[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - I

[BishamonSama]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Resubmitting this first jutsu because it was left back on Page 266 to be approved/declined by "Someone who knows more about sealing" )

(Fuuinjutsu: Hiraishin Yusou no Jutsu)- Flying Thunder God Conveyance Seal Technique
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Type: Supplementary
Chakra: 40-60
Damage: N/A
Description: The user confines the jutsu of Flying Thunder God to the form of an easily transportable paper seal that the user carries on their person. This jutsu allows the user to "prime" the seal, meaning that the seal will teleport whatever it next touches to the location of a Flying Thunder God "destination" seal. The seal that this technique primes can be attached to a special Flying Thunder God kunai and then thrown. Upon contact with an object, the kunai will then teleport that object to a destination seal of the user's choosing. These seals can also be used to teleport previously-used jutsu (ie., a rock formation created by an an earth jutsu). Since this technique is simply a modification of a seal version of the Flying Thunder God technique, the number of its uses depends solely on the number of paper seals that the user has pre-prepared and on the user's chakra - there is no limit to the uses of the Flying Thunder God Technique. However, the larger the intended teleported object, the more chakra the user must put into "priming" the seal. The "primed" seals wear off after one turn; if the seal does not successfully come into an object within one turn of being primed, it must be primed again for further use.

NOTE: This technique appears to not be restricted much. This is true; the usages of this technique are not restricted, partially because of the unrestricted nature of Flying Thunder God and of the relative simplicity of the idea behind this technique. However, the complexity behind successfully using this technique balances out its lack of usage restriction; the user must first mark a destination, then the user must prime the pre-prepared seal, then the user must make sure that the seal somehow comes into contact with something, then the user must teleport that object to the destination, and then the user must take advantage of the object's teleportation in battle. While easier to use jutsus - say, a big dragon-shaped fireball that burns up everything in sight - have restrictions on the number of their uses, this jutsu, due to the complexity of using it correctly and due to the technique on which it's based, does not and should not have a restriction on the number of its uses.

~Declined~ Now, first of all, I must say this is a very well thought out jutsu and shall not touch it's core. However, this technique leaves me with many question regarding it's applications, hence explaining why it got declined, for the moment.

I want you to clearly explain the followings points and place them somewhere in your jutsu (description added notes):

-Can it activate upon contact of "intangible" source, like fire and lightning? If yes then will it trap the entirety of the jutsu or part of it? (this is tricky considering it'd have to act as a vacuum to transport all of it).
-What is the size limit and how does the seal recognize the boundaries of what you're trying to teleport? To be more precise; if you were to prime it and shoot it toward the ground, would the ground vanish? I certainly hope not, though I want to know what would happen. Also, what defines a "large" target? Be precise.
-I need you to restrict the amount of time this technique can be used to negate the usage of your opponent's jutsu. Even after reading your added explanation on the necessity for this jutsu to stay restriction-less, I feel it could be very easy to turn it into an easy way to counter almost anything (i.e: placing destination seal on a kunai, throwing it away, and throwing a primed kunai at any attack coming).

I think that's about it. It's worth it, great jutsu. Good luck ^^

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Original jutsu:

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(Amenonuhoko)- Heveanly Jewelled Spear
Rank: S
Type: Offense/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 40 to summon, 10 to use special abilities
Damage: 80
Description: The Amenonuhoko is a large naginata (a Japanese spear) created by the primordial Shinto Gods. The Gods gave the naginata to Izanagi and Izanami to create the first land out of nothingness. The naginata itself has a long, razor-sharp blade that never dulls. Its shaft is made of unbreakable holy bamboo. Chakra of two types per battle can be channelled through the blade and shaft of the weapon, and the shaft can be extended and retracted at will in battle, much like the Third Hokage's Enma Staff.

Note: Can only be summoned once per battle
Note: User must maintain direct contact with the naginata at all times. If the naginata falls out of the user's possession, then the user will not be able to use its special abilities for the rest of the match.
Note: User cannot use water or wind jutsus above S-rank while holding the naginata.

Submitted updated jutsu:

(Amenonuhoko)- Heveanly Jewelled Spear
Rank: S
Type: Offense/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra: 40 to summon, 10 to use special abilities
Damage: 80 (+10 to Taijutsu)
Description: The Amenonuhoko is a large naginata (a Japanese spear) created by the primordial Shinto Gods. The Gods gave the naginata to Izanagi and Izanami to create the first land out of nothingness. The naginata itself has a long, razor-sharp blade that never dulls. Its shaft is made of unbreakable holy bamboo. Chakra of any type can be channelled through the blade and shaft of the weapon, and the shaft can be extended and retracted at will in battle, much like the Third Hokage's Enma Staff. The holy power exuded by the naginata gives a mild but noticeable increase to the user's speed strength. Additionally, the naginata is imbued with the Flying Thunder God seal, allowing the user, if he is capable of using Flying Thunder God, to teleport to any location on the naginata.

Note: Can only be summoned once per battle
Note: User must remain within 5 yards of the naginata at all times. If the naginata falls out of the user's possession, then the user will not be able to use its special abilities for the rest of the match.
Note: User cannot use water, wind, or lightning jutsus above S-rank while holding the naginata.

~Approved~

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(Saru no Koukou Mo-do)- Monkey King Mode
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra: 45 (+10 each turn)
Damage: N/A (+10 to Taijutsu, +5 to Fire, Earth, and Lava)
Description: After summoning Monkey King Enma, the user and Monkey King fuse, in a similar way to how Kisame and Samehada fuse. The user's appearance becomes much more monkey-like - he gains a darker face and facial hair like Enma, with his hands and feet turning into claws. The user gains Enma's jaguar pelt, which is able to reflect Taijutsu of C-rank and below. The user gains the ability to stretch his limbs and body to lengths of up to 10 extra feet, a trait granted by the extension capabilities of Enma's staff form. The user also gains increased speed and strength rivaling that of Sage Mode. Additionally, the user's Fire, Earth, and Lava jutsus gain increased power and speed of use. This mode lasts for only three turns, however, and during those turns the user is completely incapable of using Water and Wind jutsus. In addition, after the three turns are up, Enma disappears, Enma cannot be summoned again during the battle, and the user is rendered incapable of using Taijutsu for one turn due to exhaustion.

NOTE: Only usable once per battle. Enma disappears after use.
NOTE: Wind and water jutsus cannot be used during the three turns that this mode is active.
NOTE: None of the Eight Gates can be opened during the three turns of this mode or one turn after this mode.

