[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - I

[LolaxXx]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

didgridoo
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Close
Chakra Cost:40
Damage:60
Description: A wind instrument developed by an indigenous people from a far away land. Made from a large hollowed out hardwood, imbued with chakra. The user blows into this instrument, creating a loud sound. The frequency spreads a large distance and can be heard throught the area. Depending on how much the user blows into the instrument, determines how loud and how far the resonance will be. because it is very light, and very hard, the weapon can be used as an weapon to club or jab enemies with.

±± Declined ±± The idea is good but it needs work. First the type isn't attack, its "weapon". Also you need to rank and describe the effects of this sound a bit better. The usage of the sound technique needs to be restricted in rank and to a set number of times. This is a weapon so it doesn't cost you chakra nor does it do any damage on its own. Leave it N/A on both fields.


Ninja Art- Trembling Soundwave (buruburu oto nami
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Close- long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage:N/A
Description: The user blows into their didgridoo, by doing so releases a soundwave infused with their own chakra, a sound based genjutsu. Upon hearing the sound, the victim is placed in a genjutsu where there vision becomes altered. In their eyes, the entire world around them begins to massively shake constantly and causing dizziness, nausea, and a loss of balance.
*Can only use once every other turn

±± Declined ±± the weapon wasn't approved. And also, to have sound based genjutsu you need to have mastered genjutsu...have you? Because this isn't a Ninjutsu. Its a Sound Genjutsu.


Ninja Art- Double Vision (Nijuu Genzou)
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Close- Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: The user casts a genjutsu on the opponent to trick the opponent into seeing doubles of everything they look at including people, and general surroundings.
*Lasts for two turns

±± Declined ±± again, this is not Ninjutsu/Ninja Arts. Its a genjutsu. Have you been trained in genjutsu?

 

[Typhon]

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(Momoirohigi: Buririanto Panku) | Pink Secret Technique: Brilliant Punk
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: 60
Description: This attack utilizes the hard metallic defense of Diamond Jozu and turns it into an offensive attack. The puppeteer controls Jozu by having it move towards the opponent at high speeds with its metallic shingles facing outwards. The puppet smashes into the target causing considerable damage while knocking them back.
-Can be used three times per battle.
-Must be capable of using the Diamond Jozu puppet.

±± Approved ±±


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(Momoirohigi: Daiyamondo Jozu) | Pink Secret Technique: Diamond Jozu

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Type: Puppet
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description: Diamond Jozu is a very large humanoid puppet with an empty chest cavity that can hold a puppeteer similar to Sasori's Hiruko. The defensive ability of this puppet comes from it's shingle like armor. One side of the shingles is the typical wooden plating used for most puppets, however the other side is plated with a very shiny metal which has the appearance of diamond when light shines off of it. At any time the puppeteer can flip these shingles exposing their defensive side. These shingles are capable of defending against a limited number of A-rank attacks, and is impervious to B-rank and below attacks. The front chest of the puppet also folds up exposing a moderate sized open window for the puppeteer to see from (can be seen in pic as the greenish chest plate area). This windowed area doesn't contain the metallic shingles and is a point of weakness for the puppet and is vulnerable to all attacks. The typical entrance/exit for this puppet is its back which can be used to quickly abandon it if needed.
-Metal Plating crumbles away after taking one A-ranked attack. S/Forbidden attacks instantly destroy both the armor and the puppet.

(Momoirohigi: Kanchi-sama) | Pink Secret Technique: Lord Canti
Type: Puppet
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A (40 for Chakra Cannon)
Damage: N/A (80 for Chakra Cannon)
Description: Lord Canti is a puppet developed by Doflamingo as an offensive compliment to the defensive Diamond Jozu. Lord Canti is a red robotic-humanoid looking puppet that stands slightly taller than most people. Its base weapon is a red guitar with bladed edges which is used for direct melee combat. It also has the capability to use the basic puppetry attacks by releasing kunai, senbon, smoke bombs, etc. from its arms, including the basic chakra shield which opens up from his right arm. Canti can release a strong stream of fire from its grill-like mouth that reaches mid range and is A-rank in power. Canti's most powerful attack is a specialized chakra cannon used to devastate the opponent (submitted as a separate technique).
-All abilities used through Canti count as a move.
-Fire is A-rank, reaches mid-range and can be used three times.
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±± Declined ±± just take away the reference to robotics. No modern tecnology references in the RP. Other than that, its good


(Momoirohigi: Batta-appu) | Pink Secret Technique: Batters Up
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: 80
Description: This is Lord Canti's most powerful attack. The puppeteer controls Canti and tansforms its body into the shape of a cannon with a long barrel. They charge the puppet with chakra and then fire a condensed ball of chakra at high speeds towards the target. Once the ball hits its target it erupts in a massive blast decimating the target. This can only be used twice per battle due to the strain it puts on the body of the puppet. Due to the structural stress put on the puppet, after the second use it becomes unable to use puppetry techniques above C-rank.
-Can only be used twice per battle.
-Puppetry techniques above C-rank unusable after the second use.
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±± Declined ±± define the bolded part a bit better. Other than that, although a chakra Canon-like ninjutsu exists, its possible in the logic of the puppets and puppet techniques so rest seems fine.

 

[Lord of Kaos]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

1. (Bone Release: Dance of A Thousand Flapping Bird's of Ascent) Honeton: Habataku Chidori Nobori no Mai
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra: 50
Damage: 90 (+10 to user)
Description: Derived from 1000 Birds Spike Ball, the user quickly and skillfully grows two long bone spikes through his palms, made from the densest and strongest Kaguya bone and with the ends tapered off, being hallow on the inside. The user than adds large amounts of lightning chakra through the bones, causing slight damage to the user's arms. While adding lightning chakra through the middle of the spikes, the user also channels Wind chakra along the outside of the spikes, causing them to be even sharper, allowing it to pierce through earth jutsus of up to Forbidden rank and steel (not all metal-based CE armors however). The user then stabs the enemy with said spikes, using the wind to increase the cutting power and the lightning to paralyze the target on contact. Upon making entry with the target, the user forces the spikes to explode, sending bone shrapnel from the inside of the target with enough force to blow a limb off if stabbed inside a limb. When the shrapnel explodes, the sound of a thousand birds taking off is heard, giving the technique it's name. A master of this technique is able to use this mold both the wind and lightning chakras throughout and around the bones as they are forming, allowing him to be able to used it as the bones are growing.
*Can only be used twice*
*Can be used as the bones are growing outwards*
*After using, the user cannot use any Bone jutsus for two turns and lightning for one turn afterwards*
*The user also cannot use any summoning jutsus the next 3 turns as well*
*Must have had basic Yin/Yang training to use this jutsu*
*The user's arms chakra path will be injured from the use of two simulatenous chakra types and the user will take substantially more time making handseals and will only be able to use taijutsu of B-rank and lower the next two turns*
*Can only be used by Lord of Kaos and Goro Kaguya*

Derived from this jutsu in the spoiler (placed in spoiler so it will not be confused with a submission of mine).

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(Honeton: Chidori Gosunkugi Mari) - Bone Release : 1000 Birds Spike Ball
Rank: A
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: User focuses a large amount of lightning chakra into the palm of their hand( about the size of a chidori, but 2 twice the chakra). After forming the chidori in the center of the palm, wraps their hand in a super dense bone covering. At the top of bone covering there are 3 open tipped bone spikes. User then rushes the opponent at an incredible speed and inserts the chidori through spikes into the opponents flesh causing paralysis (for one turn) in them after 2 turns.
Note
*Can only be used 2 twice per battle*

~Leaving for Mugi~

2. (Water Style: Atomic Abyss: Poseidon's Aquatic Destruction) ♆ Suiton: Atomikku Shin'en: Poseidon's Suijou Metsubou
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Close-Long (most effective up close)
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80 (+40 to user if hit)
Description: The user starts by making several condensed large balls of water with great pressure compressing them to the size of basketballs but the solidarity of ice (still water, just tightly compacted). The user then causes the orbs to sink into the water source he and his opponent are standing on, creating an mine-field in the ocean of sorts. If the opponent moves through underwater, he will cause a chain reaction, causing all of the water orbs to forcibly explode, causing great damage to anything caught underwater, with enough force to break bones on contact and cause severe internal damage to and rupture organs and even remove limbs. If both the user and enemy are standing on the water surface, and they move, it will cause the orbs near the surface to explode firstly, still causing a chain-reaction. The explosions, if above water, have the force and power to blow holes in metal.
*Can only be used once*
*after using, the user nor the opponent can move for 3 turns. After the three turns, the orbs loose their compressed-ness and the user and opponent will have no threats presented when moving*
*If the user is on the water when detonate, he will take the same damage the enemy would take*
*After using, the user cannot use water jutsus for three turns*
*The user is able to control the orbs released nearby him when he moves but doing so takes a great deal of chakra from him and thus, he can only use 1 jutsu per turn if he does this (must be stated). Once the explosions start, however, he will no longer be able to control them*
*If hit by orbs, the user's bones will be broken and damaged and he will be unable to move*
*Can only be used by Lord of Kaos*

~Declined~ Very interesting technique. I just have a few things to be added: How many (hence you'd need to state their exact location when placing them in the water)? If you can control them, how can I be sure you won't simply direct them at your opponent off the bat? I really need you to efficiently spread them, otherwise you could simply stack them all under your opponent and have yourself a blast (if you don't mind the pun ).

