I didn't manage to pick up that they were with Hagoromo that's the reason for the reread which I'll do before you post the next chapter. When will that be, by the way? I know you said you are posting the other one before you post the next part to this. I read the online version by Brewitt-Taylor that I told you about last week 120 chapters. I'm going to order the other version in the next few weeks from Amazon
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I see O__o Well maybe this is the reason to why I swore to write shorter chapters in the first place, you think of that? XD You were always great at inspiring me to make them this big though xd
Dunno. Haven't started it yet. Going on a small break to focus on those other releases so I suppose in the beginning of July seems fair.
I can't believe you actually read through that ancient thing? How did you even manage to grasp its content? I have never been so disarrayed and lost when reading something as I was reading the first chapter of that thing. Only due to my prior knowledge did I even recognize themes but even the names are messed up being in an old translation of the names/old and outdated way of spelling them.
As for the other version, you kind of spoiled the surprise for yourself now xd You're not supposed to read both versions unless you are really into that historic period and different alterations. How long did that Bret-Taylor version stretch anyways? To the rise of Jin or before that?
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I apologize for not replying back in chapter 6 as a lot of things have been going on with me that’s kept me away -_- Anyways I wanted to respond to that by saying thank you for the compliments, especially for adding “excellent advisor” on being a samurai! ^^ You’re making me feel like I’m Shikamaru to your Naruto XD (And funny thing is that I’ve always liked Shikamaru’s character) 
I thought I should note that is was very kind of you to provide dividers of sorts in case someone was unable to finish reading the chapter in one take ^^
I have to admit, since I read that chapter 7 preview not too long ago, the fact that it was more or less fresh in my mind and that I also skimmed a little to make sure they were both pretty much a match, I decided to skip onto the new part. Let me know if you actually added something new in there and I’ll be sure to re-read that section entirely.
Of course you’d throw in some sort of Zelda reference lol However, I really liked how you chose to do it-I thought it worked perfectly. The Skyworld depicting like a heavenly plane and the underworld of course similar to hell and it all ties in with the Rikudou Sennin’s powers-brilliantly done! So the point of the famous tower finally comes to light-I didn’t expect that and I like where this is going After the huge explanation ended with Naruto asking if he understood, Hagoromo agreed even though he was truly confused and that also reminds me of me lol And man that was a ton of information, history, etc. to take in! The parting between Hagoromo and Naruto was nice So Danivass makes an appearance lol It kind of seemed as though Dani might’ve not completely trusted in Hagoromo and his message but he did in the end and well like father like son ^^ It was definitely something seeing Hagoromo meet a blood relative of his for the first time. It didn’t hit me right away but this leader meeting reminded me so much of whenever each of the Kage met for conference and it has gotten pretty intense for these leaders. Once everyone averted their attention towards Hagoromo, things got serious real quick lol And the tension in the room is only escalating! I didn’t expect this as it seemed like it would only be a fairly calm conference. I was shocked when Nagamasa decided to reveal the truth! The meeting simply continues to shock me lol I thought perhaps Hagoromo would remain silent after the objections of his confidants but he surprisingly decided against it. Although shocking, it appeared as though this situation was going to reach a breaking point which it did with Mitsuhide’s attack. I didn’t expect for Hagoromo to be training that long and the grandmaster is hilarious lol The revelation of the grandmaster was indeed an eye opener XD Well, I was thinking that Hagoromo would be the only one partaking in exploring this tower but there were in fact two others and that there was a prize for reaching the end which was surprising. I liked that before this chapter ended we were able to get intel on this tower. And you were definitely correct with how long this chapter was lol
Phenomenal comeback and I never had a doubt you’d pull it off! No matter how long of a break, etc. you take you always come back packing a punch!
Fun Fact & Author's Note:
1 I definitely noticed how you tied in all of your works together and you did it with a splendid fluidity I also liked that you took a quote from The Hobbit as I really love that series! ^^
2 So thank you for providing an image to these very different samurai I have to say that Kotaro Fuma looks the scariest lol and Mitsuhide looks the best in my opinion-too bad he’s playing for the bad side -_-
I thought I should note that is was very kind of you to provide dividers of sorts in case someone was unable to finish reading the chapter in one take ^^
I have to admit, since I read that chapter 7 preview not too long ago, the fact that it was more or less fresh in my mind and that I also skimmed a little to make sure they were both pretty much a match, I decided to skip onto the new part. Let me know if you actually added something new in there and I’ll be sure to re-read that section entirely.
Of course you’d throw in some sort of Zelda reference lol However, I really liked how you chose to do it-I thought it worked perfectly. The Skyworld depicting like a heavenly plane and the underworld of course similar to hell and it all ties in with the Rikudou Sennin’s powers-brilliantly done!
So the point of the famous tower finally comes to light-I didn’t expect that and I like where this is going After the huge explanation ended with Naruto asking if he understood, Hagoromo agreed even though he was truly confused and that also reminds me of me lol And man that was a ton of information, history, etc. to take in! The parting between Hagoromo and Naruto was nice So Danivass makes an appearance lol It kind of seemed as though Dani might’ve not completely trusted in Hagoromo and his message but he did in the end and well like father like son ^^ It was definitely something seeing Hagoromo meet a blood relative of his for the first time. It didn’t hit me right away but this leader meeting reminded me so much of whenever each of the Kage met for conference and it has gotten pretty intense for these leaders. Once everyone averted their attention towards Hagoromo, things got serious real quick lol And the tension in the room is only escalating! I didn’t expect this as it seemed like it would only be a fairly calm conference. I was shocked when Nagamasa decided to reveal the truth! The meeting simply continues to shock me lol I thought perhaps Hagoromo would remain silent after the objections of his confidants but he surprisingly decided against it. Although shocking, it appeared as though this situation was going to reach a breaking point which it did with Mitsuhide’s attack. I didn’t expect for Hagoromo to be training that long and the grandmaster is hilarious lol The revelation of the grandmaster was indeed an eye opener XD Well, I was thinking that Hagoromo would be the only one partaking in exploring this tower but there were in fact two others and that there was a prize for reaching the end which was surprising. I liked that before this chapter ended we were able to get intel on this tower. And you were definitely correct with how long this chapter was lol Phenomenal comeback and I never had a doubt you’d pull it off! No matter how long of a break, etc. you take you always come back packing a punch!