~Declined: I don't approve fusion techniques, even if they're overly restricted~

 

[Ryuji]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Fuuton:Shakkuri)-Wind Style:Hiccup

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Type: Suplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra Cost: 40 every turn the wind is in use.
Damage Points: N/A
Description: After performing a single hand seal the user will create a medium size wind, the wind's purpose is to enter the opponent's mouth the second he/she opens his/her mouth. Once in, the wind will enter through the opponent mouth and nose and it flows through the pharynx, past the glottis and into the larynx and trachea, ending in the lungs. After 1 of the opponents turns passes the opponent's muscles of the chest and abdomen aids the airflow to move down when the opponent inhales, and then up when exhales, causing the opponent to have hiccups and limits the user to use jutsus that are blown directly from the opponent's gut or mouth since the opponent has hiccups, the jutsus will get stuck in the mouth or trachea and damage them greatly, but jutsus like the Fireball Jutsu who only need a little blow of air and don't make contact with the mouth or gut so the opponent is safe but the jutsu will loose 10 Damage points since the hiccups will interrupt it's performance.
Note: Can only be used once per battle.
Note: The technique counts even if the technique wasn't succesfull.
Note: The user is render out of wind techniques and S-rank (and up) techniques of any kind for the next 3 turns.
Note: This jutsu's effects last for 3 turns.
Note: Can only be taught by Ryuji.

~Approved~

Custom weapon replacement, don't know if you need the link of my previous CW.

(Enpatsu no Uchite Soshite Shakugan no Doragon) - Flame-haired Hunter and Burning-eyed Dragon

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Type: Supplementary/Deffensive/Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: N/A (10 every turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Two blades crafted by a swordsmith who wanted to create an exact double of an already made sword of his, but each with a different pommel, one with a dragon and other with masked man with flaming hair. Their both of average lenght and made from high carbon chakra steel, a tsuba made of copper and the hilt is made of hardwood with wrapped in a pitched black cloth. These katanas are both kept inside a hardwood scabbard (each) strapped to a sword belt on the user.
Although as much as they seem normal, these swords posses a set of special abilities when used in Shinobi battles:

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  They react to the user chakra and gain a layer of fire around the blade that doens't hurt the user but it will harm an opponent. If the user's chakra flow becomes irregular (genjutsu, jyuuken etc) the swords will release flare of fire around the user before burning the user for a brief moment (50 Damage Points), dealting enough pain to be release out of an illusion.

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  The katanas can be use as a medium to perform fire jutsus, eliminating the use of the mouth, thus making the interval time between the use of jutsus very small. The time this takes is the same as performing the hand seals for each jutsu though this isn't much of a problem if the user has a fire affinity.

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  When the user chanells fire chakra directly into them, the blades can output flames as a blast to either attack, defend or to propel himself through the air at high speeds with great maneuverability. The force of the blast are the same as a B-rank technique with a long range. However if this in use, the user can only use 2 jutsus per turn.

Note: Fire, Kenjutsu and any jutsu based on these swords gain 10 damage points.
Note: The user can't summon anything else a turn before using these swords and 3 turns after starting using them.
Note: The user must stop using these swords after 5 turns and wait 5 turn before using them again, but with double the Chakra Cost.

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Declined. The genjutsu release needs a restriction on it regarding the rank it can be released and the amount of times it can be used.

(Enpatsu no Uchite Soshite Shakugan no Doragon) - Flame-haired Hunter and Burning-eyed Dragon

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Type: Supplementary/Deffensive/Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: N/A (10 every turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Two blades crafted by a swordsmith who wanted to create an exact double of an already made sword of his, but each with a different pommel, one with a dragon and other with masked man with flaming hair. Their both of average lenght and made from high carbon chakra steel, a tsuba made of copper and the hilt is made of hardwood with wrapped in a pitched black cloth. These katanas are both kept inside a hardwood scabbard (each) strapped to a sword belt on the user.
Although as much as they seem normal, these swords posses a set of special abilities when used in Shinobi battles:

• 
  They react to the user chakra and gain a layer of fire around the blade that doens't hurt the user but it will harm an opponent. If the user's chakra flow becomes irregular (genjutsu, jyuuken etc) the swords will release flare of fire around the user before burning the user for a brief moment (50 Damage Points), dealting enough pain to be release out of an illusion. This dispels normal S-rank illusions and A-rank Sharingan Genjutsu or other types of Genjutsu; but only once, a second time will only cause pain to the user without releasing the illusion.

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  The katanas can be use as a medium to perform fire jutsus, eliminating the use of the mouth, thus making the interval time between the use of jutsus very small. The time this takes is the same as performing the hand seals for each jutsu though this isn't much of a problem if the user has a fire affinity.

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  When the user chanells fire chakra directly into them, the blades can output flames as a blast to either attack, defend or to propel himself through the air at high speeds with great maneuverability. The force of the blast are the same as a B-rank technique with a long range. However if this in use, the user can only use 2 jutsus per turn.

Note: Fire, Kenjutsu and any jutsu based on these swords gain 10 damage points.
Note: The user can't summon anything else a turn before using these swords and 3 turns after starting using them.
Note: The user must stop using these swords after 3 turns and wait 5 turn before using them again, but with double the Chakra Cost.
Note: Dispelling a Genjutsu counts as using Kai.
Note: The user can only use the ability to create fire blast 3 times over the 3 turns the sword is being summoned.

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~Approved: I've changed the number of turns those swords can be on the field to 3 and added the note in bold~

 

[Jokey]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Tentei Sono Kin Chiri | God of the Gold dust

Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage points: -
Description: By concentrating allot of chakra trough the Gold dust, the Gold dust release and technique's will become much faster, adding much more chakra trough it and almost pumping up the chakra trough the user his whole body and trough the Gold dust itself, being able to perform Gold dust technique's much faster at an extremly rapid speed and making the Gold dust while controlling it much more easier for the user to control the Gold dust, also the reaction of the gold dust will increase allot, being equal at the speed of performing lightning technique's.

- No S/A-Ranked Gold dust technique's for the following 2 turns.
- -10 Chakra every turn this technique is activated.
- This technique ain't increasing the damage of any technique, only the impact of the technique's being used against the opponent.
- Only the Fourth Kazekage can perform this technique.
- Can only be used by BloodLust Loki and Joker Kaguya.

~Declined don't resubmit~

Hakabakashii Mokuton Houmen | Rapid Wood Release

Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage points: -
Description: By concentrating allot of chakra trough the Wood element, the Wood element and technique's will become much faster and verstile, adding much more chakra trough it and almost pumping up the chakra trough the user his whole body and trough the Wood itself, being able to perform Wood technique's much faster at an extremly rapid speed and making the Wood while controlling it much more easier for the user to control the Wood, the wood will become almost equal to Lightning currents traveling trough the ground.

- The user will lose -15 chakra every turn this technique is activated.
- No S-Rank wood technique's for the following 3 Turns.
- Can only be thaught by Joker Kaguya.
- This technique ain't increasing the damage of any technique
- The user will be exhausted after having this technique activated for more then 5 turns.