Lol at the play on words.

1. (Water Style: Atomic Abyss: Poseidon's Aquatic Destruction) ♆ Suiton: Atomikku Shin'en: Poseidon's Suijou Metsubou
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Close-Long (most effective up close)
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80 (+40 to user if hit)
Description: The user starts by making several (up to 5 in short range, 10 mid range and 15 in long range, basically five in each range) condensed large balls of water with great pressure compressing them to the size of basketballs but the solidarity of ice (still water, just tightly compacted). The user then causes the orbs to sink into the water source he and his opponent are standing on, creating an mine-field in the ocean of sorts. If the user choices to, he can also create said orbs in the water itself, preventing the opponent a chance to detect them (doujutsu and chakra sensing abilities aside, of course). The orbs are then spread in a pentagonal shape, surrounding the user and opponent, with 3 pentagons in total: one surrounding the enemy in short range, one in mid range and the last in long range. If the opponent moves around underwater, he will cause a chain reaction, causing all of the water orbs to forcibly explode, causing great damage to anything caught underwater, with enough force to break bones on contact and cause severe internal damage to and rupture organs and even remove limbs. If both the user and enemy are standing on the water surface, and they move, it will cause the orbs near the surface to explode firstly, still causing a chain-reaction. The explosions, if above water, have the force and power to blow holes in metal.
*Can only be used once*
*after using, neither the user nor the opponent can move for 3 turns. After the three turns, the orbs loose their "compressed-ness", for lack of a better word, and the user and opponent will have no threats presented when moving*
*If the user is on the water when detonated, he will take the same damage the enemy would take*
*After using, the user cannot use water jutsus for three turns*
*The user is able to control the orbs released nearby him when he moves but doing so takes a great deal of chakra from him and thus, he can only use 1 jutsu per turn if he does this (must be stated). The user is only able to take control of up to 3 orbs with each one coming from a different range, i.e. one from short, one from mid and one from long range. Once the explosions start, however, he will no longer be able to control them*
*If hit by orbs, the user's bones will be broken and damaged and he will be unable to move*
*Can only be used by Lord of Kaos*

±± Pending ±± Just a few remarks: If it causes damage to yourself (which apparently it does), its not an S-Rank. Also, the description needs to be a bit more clear regarding the 3 pentagons. Is their range (short, mid, long) in relation to you or to the enemy? Also, the word you are looking for is "lack of pressure" Contact me through Vm with the replies to this and i'll recheck.


2. (Water Style/Sword Style: Poseidon's Restraint) ♆ Suiton/Kenjutsu: Poseidon's Seisai
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user channels chakra into his sword to split the sword into several smaller kunais, resembling the sword's appearance (appearance only, doesn't gain abilities of the sword). The user then channels water chakra into the several kunai's and turns the kunais into water, that he sends at the enemy. As the several small bodies of water approach the enemy, the water turns back into several kunais that pierce the enemy. The user can also use this jutsu to restrain the target by directing the kunais at the target's limbs, pinning him either to a wall, ground, or other solid object. The user can also use this jutsu with wire between the kunais. When the kunais are turned to water, the wire stays connected through means of chakra. After two turns the kunais turn back to water and at the end of the following turn (three turns after usage), the kunais regroup to form the sword again, which travels to the user with great speed.
*can only be used three turns*
*after using, the user cannot use water related jutsus the next turn*
*Can only be used every two turns*
*Can only be used by Lord of Kaos*

±± Declined ±± Too many stacked abilities. Work on the description a bit better. Restrictions are ok as is the general idea. Just make it so that its simpler as what you are basically making are small kunais of water that you send to attack your enemy and pierce him while having the ability to have wires attached to them. However, i'm a bit sceptical of how the wires stay connected through chakra. Explain that part a bit better ^^

 

[Yashin]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Dim Mak - Katai Sujichigai) Deaths Touch - Leg Cramp
Rank: B
Range: Short
Type: Offensive
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: 40
Description: The user places one hand on the ground or a solid surface,he then swings one leg around at a swift speed and makes contact with the enemy's lower thigh.This attacks the pressure point leading to one of the arteries.If the attack is successful the enemy will feel a sharp pain in his thigh causing him to collapse to his knees,he is unable to stand for one turn.Continues attacks can cause internal bleeding in the arteries
~ Lasts one turn
~ Must be taught Dim Mak to use

±± Declined ±± link to Dim Mak approval? Also, do you have medical training? And that attack in that place wouldn't work that way actually but ok. Trust me, its my area of work.

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(Kijuuki Kata) Crane Form
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra cost: N/a
Description: The user enters 'Crane Form', a unique Kenjutsu stance in which the user utilizes 4 swords at the same time ; one in each hand, one in his mouth and finally one in the crevice between his leg and thigh.This causes the user to clench the sword,only standing on one foot giving him the look of a crane.This style has been compared to Killer B's Seven Swords Dance.While based off this style,Crane Form focus's much more on control and creating openings by attack the enemy on every level of height.To best utilize the styles potential, the user performs spins and jumps at high speed.The swords can be charged with Chakra to increase their cutting and attack power.
Note ~ Can only be used Daiki and those taught to.

±± Pending ±± Leaving for Izanami
Approved
(Sanshouuo Yuukai) Salamander Fusion
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range:N/a
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage points:
Description: The user performs the tiger handseal,as he does this the skin on the side of his neck begins to rumble.After a few seconds a set of Gills on each side erupts form beneath the skin allowing him to breath underwater.The user can take it a step further by webbing his hand and feet allowing him to swim extremely fast underwater although this renders him unable to use handseals until.
Note:
-Can only be used 3 times per battle
-Must have Signed Axolotl Contract

±± Declined ±± Similar technique already exists

 

[Bad Luck Brian]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Jigoku no ringu)- Ring of Hell
Type: Weapon
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage:
Description: The user will wear a ring on his or her right hand. The ring is locked with a tremendous amount of chakra that only certain users may be capable of harnessing. The chakra is a different color then the normal blue it is a metallic color looking almost silvery. It is a black color though it is made from tungsten one of the strongest metals around.

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±± Declined ±± Riiighhttt....and what does this do again? What exactly are the abilities of this "Weapon"?

 

[Blizzàrd1]

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(Raiton: Sono Ikazuchi Tentei Kusari) - Lightning Release: The Chains of lightning God
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: During the battle user channels its lightning chakra as a long stream of thick chakra threads in the ground below him/her through his/her feet. These threads stay in the ground until the user manipulates them to tear the ground, coming out instantly as lightning chains and wrapping both legs of the opponent to shock them or restrict their motion. An additional chain could be manipulated to stab the opponent when he/she is fully tied up. These chains could be called between 3 turns. If they are not manipulated within 3 turns the chakra connection with the chains is lost and the chains die without even inflicting any harm.
Note:
~ This jutsu lasts for 3 turns before activation.
~ Can be used 3 times per battle.
~ Can only be taught by -Blizzard-

±± Declined ±± Although i have a similar technique in essence, my main concern is the bolded part. It can happen as a normal attack through the ground but staying there for 3 turns so you can use is too much. Besides, were are the restrictions? If this is an S-Rank, restrict accordingly.

