Black despair Part 18 "Distort"

[Kuroi Honoo]

BLACK despair

PART EIGHTEEN
"DISTORT"

[Setting change: A forest]

Fuu: (In thought) What could possibly be this ninja’s alterative motive against Danzou-sama?

Fuu: The ninookame’s readings?

Assailant #13: Nothing yet

Fuu: It’s useless…the ninja must have already reached Root

Assailant #12: Nevertheless there is no one present to assist Danzou-sama

Fuu: We must believe in Danzou-sama

Assailant #13: Yes

Assailant #12: But-

Fuu: Danzou-sama is superior to us all

Assailant #12: Right

Fuu: (In thought) We are on our way Danzou-sama..

[Setting change: Danzou’s chamber]

Narrator: Assailant #14 swiftly appears before Danzou and Hyou beside him with urgent news.

Assailant #14: Danzou-sama two iryou-nin have been slayed and the responsible one is loose

Narrator: The elder’s eye widens.

Danzou: Hyou and Bakurai..you two are to inform any at all other members to search for the culprit in and out of Root at once!

(Character insight revisited)

Character Insight - Assailant #14:

● Hair color: Light pink (added)
● Eye color: Deep sky blue (added)
● Name: Bakurai (a code name given to one of the many Root shinobi members in current time) (added)

Hyou: Understood

Bakurai: Understood

[Setting change: Root sub-department infirmary]

Narrator: All injured ANBU arrive in the infirmary to view a chaotic scene.

Gio: Who did this?

Head Root Iryou-nin: That is under investigation..

Head Root Iryou-nin: (Continued) Help me with the severely injured onto the available slabs

Gio: Yes

Head Root Iryou-nin: (In thought) This one needs my attention the most

Hiliosu: *light breathing*

Head Root Iryou-nin: (In thought) I’m losing him..

[Setting change: Root sub-department division chambers]

*door slams open*

Narrator: A hand is placed over the sleeping adolescent as something is suddenly then swung towards Hyou.

*metal clashing*

Hyou: ...Never forget to continuously keep your guard up..

Assailant #9: ..Yes

Hyou: (Continued) As ordered by Danzou-sama you are to join in the search for the culprit who murdered our two iryou-nin

Assailant #9: ..Understood

[Setting change: Konohagakure no Sato forest]

Ukusa: (In thought) ….Wha-..where am I?

Unknown Shinobi #4: Ah..you have awoken..

Ukusa: Who are you..I don’t understa-

Unknown Shinobi #4: Do not act the victim..

Ukusa: I don’t even have a body..what is thi-

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Shouts) SHUT UP!!!

Unknown Shinobi #4: How dare you..

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Continued) To betray our organization..no…to betray our delicious boss

Ukusa: I don’t kno-

Unknown Shinobi #4: If you keep this up.. I’ll just have to kill you a little earlier..

Ukusa: *gasp*

Unknown Shinobi #4: Here…I’ll let you out

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Continued) Umm..You sure have grown up since the last time I saw you

*winks eye*

Ukusa: (In thought) I cannot see him..but I can still hear hi-

Unknown Shinobi #4: Do not daydream when you are in my presence!

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Continued) You are good…I mean if I didn’t know you well I’d say you were not acting..

Ukusa: I’m not!

Unknown Shinobi #4: Hmm…maybe something indeed happened to you..

Narrator: Slowly the adolescent ANBU slipped his hand into his holster and quickly launched as many shuriken in every direction.

Ukusa: (In thought) He is truly invisible..

Unknown Shinobi #4: Is that the best you have..*snickers*

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Continued) I might as well jog your memory before you are to perish..

Ukusa: What are you talking about?!

Unknown Shinobi #4: You were raised and brought up in our organization Dokueki..you were trained young and eventually was given your very first mission at such a young age

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Continued) It was to spy and gather intel on Konohagakure yet you never returned

Ukusa: (Shouts) STOP!!!

Unknown Shinobi #4: Oh…is it all coming back..*snickers*

[Setting change: Root sub-department center chamber]

Narrator: An ANBU Root appears before Danzou as he kneels onto the floor.