Fun Fact & Author's Note:
1 I definitely noticed how you tied in all of your works together and you did it with a splendid fluidity
I also liked that you took a quote from The Hobbit as I really love that series! ^^ 2 So thank you for providing an image to these very different samurai
I have to say that Kotaro Fuma looks the scariest lol and Mitsuhide looks the best in my opinion-too bad he’s playing for the bad side -_-Haha, well since you've been around my writing for 5 years, I guess that's one way to look at it xD But I ain't no Naruto, haha xD More like Rock Lee I guess, lmao.I apologize for not replying back in chapter 6 as a lot of things have been going on with me that’s kept me away -_- Anyways I wanted to respond to that by saying thank you for the compliments, especially for adding “excellent advisor” on being a samurai! ^^ You’re making me feel like I’m Shikamaru to your Naruto XD (And funny thing is that I’ve always liked Shikamaru’s character)
I thought I should note that is was very kind of you to provide dividers of sorts in case someone was unable to finish reading the chapter in one take ^^
I have to admit, since I read that chapter 7 preview not too long ago, the fact that it was more or less fresh in my mind and that I also skimmed a little to make sure they were both pretty much a match, I decided to skip onto the new part. Let me know if you actually added something new in there and I’ll be sure to re-read that section entirely.
Of course you’d throw in some sort of Zelda reference lol However, I really liked how you chose to do it-I thought it worked perfectly. The Skyworld depicting like a heavenly plane and the underworld of course similar to hell and it all ties in with the Rikudou Sennin’s powers-brilliantly done!
Phenomenal comeback and I never had a doubt you’d pull it off! No matter how long of a break, etc. you take you always come back packing a punch!
Fun Fact & Author's Note:
1 I definitely noticed how you tied in all of your works together and you did it with a splendid fluidity
2 So thank you for providing an image to these very different samurai
Well the preview was horrible XD I mean, I spent about 15 hours alone to brush that part of the scene up, adding about 2000 words. I even specifically told Jinrou to re-read it because it would be a heck of a lot different and more smooth xD At this point since you're already done I don't think it matters though. It does have some great aspects to it but in the long run, I guess the adds weren't that important. Although 2000 words are like 2 chapters for some writers on here
Like I mentioned to Trea in one of my earlier posts here (don't know if you checked out any of the other comments??), the complete final edition of the 1st part of the 1st scene was my favorite thing about this chapter. I felt that since the end result was so much better than the draft version, it helped make an even bigger impact on the 2nd half of it, which ended in Naruto and Hagoromo parting ways. I don't know if you noticed but the draft/preview version was very choppy and had little "finesse" over it. The edits helped make that better, which also reflected the end quality and my personal view on the full 1st scene altogether.
Well it's no the first time I've done a "meeting" scene like this. I did like 2 I think in the Series Finale, and another 3 or 4 in the rest of TLSoK, so yeah, I'm still trying to keep it fresh despite the fact that it seems like I've been doing this a lot. I think it played out nicely though ^^
The final scene is probably the shortest of this chapter, but it still lays out some important "ground-work" for what to come. I did talk a lot about this scene in a sense earlier, both revealing the information about the floors and also that there would be some other characters at play too, already back in the last chapter I think...
Thanks bro =p I still appreciate your reviews as much as ever before
1: I think you actually made a comment about that quote when I first used it in Returns all those years ago xD I think you said something similar to this if my memory doesn't fail me now xD
2: I like that you actually comment on the pics
I don't know if you ever got time to check out that Sengoku Musou anime I linked earlier, but after watching it myself, I can say with confidence that a lot of inspiration to this chapter came from it and that it was indeed worth it.Thanks again for the review bro ^^ Now to look towards the future :scorps:
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First thing's first. I never would have imagined that I would have the opportunity to point out a grammar mistake in your work, I'm kinda excited, for lack of a better word, to point this out.
It's this here,
"'If this is the entire truth, how about showing some off your powers to prove it?'"
Whereas it should be,
"'If this is the entire truth, how about showing some of your powers to prove it?'"
Well that's the only thing I picked up on.
One more thing, it took me a little under one and a half hours to read this. I told you it wouldn't take two.
Back to the review, which I never really started.
So Hagoromo's been cast aside like some outcast when he was supposed to be a war hero or something. I don't have a full grasp of Mitsuhide's character but for a war veteran he was a bit too prejudicial. I hope that you don't go biased about good and evil here because it is all a matter of perspective, what is evil for one might be good for the other.
Regardless, I think that while Hagoromo was being respectful and all, he should have been a bit more confident in himself. After all he could not be harmed even with the combined efforts of everyone present at the meeting.
I have a feeling that you will bring back Naruto because the original timeline has already been altered when Naruto revealed his identity.