(Raiton: Sono Ikazuchi kiji) - Lightning Release: The Lightning Cloak
Type: Defense
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: User channels lightning chakra in his/her hands. He then claps and separates his/her hands from each other creating a long cloak that could easily cover users body. The clock is a mesh of strong tight lightning bonds which are not harmful to the user whose chakra is used. He can then use this cloak to protect him from other jutsus by wrapping it around him or the jutsu. This cloak is super effective against earth style technique which are A-Rank or below, It can tear the earth into molecular level but it disappears after it is used once.
Note:
~ Can defend the user from A-Rank or below Earth jutsus which are of reasonable size, not huge boulder but rocks, spikes, small earth weapons.
~ Can be destroyed by B-Rank Wind Jutsu.
~ Will disappear after used once.
~ Can only be taught by -Blizzard-

±± Declined ±± How long does it last while activated? Size? Explain the bolded part...molecular level? what is the purpose? Also, the way its written means it can be used multiple times... A-Rank needs to be restricted to 3-4 uses depending on technique.

(Fuuton: Sono kaze kiji) - Wind Release: The Wind Cloak
Type: Defense
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: User channels Wind chakra in his/her hands. He then claps and separates his/her hands from each other creating a long cloak that could easily cover users body. The clock is a mesh of strong tight wind bonds which are not harmful to the user whose chakra is used. He can then use this cloak to protect him from other jutsus by wrapping it around him or the jutsu. This cloak is super effective against lightning style technique which are A-Rank or below, It can tear the lightning into molecular level but it disappears after it is used once.
Note:
~ Can defend the user from A-Rank or below Lightning jutsus; such as: waves, thunder or bolts etc.
~ Can be destroyed by B-Rank Fire Jutsu.
~ Will disappear after used once.
~ Can only be taught by -Blizzard-

±± Declined ±± Look at the above technique and my notes apply for this one as well.

 

[Alternative]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Raiton: Inazuma Ningyō) - Lightning Release: Lightning Puppet
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: -
Description:
• After the user has puppet strings connected to their puppet, they will perform 3 hand seals (Ox → Snake → Hare). Once that's done, the user channels lightning chakra through to their puppet using the chakra threads as guides. The puppet becomes infused with the lightning jutsu, becoming an electric entity of sorts. They are infused with the lightning like any old weapon would be, but stays with the puppet. For three turns, the puppet's movements become much faster than usual, nowhere near the level of opening Gates. It's movement speed from using this technique is approximately twice the speed of the average human. The speed also affects jutsu the puppet uses, increasing the speed of it's weapons, making them harder to avoid.
Notes:
• Must know Puppet jutsu
• Cannot be used with puppets such as Hiruko, Sasori (as Sasori) etc.
• For keeping the puppet's integrity together, this can only be used three times a match.
• The move's intensity requires a two turn cooldown period after it ends.
• Can only be used by those Alternative allows

±± Declined ±± I just checked one or two pages behind a technique very very similar in effect to this one, submitted by Black Uchiha.

(Furubodi no Chakura Tate) - Full Body Chakra Shield
Rank: S
Type: Defensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 45
Damage Points: -
Description:
• This is a greater version of the Chakra Shield technique. The user controls their puppet to seperate the entire body, and mechanically form the shape of a target, or some other shape to cover a wide area. From there, the user forces chakra into the puppet, forming a shield using the full body of the puppet. The shield itself is made up of completely pure chakra, and can withstand any and all ninjutsu, or elemental attacks up to S-Rank. The shield can also protect the user from any physical blows up to B-Rank.
Notes:
• Must know Puppet Jutsu
• Because of it's intensity, can only be used twice a battle, but only once per puppet.
• The puppet starts to fall apart from the force of the move, and can only last one turns after this technique is used. After the one turn, the puppet cannot be used for the remainder of the match.
• Can only be used by Alternative and those he allows.

±± Declined ±± As Izuna has stated many times before, normal chakra (unless highly condensed and shape manipulated in advanced forms, which isn't the case of a puppets chakra shield) is weaker than Elemental Chakra of the same rank. So this would block only A-Rank elemental techniques unless you can make it so that the form its shapped is very very advanced and dense enough to do so. However, that isn't the shield of a puppet.

 

[Gitanshu]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(maru-o-chakra)- circle of chakra
Type: Attack/Defense
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description : This is a sword based technique which requires use of 2 katana he holds each in one of his respective hands and quickly pass his chakra in them and when they are charged by chakra he quickly stretches his has hands at an 90 degree angle opposite to each other and quickly take 360 degree turn and release the chakra concentrated in his sword in a semicircular shape this can block any technique of equivalent rank or can be simply used to attack an opponent by that chakra
~can only be taught by gitanshu~
~no S ranks and kenjutsu based techniques in the same turn ~
~can only be used thrice~

±± Declined ±± Hyuga Kaiten rip off using swords. :| Also, elemental chakra beats raw chakra.

 

[Baldy]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Feel free to edit anything which you feel needs to be edited ^_^
Weapon- (Ransadōru Verude)-Green Lancer
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The Green Lancer is a double-sided lance. (Picture is on the right) The Green Lancer is made of very tough iron, and cannot be broken easily. The ends of the weapon is extremely sharp, and can pierce through human bodies with almost no effort. The greatest ability of this "weapon" is that Nel can throw this lance with great force at the opponent in battle. If Nel focus her chakra into the weapon and throws it at the opponent, The Green Lancer will travel at extreme speeds towards the opponent. The catch is that, as the Green Lancer travels through the air, it starts to spin and build up energy. The energy is pink in colour and the Lance continues to build up momentum and power. When it hits the opponent, it acts as a drill and it inflicts extreme piercing damage. Due to the power it got from all the spinning, the Green Lancer is able to pierce through B-rank defences and below. It can travel up to mid-range and it will return to the user after being thrown

- Can only be used or allowed by me
- If allowed, the person cannot use this weapon against me in a battle
- There is a cooldown of 2 turns before you can throw the weapon with great force again.

I know the translation isn't completely accurate, but I couldn't find any translation.

~Declined~ Restrictions are off. Such a technique need to be restricted to a certain number of use per match.

~Resubmitting~

Added a restriction

Weapon- (Ransadōru Verude)-Green Lancer
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The Green Lancer is a double-sided lance. (Picture is on the right) The Green Lancer is made of very tough iron, and cannot be broken easily. The ends of the weapon is extremely sharp, and can pierce through human bodies with almost no effort. The greatest ability of this "weapon" is that Nel can throw this lance with great force at the opponent in battle. If Nel focus her chakra into the weapon and throws it at the opponent, The Green Lancer will travel at extreme speeds towards the opponent. The catch is that, as the Green Lancer travels through the air, it starts to spin and build up energy. The energy is pink in colour and the Lance continues to build up momentum and power. When it hits the opponent, it acts as a drill and it inflicts extreme piercing damage. Due to the power it got from all the spinning, the Green Lancer is able to pierce through B-rank defences and below. It can travel up to mid-range and it will return to the user after being thrown
- Can only be used or allowed by me
- If allowed, the person cannot use this weapon against me in a battle
- Only usable three times a battle
- Has to wait a cooldown of 2 turns before you are able to throw it again

±± Declined ±± What is this energy you speak of? raw chakra? How does it return? wire? can it simply fly back to your hand? explain that a bit better. Also, the resctriction I bolded isn't a jutsu resctriction. Its a restriction you put onto the ones you allow to your your technique. To the jutsu itself, its pointless. And, don't forget, you still need to decide if this is an attack using that lance (which in that case means the lance should be submitted as a CW) or if this is the CW in itself.

~New~

(Raiton: Senkou Raikouya)- Flash Lightning Arrow
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 50
Description: User would perform the hand seals; Monkey>Tiger>Boar and then form a lightning sphere of chakra on the user's palm. When in short-range, after performing the necessary hand seals, the user would raise his forearm up slightly, pointing diagonally up-backwards, and do a forward-like motion while having his fingers pointing directly at the target. The sphere of chakra would be released in the form of a highly flashy lightning arrow, that is extremely bright. This is only part of the technique; Whilst the arrow is not as powerful as normal A-ranks, it has a second function. As the lightning arrow makes contact with the opponent, or his counter, it would cause the electrons in the lightning arrow to split apart, forming an extremely bright field of electricity. The brightness can blind opponents momentarily, before the technique fades. It is a good diversion. One can also choose to perform a single hand seal, which would cause the same effect. This technique can only be performed in close-range.

