your hands
The blame has found these hands

It's hard to live this, to know if I mean it
To let you know you have me, that I never can forget it
And these last words I say here
Are the last words that I will share
So God I'm asking you, do you even care?

My hands are shaking and they won't stop, as the world becomes a hospital room
I am not the one to ever disappear, but it's over now
Say it for the last time, one last time
I want to let go of this world for you

Hands held toward the sky
In the cool air of October
The whispers were always there
But they never caught up to your words
So will December find me all alone?

The wishful face of the believer
Hope, but there is doubt that bleeds through
Still, I am arrested by your presence
Nothing will compare to you

 

[SplittingAtoms]

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[Dreckerplayer]

dude, i love this...great job man. keep at it, never stop.

 

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i think it was deep, maybe your not deep

 

[MetalDuck]

To be fair, I should have probably labeled it as a poem. Thing is, I don't have a name for it. If anyone has any ideas on what to name it, I would love to hear it.

 

[Netsui]

To be fair, I should have probably labeled it as a poem. Thing is, I don't have a name for it. If anyone has any ideas on what to name it, I would love to hear it.

If it's a poem, then it should be placed in the FanFiction section.

I really liked it. Great job.

 

[Οdin]

I like it.

 

[MetalDuck]

If it's a poem, then it should be placed in the FanFiction section.

I really liked it. Great job.

I am sorry. Somebody asked if it belonged in the fan-fic section, but I didn't know. Really, I am sorry. If I could have a mod move it over there, that would be awesome.

And thank you guys. It means a lot to me.

 

[MetalDuck]

I just wanted to show the Base that I am more than just a smart-ass. There are many sides to me, just like everybody else.

Again, anyone got an idea for a name?

 

[Netsui]

I am sorry. Somebody asked if it belonged in the fan-fic section, but I didn't know. Really, I am sorry. If I could have a mod move it over there, that would be awesome.

And thank you guys. It means a lot to me.

I just wanted to show the Base that I am more than just a smart-ass. There are many sides to me, just like everybody else.

Again, anyone got an idea for a name?

Edit: Nvm. It was moved already. xd

And a name... I'm not sure. I'm not good when it comes to titles in general. :ghehe:

 

[Avani]

Moved and prefix added.

 

[MetalDuck]

Thank you, Tsuchi. I'll post the any more pieces in this forum.

Again, I have not been able to think of a name for this. I always do this; spend a couple months writing the poem, and not a second about a name. So, I am open to any suggestions!

 

[MetalDuck]

Edit: Nvm. It was moved already. xd

And a name... I'm not sure. I'm not good when it comes to titles in general. :ghehe:

Yeah, neither am I. Obviously. But I appreciate you taking your time to read it, and post on it. If something does come up, let me know.

 

[0neCrazyAngel]

this is really really g0od. Its nice to read s0mething pr0f0und f0r a change. G0od j0b!:ice:

 

[MetalDuck]

this is really really g0od. Its nice to read s0mething pr0f0und f0r a change. G0od j0b!:ice:

I thank you, sir.