Exactly one month since the last post. Guess I couldn't have timed it better xd
I'm reading the chapters I've missed at the moment, so I'll get back here with a sum up when I'm done, instead of reviving each of your chapters
Ps: Oh. and btw, you never used the post you reserved on page one, Escorp
Edit: Finally... I caught up As I've sent you some VMs about the previous chapters, I'm going to put most of my focus on this chapter and the story so far.
First of all, it's quite humorous that it was Choji that was immobilized like that, poor guy, made him feel weak and humiliated, Lol xd
One thing that it might be easy not to think too much of, but that I thought was a little funny and weird at the same time, is how the Naruto characters become these kind of superhumans compared to the HP characters. I know it's unavoidable, due to how they are portrayed, but it's a bit amusing to see how they are jumping down from the windows of their rooms or from the office of Hermione, which is pretty high up I presume, and then jumping back up without any of the HP characters even thinking about it
It would be cool if some of the students exclaimed; "Wow, how did he jump that high up," etc.
However, I guess this is made up for when Gaara and Yamato shows of their constructive skills.
The fight was intriguing. It couldn't have been easy to describe as there is no "evidence" of how a ninja attack would clash with a wizard attack. I don't think we saw too much of that in this fight, as you might have avoided the attacks clashing too much on purpose? I still feel this fight was pretty cool and a look at what to come. Maybe we will have a bijuu dama clashing with some sort of Avada Kedavra from Voldemort?
For some reason I'm picturing the Kabuto - Voldemort relationship to be like Tobi - Kabuto or Oro - Sasuke for some reason, only that the events are turned around. Can't wait to see what's in store for upcoming chapters, and I do hope you'll be able to start writing fully again, like you promised, and perhaps even at the same time as I?
The story so far is pretty well made. I feel like we've had a roller coaster of build ups and fights, which has been well mixed and blended. I feel like I did enjoy the four first chapters and the two last best for some reason, but that might be because 5-7 was mainly focused on character relation and story making, which is good, but perhaps it was a little dragged out due to the time-laps they were released, making those three chapters feel like standing still at times. All in all, this is one of, if not the best cross over FFs out there, and it's definitely top 5 at NB and I do think that you're still managing to get each new chapter done quite well, even if you haven't been able to write for awhile. I know the feeling that you're not sure how the latest chapters have fared due to the time laps between them, but trust me, you're improving your writing ability for each chapter that comes, and there is only one way to go from here, and that is up.
So all that remains now is to ask; when is the next chapter scheduled?
I'm reading the chapters I've missed at the moment, so I'll get back here with a sum up when I'm done, instead of reviving each of your chapters
Ps: Oh. and btw, you never used the post you reserved on page one, Escorp
Edit: Finally... I caught up
As I've sent you some VMs about the previous chapters, I'm going to put most of my focus on this chapter and the story so far.First of all, it's quite humorous that it was Choji that was immobilized like that, poor guy, made him feel weak and humiliated, Lol xd
One thing that it might be easy not to think too much of, but that I thought was a little funny and weird at the same time, is how the Naruto characters become these kind of superhumans compared to the HP characters. I know it's unavoidable, due to how they are portrayed, but it's a bit amusing to see how they are jumping down from the windows of their rooms or from the office of Hermione, which is pretty high up I presume, and then jumping back up without any of the HP characters even thinking about it
It would be cool if some of the students exclaimed; "Wow, how did he jump that high up," etc.
However, I guess this is made up for when Gaara and Yamato shows of their constructive skills.
The fight was intriguing. It couldn't have been easy to describe as there is no "evidence" of how a ninja attack would clash with a wizard attack. I don't think we saw too much of that in this fight, as you might have avoided the attacks clashing too much on purpose? I still feel this fight was pretty cool and a look at what to come. Maybe we will have a bijuu dama clashing with some sort of Avada Kedavra from Voldemort?
For some reason I'm picturing the Kabuto - Voldemort relationship to be like Tobi - Kabuto or Oro - Sasuke for some reason, only that the events are turned around. Can't wait to see what's in store for upcoming chapters, and I do hope you'll be able to start writing fully again, like you promised, and perhaps even at the same time as I?
The story so far is pretty well made. I feel like we've had a roller coaster of build ups and fights, which has been well mixed and blended. I feel like I did enjoy the four first chapters and the two last best for some reason, but that might be because 5-7 was mainly focused on character relation and story making, which is good, but perhaps it was a little dragged out due to the time-laps they were released, making those three chapters feel like standing still at times. All in all, this is one of, if not the best cross over FFs out there, and it's definitely top 5 at NB and I do think that you're still managing to get each new chapter done quite well, even if you haven't been able to write for awhile. I know the feeling that you're not sure how the latest chapters have fared due to the time laps between them, but trust me, you're improving your writing ability for each chapter that comes, and there is only one way to go from here, and that is up.
So all that remains now is to ask; when is the next chapter scheduled?
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