~ Can only be used/taught by me
~ Arrow travels at a fairly fast speed
~ Can only be used three times a battle
~ Must have a three turn cool down period
~ Blinding lasts for about 1-2 seconds only

±± Declined ±± Similar techniques already exist...plenty of them
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(Raiton: Shokkingu Tama; Amimono no Raikou)- Shocking Sphere; Web Of Lightning
Type: Attack/Defence
Rank: A
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: User would focus electrical energy in their palms, and perform the following hand seals in the following order; Monkey>Dog>Dragon. The user would shoot out a shocking sphere of lightning at the opponent, which would travel at a fairly fast speed towards the opponent. The sphere of lightning is enough to completely paralyse an opponent and cause severe injuries. However, there is a second part to this technique. With a single hand seal, namely Horse, the user can control the electrons in the sphere to seperate and quickly, in a split second, form a web of lightning that has a large span over a wide arc. The web of lightning is rather big and wide, and has small little patches between the whole web. The holes are not too big, so even rather small attacks might not be able to slip past it. The web is strong enough to withstand an A-rank attack, or 2 B-rank attack, or 4 C-rank attack and or 6 D-rank attacks. However, minuscule attacks can slip past the web with little to no damage.

~ Can only be used/taught by me
~ Can only be used three times a battle
~ Must have a three turn cool down period

Feel free to edit in anything which you see fit. ^_^

±± Declined ±± Look at the first part, does it expand after it hits? Or before? also, explain the second bolded part. Take into account the elemental weakness and strenghts.

 

[Alucard]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Tenmyaku Kisatsu: Senga Jinkei Killing the Spirit of the Divine Pulse: Keen Fang of Divine Might
Rank: A
Type: Attack; Taijutsu
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Senga Jinkei is a close-quarter combat technique, in which the user joins their fingers next to the middle one. Then he pushes their fingers into a certain target at a very high speed, leaving a wound similar to a bullet wound, making swords or similar weapons unnecessary. Because the user concentrates all of his body weight and power into his needle-like finger tips and because the area of contact is so small, this technique has incredible penetrating power, being capable of piercing through swords or even strong walls made of wood or earth [up to B-rank] which aren't of great density. Tough it's more frequently used with a single finger, the user can use his whole hand for a wider wound/hole on his target.
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Restrictions:
Usable three times per battle
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~Declined~ Piercing through a sword O__O That's a bit too much. The rest seems fine.

Iai Heki Bursting Draw Technique
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user places his hand on the hilt of his sword and at the same time flows a great amount of chakra into it. This will cause the sword to burst trough the scabbard, while at the same time, the user performs a swinging motion. Because the scabbard is suddenly destroyed due the great amount of chakra flowing through the blade of the sword, the user doesn't need to perform a drawing motion before slashing the opponent. A slash is immediately made from the point where the user holds his sword, thus, making this technique even faster than other drawing techniques. Also, the massive flow of chakra running through the blade of the sword, adds to its cutting power, making it at the same time, a strong technique.
Usable only by a samurai biography
Usable twice per battle
No Iai/Iaido techniques next turn

~Declined~ Great technique again, but tell me, how can you use this technique twice if you destroy the scabbard in the process?

Removed piercing through sword part.

Tenmyaku Kisatsu: Senga Jinkei Killing the Spirit of the Divine Pulse: Keen Fang of Divine Might
Rank: A
Type: Attack; Taijutsu
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Senga Jinkei is a close-quarter combat technique, in which the user joins their fingers next to the middle one. Then he pushes their fingers into a certain target at a very high speed, leaving a wound similar to a bullet wound, making swords or similar weapons unnecessary. Because the user concentrates all of his body weight and power into his needle-like finger tips and because the area of contact is so small, this technique has incredible penetrating power, being capable of piercing through even strong walls made of wood or earth [up to B-rank] which aren't of great density. Tough it's more frequently used with a single finger, the user can use his whole hand for a wider wound/hole on his target.
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Usable three times per battle
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The scabbard of the sword is destroyed, but if i hold more sheathed swords, i could use it once again on any one of them I'm submitting it again, with the same restrictions because of that reason, though if you think it should be reduced to one use only, feel free to edit please^^

Iai Heki Bursting Draw Method
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user places his hand on the hilt of his sword and at the same time flows a great amount of chakra into it. This will cause the sword to burst trough the scabbard, while at the same time, the user performs a swinging motion. Because the scabbard is suddenly destroyed due the great amount of chakra flowing through the blade of the sword, the user doesn't need to perform a drawing motion before slashing the opponent. A slash is immediately made from the point where the user holds his sword, thus, making this technique even faster than other drawing techniques. Also, the massive flow of chakra running through the blade of the sword, adds to its cutting power, making it at the same time, a strong technique.
Usable only by a samurai biography
Usable twice per battle (one usage per different sword, as the scabbard gets destroyed)
No Iai/Iaido techniques next turn

±± Both Approved ±± Good job!

Iai Nimakkou Two Fronts Drawing Method
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This is a tricky Iaido technique, which can be divided in two steps. The first step, is composed by a blast of chakra with great cutting power (equivalent to A-rank), which is released from the sword, as soon as it is unsheathed. The second step is the actual cut the user performs on the opponent, after drawing the sword, which can be compared in strength to Mifune's technique when he split Ibuse's head wide open. If the user has mastered Iaido and because of the speed at which Iaido techniques are performed, both the chakra blast and the slash the user performs, can hit the opponent virtually at the same time. The versatility of this technique is that, although the chakra blast moves in a straight line, hitting the opponent on a determined area, the cut the user performs, can be done in a different place and at a different angle, making it seem the opponent is hit by two different attacks, following different trajectories at the same time, while in fact, everything is done in one single motion.
Usable twice per battle
No Iaido techniques above A-rank next turn.

±± Pending ±± Leaving this one for Izanami

Approved

 

[Selendrile]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Bakuton: Kibaku Shiroi Ne no Ki)- Explosion Release: Explosive White Root tree
Rank: B
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 25
Damage Points: 40
Description: The user will put a single hand in their side pouches filled with clay, and begin to mold and shape it. Then, they will release the explosive clay into the ground, keeping it connected to his hand, where they are able to grow a single explosive clay tree anywhere on the battlefield. The explosive clay tree has a circumference of eight feet, and is around twelve feet tall. Its roots also extend into the ground ten feet deep, and ten feet in any direction of the tree. At any time after the explosive clay tree has been created, it can be detonated by performing the Tiger hand seal, and by yelling, "Katsu!". Blast radius covers the area short range around the tree.
*Note: Must have a Deidara biography
*Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
*Note: Usable three times per battle
Declined this is not a B rank level technique and should be higher ranked

(Bakuton: Kibaku Shiroi Ne no Ki)- Explosion Release: Explosive White Root tree
Rank: A
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user will put a single hand in their side pouches filled with clay, and begin to mold and shape it. Then, they will release the explosive clay into the ground, keeping it connected to his hand, where they are able to grow a single explosive clay tree anywhere on the battlefield. The explosive clay tree has a circumference of eight feet, and is around ten feet tall. Its roots also extend into the ground ten feet deep, and ten feet in any direction of the tree. At any time after the explosive clay tree has been created, it can be detonated by performing the Tiger hand seal, and by yelling, "Katsu!". Blast radius covers the area short range around the tree.
*Note: Must have a Deidara biography
*Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
*Note: Usable twice per battle

Up one rank, down to two times per battle.