~Declined don't resubmit~

 

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Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Roshida Mode (Roshida Mode)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 3o Per Turn of Use
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user bites their thumbs, and marks their eyelids in blood. During the users next turn, the blood drips from their eyes to their
jaw line, and the user begins to grow colored feathers, as well as feathers of a different color around their neck. The c
olor of these feathers vary from person to person. Their eyes become small and black, similar to that of a hummingbird.
~Cannot be used unless:

• The user has not used any summons during this battle.
• The user has signed the hummingbird contract.
• The user has used no jutsu during the turn of use.
• The user has not used taijutsu before or after use. The use of taijutsu forces the user to exit Rashido Mode, and renders them unable to enter it again during the same battle.

~The user can exit Rashido mode at any time.
~Rashido mode can only be entered twice per battle.
~Roshida mode can only be used for a total of ten turns per battle during both uses, and counts as a jutsu each turn of use.
~Kekkei Genkai cannot be used during Roshida mode.

Declined. Strengths? Drawbacks? Regarding your 10 turns between the two usages, Absolutely not, because that means one usage can last 10 turns if you dont have a second.

Roshida Needles (Roshida Senbon)
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Long
Chakra Cost: 3o
Damage Points: 6o
Description: The user shoots a large amount of senbon-like feathers from their mouth, arms, or legs. These can be aimed at a specific point on the target or shot at them randomly.
~Can be used by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

~Approved~


Roshida Claw (Roshida Tsume)
Type: Supplementary\Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 3o
Damage Points: 6o
Description: The user focuses chakra in their hand, and creates a claw-like form out of pure chakra that is capable of piercing through human flesh.
~Can be used by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

~Approved~

Roshida Cloud (Roshida Kumo)
Type: Supplementary\Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 3o
Damage Points: 6o
Description: The user uses their feathers to create a cloud-like buildup of feathers beneath their feet that can be used as a stepping stone.
~Can be used only by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

Declined. how are the feathers staying up? you would just push them down.

Earth Release: Roshida Stone (Roshida Tsume)
Type: Supplementary\Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 3o
Damage Points: 6o
Description: The user channels chakra into an object and turns that object into a strong grey-colored stone. If the target is a living being, only their arms legs and, if possible, tail can be turned to stone. In this case, the user must make direct contact with that limb, or make contact with an object connected to that limb, such as turning a persons leg to stone by touching the ground they are standing on. If the target is touching an object that the object the user is touching is touching, this cannot be used. I.e. Standing on a pole connected to the ground the user is standing on.
~Usable thrice per battle.
~Can be used only by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

Declined. Do not resubmit

Roshida Mode (Roshida Mode)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 3o Per Turn of Use
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user bites their thumbs, and marks their eyelids in blood. During the users next turn, the blood drips from their eyes to their
jaw line, and the user begins to grow colored feathers, as well as feathers of a different color around their neck. The c
olor of these feathers vary from person to person. Their eyes become small and black, similar to that of a hummingbird.
~Cannot be used unless:

• The user has not used any summons during this battle.
• The user has signed the hummingbird contract.
• The user has used no jutsu during the turn of use.
• The user has not used taijutsu before or after use. The use of taijutsu forces the user to exit Rashido Mode, and renders them unable to enter it again during the same battle.

~The user can exit Rashido mode at any time.
~Rashido mode can only be entered twice per battle.
~Roshida mode can only be used for a total of ten turns per battle during both uses, and counts as a jutsu each turn of use. Can only be used for up to five turns per usage. Upon exit, the user cannot attempt activation again for three of the user's turns.
~The user's speed is increased during usage (x1.5 on the Speed Chart) as well as their ability to see certain speeds (x1.5 on the Speed Sight chart). The users speed is less than normal for three turns after exit. (x 0.5 on Speed Chart. Does not apply to sight).
~The user's summons for the hummingbird contract can be done without hand seals during usage of Rashido mode. The user's summons all disipate upon exit of Rashido mode. These summons cannot be called upon for three turns after exit of Roshida mode.
~During Roshida mode, Kekkei and Special Abilities are forbidden, and cannot be used between the two usages. They can, however, be used before the first usage and three turns after each usage, with the exception of if the user wishes to use it a second time.


[On a side note, this has been changed drastically, and must be checked again completely.]

Roshida Cloud (Roshida Kumo)
Type: Supplementary\Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 3o
Damage Points: 6o
Description: The user uses their feathers to create a cloud-like buildup of densely packed feathers beneath their feet that can be used as a stepping stone. Once used, the feathers are pushed in the other direct, propelling the user.
~Up to three clouds can be created per use.
~Only usable by hummingbird summons or a human in Roshida mode.

Roshida Sword (Roshida Ken)
Type: Attac
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra : 6o
Description: The user creates a sword-like beak similar to the beak created by Hachidori Hands. It is a javelin-shaped spear, and can be aimed and thrown at the target. As soon as it lands/hits, it disipates in a cloud of feathers.
~Can only be used by a hummingbird summon or a human in Rashido mode.

Roshida Drill (Roshida Doriru)
Type: Supplementary\Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 3o
Damage Points: 6o
Description: The user creates to large beaks similarly to how beaks are created through Hachidori Hands. The beaks rotate, acting like spinning drills. The user goes underground and tunnels underneath the target, and comes up from underneath them with the beak.
~Can only be used by a hummingbird summon or a human in Rashido mode.

Rashido Whip (Rashido Muchi)
Type: Supplementary\Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 3o
Damage Points: 6o
Description: The user creates a whip of tightly woven feathers in the form of a long whip, which can be used to stile the opponent.

~All Declined: Over weekly submissions~

 

[Bhil]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Name: Onyx Foot Style - (Onikisu Ashi Sensu)
Description: The Onyx Foot Style is a unique use of taijutsu developed by a taijutsu ninja who was also a great chef , this was developed to allow the cook to fight effectively without the possibility of damaging his hands , a cooks prized possession. Due to this practitioners of this style have been noted to give off a relaxed image during the fight by usually either putting their hands in their pockets or folding their arms , the only time a practitioner of this style will use their hands is to prop themselves to use a wider array of kicks. As a fighting style, the style boasts a wide and impressive array of kicks, coupled with super acrobatic skill make it a very versatile fighting technique, allowing the user to effectively weave continuous and powerful attacks upon adversaries , though the use of momentum they can use the continuous combos for a lesser cost of energy but must end the combos after a certain amount of time.

Onyx Foot Style - Neck Meat - (Onikisu Ashi Sensu - Collier)
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: This attack that the user executes from standing , placing their hands in their pockets they will deliver a powerful kick directly to the opponents neck. This is achieved with very little back lift which is surprising , the users foot will come in a roundhouse fashion sweeping from the side to attempt to damage the opponents neck. This is all done from a casual standing position with no indication of an attack.


Onyx Foot Style - Shoulder Meat - (Onikisu Ashi Sensu - Epoule)
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: This attack is used for a standing position much like Collier , this though is a forceful kick directed straight down with the heel. This axe kick as given away by the name is intended to hit the enemy on top of their shoulder , the idea behind this is an attempt t either knock the opponent off balance , or send them crashing into the floor with the force driving them down on that side taking them off their feet.

