Naruto: Hokage Chronicles -Chapter 4-

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Naruto: Hokage Chronicles -Chapter 4-
~New Recruits~​

Links to the previous chapters:
Chapter 1:
Chapter 2:
Chapter 3:


Tobi stands still, in shock, taken back by the presence of the Kunoichi, Madara looks on unfazed, unsure of the significance of the women.

Madara: Well seeing as you have proven yourselves as the strongest shinobi, I think now is the time we inform you of your purpose in this organisation. We will grant you power beyond your wildest dreams, but in return you shall serve under us, together we will get revenge on this new shinobi system. First of all, what are your names and tell us why you seek power, we will start from the left.

*Madara points to the Kunoichi that shocked Tobi, she is medium height, red hair with glasses. The kunoichi stands up straight, looks Tobi in the eye*

???: I am Karin Uzumaki, I came seeking power to get revenge on a certain Shinobi, one that used me, then broke my heart, I will destroy him and his village.

*Tobi chuckles, thinking to himself “just as I thought”*

Madara: How about you.

A broad Shinobi stops his heavy panting, stands up straight, avoiding eye contact with Madara. He is a very tall and muscular Sjhinobi, it is clear he is not very intelligent but makes up for it with brute force.

???: My name is Ishi, sir. My brother was killed in the war.

*He pauses, biting his lip, trying to hold back his anger*

Ishi: My village just disregarded him as a number, no memorial service , they left his body on the battlefield.

They move along the line each shinobi giving their names and their intentions.

“Ryuu”

“Samuru”

“Shou”

Finally they reach the last women, she is small, pale and skinny. She is very shy, avoiding eye contact. Judging from her appearance she seems the weakest of the survivors.

Tobi *thinking*: She should be interesting as well, how she survived this test is beyond me, she must have some sort of Kekkei Genkai.

???: M… My name is Kimiko, I wish to avenge my clan, who were wiped out in the war by their own village.

Tobi: Very well. As promised you will be given power. This power is rare, only a select few have been able to master it completely, we are in possession of 7 Biju’s each of you shall have one of these sealed inside of you, becoming a Jinchuriki.

Karin: There are only 6 of us, who will be the final Jinchuriki?

*Madara turns and stares at Karin, trying to intimidate her.*

Madara: Very observant aren’t you? The 7th Jinchuriki will be Yokichi.

Tobi and Madara step aside revealing Yokichi, he stares straight at Karin, his eyes are cold and appear lifeless, they are completely white with very small, black pupils in the centre.

Madara: Any other questions?

Madara stares down at the Shinobi, with his EMS activated, it clearly frightens some of the Shinobi, remembering the damage he caused during the war.

*The shy Kunoichi takes a step forward, avoiding eye contact.*

Kimiko: How did you survive as an Edo – Tensei, I thought you would disappear when Kabuto was killed.

Madara and Tobi both turn to each other and chuckle.

Madara: You are also very observant. I owe it all to one Uchiha with a foul temper, it is because of him, I was able to live on. When Uchiha Sasuke & Uchiha Itachi were fighting Kabuto, Itachi was defeated and sealed by Kabuto. This angered Sasuke, ignoring his brothers warning, he killed Kabuto, allowing me to live on.

*Karin mutters under her breath. “Idiot” she turns and stares at Madara, clearly angered by Sasuke's name*

Koichi’s eyes are no longer as cold, they have returned to normal, his pupils dilate with each passing second, he seems a lot calmer.

Yokichi: Well for the time being, all of you return to your rooms, we will begin the preperations for you to become Junchuriki immediately, we will succeed.

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Back at Konoha, Naruto is sitting in his chair, pondering, he gets an ominous feeling and he turns to look out of the window. He tries to shake it off and return to writing his letters, informing the other Kage’s of the changes in his village.

Dear Kages,
I am writing to inform you of the changes I have made regarding medical support and security around the village, first of Sakura Haruno will now act as a medical ambassador, if you require any assistance in this field please contact me and I will refer it to her. Rock Lee is now head of the academy, in future he will be responsible for organising the Chunnin exams. Shikamaru Nara is now my advisor, he will be working alongside me and all of you helping to relay information. Sasuke uchiha will be head of the policing and ANBU at the village now, whilst Tsunade will be working in the medical field as well. I have elected Hatake Kakashi to act as an ambassador for the joint army from our villages, I believe he is the perfect man for the job if you all agree.

Regards,

The Hokage
Naruto Uzumaki


Naruto: Shikamaru, can you please send these off to the Kages immediately?

Shikamaru: Of course Hokage – Sama, but is it wise to inform the other villages of all our intimate details involving security?