±± Approved ±±

(Katon: Kaen no Tenjō)- Flame Ceiling
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Mid/Long
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 50
Description: Performing one handseal, the user creates a 4x4 foot, flat square wall of flame above the opponent. Then performing another hand seal, the flame ceiling will then drop down sixteen pillars of flame (16sq. ft) quickly, similar to the bars on a cage. This technique is used as a cage, but because of the heat of the flames, the opponent may suffer highly serious burns due to the proximity of the flames.
*Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile

~Approved~

(Katon: Bureizu no Kēji o Sakujo)- Dropping Blaze Cage
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Mid/Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Performing two hand seals, the user creates a 10x10 foot, flat square wall of flame above the opponent. Then performing another hand seal, the flame ceiling will then drop down twenty pillars of flame (5 on each side) quickly, similar to the bars on a cage. This technique is used as a cage, but because of the heat of the flames, the opponent may suffer highly serious burns due to the proximity of the flames.
*Note: Can only be taught by Selendrile
*Note: Usable two times per battle
*Note: No other fire techniques to be used on the same turn

Update on Technique:
Up one rank, slight description alteration, added a usage restriction

±± Approved ±± Added a restriction

(Bakuton: Hakucho-nushi no kureimanto)- Explosion Release: The Clay Cloak of the White Butterfly Lord
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will place both hands into their side pouches filled with clay, and then release the clay from their palms onto their entire body. After the clay layer fully encases the body, the user will retract it, forming a white cloak that is split into four sections at the waist. The cloak is incredibly effective at blocking physical attacks, having the ability to fully block B-rank and lower taijutsu and kenjutsu techniques. This is due to the density of the cloak, and the the ability to absorb heavy impacts. Even the momentum from attacks is slowed, leaving only a small transfer of energy to the actual user's body. Being partly earth based, it it also very resistant to water, having the ability to fully defend against water A-rank and lower. However, due to its natural weakness to lightning, a direct B-rank attack will destroy the cloak. The user will also experience increased speed of 1.25x, due to the aerodynamic cloak.
*Note: Must have a Deidara biography
*Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
*Note: Usable twice per battle; Lasts for 4 turns
*Note: Can block up to 2 techniques total, before it begins to crack and fall away; (Any mix of Tai/Ken/Suiton)

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^ I do not want to increase the rank of this technique, so please include in your critique how I can make it approvable if its not, for an A-rank technique.

±± Declined ±± Let me see if i understand: you are encasing yourself in explosive clay that then transforms into a cloak which you intend to use for protection from impacts and jutsu while making you faster by making you more aerodynamic? Take the increased speed part. Reword the first part i bold and make it simpler.

 

[XZA]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Ōkina suna no hyōtan| greater sand gourd
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: short-long
Chakra Cost: N/a ( -40 if summoned -20 per turn )
Damage Points: N/a
Description: The user places there hand on the ground, preforming the summoning jutsu to summon a giant pot. The pot is very large with the love kanji in red on the front and the back. It has a white rope near the top which can be used to carry the sand pot. the pot is made out of sand, but those without a dojutsu could not see this as it has close resemblance to the Kohaku no Jōhei. The pot is filled with a large quantity of sand that is already infused with the users chakra. The sand in this gourd much faster than regular sand carried in a regular sand gourd. Whenever sand is needed the gourd automatically activates. Due to this sand already being infused with the users chakra, they can control and manipulate it almost instantly to suit their needs. Though, this sand doesn't have kaurura's love so the shield of sand isn't automatic with this sand.
Note1: the gourd automatically refills itself with sand
Note2: can only refill itself three times
Note3: the user doesn't have to summon if carried into battle in the beginning

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don't laugh >.>

±± Declined ±± I won't allow anyone to submit ripoffs or blunt upgrades of already powerful cannon techniques. Note that what you did is against the rules and i could ban you for a whole week.

jiton: satetsu nami no jutsu | Gold dust shower
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/a
Description: The User uses Gold Dust hardened into minuscule grains, to attack simultaneously across a vast range.Using the repellent force of magnetism, the speed of the bullets is rapidly increased after they are shot. Furthermore, the user can also use the magnetic force to make the bullets grow into senbon as they move across the terrain.
Note: can only be used by the fourth kazekage

±± Declined ±± Were did the bullets come from? do you shape the Gold Dust into bullets so that you can then use? Also, note that this isn't a b-rank. And how many can you do? average size, give or take?

Jikashu: sakin mesai | Gold Dust blinding
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description:The User preforms the snake hand-seal and has a large quantity of Gold Dust come forth from the ground under the opponent and sends towards an enemy, which due to its luminous quality, can blind the opponent. the user can also adjust the brightness of it.

±± Declined ±± restrictions? Work on the description. Its too...vague and information is missing describing how this happens actually

Feel free to edit^^

 

[The Doctor]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Suiton: Kō masatsu no tekunikku) Water release: Anti-Friction technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: An experienced user of water release begins by gathering chakra inside of their body. Once enough chakra is gathered, user will release it from their pores. When the chakra is being released the user will focus on converting the chakra into an oil like liquid that covers their whole body. The purpose of this liquid is to work as a friction reducer, lowering it to almost zero. When covered in the liquid, the user is able to glide on the ground.
Note: Makes the user covered in the liquid weaker to lightning jutsu
Note: The user is unable to use fire, unless he is willing to risk evaporating the liquid.
Note: Can only be taught by Passion and Doctor Kaguya

±± Declined ±± Chakra info is wrong for a b-rank. If you use this technique, how can you stand on your feet? Note that this would only be usable on certain grounds, not for example in snow or sand. You'd be unable to hold weapons, grab things, etc. Work on it a bit more.

 

[Scorps]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Genjutsu: Omoi no Kamui | Illusionary Arts: The Mind of Creation
Type: Supplementary/Offensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description:
A powerfull technique were the user takes control of the enemy's 5 senses and makes him experience anything he can imagine. These illusions may cause the enemy pain or distress or simply serve as a distraction or to camouflage the user in an escape or an attack. The genjutsu itself is done by performing 3 hand seals (Tiger+Ram+Horse) while inserting your chakra into the enemy's brain, disturbing his chakra flow and quickly gaining control over his senses. If the user is within short range of the enemy he can perform this technique with either 1 hand seal (Ram) or by looking directly into the enemy's eyes.

Note: Can only be used thrice per battle
Note2: User can't perform other Genjutsu in the same turn
Note3: User can't perform any technique above S-Rank on the same turn
Note4: Can only be taught by Scorps
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-Declined- too general

Genjutsu: Magirawashii no Serifu | Illusionary Arts: The Misleading Words
Type: Offensive
Rank: A-Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 30
Damage: N/A
Description:
A simple but powerful illusion that is used immediately before an elemental technique. The user does one hand seal (Tiger, Ram or Horse) before the ones required for the elemental technique that follows. The result is that the enemy will see the next released technique as that of another element. However, to perfect the illusion, the user must train and have the ability to string the hand seal of the genjutsu with the ones of the elemental technique so that they seem to be only one set of hand seals.

Note: Usable 4 times
Note2: Can only be used before techniques of the 5 basic elements that the user knows
Note3: Can only use up to S-Rank on the same turn its used
Note4: Can only be taught by Scorps
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-Approved-

 

[BusinessManTeno]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Gogyou sutairu: honoo sutebachi)Fire Style:Flame Desperation
Type:Attack
Rank:B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:25
Chakra Damage:50
Description:The User Does 1 hand seal then Palm His hands on the ground. He then Channels his fire chakra through the ground towards the opponent underground. Fire will then Raise out of the ground from under the opponent. Making the opponent legs catch on fire. Giving his Leg 2nd Degree burn. Making it hard for him to dodge or walk after the burning.

-Brothers In Arms Can Use-
-~Uchiha Clan~ Can Use-

±± Declined ±± this is not a B-Rank. Wrong name. Its a Katon technique. Chakra damage? use the correct template. Also, you can make flames come from beneath your opponent but if they burn or not his legs is something you can't predict unless you make it so that the fire is designed to wrap around his legs. Also, note that the ground would show indications of what is about to happen right before it happens, if you get my drift.