Terai: I have returned Danzou-sama to report another success

(Character insight revisited)

Character Insight - Terai:

● Name: Terai (code name Akio has now been replaced with the current time code name Terai) (added)

Danzou: We are under attack!

Danzou: (Continued) You are needed along the others in the outside to search for anyone suspicious!

Terai: Understood Danzou-sama

[Setting: Root sub-department division corridors]

Dajimu: Tera and I will search outside

Character Insight - Dajimu:

● A side character
● Gender: Male
● Classification: ANBU
● Affiliation: Konohagakure, Root
● Hair color: Unknown
● Eye color: Unknown
● Face: Porcelain animal mask
● Name: Dajimu (a code name given to the Root shinobi Dajimu in current time)
● Weapons: Tantou

Character Insight - Tera:

● A side character
● Gender: Male
● Classification: ANBU
● Affiliation: Konohagakure, Root
● Hair color: Unknown
● Eye color: Unknown
● Face: Porcelain animal mask
● Name: Tera (a code name given to the Root shinobi Tera in current time)
● Weapons: Tantou

Bakurai: We will continue our search here!

Tera: Roger

Dajimu: Roger

[Setting change: Konohagakure no Sato forest]

Ukusa: (Shouts) I don’t want to hear anymore!

Unknown Shinobi #4: *snickers* Is the truth really that upsetting?

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Continued) I haven’t even started yet..

Ukusa: I belong to one person only

Unknown Shinobi #4: Do you mean the infamous elder of Root?

Ukusa: How do you know?

Unknown Shinobi #4: Our leader has a vendetta against that shitty miserable old man

Ukusa: Don’t talk about my leader lik-

Unknown Shinobi #4: Like what? Like the truth?

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Continued) That he is a demented old fool thinking he can save his village from all that is evil but you know that is an act of contradiction

Unknown Shinobi #4: As he is just like the rest of us who strive for others destruction..hahh…hhaaaaa!

Ukusa: I cannot..take anymore

Unknown Shinobi #4: (Shouts) I Shizo will obliterate you

(Character insight revealed)

Character Insight - Unknown Shinobi #4:

● Classification: Nuke-nin (added)
● Affiliation: Dokugakure, Dokueki (added)
● Hair color: Unknown (Due to mask) (added)
● Eye color: Unknown (Due to mask) (added)
● Name: Shizo (added)

Shizo:Oh yes…Boss Mukaku-sama told me to give you this message before your death

Shizo: (Continued) You were always expendable to me and because of your betrayal..the tie that binds has been severed..

Shizo: (Shouts) Take this you insolent shit!

Ukusa: (Screams) NOOOOOOOOOO!!!

Shizo: What th-

Narrator: Lighted pointed-like rays begin to protrude from Ukusa’s body and rapidly shoot out impaling the enemy shinobi.

Jutsu Insight - Child:

● Jutsu Name: Unknown
● Classification: Kekkei Genkai, Ninjutsu, Jikuukan Ninjutsu
● Type: Hiton (Light release)
● Rank: Unknown
● Class: Offensive, defensive
● Range: All ranges
● Hand seals: Is not initiated through this use but rather by any emotional outburst.
● Description: A third jutsu to the first mysterious full body illumination. This jutsu can only be unleashed through the requirement of emotional distress where light protrudes from the user’s body forming spiked beams. Multiple sharp beams can be shot at a rapid speed creating bullet sized holes to the impaled bodily area. It is all done however, with the user unconscious. This is due to not yet perfecting the kekkei genkai.

Shizo: (In thought) My body is reverting back as I can no longer keep my jutsu active and I cannot dodge his attacks much longer..

Shizo: (Continued) I won’t get to see my beloved boss ..YOU WILL DIE ALONG WITH ME!!!

THE NINETEEN AND FINAL PART OF BLACK DESPAIR WILL BE RELEASED IN A LENGTH OF ABOUT TWO PARTS NEXT WEEK, SAME DAY, TITLED Kuroi Zetsubou (Look for it!).