~All approved~

Updating all into:

Name: Black Leg Taijutsu - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu)
Description: Black Leg Style Taijutsu is a unique use of taijutsu developed by a taijutsu ninja who was also a great chef , this was developed to allow the cook to fight effectively without the possibility of damaging his hands , a cooks prized possession. Due to this practitioners of this style have been noted to give off a relaxed image during the fight by usually either putting their hands in their pockets or folding their arms , the only time a practitioner of this style will use their hands is to prop themselves to use a wider array of kicks. As a fighting style, the style boasts a wide and impressive array of kicks, coupled with super acrobatic skill make it a very versatile fighting technique, allowing the user to effectively weave continuous and powerful attacks upon adversaries , though the use of momentum they can use the continuous combos for a lesser cost of energy but must end the combos after a certain amount of time.

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Black Leg Taijutsu - Neck Meat - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Collier)
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: This attack that the user executes from standing , placing their hands in their pockets they will deliver a powerful kick directly to the opponents neck. This is achieved with very little back lift which is surprising , the users foot will come in a roundhouse fashion sweeping from the side to attempt to damage the opponents neck. This is all done from a casual standing position with no indication of an attack.


Black Leg Taijutsu - Shoulder Meat - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Epoule)
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: This attack is used for a standing position much like Collier , this though is a forceful kick directed straight down with the heel. This axe kick as given away by the name is intended to hit the enemy on top of their shoulder , the idea behind this is an attempt t either knock the opponent off balance , or send them crashing into the floor with the force driving them down on that side taking them off their feet.

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Black Leg Taijutsu - Rib meat - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Cotellete)
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: An attack as given away by the name is primarily focused on the ribs of the opponent, the user will fall down onto one of their hands and perform a one handed handstand. As they are falling they bring their legs over and deliver a straight kick to the ribs, this can be and usually is if the attack hits followed with Selle.

Black Leg Taijutsu - Under Saddle Meat - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Selle)
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description: This is an attack which is commonly used in combination with Cotellete , the user using the momentum from the Cotellete attack. The user who is still in a handstand will use the momentum to spin back the other way, to deliver a fierce sweeping kick to the opponents lower back or lumbar region.


Black Leg Taijutsu - Chest/Breast meat - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Poitrine)
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 30
Description:This attack is different from a lot in the style as it is delivered as a straight stabbing kick , this attack is quicker than most in this style due to its directness. Although it is better in terms of speed it forfeits the large attack area of the sweeping kicks , thus making it a quite balanced attack.

I have permission from Black-Leg To create these.

~All Approved~

 

[Kurisutina]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Satetsu no Gādian / 砂鉄のガーディアン) - Guardian of Iron Sand
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offense / Defense / Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50 (-20 per turn.)
Damage Points: 90 (-30 every turn to user.)
Description: This jutsu is a style that was created by the Third Kazekage in order to fend off invaders of Sunagakure. After gathering an immense amount of Iron Sand, he begins to create a gigantic "armored" warrior that holds a spear and shield. The guardian is formed behind the user and exposes the user. The spear can be launch from the guardian's hand by changing the polarity of the Iron Sand. The spear loses shape once passing mid-range however. The shield can block one focused S-Rank jutsu and then it will dissipate. The guardian himself loses shape after being hit by an A-Rank jutsu.
~The user must have used Iron Sand Gathering twice.
~The user can use the Iron Sand from the guardian for a medium for his Iron Sand. (No Iron Sand jutsu used without using him as a medium unless it's with a detached part of him.)
~The guardian lasts three turns and then loses shape.
~The guardian causes so much strain on the user's Kekkai Genkai that it renders it unusable after using the guardian.
~The user's guardian makes the user have to use only magnetism jutsu or Iron Sand jutsu while the Guardian is active.
~If the guardian grabs onto the opponent, the guardian can destroy an opponent with its hands. (Iron Sand Burial)
~While using, the user's speed drops two stages (Mugi's speed chart), and after expiring, it drops one more stage. (-2 while active, -3 after use.)
~Usable only once per battle.

~Declined: First of all, no reference to the speed chart. Is it only to be used if a debate arise. Secondly, lower the abilities of your shield. As I've said before to many members; Amaterasu and Kirin are S-ranked, can they be blocked by your technique? If you think it can, explain why~

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(Satetsu Atsumari) - Iron Sand Gathering
Type: Supplementary
Rank: C
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The User uses a magnetic field that expands outwards to Long-Range and begins to draw in Iron Sand from iron deposits in the nearby area. The Iron Sand isn't as fast as the user's normal Iron Sand as it is much denser and heavier then normal Iron Sand.

~Can be done at the start of a battle to gather large amounts of Iron Sand.
~Takes two turns for all the Iron Sand to accumulate.

(Satetsu no Shotto / 砂鉄のショット) - Iron Sand Shots
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 50
Description: The user takes their Iron Sand and fires multiple shots of Iron Sand that can punch through B-Rank Doton jutsu. The user fires the shots of Iron Sand by changing the polarity of small amounts of Iron Sand so that they repel against other forces and shoot out with speed that creates a large force.
~Only usable 3 times.

~Approved~

 

[The Doctor]

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(Meiton:Kyōbu bīmu) Dark release: Chest Beam
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Type: Attack
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description:The user places his hands to create a sphere over his chest. Afterwards the user focuses dark chakra in his hands. Then, he creates a circle of dark chakra in the back of the sphere. The user release his chakra, and produces an extremely large continuous beam that can be fired at an opponent.
Note:May only be used by Mockingbird
Note:May only be used twice per battle.

~Declined: This "beam" jutsu was done already, countless times~

(Suiton:Misutoaianmeiden) Water release: Mists's Iron Maiden
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Type: Attack
Chakra: 30
Damage: 60
Description: The user will focus his chakra into the mist. Afterwards, using the water molecules in the air or mist, the user will create small spikes, about the size of a finger, which can be shot towards an opponent. or can stay suspended in the air.
Note:May only be used by Mockingbird and Demosthenes
Note:May only be used four times per battle
Note:May not be used on the first turn

~Declined: Explain where the spikes will form and how they will attack the opponent. Also, make it Short-Medium range~

 

[Heister]

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I edited it:

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(Sandā no ma no katana) - Katana of the Thunder Demon
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The Katana of the Thunder Demon is a blade known for its devastating raiton based techniques, it's blade is one meter long. The sword is built with the a metal that has an affinity towards raiton chakra, and allows a person to pour their own raiton chakra into it making it's blade sharper (able to cut through A-rank doton projectiles). The second ability of the blade is to materialize an A-Rank beam of lightning that hits any target that is within mid-range (blockable by B-rank and higher wind jutsu)
~Using the beam counts as one jutsu for the turn
~Beam can only be used once per battle
~The raiton chakra charging the sword is A-Rank, and can cut through A-rank and below doton projectiles/armor and counts towards one the users 3 per turn moves.
~Can only be used by Heister
~Can only keep sword charged with raiton chakra for 4 turns
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Not changing anything but allowing other people to use it in battle:

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(Sandā no ma no katana) - Katana of the Thunder Demon
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The Katana of the Thunder Demon is a blade known for its devastating raiton based techniques, it's blade is one meter long. The sword is built with the a metal that has an affinity towards raiton chakra, and allows a person to pour their own raiton chakra into it making it's blade sharper (able to cut through A-rank doton projectiles). The second ability of the blade is to materialize an A-Rank beam of lightning that hits any target that is within mid-range (blockable by B-rank and higher wind jutsu)
~Using the beam counts as one jutsu for the turn
~Beam can only be used once per battle
~The raiton chakra charging the sword is A-Rank, and can cut through A-rank and below doton projectiles/armor and counts towards one the users 3 per turn moves.
~Can only be used with Wolfwood's approval, must be summoned to battlefield
~Can only keep sword charged with raiton chakra for 4 turns
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~Approved~

 

[Kaziname]

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(Suiton: Umi no ō no Fīrudo) - Water Style: Field of Sea Kings
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: By distributing one's own suiton chakra around whole battlefield, user can enhance the forming speed of water jutsus two fold. Although jutsu is quite useful it is also a double-edged sword. Unfortunately jutsu was never fully completed thus jutsu works both ways - it enhances the forming speed of all water jutsus in the field (both user's and his opponent's).
*Lasts for 4 turns
*Can be only used once
*Can be only used by Kaziname


~Declined: I like the idea, but I'm not sure I get the bold part. Make it clear and I'll approve~

If you think it is approvable without that (in my opinion big restriction ) "opponent-gets-the-boost-too":

(Suiton: Umi no ō no Fīrudo) - Water Style: Field of Sea Kings
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: By distributing one's own suiton chakra around whole battlefield, user can enhance the forming speed of water jutsus two fold.
*Lasts for 4 turns
*Can be only used once
*Can be only used by Kaziname

If you think that that kind of restriction is needed:

(Suiton: Umi no ō no Fīrudo) - Water Style: Field of Sea Kings
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: By distributing one's own suiton chakra around whole battlefield, user can enhance the forming speed of water jutsus two fold. However - due to large concentration of suiton chakra, it enhances forming speed of opponent's water jutsus two fold as well.
*Lasts for 4 turns
*Can be only used once
*Can be only used by Kaziname

(Suton: Umi no Me) - Water Style: Eyes of the Sea
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 25 (+10 per turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: By utilizing suiton chakra user is able to create eyes of water to aid him in combat by covering blind spots or in spying by allowing him to scan the area without exposing himself to danger.

~Declined: Elaborate on the eye itself. Is it on your body? Does it fly like Gaara, how long does it stays on the field, does it reganarate if hit?~

(Suton: Umi no Me) - Water Style: Eyes of the Sea
Rank: B
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 25 (+10 per turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: By utilizing suiton chakra user is able to create eyes of water to aid him in combat by covering blind spots or in spying by allowing him to scan the area without exposing himself to danger. Eyes levitate on the battlefield just like Gaara's.
*They don't regenerate if hit
*They can remain active for a maximum of [X] turns

Well, I thought that since they are like Gaara's technique, they should stay active for as long as I send chakra to keep them active (that's why I've put "(+10 per turn)" in chakra cost). If you don't agree then replace the [X] with number of turns you see fit.

(Suiton: Appurippu!) - Water Style: Rip-up!
Type: Defense
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: By using water chakra user will "rip-up" water molecules (H2O) and separate them thus seemingly "erasing" a body of water. After user separates them he has to keep them divided by coating them with chakra in order for them to not merge again into water. Since technique requires precision, substantial amount of chakra and a lot of concentration the body of water can't be too big or else the technique will fail (biggest amount of water user can "erase" is roughly the size of "Water Dragon Bullet").
*Due to complexity of jutsu it can only be used twice
*Can only be used by Kaziname

~Declined: Far-fetched (even though it's scientifically possible). Do not resubmit~

~All Declined: Over weekly submissions~

After reading this maybe (and maybe not xd) you would reconsider and approve the jutsu - I know you said "Do not resubmit", but really. Far-fetched? Isn't this jutsu one of the "realistic" ones? With this jutsu, I actually do a thing that is scientifically explainable. How about transforming you body into fire (or earth; water; whatever)? In jutsus like that you basically transform every molecule of your body into given element (yeah, definitely not far-fetched -.-) and things like that can't be explained even by science - yet, they got approved.

What I meant by far fetch is, there's a difference between the Narutoverse and our world. Even if something is possible in one, doesn't mean it works in the other. Our laws of physics obviously aren't the same in the Narutoverse.

Also, to efficiently separate the molecule into both H+ and OH-, you need to run an electrical current in the water, it's called electrolysis. If you were to separate a whole body of water, you do realize the air around you would be filled with Hydrogen, right? And since you needed to use an electrical current to achieve this, you'd most likely blow up all the air around you. When someone perform electrolysis, they generally do it on a small scale, and if they do it on large scale, it's certainly not in the open.

If you want to play with the science, do it right

 

[-Kenshin-]

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(Uindo& faiākonbinēshon: Faiaharikēn)Wind and Fire Combination: Fire Hurricanes

Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range:Short- Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user will Summon as clone and then release release all his Fuuton Chakra into the air and Summon Three Hurricans Like vortexs then at the same time the Hurricane Votrexs are coming down from the sky The clone will Release a Large wide and Long stream of fire into each of the Vortex's Creating three Vortexs Fire that the user can direct at his oppent

*Note: Can only be used by -Itachi- unless tought by -Itachi-
*Note: Can only be used Twice a Battle
*Note: After using this jutsu the user can only use A ranked Techs for the next turn

~Decline: Over weekly submissions~

 

[Zanji]

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(KaDoton Hijutsu: Tera Seiryoku) Secret Fire-Earth Release: Terra Force
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive
Range: Long
Chakra: 60
Damage: 100 (-40 to the user due to the strain on the user)
Description: The user slams both of their fists into the ground releasing a mass amount of chakra into the ground forcing 10 large pillars of Fire/Magma/Earth Energy to erupt out of the ground around the user and collide high above him forming a massive sphere above the user. He then jumps high into the air and without grabbing the sphere he will either slam the technique into the opponent or throw the sphere at his opponent. The Sphere will then explode upon impact of the opponent or will carry the opponent away from the user then proceed to explode. The explosion is easily strong enough to completely destroy a large cliff side leaving a crater or destroying a mountain.
Note: Can only be used once
Note: Can only be used by Zanji or taught by Zanji.
Note: Cannot use Fire or Earth techniques A-Rank or higher for the next 3 turns.
Note: Is unaffected by an opponents Explosion or Implosion Techniques that affect Earth or Fire Techniques. Due to the user mixing a mass quantity of his own chakra into the technique, and the mixture of elements.
Note: Can only use 2 techniques per turn for the next 3 turns.
(There is no literal translation for Terra, I looked in japanese its Terra, Tera or テラ)