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(jisei sutairu:shukakutentou) Magnetism Style: Similars Dont Attract
Type: Defense
Rank:S
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:50
Chakra Damage:None
Description: The user does 2 handseals then puts his/her hand on the ground to get a feel for the earth magnetic field. The user then surrounds his/her body with the same magnetic field as the earth repulsing any earth that comes near him/her that contains metal in it Or Gold/Iron Sand. Also making it that the user floats in air (About 4inches) due to the user body being covered in the same magnetic energy as the earth. Repulsing each other . (North and North. Or South and South)

-Cant use any Earth On the same turn as this-
-Can Only use Twice-
-Can Use Any Magnetism Techs The Same turn as This-
-This Stays Active the Whole turn you use it in-
-Only usable by Teno-

±± Declined ±± Do not resubmit. Jiton are the names of Magnetism techniques. Again, chakra damage? Use the correct template. Also, this technique is too similar to the gravity manipulation techniques of the Deva Path. This is in theory possible (albeit your technique would need lots of work to be approved and is severely and utterly OP) but it collides with the cannon abilities of the Deva Path making it impossible to approve or even work on.
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Jisei sutairu:Jisei Electrons
Type:Attack/Supplementary
Rank:S
Range:Short-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Chakra Damage:40(Not really an attack jutsu)
Description: The User does 3handseals, then send their Chakra filled with magnetic energy through the ground towards the opponent. The magnetic energy will then react to the opponent electrons in their body very harshly. Causing the electrons in the opponent body to spin rapidly out of control causing the electrons in the opponent body to to explode and stop overall. Making the opponent not able to send messages to the brain. Meaning the opponent can not move nor react to a jutsu. NOTE. This is NOT a genjutsu

-Can only use once-
-Cant Use any Genjutsu throughout the whole battle if this is used-
-Cant Use Any Ninjutsu for 3turns-
-After The use of this. User cant use any Magnetism For 2turns-
-Only Usable by Teno

(edit whatever)

±± Declined ±± I can't believe this is the first time i'm going to actually said this but overpowered and unrealistic. To create such a magnetic field would be practically impossible. And, if your stop the electrons in the enemies body, thats not what happens... Its more like, you know...BOOM? Dematerialization? One more chance to make this work although its not salvageable in my opinion. And one more time...use proper template.

 

[Lord of Kaos.]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Fire style: Rain of Hell(katon: Jigoku no ame)
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offence
Range: All
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage: 90(15 to user)
Description: This jutsu is actually a Fire-Water combo. The user makes about 15 hand-seals while he shoots a colorful, blazing, gigantic flame into the air. When the hand-seals are complete oil starts to rain from the sky like a large scale (Suiton: Kokuun) - Water Style: Black Clouds these oil droplets mix with the fire the user is sending up to the sky. This makes it rain fire drops effecting the entire field except for the source of the fire and short range around it.(so basically the area around the user is unaffected) This jutsu is even more deadly around grassy/forest/jungle terrain as it can cause additional fires. To keep the rain going the user has to keep shooting the giant flame to the sky which puts great strain on the body dealing 15 damage to the user once the jutsu ends.
*The user can keep the rain for a total of 3 turns(so its ends at the end of the opponents 3rd turn, after this jutsu is used)
*The user can't use any jutsu while the rain is happening as he has to keep the flame
*The user and clones/bodies can't use Forbidden rank jutsu and S-rank fire jutsu for 3 turns after the rain ends
*the user can end the rain at any time during the 3 turns
*The user and clones/bodies can't use any fire rank jutsu while the rain is in effect
*can only be used once per battle

±± Declined ±± Firstly and foremost, its severely overpowered. Second, why is this a forbidden rank technique? its been said many times before that you need to have physical damage and consequences when using a forbidden rank technique. Having 15 damage to the user is meaningless in the rp. Also, look at the word i bolded. If you are channeling 2 elemental chakras at the same time then you need yin/yang mastery. To make this work you need to reword the description in a way that you are first using Water Chakra for the oil and then Fire Chakra to ignite it. In two different stages. And by doing so and keeping the idea of it being forbidden it will count as 2 moves on your turn. This needs a lot of work. The reason i didn't DNR it is only because i want to give you one chance to make it work.


Fire style: Godly Protection(katon: Keiken'na hogo)
Rank:S
Range: Short
Type: Defense/Supplementary
Chakra Cost: 40(additional -10 per each turn it's kept in effect)
Damage: Non
Description: The user does the tiger hand-seal and gathers immense amounts of flame chakra in his dominant hand. Then the user covers his body with a layer of chakra and slams his hand with the fire chakra to the ground. Instantly a orange-yellow fire comes out of the ground burning the area up to the users head. It burns anything up to 45cm away from the user in all directions (except above). The user is protected by the layer of chakra he created. The fire increases the temp of the area around the user greatly, because of that the fire can only be kept for 3 turn. During the 3 turns the user is protected from any A-rank or below wind jutsu and any B-rank or below Ice jutsu from all directions except above.
*the user can still see and spew things from his mouth inside the fire(it burns up to his face)
*The user can't use wind or Ice jutsu while the fire is active
*If the user uses any water type jutsu it will cancel out the fire(also the power of the water jutsu will be decreased by 2 ranks)
*can only be used once per battle

±± Declined ±± Severely overpowered for even an S-Rank technique. This one needs a lot of work. You need to figure out what you want for it exactly.

Earth Style: Small Cutters(Doton: Kogata kattā)
Rank: A
Range: All at the same time
Type: Supplementary
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage: near nothing
Description: The user does 3 hand-seals and slams his hand into the ground. His chakra quickly travels through the surface of the earth and covers the entire field. Then the user makes small pieces of earth come out of the ground(4mm^3). One attacks the opponent making a small flesh wound on his/her skin(deals as little damage as a bee sting). Then the small piece of earth with the opponents blood comes back to the user's hand. The user can create multiple earth pieces come and hit multiple opponents, no more then 1 piece can hit 1 target. The user can make pieces all around the opponent to hit him/her if he/she tries to escape. The main reason for this attack would be to draw out blood and get a sample so a summon with a sensitive nose can track the opponent.
*Can only be used 3 times per battle
*The attack doesn't disperse clones
*Hidan bios and bios with blood CE can't use this jutsu

±± Declined ±± The idea is quite interesting but you need to make sure the tiny earth particles are somewhat visible. At that size they aren't. And, you wouldn't need Blood to trrack someone. Only something with the enemy's smell.

 

[Bolt]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kiri Terepo-to no Jutsu) - Mist Teleportation Technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: While user's mist is in play, his chakra is present throughout the mist. So user focuses anywhere in the mist and teleports wherever he wishes to, within the mist.
Note: -Can only be used 3 times per battle.
-Can only be taught by Bolt.

Declined, do not resubmit, no teleportation techniques are allowed to be submitted for custom techniques

 

[Erzo]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Last submission on the 16th.

Yoroi Dageki Matsugo: (Armour strike of death)
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: S-Rank
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: The user has mini spikes on his armours front and back, these spikes look like something he'd use to peirce his enemy when they are within touching range but however the user can channel his chakra into the mini spikes and causes the chakra to extend from the spikes and pierce his enemies even if they are not within touching range.
Note: Can only be taught by RockLeeGreenBeast
Note: Can only be used by a samurai.
Note: Can only be used 2 times.
Note: The user can't use it for the next 2 turns after using it once.

±± Declined ±± Look at the bolded. Were do these spikes come from? Not all armors have them. Also, this is a Ninjutsu. Something Samurais can't use.

Custom Weapon.

Kaji Katana : Fire Blade

Rank:S
Type: Weapon - Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra: (+20 for fire jutsus rank A and above deflected, +15 for any Earth jutsu cut)
Damage: N/A
Description: The Fire blade looks like an ordinary blade, with leather straps surrounding the area where the user holds it from, the leather is not ordinary leather as it is - for an unknown reason it is not able to burn. It has a sharp tip which is useful against opponents at close range. The blade also has the ability to deflect small fire jutsus ranked A and lower without difficulty. Furthermore due to its sharp tip the sword is able to cut through Earth jutsus ranked B and lower.
Note: Fire deflection counts as one of the users move.
Note: Fire deflection jutsu can be used 3 times.
Note: The blade can only be wielded by RockLeeGreenBeast.
Note: By Hard materials I mean Earth jutsus ranked B and lower.
Note: The cutting of Earth jutsus ranked B and lower counts as a move.
Note: Cutting Earth can only be done 3 times.