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[Michael92]

Haven`t got time to read it yet, but i will after work

 

[Xentinel]

It seems to be very awesome! And yet, I did have time to read all of this!!

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

Haven`t got time to read it yet, but i will after work

I will be awaiting your wonderful insight as always

It seems to be very awesome! And yet, I did have time to read all of this!!

Thank you as well as Michael for voting for me in the Fanfiction poll even though it looks better much for you Michael-just like I had predicted lol Congratulations and I solute you for your good work ​

 

[danivass]

can't wait for the last part

 

[Michael92]

Last chapter next week?! I thought you said you were going to keep going for awhile

Anyway, It`s still pretty good as it has always been, and i have no idea what`s going to happend next Can`t wait for next time

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

can't wait for the last part

Thanks

Last chapter next week?! I thought you said you were going to keep going for awhile

Anyway, It`s still pretty good as it has always been, and i have no idea what`s going to happend next Can`t wait for next time

That was a tease on my behalf lol I love surprises myself so of course I would incorporate that into my work-even if I had to keep it from a friend ;p It had to remain top secret lol ^.^ Well, I think you will be in for the biggest shock next final part ​

 

[Michael92]

That was a tease on my behalf lol I love surprises myself so of course I would incorporate that into my work-even if I had to keep it from a friend ;p It had to remain top secret lol ^.^ Well, I think you will be in for the biggest shock next final part ​

Can`t wait

 

[King Dante]

I will be awaiting your wonderful insight as always



Thank you as well as Michael for voting for me in the Fanfiction poll even though it looks better much for you Michael-just like I had predicted lol Congratulations and I solute you for your good work ​

The Fanfiction contest is a popularity contest. 95% of the voters do not read the fanfics and vote for the user they like.
Art contest however is a more fair contest because it only takes a couple secs to check the art and vote for your favourite.
With that said Kuroi, you do not need to be so humble all the time, you know that your work is far superior and it's a shame that you don't get more votes only because you keep it low-profile.

 

[Michael92]

The Fanfiction contest is a popularity contest. 95% of the voters do not read the fanfics and vote for the user they like.
Art contest however is a more fair contest because it only takes a couple secs to check the art and vote for your favourite.
With that said Kuroi, you do not need to be so humble all the time, you know that your work is far superior and it's a shame that you don't get more votes only because you keep it low-profile.

I completly agree with you. If you don`t link your "fans" with the next chapters they might forget and your FF will fall in popularity, so it doesn`t only have to do with the user, but also which profile he/she keeps.

 

[MinatoIsCool]

excellent read as usual...I have not logged to narutobase for a while but have been always following your fanfic whenever I checked in...keep up the good work

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

The Fanfiction contest is a popularity contest. 95% of the voters do not read the fanfics and vote for the user they like.
Art contest however is a more fair contest because it only takes a couple secs to check the art and vote for your favourite.
With that said Kuroi, you do not need to be so humble all the time, you know that your work is far superior and it's a shame that you don't get more votes only because you keep it low-profile.

Well, I am a humble person as I will be the first to admit it but besides the pairings in Michael’s fanfic, I actually do enjoy/like his ff very much. I think it mirrors Kishi’s work pretty well.​

I completly agree with you. If you don`t link your "fans" with the next chapters they might forget and your FF will fall in popularity, so it doesn`t only have to do with the user, but also which profile he/she keeps.

@Both of you, I do highly appreciate your advice but let us all be serious I mean I am ending this fanfic tomorrow and so it is too late already to spread the word, you know. –Thanks anyways ^.^​

excellent read as usual...I have not logged to narutobase for a while but have been always following your fanfic whenever I checked in...keep up the good work

Thank you very much for following my work thus far ​

 

[Michael92]

Well, I am a humble person as I will be the first to admit it but besides the pairings in Michael’s fanfic, I actually do enjoy/like his ff very much. I think it mirrors Kishi’s work pretty well.​

@Both of you, I do highly appreciate your advice but let us all be serious I mean I am ending this fanfic tomorrow and so it is too late already to spread the word, you know. –Thanks anyways ^.^​