Suiton Hijutsu: Posaidon Seiryoku) Secret Water Release: Poseidon Force
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Offensive
Range: Long
Chakra: 60
Damage: 100 (-40 To the user due to the strain)
Description: The user stands out on a large body of water and holds his hands out to the side and sends a mass amount of chakra into the water threw his feet and cause 10 large pillars of spiraling water to erupt out of the water, and collide high above the users head and form into a gigantic sphere. The user will then proceed to jump high into the air and without grabbing the sphere they will either slam or throw the sphere into the opponent. The sphere will explode either on contact or will carry the opponent away then proceed to explode. When this jutsu is used it drains all the water the user was standing on, and the explosion is strong enough to destroy a large cliff side leaving a crater or completely destroy a mountain.
Note: Can only be used once.
Note: Can only be used by Zanji or taught by Zanji.
Note: Can not use any Water Techniques B-Rank or higher for the next 3 turns.
Note: Is unaffected by an opponents Explosion or Implosion Water techniques. Due to the user mixing a mass quantity of his own chakra into the technique.
Note: Can only use 2 techniques per turn for the next 3 turns.
(again there is No literal translation for Poseidon, so I just spelled it a tad differently)

~Both Declined: OP~ Elaborate on the size of the sphere, what it can block if countered? Also, where are the physical impact on your body that makes it Forbidden? There's a lot of restriction, which is ok, but none that physically affects you, which is the point of a Forbidden jutsu. Also, check the bold part. Draining all the water you're standing on? What happens if you're standing on the ocean? There's work to do with those two~

 

[Serpent]

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(Kchuysei: Sune-ku Kutsurogi) Summoning: Snake Room:
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user slams their hands together and a room warps around the battlefield. this room is an unique chakra barrier that appears to have solid walls, the walls move with the opponent keeping them in the center of the room. The room is filled with thousands of snakes, these snakes can be bent to the user's will to attack the enemy.
Note:
-No S-Rank next turn
-Must be able to summon snakes
-Can only be used once per battle
-Only last for 3 turns
-Can only be taught by Serpent

Declined. Make it stationary. Is it just 4 walls or does it have a roof?

(Sune-ku Ishiki) Snake Senses :
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user focuses his chakra to enter a state of a Snake. their senses change drastically. there pupils become slanted like that of a snake. this doesn't have any effect on the eye site. Their skin also becomes more scaly and sensitive allowing them to feel any vibrations on or in the ground. and tongue become's forked and makes them able to taste an opponents whereabouts in the air.
Note:
-Must be able to summon snakes.
-Can only be used twice per battle.
-Can only last for 3 turns.
-Can only be taught by Serpent.

Declined. Tone down the ability some. You may be able to "smell" the scent in the air, but it depends on the wind direction. it the wind is moving away from you, my scent will never reach you.

(Kchuysei: Sune-ku Kutsurogi) Summoning: Snake Room:
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user slams their hands together and a room warps around the battlefield. this room is an unique chakra barrier that appears to have solid walls with 8 sides in the shape of a octagon and a dome cling, the walls appear with the opponent in the center of the room. The room is filled with thousands of snakes, these snakes can be bent to the user's will to attack the enemy.
Note:
-No S-Rank next turn
-Must be able to summon snakes
-Can only be used once per battle
-Only last for 3 turns
-Can only be taught by Serpent


(Sune-ku Ishiki) Snake Senses :
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user focuses his chakra to enter a state of a Snake. their senses change drastically. there pupils become slanted like that of a snake. this doesn't have any effect on the eye site. Their skin also becomes more scaly and sensitive allowing them to feel any vibrations on or in the ground. the tongue become's forked and makes them able to taste an opponents whereabouts in the air up to Mid range.
Note:
-Must be able to summon snakes.
-Can only be used twice per battle.
-Can only last for 3 turns.
-Can only be taught by Serpent.

I'm not sure how to indicate wind detection in a battle so to avoid arguments in battles to who is up or down wind I made it up to Mid range if that's okay with you..

~All Declined: over weekly submissions~

 

[-Haku Yuki-]

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Summoning Animal: osprey

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Scroll Owner: -Haku Yuki-
Other Users who have signed contract: none
Summoning Boss if existing:n/a ( will add after approval)
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:n/a

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~Declined: Contract already exist~

 

[Daemon]

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(Taijutsu|Kankoui|Fukyuu Itami)-Fighting Technique|First Act|Opening Scene
Type:Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:N/A
Damage Points:60
Description: The user upper cuts the opponent lifting him some inches into the air. Then follows up with a round house kick to the chest knocking the air out of the victim. He or She then grabs the foes legs as they fly back and slam them back and forth on the ground. Once the opponent hits the ground for the last time, the performer kicks them in the chest causing them to slide across the ground and crash into a wall.
(Can only be taught by Daemon)

(Taijutsu|Kankoui|Kyuukei)-Fighting Technique|First Act| Intermission
Type:Attack
Rank:B
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:20
Damage Points:40
Description: The user focuses chakra into their legs and starts charging at the opponent. The performer grabs the arm of the opponent and uses their right knee to slam into the elbow breaking the arm of the unlucky sparring partner. Then the user uses his/her right hand to slam the face of the opponent in the ground.
(Can only be taught by Daemon)


(Taijutsu|Kankoui|Kishou Zecchou)-Fighting Technique|First Act|Rising Climax
Type:Attack
Rank:S
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: After the intermission is performed, the user grabs the opponent by the collar and tosses him or her into the air. He pivots his foot and charges chakra into his elbow. As the opponent falls, He/She lands directly on the users elbow breaking in their rib cage and puncturing the lungs. He quickly turns and grabs the opponent in the neck and drives them into the ground cracking the surface of the terrain. As he holds on to the neck, he begins to run which in return dragging the opponent through the ground then slamming them into a wall.
(Can only be taught by Daemon)
(can only be used after Fighting Technique|First Act| Intermission is performed.)
(Can only be used once per battle).

~All Approved: Just took away the last sentence of your "Rising Climax" jutsu~

(Taijutsu|Kankoui|Doramatikku Shuukyoku)-Fighting Technique|First Act|Dramatic Finale
Type:Attack
Rank:Forbidden
Range:Short
Chakra Cost:50
Damage Points:100
Description: After the climax is performed, the user sharpens the edge of the chakra on his finger tips so he can dig into the flesh of the opponent. He then clenches his fingers giving him a firm grip. He lift the opponent of their feet and throws them in the air. He jumps after them and puts the opponent in a full nelson and crashing him into the ground face first. Maintaining the full nelson. He lifts him up again and throws him forward. Chakra then surges through the body of the user increasing his speed for this move only(he moves about as fast as Gai without his weights.) He then catches up to the opponent and punches them in the face hitting them into the side of a wall. He then begins to charge full speed and ram his shoulder into the mid section of the enemy killing them on impact.
(Can only be taught by Daemon)
(can only be used after Fighting Technique|First Act|Rising Climax is performed.)
(Can only be used once per battle).

