Poem about Naruto

[NeedAnime]

NARUTO

There was once a village
hidden in leaves
And in that village a clan
that had a thief

The thief stole
The mind of a beast
And used it
to atack the Leaf

The leader of the village
Didn't leave the village to be pillaged
Like an eagle he rose
And defated the one , by who he was opposed

Those , were the leaders of two clans
They both had their own plans
But in the future , of them , there will be no trace
And a new person will be in their place
The person willl be a young boy
Who will grant the world lots of joy​

This was a poem about Hashi and Madara ,partially about Naruto , and it is just the first part

 

[saaaaaadpanda]

You need to work on more clearly defining a consistent structure, as well as a more parallel rhyming scheme. Not bad though.

 

[Colonel Armstrong]

cool

 

[AikoLtu]

A Letter from Naruto to Sakura (Valentine's day)
SCROLLS ARE RED
SHURIKENS ARE GREY
DON'T LOVE SASUKE
CUZ' HE'S GAY!!!
Love
Naruto (I find it in deviantart) Cool and funny

 

[Holy Cross]

i bet ur tripping balls

 

[Legendary Broly]

preettty goood

 

[NeedAnime]

Why no one give me rep?

 

[saaaaaadpanda]

Why no one give me rep?

Don't ask for rep. No one will give it to you then...

 

[Uchiha Madara Senju]

Why no one give me rep?

Do you Post This For +rep / -rep ! By The Way +rep/Thanked Post

 

[NeedAnime]

@UMS May you be lucky enough to receive reputati

 

[WhistleBlower]

You need to work on more clearly defining a consistent structure, as well as a more parallel rhyming scheme. Not bad though.

you do realise poetry does not have to rhyme? :sy:

its good to see we got a poet here ahahaha...anyway it was pretty good..all your work?

 

[saaaaaadpanda]

you do realise poetry does not have to rhyme? :sy:

Yes. Do you realize he's attempting to here?

 

[crysis04]

good

 

[NeedAnime]

@Usman yes it's my work. Tnx man.

 

[WhistleBlower]

Yes. Do you realize he's attempting to here?

far out man, give him a break, he just posted up a poem which he probably wasn't sure to do, i don't see you posting things up tat u aren't sure about xd

 

[saaaaaadpanda]

far out man, give him a break, he just posted up a poem which he probably wasn't sure to do, i don't see you posting things up tat u aren't sure about xd

When you post creative work on a public forum, you invite constructive criticism. That's all I'm offering.

 

[NeedAnime]

When you post creative work on a public forum, you invite constructive criticism. That's all I'm offering.

And yet , bad news is never rewarded.

 

[Fie94]

good Job :]..i think da only prob is rhyme ,anyway u can do alot better next time ..Just need to take a lil more time
../btw ..

A Letter from Naruto to Sakura (Valentine's day)
SCROLLS ARE RED
SHURIKENS ARE GREY
DON'T LOVE SASUKE
CUZ' HE'S GAY!!!
Love
Naruto (I find it in deviantart) Cool and funny

lol