As Dante said, even if you are, you don`t need to be it all the time Admit it, your FF is the best around

xd Funny way to say it, but it`s never too late you know

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

As Dante said, even if you are, you don`t need to be it all the time Admit it, your FF is the best around

xd Funny way to say it, but it`s never too late you know

In my honest opinion, I think that you rival me fairly well ;p besides we both know that Kenshin's fanfic beats us lol Maybe your right-I am just so lazy. Even if I do scatter the word around, my fanifc will have been long done and I don't know if I want to go through all that, you know?​

 

[Michael92]

In my honest opinion, I think that you rival me fairly well ;p besides we both knwo that Kenshin's fanfic beats us lol Maybe your right-I am just so lazy. Even if I do scatter the word around, my fanifc will have been long done and I don't know if I want to go through all that, you know?​

Hehe, i suppose you`re rightxd Well in my opinion it`s something like this between the three of us(and this is my honest opinion):

Writing style:

1: You
2: Kenshin
3: Me.

Story:

Not too sure about this one, but I think we`re fairly matched. Even the god can be beaten, just like Nagatoxd
Maybe with Kenshin one step ahead of us.

Character:

Not too sure about this one eitherxd

Overall:

1: Kenshin/You
2: Me.

Yeah i know what you mean i guess

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

Hehe, i suppose you`re rightxd Well in my opinion it`s something like this between the three of us(and this is my honest opinion):

Writing style:

1: You
2: Kenshin
3: Me.

Story:

Not too sure about this one, but I think we`re fairly matched. Even the god can be beaten, just like Nagatoxd
Maybe with Kenshin one step ahead of us.

Character:

Not too sure about this one eitherxd

Overall:

1: Kenshin/You
2: Me.

Yeah i know what you mean i guess

Well, if by writing style you mean good grammar etc. then yes I would definitely be better than both of you, hands down seeing as English is my mother tongue and not you guys

Story and character yeah I too think we are all even lol

As for overall, I do thank you for placing me beside Kenshin however, I think my place is more like aside you but again just my opinion ^.^​

 

[Michael92]

Well, if by writing style you mean good grammar etc. then yes I would definitely be better than both of you, hands down seeing as English is my mother tongue and not you guys

Story and character yeah I too think we are all even lol

As for overall, I do thank you for placing me beside Kenshin however, I think my place is more like aside you but again just my opinion ^.^​

Well yeah that too, but not only grammar and sentence build up, but the way you`re writing your FF as well, that`s what i meant

Hehe I guess we need a third/fourth part to decide that thenxd

 

[King Dante]

This is a bit of a spam but i think Ruler came out strong for a first Fan-Fiction.
It's not very original (let's be real) as he only had to pick up already existent characters but it was a smart move to "train" with material that he was already used to and off course evrything that comes after is perceived by his own mind.
It's an interesting read and again was a smart move because most will easily read something Naruto related.
Thank god he didn't went the use forum names route, all the freaking fanfictions look the same in this section.
While Kuroi's also picks up on Naruto elements, i find it to be almost a complete original work and he expresses his writting very well, off course he also has the advantage of speaking the language which was something that conditioned my brother at times as english is not his first language but overall i think you have great talent and looking forward for your next work which i expect to be completely original.

Where i think my brother has the advantage is in originality and creations, also he's never affraid to use shock value in favor of entertainment, something that both of you lack.
He was invited to write on a fan-fiction based forum, that's why he doesn't writes here anymore and off course he doesn't like a certain moderator.

 

[Michael92]

This is a bit of a spam but i think Ruler came out strong for a first Fan-Fiction.
It's not very original (let's be real) as he only had to pick up already existent characters but it was a smart move to "train" with material that he was already used to and off course evrything that comes after is perceived by his own mind.
It's an interesting read and again was a smart move because most will easily read something Naruto related.
Thank god he didn't went the use forum names route, all the freaking fanfictions look the same in this section.
While Kuroi's also picks up on Naruto elements, i find it to be almost a complete original work and he expresses his writting very well, off course he also has the advantage of speaking the language which was something that conditioned my brother at times as english is not his first language but overall i think you have great talent and looking forward for your next work which i expect to be completely original.