~Declined: OP and uselessly labeled Forbidden rank. Re-work the description since I declined that part about having chakra in your finger to "hook" your opponent in the rib-cage~

 

[BishamonSama]

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Summoning Animal: osprey

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Scroll Owner: -Haku Yuki-
Other Users who have signed contract: none
Summoning Boss if existing:n/a ( will add after approval)
Other Summoning Animals tied to contract:n/a

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I already hold the Osprey summoning contract.

 

[-Kenshin-]

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(Raitoningurirīsu: Raitoningukoifisshu)Raiton: Lightining Coy Fish

Type: Attack
Rank:S
Range: Short- Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points:80
Description: The user will release their Raiton Chakra into the air and use shape manuplation to shape the Ligthening to look like a Giant Coy Fish. the user will then direct the coy fish at his oppent.The Coy Fish itself is about 20 times the size of the user so it covers a very large area

*Note: Can only be used by -Itachi- unless taught by -Itachi-
*Note: Cant use anymore S ranked Lightening for the Next turn after the jutsu is completed
*Note: The jutsu can be used three times a Battle

~Declined: Over weekly limit~

 

[Phobos]

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(I got permission from Dan to sumbit this.. he actualy told me to do so lol)

(Hyouton: Aisu Kakujuu) - Ice Release: Ice expansion
Type: Attack/Defence
Rank: A
Range: Short - long
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points: + 25
Description: After releasing an ice jutsu the user will perform 2 handseals as they release their chakra into the ice jutsu. By doing so, the user will lower the ice temperature even further, strenghtening the ice jutsu and boosting its power by 25 damage points.

- Can only use used on ice the user or the users summon has created
- Can only be used once one each ice jutsu created
- Can only be used 3 times
- Need both my, and Pervy's permission to be allowed to use this

~Declined~ This would require that you "expand" your water and earth chakra and would result in using this technique twice . I will decline the one I accepted accepted with Ice. These expansion techniques shall remain centered around the 5 basic elements.

(Yobidashi-moto) - Invoker
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: -
Description: User makes three handseals and three orbs (about size of a fist) appear rotating above their head, those orbs are symbolizing elements the user is currently able to use. The orbs can be- fire, wind, fire, lightning, earth and ice. They are all easily distinguishable ( looks like element they represent).
Depending on what orbs the user is using, the user have their body filled by chakra represented by those orbs allowing them more power for those elements. Each orb increase the power of corresponding techniques by +5. Any combination of orbs is possible but no other elements can be used other then those represented by currently used orbs.
If the user want to change orb configuration (re-invoke), they can do so by using three handseals, but it will count as a jutsu and can be only used every other turn.

- Every orb increase its representing element's power by 5
- Re-invoking can be only done every other turn
- Once per battle
- Lasts until canceled

~Declined~ I want a fixed number of turns, a maximum number of re-invocations and a minimum number of turn you need to use that element before switching it for something else.

 

[Demosthenes]

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(Hyuuga Buzoku Genjutsu: Ryouiki no Hakke) Hyuuga Clan Genjutsu: Field of Divination
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will take a stance, leaning low on their dominant leg as they slide it behind them, sliding the other one forward. They will then extend their non-dominant arm forward, facing the palm upward, slanting the arm at a downward angle, letting the back of the hand hover a few inches above the non-dominant knee. The user will simultaneously extend their dominant arm back, facing that palm upward as well as they nearly fully extend that arm, giving it a slight bend in the middle as the arm is slanted upward. As the stance is made, the user sends an outward wave of chakra that, should it hit the enemy, puts them under a genjutsu. The landscape around the enemy will become dark as they find moving their body to be very difficult to move, as if they were completely engulfed in liquid concrete. They will then see the user (The user of the genjutsu is not darkened, only the landscape.) standing in the center of a glowing, green, circular Eight Trigrams symbol in within which the enemy will be standing.
Note: If this technique is successful, the user must follow it up with a Jyuuken/Tai/Ken attack.
Note: Can be used twice per battle

~Approved~ I've edited the chakra cost to fit the regular template.

(Hakkeshou Bakushin) Eight Trigrams Heavenly Dash
Type: Defensive/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 60
Damage Points: (Should the enemy be touched directly, 60.)
Description: The user crouches down, emitting chakra from all of their tenketsu as they quickly condense the chakra into a spherical shape and crouch down, leaning forward. Then, using the same means of chakra manipulation as with Eight Trigrams Heavenly Spin, the will cause the chakra to spin forward, causing them to roll in that direction at a significant speed, allowing them to maneuver out of the way of techniques/defend against them while speeding across the battlefield.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
Note: The user is incapable of performing other techniques while this one if active.

~Declined do not resubmit~ I will not allow you to roll around in a hamster ball -___-

 

[Professor Sarutobi]

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(Shikon Chi Hanone)-Were-hyena Mode
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage Points: +30 to taijutsu attacks
Description: The user gathers a huge amount of chakra and with the teachings of the elder hyenas begin transforming from a man into a Hyena-ninja hybrid. After entering this new form the user undergoes several changes, his hide is of the densest kind of hyena hide and is immune to lightning jutsu up to S rank. The users speed and strength increases dramatically and their sense of smell, sight (able to see at night and far away distances) hearing and touch.
-Can feel vibrations in the ground, smell opponents and hear far better then human ears up to mid range.
-Can track opponent by sight even in dense mist or thick jungles up to long range
-Takes one full turn to enter.
- Speed increase to that of Rock Lee without weights when running on all fours.
- Teeth capable of crushing bone, rendering the body part useless.
- Capable of producing a laugh that traps the opponent(s) in an A ranked Genjutsu that lasts for 1 turn. In the Genjutsu, the opponent(s) will think that they are turning into a werehyena themselves, bones distorting and causing immense pain.
-Lasts 4 turns.
-Only people who have signed the hyena contract can use
- Useable twice per battle.