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Sono Kouhi Ichiyou Raikou: (The Queen of Lightning)
Rank:S
Type: Weapon - Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Range:Short
Chakra: +20 Each time chakra boost is used.
Damage: N/A
Description: The queen of lightning is a blade which was forged on the highest mountains of kumogakure, and during its time in the mountains it was said to have been struck my lightning multiple times and due to this it has high amounts of lightning channeled within it and is constantly at that state. (much like this jutsu (Chō Biburāto Raitontō) - Super Vibrating Lightning Release Sword). The blade is able to cut any A ranked earth objects with ease, due to its natural affinity to lighting. A feature the blade had is that it has a considerably long hilt, and on the hilt it has 2 considerably large holes at the base and another 2 at each side of the hilt so 8 holes overall not including the 2 at the base. (near the bottom area, so the users hand are not covering the holes), nobody knew why the holes were and most people thought it was only due to the old age of the blade, however when the user requires her too, The queen of lightning is able to release boosts of normal chakra out from those holes. The chakra that comes out is nor harmful to anyone and if it does connect with the opponent it merely pushes them back with blunt force and nothing more, however the chakra release is able to speed the swing of the blade. For example the user could be swinging the blade from high up in the air downwards, the blade then releases chakra from the two holes at the top of the hilt and push the blade downwards so the blade comes with even more speed and force then it might have normally come down with.
Note: The chakra boost to increase the users speed can be used as many times as you like but you have to wait 2 turns after using it each time.
Note: Can only be wielded by RockLeeGreenBeast.
Note: You can cut through Earth jutsus ranked A 2 times.
Note: You can cut through Earth jutsus ranked B and C 4 times.
Note: Chakra boost increases the swing of the sword to the speed of Rock Lees movements without his leg weights.
Note: If someone else was to pick up the sword, the lightning from the sword would electrocute them.

±± Declined, do not resubmitt ±± As said before, many weapons like this already exist.

Summoning Animal: Kangaroo
Scroll Owner: RockLeeGreenBeast
Other Users who have signed contract: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A
Summoning Boss if existing: N/A

±± Declined, do not resubmit ±± Contract already exists. Doing a search before posting a custom animal summon is essential

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[Enzup]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Ninjutsu: Reikon Eater) - Soul Eater
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: User after performing 5 handseals releases his pure chakra from each and every spore of his body and creates a dense sphere around him which is so strong that can protect the user from any Ranks jutsu till the sphere is around his body.
Note: ~Sphere lasts for maximum 2 turns and can be cancelled by making 1 handseal.
~Sphere can block a maximum of 3 attacks, after which chakra start despersing.
~While sphere is active, user can only use those jutsus which does not originate from user's body. (eg. he can't use "rasengan" or some wind or fire jutsu which he shoots from mouth)
~Due to excess release of pure chakra, user can't use any S-Rank or above technique for next 2 turns after sphere becomes inactive.
~Can only be used twice per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

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~Declined~ OP.

(Ninjutsu: Reikon Eater) - Soul Eater
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40 [+20 for each turn]
Damage Points: N/A
Description: User after performing 5 handseals user releases his pure chakra from each and every spore of his body and creates a dense sphere around him which is so strong that can protect the user from Jutsus.
Note: ~Sphere lasts for maximum 2 turns.
~Sphere can block a maximum of 2 attacks, after which chakra start despersing.
~Sphere can block any rank's jutsu for only 1 time, and other upto S-rank.
~While sphere is active, user can only use those jutsus which does not originate from user's body. (eg. he can't use "rasengan" or some wind or fire jutsu which he shoots from mouth)
~Due to excess release of pure chakra, user can't use any S-Rank or above technique in his next turn after sphere becomes inactive.
~Can only be used twice per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

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±± Declined, do not resubmitt ±± I'm training you in Ninjutsu... You haven't yet reached s-rank :|

Since this jutsu counts as my 4 moves, and can block only 1 jutsu, so i am updating it and making it a lil bit OP , as i am also restricting that i will only be able to use 2 moves per turn.

(Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
Type: Defense
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50 (+30 for every turn i.e. +10 for each)
Damage Points: 90 (if someone tries to cross it) [-30 to user]
Description: After creating 3 shadow clones, one clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earh, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block any no. of jutsus upto forbidden rank till the time it is active, and for that clones must continue to release their respective chakras in the dome. As user will be trapped inside that dome, so for attacking purpose he can make a single handseal, so that a appropriate size of hole/opening will be made in the dome and from which he can use his jutsu on his target and than again by making a single handseal, the hole/opening closes.
Note: ~User must create atleast 3 shadow clones before using this jutsu.
~This technique lasts 3 turns.
~If one clone is made to poofed away, than the ability of dome will be decreased and thus it can block two rank lesser techniques i.e. upto A-rank, and if two clones than upto B-rank. And if all three clones, than this technique ends right there.
~Opponent can't use the earth below the user, which is in sphere for any purpose. As that earth is separated from the main earth, due to lightning chakra from sphere, neither user can use the earth below him to slam his hands on the earth to manipulate the earth outside the sphere.
~User can only use 2 moves each turn due to excessive chakra used.
~Counts as 3 moves in the user's turn.
~ -30 damage to user due to excessive amount of chakra used.
~Can only be used once per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

~Declined~ Even if it took the remainders of your turns for the match and caused you to die after using it I wouldn't approve a technique that can block absolutely anything. Ever.
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(Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus blocking any jutsu upto S-Rank (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank) and can take on one more attack.
Note:~Can't use any earth jutsu of S-rank and above in same turn.
~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
~Can be used 2 times per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.

Resubmitting

(Ketteiteki Benso) - Ultimate Defense
Type: Defense
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50 (+30 for every turn i.e. +10 for each clone)
Damage Points: 90 (if someone tries to cross it) [-30 to user]
Description: After creating 3 shadow clones, one clone releases water chakra, second one releases lightning chakra and the third one releases pure chakra in it to create a shield of hollow sphere around themselves of 10m radius, whose small part is below the earth, so from above the surface it looks like a dome. This shield can block one jutsu of forbidden rank, and 3 of S-ranks (240 Damage Points). And for that clones must continue to release their respective chakras in the dome. As user will be trapped inside that dome, so for attacking purpose he can make a single handseal, so that a appropriate size of hole/opening will be made in the dome and from which he can use his jutsu on his target and than again by making a single handseal, the hole/opening closes.
Note: ~User must create atleast 3 shadow clones before using this jutsu.
~This technique lasts a maximum of 3 turns.
~If one clone is made to poofed away, than the ability of dome will be decreased and thus it can block one rank lesser techniques i.e. upto A-rank, and if two clones than upto B-rank. And if all three clones, than this technique ends right there.
~Opponent can't use the earth below the user, which is in sphere for any purpose. As that earth is separated from the main earth, due to lightning chakra from sphere, neither user can use the earth below him to slam his hands on the earth to manipulate the earth outside the sphere.
~Counts as 3 moves in the user's turn.
~ -30 damage to user due to excessive amount of chakra used.
~Can only be used once per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

±± Declined, do not resubmit ±± Overpowered and fails the basic concept of being a forbidden rank jutsu. Your clones do the jutsu so you don't take physical damage. And stating "-30 damage for user due to excessive amount of chakra" is ridiculous since the clones are the ones doing the technique.
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It is my tech only, and i was updating it.

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(Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus it will be destroyed after taking one S-rank technique. (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank)
Note:~Can't use any jutsu of earth in next whole turn.
~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
~Can be used 2 times per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

~Approved~ Took out the part about needing to destroy 3 towers to stop the techniques.

(Doton: Boushi Tou) - Earth Style: Spinning towers
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user puts his hands on earth and pulls out 4 towers each of height 5m and diameter 1m, one in each direction(i.e. N,E,W,S) at a distance upto 5m from the user. The towers start spinning on their own axis and simultaneously around the user. And thus blocking any jutsu upto S-Rank (exception for lightning i.e. A-Rank) and can take on one more attack.
Note:~Can't use any earth jutsu of S-rank and above in same turn.
~The spinning of towers can be stopped by making a single handseal.
~Can be used 2 times per battle.
~Can only be taught by Enzup.

±± Declined ±± I won't accept it with you putting "blocking any jutsu up to S-Rank except lightning". Its too general and leaves many holes. Either leave it how it is or specify what i can block with detail.

 

[House]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Been a week!

(Doton/Suiton:Hebi no hōkō) Earth and Water Release: Roar of a Lion
Rank: S
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: As the user forms 2 hand seals and slams his hand on the ground, a giant 8 by 10 meter wide lion head will erupt from the ground under the enemy. As the lion has erupted from the ground as its beginning to close its giant mouth on the enemy, water will erupt from the lion's mouth in order to entrap the enemy in water, then the lion will entrap the opponent in its mouth. As the enemy got entrapped within its mouth, the lion will smash itself into the ground, destroying itself and anything trapped within it. The water will entrap the enemy, and right after that, the lion will close its mouth. Despite the size of the lion, the lion will be able to reach into the skies, and the user may only use it within Mid-Long range.
Notes:
~Can be used twice
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~higher then S-ranked earth can't be done in the same/next turn.
~Must master Earth
~Doujutsu may see it

~Declined~ Okay, two things: reaching into the skies? How far are you referring to? Then, you can't use two elements in one move unless you've undergone Yin Yang training. Did you?