Another thing I have a feeling about is that Naruto has let the age get to his head and is changing the timeline for the sake of entertainment, as crazy as that sounds.
Now the Tower of Death. Isn't there too much knowledge known by the gatekeeper if he hasn't even been there?
If he had to use Banbutsu Sōzō to make the Taijutsu trainer, Naruto might as well train Hagoromo himself. Though I understand that interacting too much with Hagoromo would negatively affect the timeline.
I feel like you're about to do a timeskip and do something major, but that's mere speculation on my part.
Now I'm sure that this review isn't the quality that you requested but I don't think that I could write more without sounding completely illogical and make reading this feel forcefully dragged on.
It's this here,
"'If this is the entire truth, how about showing some off your powers to prove it?'"
Whereas it should be,
"'If this is the entire truth, how about showing some of your powers to prove it?'"
Well that's the only thing I picked up on.
One more thing, it took me a little under one and a half hours to read this. I told you it wouldn't take two.
Back to the review, which I never really started.
So Hagoromo's been cast aside like some outcast when he was supposed to be a war hero or something. I don't have a full grasp of Mitsuhide's character but for a war veteran he was a bit too prejudicial. I hope that you don't go biased about good and evil here because it is all a matter of perspective, what is evil for one might be good for the other.
Regardless, I think that while Hagoromo was being respectful and all, he should have been a bit more confident in himself. After all he could not be harmed even with the combined efforts of everyone present at the meeting.
I have a feeling that you will bring back Naruto because the original timeline has already been altered when Naruto revealed his identity.
Another thing I have a feeling about is that Naruto has let the age get to his head and is changing the timeline for the sake of entertainment, as crazy as that sounds.
Now the Tower of Death. Isn't there too much knowledge known by the gatekeeper if he hasn't even been there?
If he had to use Banbutsu Sōzō to make the Taijutsu trainer, Naruto might as well train Hagoromo himself. Though I understand that interacting too much with Hagoromo would negatively affect the timeline.
I feel like you're about to do a timeskip and do something major, but that's mere speculation on my part.
Now I'm sure that this review isn't the quality that you requested but I don't think that I could write more without sounding completely illogical and make reading this feel forcefully dragged on.
XD Excellent!! I was almost starting to believe that it really was flawless xD Too bad it's been 12 days and the editing option is gone U_U It's already at the 150 K letter limit also, not a letter more or less, so it would be too troublesome asking for someone to edit and rearrange within that limit now >_> Thanks for pointing it out anyways
I'll fix it in my notes on my hard drive at least (already done as I'm writing) I have a feeling you only cared because I did though, and that you looked really hard to find one xd I kid ^_^ Also, I think it's the only obvious mistake perhaps, and that is why you spotted it. Reading the line, I think I meant to say; [...]showing off some of your powers" instead of "[...]showing some of your powers" though, or at least I think I read it that way. After all, I can always get better at sentencing like any of us, and my vocabulary can definitely improve and become more sophisticated. I don't think I have that within me though unless I move to England or USA or something, one day, and start using English daily for more than just on the Base. To top things off, I'm certain you would find countless errors in my past chapters as this is the only chapter I went maniac over to try and make it the best release I have ever done. I mentioned it before, but I did re-read my story at an earlier point before writing chapter 6, and I easily spotted some errors in the 1st chapter for instance. I didn't bother asking a mod to fix it though, but I think I did fix it in my version of the chapter(s) in my notes, but I can't honestly remember.Lmao, well it took me 20 hours to read due to me starting over every time I corrected a mistake (I really did. Took me days just to get through the first half of the 1st scene xd I think after that I decided to give me some slack and just read through the thing even if I corrected the mistakes. Don't even ask me why I did it like this, lmao). For most people 1 hour 50. - 2 hours 10. Seems to have been the norm, or approximately around that category some place, so you're not that far off. Also, if you rush the reading on purpose, you might miss a thing or two
"I hope that you don't go biased about good and evil here because it is all a matter of perspective, what is evil for one might be good for the other." Exactly! That's why I went all sophisticated in this chapter to further that subjective perspective of peace is the problem. I think it was Ieyasu who said that everyone had fought for what they believed in, and that truly no clan was pure good or evil. This is the dilemma they are facing, something to which a common cause would help unite them all in the future (The Jubi - Why not spoil it because you already know it will happen, lmao. In fact, Madara himself already explained how Hagoromo tried to unite the land by connecting everyone with each other through sharing his chakra. It's all in the plans). This chapter serves as a founding stone towards deciding what exactly will be the Key to Peace for Hagoromo to find, how to change the world and truly make the Peace last. Not for 10 years, not for a 100, not even for a 1000, but indefinitely... Forever.
The reason to why he was "cast aside" is that he really wasn't. For those clans that participated in the battling and opposed Nobunaga and Ieyasu, they knew more about Hagoromo's involvement and efforts, whereas the rest of the land and the other clans busy fighting their own battles and minding their own business, they had only heard certain rumors. The Oda and the Sanada clans were after all the two most powerful clans in the land, so the sudden collapse of these two together with a mutual peace agreement between them obviously affected the entire land/the rest of the land as well. The details have been kept secret because of the same reason Hagoromo was given a cover name in the first place. This chapter is quite big and I suppose it's definitely hard to grasp all the details in one reading. However, for someone who has read this chapter about 10 times already, and also have created it in the first place, it's easier for me to remember it all. I think "lesson-wise," but also reflecting and philosophical-wise on the problems of this world and the human race, this is the best chapter I have ever written.