Naruto: We are a alliance now, information ike this is vital to prove we trust them, we have the same information with the other villages.

Shikamaru: Yes, Hokage – Sama, I will send these letters right away.

Shikamaru exits the room, there is a loud 'Thud' as the door closes behind him, Naruto turns in his chair, now facing the window, he overlooks the village, he smiles to himself.

Half hour passes. Naruto is still looking out of the window, there is a loud knock on the door.


Naruto: Enter.

The door opens, in walks Sasuke and Sakura.

Naruto: Thank god you guys have arrived, Hokage isn't all its cut out to be, I have just finished a mountain of paperwork and I feel like I haven't seen you guys in days. Do you want to go to Ichiraku Ramen?

Sakura: Stop slacking off, you are the Hokage. We are busy too you know.

Naruto: I know, fine.

*Naruto frowns, clearly dissapointed, he looks to Sasuke.*

Sasuke: We have completed the checks just as you asked,the police department seems well organised and the men seem committed, running the department should be no trouble.

Sakura: The hospital is in good shape and the medical ninja seem well trained, I am waiting for a report on the state of the other villages and I shall proceed from there.

Naruto: *Sigh* Very well, thank you. I suppose I should let you return home, it has been a long day. Dismissed.
~Chapter End~


Chapter 5:

Thanks for reading guys, let me know what you think, I will definitely be continuing with the series. Criticism is also welcome! :D Also tell me if you think a new layout is needed & suggest something!
 
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I love the explanation to Edo-Madara... Was thinking about it for the last 3 chapters.

One thing i really didnt like is how you rushed into NaruHina, that went abit too quick. Should wait abit for that kind of thing.
 

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Naruto will never become hokage

Wow, do you hate Naruto fans,
Or do you just plain hate Naruto?

If your not gonna help this thread out, or atleast criticize on his fanfiction, Gtfo.
 

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pretty good but naruto sound way to smart for naruto
 

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pretty good but naruto sound way to smart for naruto

I love the explanation to Edo-Madara... Was thinking about it for the last 3 chapters.

One thing i really didnt like is how you rushed into NaruHina, that went abit too quick. Should wait abit for that kind of thing.

Thanks guys, I was thinking of doing a few more flashbacks/side chapters explaining what happened with Naruto & Hinata and how Naruto changed over the war/past 3 years and how he matured, I did one with Sasuke, so I think I will do the same with the Naruto, in my head I had the two dating for a while now, should have put it in the introduction really!
 

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Karin? She should be sasuke's girl and be sakura's new rival and where is zetsu

But I liked it good job

Oh a suggestion let them dig up hidan
 

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Karin? She should be sasuke's girl and be sakura's new rival and where is zetsu

But I liked it good job

Oh a suggestion let them dig up hidan

in this fanfic, Zetsu is dead, I should really make that clear, I may change the introduction on the first chapter, regarding the Karin thing, she is going to play a major part in the way I introduce the new threat, but as a bad guy ;p it will all become clear
 

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in this fanfic, Zetsu is dead, I should really make that clear, I may change the introduction on the first chapter, regarding the Karin thing, she is going to play a major part in the way I introduce the new threat, but as a bad guy ;p it will all become clear

Dude It was really badasss well there is a req. from me 1st of all m No Naru-Hina Fanboy but I really want 2 know ur Ideas or story behind how naruto's mind changed and all that stuff Plzzzz accept the req. of ur this frnd plzz :)
 

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Dude It was really badasss well there is a req. from me 1st of all m No Naru-Hina Fanboy but I really want 2 know ur Ideas or story behind how naruto's mind changed and all that stuff Plzzzz accept the req. of ur this frnd plzz :)

Funny should you should write this, I just finished the chapter explaining all of those things, its mainly a few flash backs but I will put it up soon, not goingg into great details but it may clear up a few things :)
 

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nice chapter again
 

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gosh i thought it was gonna come out at night! haha im behind a chapter! but i really liked it. i didnt expect to see kirin there of the final 6. and you should have tobis old personality back! i really liked his funny side. i think it would bring a little humor into the whole story. and yeah bring hidan back! haha great chapter!
 

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its getting very good keep up the good work
 

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I love the explanation to Edo-Madara... Was thinking about it for the last 3 chapters.

One thing i really didnt like is how you rushed into NaruHina, that went abit too quick. Should wait abit for that kind of thing.

ill explane, when kabuto stoped edo tensi itachi and muu were gone but madara was not cause it was muu who summoned madar
 

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Karin? She should be sasuke's girl and be sakura's new rival and where is zetsu

But I liked it good job

Oh a suggestion let them dig up hidan

can't without a struggle. the area is protected by the Nara clan and once they know i am shore naruto will since hes hokage XD
 
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