(Hebi no hōkō) Roar of a Lion
Rank: S
Type: Summon
Range: Mid-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user bites his thumb, and forms a handseal then slams his hands on the ground, "The Lion of Foundation", a giant 8 by 10 meter wide lion head will erupt from the ground under the enemy. As the lion has erupted from the ground as its beginning to close its giant mouth on the enemy, water will erupt from the lion's mouth in order to entrap the enemy in water, then the lion will entrap the opponent in its mouth. As the enemy got entrapped within its mouth, the lion will smash itself into the ground, destroying itself and anything trapped within it. The water will entrap the enemy, and right after that, the lion will close its mouth. Despite the size of the lion, the lion will be able to reach up to 20-25 meters from the ground, and the user may only use it within Mid-Long range.
Notes:
~Can be used twice
~Can be taught by Dr. House
~Unable to do any earth or water techs in the same turn.

Note to checker: I changed the name and the type to a summoning justu. If the reaching still seems OP, then feel free to adjust it to a smaller scale.

±± Declined ±± I don't like the concept of using meters to establish range of a technique. Make it so that it can reach up to long range above the ground if that is what you want. Also, this isn't a summoning. If i understood correctly you are creating a lion of chakra that can "spit water from its mouth" or at best a Lion of water. Unless you have the Lion contract. If so, you need to submit this with a link to the contract and tons of rewording from the description. The "The Lion of Foundation", a giant 8 by 10 meter wide lion head will erupt from the ground under the enemy. " needs to be reworded. Its not a real lion is it? Soooo, its a lion of what? chakra, water, wind?

(Jūho Chikarar No Ken) – Gentle Step Fist of Power
Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description: Similar to (Jūho Sōshiken) – Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists, the user forms two large lion-shaped shrouds of chakra around their hands, then thrusts them forwards at the opponent in a spinning motion to confuse and throw off the opponents aim before striking them. As the user has thrusted forward both of his fist (making a foward striking move) the shrouds or chakra will exponentially increase in size as its reaching into mid-range. As it has reached into mid-range, the two large shaped shrouds of chakra had expended as much as 4 by 5 meters each.
~Can be used 4x
~Can taught by Dr. House
~S-ranked or higher jyuuken won't be useable in the same turn.

±± Declined ±± I won't approve this as being a variation of the Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists. Also, this is more like chakra beams than gentle fist. This being said, chakra beams have been done before. Reword it and make this seem like a real Gentle Fist move.

Re-submit:

Custom style:

(Chakurasutorīmu) Chakra Stream Techniques

Description: This jutsu is basically the same concept as "Protection of the Eight Trigrams Sixty-Four Palms" as it is made up of the same ability, but it for example could take shape of a Lion, or even a wall made of constant excertion of chakra stream. From years of training, the user had came to master the flexibility of the arms and as the user is emiting a constant stream of chakra from his palm, the user is able to reach at any point around himself. As because of the user's hand movement is extremely fast (his movements becomes a blur), with extreme precise, the user will be able to create a figure like lion, or even a simple wall in a matter of seconds. The creation of techniques are extremely fast, and the technique itself may be extremely fast, as we can see how fast hinata is able to move with the technique, in order to accomplish her goals. The proof is starting at 1:17 as how fast is really the chakra lines, and how fast is the user is able to maneuver it.



If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will tear him apart because of the movements of the chakra streams being extremely fast and accurate. The user will be able to control the size of the chakra beam, allowing her to create larger, arc-shaped chakra beams that may spread out across the user's entire attack range. The proof of how fast are the types of techniques in this style is how Hinata is able to create a huge barrier with just only one chakra line streaming from each hand. The chakra streams that these techniques are made up are extremely sharp, as taking the proof when Hinata is emiting the chakra streams when she's defending herself from the bees, as we notice how easily was he cutting the bees like a knife going through butter. The texture if you haven't seen a technique being made out of chakra streams it will look like that.

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~Only may Hyuuga use this style.

Note for checker: Basically the texture of the jutsu will look like this. As you see a barrier here, imagine this barrier to be shaped of a wall or a head of a lion, made of that texture.

Note to checker: I literally changed everything, and made it into a custom style. I took your suggestion, and I won't make it into a taijutsu based style, but more what I had described within the description. I tried to make it as clear as possible that the jutsus that I'm planning to branch off from this can be both offensive, but it was meant for really to be defensive. Thank You Izuna for giving me the idea. <3

-Declined. Way too OP. Invisible, cutting the opponent in half, tremendous speed. Good idea, but you made it way too powerful. And i would like to remind you that fighting styles should be submitted as modes and jutsus-

Custom style:

(Chakurasutorīmu) Chakra Stream Techniques

Description: This jutsu is basically the same concept as "Protection of the Eight Trigrams Sixty-Four Palms" as it is made up of the same ability, but it for example could take shape of a Lion, or even a wall made of constant excertion of chakra stream. From years of training, the user had came to master the flexibility of the arms and as the user is emiting a constant stream of chakra from his palm, the user is able to reach at any point around himself. As because of the user's hand movement is extremely fast (his movements becomes a blur), with extreme precise, the user will be able to create a figure like lion, or even a simple wall in a matter of seconds. The creation of techniques are extremely fast, and the technique itself may be extremely fast, as we can see how fast hinata is able to move with the technique, in order to accomplish her goals. The proof is starting at 1:17 as how fast is really are the setting up of the chakra lines. The setting up of the jutsu can be done in matter of seconds, but actually getting to maneuver techniques which becomes figures into certain directions isn't as extreme fast, but as in a blink of an eye it will be capable of reaching on range.



If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will create deep cuts into the user's body, because of the movements of the chakra streams being fast/dense, and it's properties of being sharp. The user will be able to control the size of the chakra beam, allowing her to create larger, arc-shaped chakra beams that may spread out across the user's entire attack range. The proof of how fast are the types of techniques in this style is how Hinata is able to create a huge barrier with just only one chakra line streaming from each hand. The chakra streams that these techniques are made up are extremely sharp, due to the extremely fast handling of the chakra lines, and the chakra lines itself is really sharp. The texture if you haven't seen a technique being made out of chakra streams it will look like that. In the picture, it looks like a simple barrier connected with chakra lines, but in the reality, it is because the user are channeling and handling the chakra line so fast, it looks like that to the naked eye. In reality, the jutsu in the picture is a fully covered barrier, enabling the user to cover even liquid or solid based jutsus. The jutsu is not invisible, only parts like how the barrier above is visible for the naked eye.

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~Only may Hyuuga use this style.

Note to the checker:
~I took out this part "If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will tear him apart because of the movements of the chakra streams being extremely fast and accurate." and I put "If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will create deep cuts into the user's body, because of the movements of the chakra streams being fast/dense, and it's properties of being sharp.
~I took out this part: "..as taking the proof when Hinata is emiting the chakra streams when she's defending herself from the bees, as we notice how easily was he cutting the bees like a knife going through butter." and I put " due to the extremely fast handling of the chakra lines, and the chakra lines itself is really sharp."
~ I added this to make it more clear to the reader, and to answer Rei's approval as she mentioned invisible: "In the picture, it looks like a simple barrier connected with chakra lines, but in the reality, it is because the user are channeling and handling the chakra line so fast, it looks like that to the naked eye. In reality, the jutsu in the picture is a fully covered barrier, enabling the user to cover even liquid or solid based jutsus. The jutsu is not invisible, only parts like how the barrier above is visible for the naked eye. "
~I removed this: "and how fast is the user is able to maneuver it." and I added this, as Rei had problems with its speed "The setting up of the jutsu can be done in matter of seconds, but actually getting to maneuver techniques which becomes figures into certain directions isn't as extreme fast, but as in a blink of an eye it will be capable of reaching on range."

±± Declined ±± Your hand leaves a beam behind...so the beam is shaped in the movement your hand just made. This leaves your concept of making intricate figures by that process invalid if you really think about it. Also, this is a variation of Gentle Fist but its still gentle fist. Thus, it should be submitted as a jutsu of Gentle Fist. A custom style is something completely new. This is Gentle Fist not a new style. Submit this as a jutsu but bare in mind that if its too much based on Hinata's technique it won't be approved.