As for the latter fact of Hagoromo being more confident in himself, the reason is that he has yet to become the leader he is supposed to be. He is still trying to find his place in this world, to find and understand his own destiny. His life has practically been a mess all the way up until now, and trying to stand out and convince all the clan leaders in the land in a sudden meeting that he wasn't even aware of would happen, was perhaps even a little too much for him. It all makes sense towards building up later events though, and despite the fact that I've previously said that the Tower of Death/Game of Death arc would mostly be a side story, it is actually a major contributor towards defining Hagoromo's character and the path he must take to become the Sage of Six Paths. To prepare him for his ultimate battle with the Jubi, and to sort of accomplish a common mutual understanding between all humans in this world. He's already smart at his age now, but there's still a long way to go before he becomes as wise as Naruto/Wizard appears here. I think this approach is just the approach I needed to make in order to make a believable character that goes through several changes to become the man he's destined to be. From being truly weak and completely helpless when his foster parents died and during the Holy Sect massacre, he is now finally beginning to understand and grasp his bloodline. In time, you will see where I'm going with this and finally get to see him in the reflection of who he was when I portrayed him in my The Legendary Sage of Konoha Series as he battled Naruto back in Returns. Your questions are all fair, but so far they seem to be without making connection to the plot-points provided in not only that scene of the samurai meeting, but also in the scene between Hagoromo, Naruto and Revan, and in the utmost important details revealed during his training with the grandmaster. If anything, you can already start to see the change in him from there, realizing that he must move forward and prove himself in order to fulfill his destiny...
As for bringing back Naruto, there's this very important line that was spoken in The Legendary Sage of Konoha Series Finale Part 5 by the Wizard to the then unknowing Naruto that (I don't remember the full line without going back, but it was something like this...) whatever happens, destiny will prevail. I only now realize that every end is different, every final battle is unpredictable, but in the end, even if our fight now is not how I remembered it to be when I fought the Wizard before jumping time (The Wizard/Naruto talking to his past-self), the outcome was still the same. This line is even more signified in this chapter (chapter 7) where Naruto tells Hagoromo that it doesn't matter if he follows every thing bit by bit, the outcome will be the same. Recollection of the Past is the defining story for this time line, and it will end with Naruto passing on to the afterlife, just like his future-self did in the Series Finale. It's to be noted that not only did the Wizard tell Naruto about the past and the things he had to do, but he transferred his memories of the past, so that he just had to follow his footsteps.
Lmao, if only xD However, the only thing he thinks of is moving on, getting this journey done. The scene that I wrote last year of Naruto reuniting with his beloved ones, which in reality is a "further establishment" of a scene already present in the Series Finale Part 6, at the beginning (In the Series Finale I always started the Parts with scenes that apparently made no sense, that was out of place. There was a reason for that. The last one I wrote in particular, actually takes place in Naruto's point of view as he finally "arrives" in the afterlife. No one picked up on that back then). In fact, it's kind of an continuation of that scene, which leads into Naruto going back to visit Ikari once more, as the preview I did at the end of the Forgotten Tale showed (and the going back thing was actually something I was inspired to do after Obito came back to temporarily give Kakashi two MS in the Manga).
As for the gatekeeper, there will actually be revealed something about that if I'm not mistaken. The Tower is not what it seems, and the enemy is not who they used to be. There will be a lot of story to come and two characters from other stories of mine will make an appearance! The short version is that when the Tower was built, the past generations of the gatekeeper's family was chosen to be the gatekeeper of it, and thus the tradition was kept and followed. In doing so, they obviously got some relevant intel on the challenge as well back then, that was passed on to the next in line. As far as the story suggests (now), there's no one telling him to continue to be the gatekeeper, to do this job. I did already talk about the Tower and the challenge in my previous chapter's comment section, but I kept the details at a minimum then as well.
Haha, well the way I see it, Naruto only has the ability to use his powers temporarily. That's why Aragon was the only wielder he got to train personally over time (a decade in fact - as revealed in Recollection of the Past), having to stand idle by and watch the world burn after that because he was too weak to move. In creating a "spokesman" in his favor, that wouldn't be affected by the same restrains and the same limit, Naruto could further his knowledge without exhausting his reserve. The Recollection of the Past dives deeper into his involvement through time and how he had been weakened several times over after being too "active" in a sense. Read it!
A timeskip huh? No, the whole Tower arc will happen in real time. Then immediately after (I think), the Jubi will emerge. There can't really be any more time-skips before then due to the fact that Hagoromo needs to seal the Jubi inside himself before impregnating Trea xD He's(they're) already 30 years old, so I can't stall that bit for much longer (I could go ten years, but it's suppose to be like 5 years between the first born Indra and the last born daughter. So I could top to a 5 years skip before then, which would make them 40 by the birth of the last kid). There will be some time-skips after that however (and naturally), which ultimately brings us to the scene of Hagoromo's deathbed when his kids are all grown up, as portrayed initially in the 1st chapter.
Actually, I don't think a review has ever produced this much of a reply on any of my reviews ever xD For some reason your questions made me keep going, and going, and going, so yeah
A lot of discussion potential here. Let me know when you have read it (and possibly replied to it as well). Until then.
