In the womb of Existence

[Hotaruko]

In the womb of Existence

As I walk this treachery path
I see my own feet sink into a void
Has it ever been this frightening?
To witness the immensity of my Ignorance

So far yet so close.
How am I to keep track of you?
See how I've been overdosed
with daring drops of joy and misery
The fearless moments are so few

See how powerless I am in front of you.

For fear I might not make it to the end
For the love I have yet to spend
Tell me, where can I gather the strength
to lift each step I've to take?

Take me away from my numbing tomb
Fear has taken the better part of me
Allow me to rest in your truthful womb
For I am nothing without you.​

 

[JENchuuriki]

keep it up!

btw, I like your aavyy

 

[Hotaruko]

keep it up!

btw, I like your aavyy

thanks~ I like yours too :yayy:

 

[FunkyFatal]

In the womb of Existence

As I walk this treachery path
I see my own feet sink into a void
Has it ever been this frightening?
To witness the immensity of my Ignorance

So far yet so close.
How am I to keep track of you?
See how I've been overdosed
with daring drops of joy and misery
The fearless moments are so few

See how powerless I am in front of you.

For fear I might not make it to the end
For the love I have yet to spend
Tell me, where can I gather the strength
to lift each step I've to take?

Take me away from my numbing tomb
Fear has taken the better part of me
Allow me to rest in your truthful womb
For I am nothing without you.​

Such deep meaning I really like it. I'm a poet and currently working on publishing a few pieces myself and I can admit that you have a great talent. I don't tell much people on this site that because most just write crazy stuff, but I felt a strong connection like i'm reading something similar to what i would write. Keep up the good work! It's people like you and I that make the poetry section truly shine!

 

[Hotaruko]

Such deep meaning I really like it. I'm a poet and currently working on publishing a few pieces myself and I can admit that you have a great talent. I don't tell much people on this site that because most just write crazy stuff, but I felt a strong connection like i'm reading something similar to what i would write. Keep up the good work! It's people like you and I that make the poetry section truly shine!

woww I'm baffled xD I can't believe a real poet just praised me thanks a lot! :yayy:

 

[FunkyFatal]

woww I'm baffled xD I can't believe a real poet just praised me thanks a lot! :yayy:

You're welcome! Keep up the work and if you ever need any tips or anything you can always PM me.

 

[Pizza]

Quite intense I must say, that was really good, your use of words and figurative devices are much applauded. Keep up the good work.