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My poem challenge for Cassi! It's free style meaning no rhyming scale or format however you want to put it. I hope you guys like this, wrote it last night as it goes with one of the many stories I have been working on. Also it's a sad poem and no I'm not depressed, as I stated before, it just goes well with one of my other stories. Enjoy~

Farewell

It seems as if this will be the last time my heart cries out to you.
Your every second spent searching for answers,
When all I wanted was you at my side.
Holding my hand and telling me how far you've come.
Anything to tear my mind away,
From the pain that continues to gnaw at my weakened state.
I never wanted much from you.

The last time you came to visit,
I could see in your gaze you knew my end was soon,
But still you go on pretending everything is all right.
If only I had the same frame of mind as you.
Then maybe I would be able to fight more.

My body is tired,
My heart is shattered.
The desire to live no longer exists.
My cheeks are now sulken,
My body thin.
As this illness continues to leech off my being,
Stealing the air before it can pass into my lungs.

Even now as the chilling grasp of death rips my soul from my flesh,
You're all that I can think about.
I hate how much I love you,
As you unknowingly toss my feelings away with no regard.

Farewell my friend,
As you will only ever see me as such.
 
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:whoa: You Beat Yourself 190%.
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:blush: so glad you liked it! :overjoy: I'm so happy now! :silly:
 
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ThatOneChick said:
My poem challenge for Cassi! It's free style meaning no rhyming scale or format however you want to put it. I hope you guys like this, wrote it last night as it goes with one of the many stories I have been working on. Also it's a sad poem and no I'm not depressed, as I stated before, it just goes well with one of my other stories. Enjoy~

Farewell

It seems as if this will be the last time my heart cries out to you.
Your every second spent searching for answers,
When all I wanted was you at my side.
Holding my hand and telling me how far you've come.
Anything to tear my mind away,
From the pain that continues to gnaw at my weakened state.
I never wanted much from you.

The last time you came to visit,
I could see in your gaze you knew my end was soon,
But still you go on pretending everything is all right.
If only I had the same frame of mind as you.
Then maybe I would be able to fight more.

My body is tired,
My heart is shattered.
The desire to live no longer exists.
My cheeks are now sulken,
My body thin.
As this illness continues to leech off my being,
Stealing the air before it can pass into my lungs.

Even now as the chilling grasp of death rips my soul from my flesh,
You're all that I can think about.
I hate how much I love you,
As you unknowingly toss my feelings away with no regard.

Farewell my friend,
As you will only ever see me as such.
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Best damn poem I've read all day. XD
 
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Nice - my favorites were the third and fourth stanzas.
Really liked the description in those lines, especially:
"this illness continues to leech off my being"
"as the chilling grasp of death rips my soul from my flesh"
"you unknowingly toss my feelings away with no regard"
Really, nicely said.
I'm not a poet, but your style seems so different from mine. You're much more blunt than I am. Well, not that I've written much >_> ' But the bluntness is effective.
 
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Bodhisattva said:
Best damn poem I've read all day. XD
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lol ty ;)
Train said:
Nice - my favorites were the third and fourth stanzas.
Really liked the description in those lines, especially:
"this illness continues to leech off my being"
"as the chilling grasp of death rips my soul from my flesh"
"you unknowingly toss my feelings away with no regard"
Really, nicely said.
I'm not a poet, but your style seems so different from mine. You're much more blunt than I am. Well, not that I've written much >_> ' But the bluntness is effective.
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ty ^_^ well with this particular poem the broken hearted woman is writing down her feelings as it's her last one...since she is dying. It goes with one of my stories I found a few days ago when I was going through a tub of my old writings. It's a very sad story as she's living/dying a life of a one sided love for her child hood friend. (It's so much deeper than that but this is just to summarize it :p) Her time for beating around the bush has expired so yeah, she has to be blunt xd
 
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