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I see, it is the only mistake which I could find so I think you can rest easy over the fact that your work is correct grammar wise.XD Excellent!! I was almost starting to believe that it really was flawless xD Too bad it's been 12 days and the editing option is gone U_U It's already at the 150 K letter limit also, not a letter more or less, so it would be too troublesome asking for someone to edit and rearrange within that limit now >_> Thanks for pointing it out anyways
Lmao, well it took me 20 hours to read due to me starting over every time I corrected a mistake (I really did. Took me days just to get through the first half of the 1st scene xd I think after that I decided to give me some slack and just read through the thing even if I corrected the mistakes. Don't even ask me why I did it like this, lmao). For most people 1 hour 50. - 2 hours 10. Seems to have been the norm, or approximately around that category some place, so you're not that far off. Also, if you rush the reading on purpose, you might miss a thing or two
"I hope that you don't go biased about good and evil here because it is all a matter of perspective, what is evil for one might be good for the other." Exactly! That's why I went all sophisticated in this chapter to further that subjective perspective of peace is the problem. I think it was Ieyasu who said that everyone had fought for what they believed in, and that truly no clan was pure good or evil. This is the dilemma they are facing, something to which a common cause would help unite them all in the future (The Jubi - Why not spoil it because you already know it will happen, lmao. In fact, Madara himself already explained how Hagoromo tried to unite the land by connecting everyone with each other through sharing his chakra. It's all in the plans). This chapter serves as a founding stone towards deciding what exactly will be the Key to Peace for Hagoromo to find, how to change the world and truly make the Peace last. Not for 10 years, not for a 100, not even for a 1000, but indefinitely... Forever.
The reason to why he was "cast aside" is that he really wasn't. For those clans that participated in the battling and opposed Nobunaga and Ieyasu, they knew more about Hagoromo's involvement and efforts, whereas the rest of the land and the other clans busy fighting their own battles and minding their own business, they had only heard certain rumors. The Oda and the Sanada clans were after all the two most powerful clans in the land, so the sudden collapse of these two together with a mutual peace agreement between them obviously affected the entire land/the rest of the land as well. The details have been kept secret because of the same reason Hagoromo was given a cover name in the first place. This chapter is quite big and I suppose it's definitely hard to grasp all the details in one reading. However, for someone who has read this chapter about 10 times already, and also have created it in the first place, it's easier for me to remember it all. I think "lesson-wise," but also reflecting and philosophical-wise on the problems of this world and the human race, this is the best chapter I have ever written.
As for the latter fact of Hagoromo being more confident in himself, the reason is that he has yet to become the leader he is supposed to be. He is still trying to find his place in this world, to find and understand his own destiny. His life has practically been a mess all the way up until now, and trying to stand out and convince all the clan leaders in the land in a sudden meeting that he wasn't even aware of would happen, was perhaps even a little too much for him. It all makes sense towards building up later events though, and despite the fact that I've previously said that the Tower of Death/Game of Death arc would mostly be a side story, it is actually a major contributor towards defining Hagoromo's character and the path he must take to become the Sage of Six Paths. To prepare him for his ultimate battle with the Jubi, and to sort of accomplish a common mutual understanding between all humans in this world. He's already smart at his age now, but there's still a long way to go before he becomes as wise as Naruto/Wizard appears here. I think this approach is just the approach I needed to make in order to make a believable character that goes through several changes to become the man he's destined to be. From being truly weak and completely helpless when his foster parents died and during the Holy Sect massacre, he is now finally beginning to understand and grasp his bloodline. In time, you will see where I'm going with this and finally get to see him in the reflection of who he was when I portrayed him in my The Legendary Sage of Konoha Series as he battled Naruto back in Returns. Your questions are all fair, but so far they seem to be without making connection to the plot-points provided in not only that scene of the samurai meeting, but also in the scene between Hagoromo, Naruto and Revan, and in the utmost important details revealed during his training with the grandmaster. If anything, you can already start to see the change in him from there, realizing that he must move forward and prove himself in order to fulfill his destiny...
As for bringing back Naruto, there's this very important line that was spoken in The Legendary Sage of Konoha Series Finale Part 5 by the Wizard to the then unknowing Naruto that (I don't remember the full line without going back, but it was something like this...) whatever happens, destiny will prevail. I only now realize that every end is different, every final battle is unpredictable, but in the end, even if our fight now is not how I remembered it to be when I fought the Wizard before jumping time (The Wizard/Naruto talking to his past-self), the outcome was still the same. This line is even more signified in this chapter (chapter 7) where Naruto tells Hagoromo that it doesn't matter if he follows every thing bit by bit, the outcome will be the same. Recollection of the Past is the defining story for this time line, and it will end with Naruto passing on to the afterlife, just like his future-self did in the Series Finale. It's to be noted that not only did the Wizard tell Naruto about the past and the things he had to do, but he transferred his memories of the past, so that he just had to follow his footsteps.
Lmao, if only xD However, the only thing he thinks of is moving on, getting this journey done. The scene that I wrote last year of Naruto reuniting with his beloved ones, which in reality is a "further establishment" of a scene already present in the Series Finale Part 6, at the beginning (In the Series Finale I always started the Parts with scenes that apparently made no sense, that was out of place. There was a reason for that. The last one I wrote in particular, actually takes place in Naruto's point of view as he finally "arrives" in the afterlife. No one picked up on that back then). In fact, it's kind of an continuation of that scene, which leads into Naruto going back to visit Ikari once more, as the preview I did at the end of the Forgotten Tale showed (and the going back thing was actually something I was inspired to do after Obito came back to temporarily give Kakashi two MS in the Manga).
As for the gatekeeper, there will actually be revealed something about that if I'm not mistaken. The Tower is not what it seems, and the enemy is not who they used to be. There will be a lot of story to come and two characters from other stories of mine will make an appearance! The short version is that when the Tower was built, the past generations of the gatekeeper's family was chosen to be the gatekeeper of it, and thus the tradition was kept and followed. In doing so, they obviously got some relevant intel on the challenge as well back then, that was passed on to the next in line. As far as the story suggests (now), there's no one telling him to continue to be the gatekeeper, to do this job. I did already talk about the Tower and the challenge in my previous chapter's comment section, but I kept the details at a minimum then as well.