Where i think my brother has the advantage is in originality and creations, also he's never affraid to use shock value in favor of entertainment, something that both of you lack.
He was invited to write on a fan-fiction based forum, that's why he doesn't writes here anymore and off course he doesn't like a certain moderator.

I guess i agree with everything you say, whereas I think both Kuroi as i wanted to start of with something Naruto-related(like your brother did with Itachi chronicles).

Only the future will tell what happens next I for sure know that I`m going to create a hole new FF with nothing Naruto related later on, so I`m hoping you will do the same Kuroi, after your next and last chapter

I`m not sure what Kuroi thinks about it, but I myself doesn`t see it fitting to include NB members in Naruto related FFs, it doesn`t really give the same feeling, however, if they create a new one like Utopic Monkey, then it could fit more "naturally" if you ask me.

If you take a look at Kuroi`s FF, you will easily see that even though it`s Naruto related it doesn`t feel that way like it does with mine, considering that he only has Danzo, Fuu and Torune that peoples might know of, and the rest of the characters are pretty much made up by himself.
So I agree with you on that one.

Yeah i guess you`re right, too bad to hear that, but i guess it was pretty obvious anyway.
I wish him good luck and hope he will return someday.

As for Kuroi.. I hope the last chapter will be as epic as the rest

 

[Kuroi Honoo]

This is a bit of a spam but i think Ruler came out strong for a first Fan-Fiction.
It's not very original (let's be real) as he only had to pick up already existent characters but it was a smart move to "train" with material that he was already used to and off course evrything that comes after is perceived by his own mind.
It's an interesting read and again was a smart move because most will easily read something Naruto related.
Thank god he didn't went the use forum names route, all the freaking fanfictions look the same in this section.
While Kuroi's also picks up on Naruto elements, i find it to be almost a complete original work and he expresses his writting very well, off course he also has the advantage of speaking the language which was something that conditioned my brother at times as english is not his first language but overall i think you have great talent and looking forward for your next work which i expect to be completely original.

Where i think my brother has the advantage is in originality and creations, also he's never affraid to use shock value in favor of entertainment, something that both of you lack.
He was invited to write on a fan-fiction based forum, that's why he doesn't writes here anymore and off course he doesn't like a certain moderator.

I guess i agree with everything you say, whereas I think both Kuroi as i wanted to start of with something Naruto-related(like your brother did with Itachi chronicles).

Only the future will tell what happens next I for sure know that I`m going to create a hole new FF with nothing Naruto related later on, so I`m hoping you will do the same Kuroi, after your next and last chapter

I`m not sure what Kuroi thinks about it, but I myself doesn`t see it fitting to include NB members in Naruto related FFs, it doesn`t really give the same feeling, however, if they create a new one like Utopic Monkey, then it could fit more "naturally" if you ask me.

If you take a look at Kuroi`s FF, you will easily see that even though it`s Naruto related it doesn`t feel that way like it does with mine, considering that he only has Danzo, Fuu and Torune that peoples might know of, and the rest of the characters are pretty much made up by himself.
So I agree with you on that one.

Yeah i guess you`re right, too bad to hear that, but i guess it was pretty obvious anyway.
I wish him good luck and hope he will return someday.

As for Kuroi.. I hope the last chapter will be as epic as the rest

I also agree and I could not put it any better myself. I do not know if I will ever again write another after this one just because it truly is time consuming. Even more than any other thing I’ve done on the computer and that is a fact- where I stand anyways. Though, if I ever was to, I too would not go the route of using the MOD’s names as it is not original at all whatsoever (whereas I strive to accomplish) as well as a clichéd flaw by many other fanfic authors here in the base (which I do not know why). Thanks to you both for following my work and I do hope that my finale is as good as the others maybe even a bit better than usual which is what I would like of course lol I think Kenshin’s work is on his own level and both me/Michael need to continue our practices in order to reach him and as Michael states I too hope that he returns one of these days.​