~Declined: I see a lot of abilities, but no restrictions. This modes grant you too many abilities, and you developed each of them to an extent that could be considered a jutsu on it's own (sight, smell, touch...etc). Also, the genjutsu is over the top in my opinion.~

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(Genjutsu: Douzen Ada ) Illusionary Technique: Natural Enemy
Type: Defence
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: n/a
Description: User does 5 hand seals and places his opponent's summoning in a genjutsu that makes them see the user summon as their natural predator four times the size of them (the opponent's summon), paralyzing them with fear and causing them to reverse summon away to safety.
-Doesn't work on boss summons
-Twice per battle.
-Can't use A-rank and above Genjutsu for the next two turns after this jutsu
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

~Accepted: it's a great idea, but I've changed some things. If you don't like it VMs and I'll decline your jutsu so you can re-submit it again with your own alterations.~

(Genjutsu:ningenbanare yobou ) Illusionary Technique: Superhuman Confidence
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: n/a
Description: User places his opponent in a genjutsu that makes them think that they are invincible and do not need to defend against the next attack and allow it to hit them expecting to be unphased.
-Only taught by Professor Sarutobi.

~Declined: Already exist ~

Twin Swords of the Fiery Storm, Xull'ayne and Nill'yn
Rank: S
Type: Summon
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40 if summoned
Damage points: +10 to Wind and Fire jutsu (one element each sword)
Description: These two swords are each blessed by an ancient sage to grant a portion of their great mastery of an element.
The first sword is Xull'ayne and is blessed with the power of an ancient Fire Sage and can cut through any Fire technique and can be used to release any Fire jutsu by the user through the blade. The second sword is Nill'yn and is blessed with the power of an ancient Wind Sage and can cut through any Wind technique and can be used to release any wind jutsu by the user through the blade.
Due to being wielded simultaneously very often the two swords are able to perform fire/wind combos.

-Can only be wielded by Professor Sarutobi.
-Can't cut through Forbidden rank Wind or Fire.
-Can't be used to release Forbidden rank Wind or Fire.
-Twice per battle (once each sword) the user can tap into the power of one sword and coat their body in the sage's ancient chakra to use it as barrier from that element making them immune to wind or Fire for the rest of that turn. (depending on which sword is used)
-Tapping into a sword counts as one of the user's 3 moves.
-The swords are carried on the user's waist until needed, can still be tapped into when on the waist.

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~Declined: Not only is the ability to cut through any wind/fire is OP, but you didn't restrict it's usage~

i only submitted 4 a few days ago so this is my 5th for the week i'll work on the others in the meanwhile. side note, the enhanced senses part is one of my CJs xd

resubmitting, added the bold parts as restrictions and took out a lot of the extra abilities as this is mainly for taijutsu

(Shikon Chi Hanone)-Were-hyena Mode
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short
Chakra: 40
Damage Points: +30 to taijutsu attacks
Description: The user gathers a huge amount of chakra and with the teachings of the elder hyenas begin transforming from a man into a Hyena-Ninja hybrid. After entering this new form the user undergoes several changes, his hide is of the densest kind of hyena hide and is immune to lightning jutsu up to S rank.
-Takes one full turn to enter.
- Speed increase to that of Rock Lee without weights when running on all fours.
- Teeth capable of crushing bone, rendering the body part useless.
-Lasts 4 turns.
-Can't use ninjutsu while in this form.
-Can't use elemental ninjutsu above A rank in this form.
-Only people who have signed the hyena contract can use
- Useable twice per battle but must wait 4 turns after it ends to enter again.

~Decline do not resubmit~ Sorry for making you waste your time the other day by not declining it for good and making you resubmit, but this is a no-go. There are many jutsus that allow you to merge/transform into animals and they're all grotesque RP wise (I wanted to be nice the other day and give you a chance). I won't allow such jutsus.

 

[BishamonSama]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

What Izuna said o-o:

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~Declined~ Now, first of all, I must say this is a very well thought out jutsu and shall not touch it's core. However, this technique leaves me with many question regarding it's applications, hence explaining why it got declined, for the moment.

I want you to clearly explain the followings points and place them somewhere in your jutsu (description added notes):

-Can it activate upon contact of "intangible" source, like fire and lightning? If yes then will it trap the entirety of the jutsu or part of it? (this is tricky considering it'd have to act as a vacuum to transport all of it).
-What is the size limit and how does the seal recognize the boundaries of what you're trying to teleport? To be more precise; if you were to prime it and shoot it toward the ground, would the ground vanish? I certainly hope not, though I want to know what would happen. Also, what defines a "large" target? Be precise.
-I need you to restrict the amount of time this technique can be used to negate the usage of your opponent's jutsu. Even after reading your added explanation on the necessity for this jutsu to stay restriction-less, I feel it could be very easy to turn it into an easy way to counter almost anything (i.e: placing destination seal on a kunai, throwing it away, and throwing a primed kunai at any attack coming).

I think that's about it. It's worth it, great jutsu. Good luck ^^

(Fuuinjutsu: Hiraishin Yusou no Jutsu)- Flying Thunder God Conveyance Seal Technique
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Type: Supplementary
Chakra: 40-60
Damage: N/A
Description: The user confines the jutsu of Flying Thunder God to the form of an easily transportable paper seal that the user carries on their person. This jutsu allows the user to "prime" the seal, meaning that the seal will teleport whatever it next touches to the location of a Flying Thunder God "destination" seal. The seal that this technique primes can be attached to a special Flying Thunder God kunai and then thrown. Upon contact with an object, the kunai will then teleport that object to a destination seal of the user's choosing. These seals can also be used to teleport previously-used jutsu (ie., a rock formation created by an an earth jutsu). The seal does not - and cannot - activate when coming into contact with intangible elements such as fire or lightning. The seal can only activate when it comes into contact with something tangible that has chakra flowing through it - a person, a previously-used jutsu, etc. The only techniques that the seal can transport are those that create entities separate from already-existing entities. In other words, the seal cannot be used on a technique that rumbles the earth, although it could be used on an earth dragon. It cannot be used on a whirlpool jutsu created within a body of water, although it could be used on a sphere of water. Since this technique is simply a modification of a seal version of the Flying Thunder God technique, the number of its uses depends solely on the number of paper seals that the user has pre-prepared and on the user's chakra - there is no limit to the uses of the Flying Thunder God Technique. However, the larger the intended teleported object, the more chakra the user must put into "priming" the seal. The "primed" seals wear off after one turn; if the seal does not successfully come into an object within one turn of being primed, it must be primed again for further use.

NOTE: This technique appears to not be restricted much. This is true; the usages of this technique are not restricted, partially because of the unrestricted nature of Flying Thunder God and of the relative simplicity of the idea behind this technique. However, the complexity behind successfully using this technique balances out its lack of usage restriction; the user must first mark a destination, then the user must prime the pre-prepared seal, then the user must make sure that the seal somehow comes into contact with something, then the user must teleport that object to the destination, and then the user must take advantage of the object's teleportation in battle. While easier to use jutsus - say, a big dragon-shaped fireball that burns up everything in sight - have restrictions on the number of their uses, this jutsu, due to the complexity of using it correctly and due to the technique on which it's based, does not and should not have a restriction on the number of its uses.

NOTE: Regardless of that previous note, this technique can only be used to successfully transport 4 opponent jutsus, assuming the jutsus abide by the rules given in the description.

~Approved~ Keep both notes in your jutsu