Haha, well the way I see it, Naruto only has the ability to use his powers temporarily. That's why Aragon was the only wielder he got to train personally over time (a decade in fact - as revealed in Recollection of the Past), having to stand idle by and watch the world burn after that because he was too weak to move. In creating a "spokesman" in his favor, that wouldn't be affected by the same restrains and the same limit, Naruto could further his knowledge without exhausting his reserve. The Recollection of the Past dives deeper into his involvement through time and how he had been weakened several times over after being too "active" in a sense. Read it!
A timeskip huh? No, the whole Tower arc will happen in real time. Then immediately after (I think), the Jubi will emerge. There can't really be any more time-skips before then due to the fact that Hagoromo needs to seal the Jubi inside himself before impregnating Trea xD He's(they're) already 30 years old, so I can't stall that bit for much longer (I could go ten years, but it's suppose to be like 5 years between the first born Indra and the last born daughter. So I could top to a 5 years skip before then, which would make them 40 by the birth of the last kid). There will be some time-skips after that however (and naturally), which ultimately brings us to the scene of Hagoromo's deathbed when his kids are all grown up, as portrayed initially in the 1st chapter.
Actually, I don't think a review has ever produced this much of a reply on any of my reviews ever xD For some reason your questions made me keep going, and going, and going, so yeah
I didn't rush reading, I just had the objective to read it in one go and well, I did it in record time.
Well, I can't really say much to that other than I see, though what changes will happen to the canon timeline with true peace.
I guess sticking with clans in the now led to the clan wars in the future.
The role of the Tower of Death is understandable as Hagoromo currently is a 'noob' in how to use Chakra so with more challenges, especially in the 'Chamber of the Blessed' and onward, he will become more proficient in its use.
I suppose some changes will be lost to time, though I wonder where the Rasengan will come into play.
But still, more than half of his drive comes with the fact that he has to follow the timeline in order to pass on.
Cryptic as always, lets see what's so special about Gatekeeper-san in the future, Ne?
Recollection of the Past seems to be too important to this I suppose, I'll read it later.
Sigh, biology finds its way into fictional works. Why am I not surprised?
Be there as much potential for discussion, I don't think I could write more than this without going into needles details about each of the points.
Yeah I guess
Oh really O__o Well you were fast regardless ;D
xD Well there won't really be any changes to the timeline, you see, True Eternal Peace already did happen, at the end of my Series Finale of TLSoK. This is only building up to that, slowly but steadily. The outcome is already known, but the details are kept clouded still. Even though "this Naruto" probably won't have the same fight as he had with the wizard in the past (since the wizard/Naruto's future-self claimed to him back then that the final fight never played out the same even though the outcome was the same. The reason for that was because he couldn't just accept a blow in order to die (his body would then move on his own), and if he already knew what would happen, there was no way he could die), I won't go on and portray that same fight twice. It will end once TLSoSP is done. That's where Recollection of the Past comes in, which will sum up - and "conclude" how everything came to an end.
That's an interesting note. The grandmaster already told Hagoromo that they need to bury the world built upon samurai warfare, so the end of the samurai era, and with the newfound ability of chakra, things will slowly yet again transpire into the clan wars we saw when Hashirama and Madara were young. However, one clan (Mifune's clan) still keeps up with tradition despite this though, and is the only remaining samurai clan present in the manga/anime. There should be a nice line between Hagoromo and Naruto in Returns where Hagoromo asks if Samurai still exists, in to which Naruto replies that there's still one clan who was lead by Mifune (he died in my fic xD). I can't recall Hagoromo's reply to this though, so I might go back to see if I can find a way to smooth things up. Perhaps I can make the Sanada clan be the ancestors of Mifune's clan? Maybe I can have Mifune be a descendant of Yukimura and Danivass themselves?? Hmm...
"Chamber of the Blessed?" I like that one, although it's not the right term xD
Oh, and the thing is... I can't really have Hagoromo excel too much before he actually seals away the Jubi in himself. I will however show some changes, if not physically then at least mentally. He will grow and learn through this challenge for sure.Oh right, I spoiled that, didn't I? xD Well you will have to wait and see XD
Yeah. Writing Naruto's death "beyond" his time is probably the most crazy thing I ever attempted. I did it in a way so that it didn't even feel like Naruto died back then, although I tried my best to make him empathize with his future-self and his own upcoming death. In a way, you could say that the moment Naruto jumped back in time was the moment he died (hence the "being reborn" term), as both Narutos had left Ikari's timeline then, and the thing happening in the past had in a sense, already happened.
Well if you saw the YT video I posted earlier about the real intended plot and the original footage put together of Game of Death, you can already get hints of things that will happen in upcoming chapters. I am after all, trying to mirror it to some degree. There's a scene where Bruce Lee punches holes in the "paper" clothing of the walls and the "Gatekeeper" (or whatever it is, as we never get to see one in the footage that are present/still exist. I just imagined it to be one) shouts up to him that the Game must go on, etc. I'm thinking of doing the same with Hagoromo...
Lmao, would you rather have Hagoromo have kids at 50? xD
Don't worry xD I'll make it interesting for you
That's about all I have for now though. RotP should be an "easy read" (in length at least, as it's one damn complicated 1st Entry/chapter) like I said. It's the last chapter that's going to be the most important one however.
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That’s insane because when I picture you, the character I think you match best with is Naruto and yet you say it’s Rock Lee instead-SHOCKING!!! O.O Well anyways, touche as I’m no Shikamaru obviously with my retarded brain lol I’m actually at a loss at what Naruto character would best fit me XDHaha, well since you've been around my writing for 5 years, I guess that's one way to look at it xD But I ain't no Naruto, haha xD More like Rock Lee I guess, lmao.
Well the preview was horrible XD I mean, I spent about 15 hours alone to brush that part of the scene up, adding about 2000 words. I even specifically told Jinrou to re-read it because it would be a heck of a lot different and more smooth xD At this point since you're already done I don't think it matters though. It does have some great aspects to it but in the long run, I guess the adds weren't that important. Although 2000 words are like 2 chapters for some writers on here
Like I mentioned to Trea in one of my earlier posts here (don't know if you checked out any of the other comments??), the complete final edition of the 1st part of the 1st scene was my favorite thing about this chapter. I felt that since the end result was so much better than the draft version, it helped make an even bigger impact on the 2nd half of it, which ended in Naruto and Hagoromo parting ways. I don't know if you noticed but the draft/preview version was very choppy and had little "finesse" over it. The edits helped make that better, which also reflected the end quality and my personal view on the full 1st scene altogether.
Well it's no the first time I've done a "meeting" scene like this. I did like 2 I think in the Series Finale, and another 3 or 4 in the rest of TLSoK, so yeah, I'm still trying to keep it fresh despite the fact that it seems like I've been doing this a lot. I think it played out nicely though ^^
The final scene is probably the shortest of this chapter, but it still lays out some important "ground-work" for what to come. I did talk a lot about this scene in a sense earlier, both revealing the information about the floors and also that there would be some other characters at play too, already back in the last chapter I think...
Thanks bro =p I still appreciate your reviews as much as ever before
1: I think you actually made a comment about that quote when I first used it in Returns all those years ago xD I think you said something similar to this if my memory doesn't fail me now xD
2: I like that you actually comment on the pics
Thanks again for the review bro ^^ Now to look towards the future :scorps:
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I will be sure to re-read that section, no worries, especially with the fact that you spent so much time and effort into editing it
I see well, it makes even more sense to have read it and I will =D
Oh, it’s my bad, about the meeting, I meant that it felt familiar to a Kage meeting done by Kishimoto but this did in fact indirectly jog your memory. I will next time be more clear with what I say, sorry -_- And yes, I completely agree, the meeting was pretty EPIC! ^^
You’re welcome and you can always count on me even though I may be extremely late sometimes XD
1 Ah well, if I did it’s my crap memory but if I did indeed then I’d just be reaffirming your awesomeness
lol 2 I haven’t yet but I will definitely try to as soon as I can and it’s always wonderful when something gives us inspiration, especially when you’re really in need of it
Again you’re welcome and I’ll be checking out the Recollection FF as soon as possible
I like to look at myself as a hard worker writing wise, so I guess that's probably the reason to why =p Iruka thenThat’s insane because when I picture you, the character I think you match best with is Naruto and yet you say it’s Rock Lee instead-SHOCKING!!! O.O Well anyways, touche as I’m no Shikamaru obviously with my retarded brain lol I’m actually at a loss at what Naruto character would best fit me XD
I will be sure to re-read that section, no worries, especially with the fact that you spent so much time and effort into editing it
I see well, it makes even more sense to have read it and I will =D
Oh, it’s my bad, about the meeting, I meant that it felt familiar to a Kage meeting done by Kishimoto but this did in fact indirectly jog your memory. I will next time be more clear with what I say, sorry -_- And yes, I completely agree, the meeting was pretty EPIC! ^^
You’re welcome and you can always count on me even though I may be extremely late sometimes XD
1 Ah well, if I did it’s my crap memory but if I did indeed then I’d just be reaffirming your awesomeness
2 I haven’t yet but I will definitely try to as soon as I can and it’s always wonderful when something gives us inspiration, especially when you’re really in need of it
Again you’re welcome and I’ll be checking out the Recollection FF as soon as possible
^^For once I don't have much to say though after exhausting myself in a Troll war in the contest thread that just got cleaned up, so I'll keep this short. I'll be looking forward to your comments on Recollection of the Past then
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I knowYeah I guess
Oh really O__o Well you were fast regardless ;D
xD Well there won't really be any changes to the timeline, you see, True Eternal Peace already did happen, at the end of my Series Finale of TLSoK. This is only building up to that, slowly but steadily. The outcome is already known, but the details are kept clouded still. Even though "this Naruto" probably won't have the same fight as he had with the wizard in the past (since the wizard/Naruto's future-self claimed to him back then that the final fight never played out the same even though the outcome was the same. The reason for that was because he couldn't just accept a blow in order to die (his body would then move on his own), and if he already knew what would happen, there was no way he could die), I won't go on and portray that same fight twice. It will end once TLSoSP is done. That's where Recollection of the Past comes in, which will sum up - and "conclude" how everything came to an end.
That's an interesting note. The grandmaster already told Hagoromo that they need to bury the world built upon samurai warfare, so the end of the samurai era, and with the newfound ability of chakra, things will slowly yet again transpire into the clan wars we saw when Hashirama and Madara were young. However, one clan (Mifune's clan) still keeps up with tradition despite this though, and is the only remaining samurai clan present in the manga/anime. There should be a nice line between Hagoromo and Naruto in Returns where Hagoromo asks if Samurai still exists, in to which Naruto replies that there's still one clan who was lead by Mifune (he died in my fic xD). I can't recall Hagoromo's reply to this though, so I might go back to see if I can find a way to smooth things up. Perhaps I can make the Sanada clan be the ancestors of Mifune's clan? Maybe I can have Mifune be a descendant of Yukimura and Danivass themselves?? Hmm...
"Chamber of the Blessed?" I like that one, although it's not the right term xD
Oh right, I spoiled that, didn't I? xD Well you will have to wait and see XD
Yeah. Writing Naruto's death "beyond" his time is probably the most crazy thing I ever attempted. I did it in a way so that it didn't even feel like Naruto died back then, although I tried my best to make him empathize with his future-self and his own upcoming death. In a way, you could say that the moment Naruto jumped back in time was the moment he died (hence the "being reborn" term), as both Narutos had left Ikari's timeline then, and the thing happening in the past had in a sense, already happened.
Well if you saw the YT video I posted earlier about the real intended plot and the original footage put together of Game of Death, you can already get hints of things that will happen in upcoming chapters. I am after all, trying to mirror it to some degree. There's a scene where Bruce Lee punches holes in the "paper" clothing of the walls and the "Gatekeeper" (or whatever it is, as we never get to see one in the footage that are present/still exist. I just imagined it to be one) shouts up to him that the Game must go on, etc. I'm thinking of doing the same with Hagoromo...
Lmao, would you rather have Hagoromo have kids at 50? xD
Don't worry xD I'll make it interesting for you
You sure do like to split your work to confuse your readers :xD:
Who knows, maybe Mifune is the descendant of that 'good' guy who called all Otsutsuki 'evil'.
Temple of the Gifted.
That was kind of expected.
Confusing
_@:Unfortunately I haven't watched the movie yet.
Yes, yes I would xd
I'll read it later, as I said.
Wow, your long replies are being cancelled out by my simplistic replies.
I actually have no idea what to say in this reply xd Why do you have to make it this hard bro? XDI know
You sure do like to split your work to confuse your readers :xD:
Who knows, maybe Mifune is the descendant of that 'good' guy who called all Otsutsuki 'evil'.
Temple of the Gifted.
That was kind of expected.
Confusing
Unfortunately I haven't watched the movie yet.
Yes, yes I would xd
I'll read it later, as I said.
Wow, your long replies are being cancelled out by my simplistic replies.
On the good side though, I'm already two chapters ahead of this with the Recollection of the Past, so I guess that gives me some free time to do other things than NB/writing.
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Well, it is how I see you you’re simply a hard worker and it pays off and shows in your worksI like to look at myself as a hard worker writing wise, so I guess that's probably the reason to why =p Iruka then
For once I don't have much to say though after exhausting myself in a Troll war in the contest thread that just got cleaned up, so I'll keep this short. I'll be looking forward to your comments on Recollection of the Past then
I see, Iruka, well I suppose I could see the kindness in his character being a trait of mine so thank you ^^ EDIT: So I read the section in the beginning and it did feel a little more intense than the rough draft
I really can’t remember any errors from the rough draft of course due to my bad memory but you said there were and that you corrected them and the finished product grammar-wise was pretty refined All in all, it was a nice read which helped me to remember some things and again wonderful job If I'm a dedicated writer, you sure are a dedicated reader, hahaWell, it is how I see you you’re simply a hard worker and it pays off and shows in your works
EDIT: So I read the section in the beginning and it did feel a little more intense than the rough draft
Glad you did for the complete understanding ^^
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I like to make your life difficult, it's enjoyable to watch you suffer. XD
Yeah, you can enter the contest with Recollection of the Past yet I have to work overtime and get two chapters out within ten days, curse you limited time!
I see xDI like to make your life difficult, it's enjoyable to watch you suffer. XD
Yeah, you can enter the contest with Recollection of the Past yet I have to work overtime and get two chapters out within ten days, curse you limited time!
I've been thinking about that actually... My original plan was not to join with that work being that it's mostly "filler" and pretty basic (will be lucky to grab an award, lol), also, it doesn't feel like it's up to my other standards, and it will probably be a bit cheap to join with it... However, if I'm planning on getting that 31/32 award, I need to join with everything I got, so I'll probably release that final chapter of it before then, depending on how this month's contest go (if I don't place, I might be considering whether to take a break or not, hah!).
Here's the plan I've mapped out though, so listen up (xd):
1: Today I'm going to ready the 3rd and final chapter of Recollection, so that it only takes a few clicks to post it whenever the demand for it starts to come (after people have caught up to the ones already released - except for Kuroi though who is indeed up to date).
2: Then I'm going to start at the 8th one, just to get it going.
3: Then, I'm going to sit down and enjoy Force Unleashed 2, which is long overdue by now xD
4: Then I'm going to sleep, bah! XD
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I was going over some old threads and oh boy xd There are some... Intense scenes scattered throughout my Series xD Maybe I should have become a drama writer or something =p This right here... I can't even begin to wrap my head around how I was able to write this scene in TLSoK Returns:
As the moon had risen upon the sky, two young teenagers sneaked through the door of the female's house as they slowly went up the stairs without making a noise. When they got to the top, the female turned around as she began kissing the man.
Miyuki: *Giggle* Jiraiya, take it easy, I don't want my father and mother to wake up... If they fi-... *Giggle* -...nd out about us, I don't know what they'll say.
Jiraiya: You worry too much Miyuki...
Continuing to kiss her passionately, the two of them snuck inside her bedroom as they slowly closed the door behind them.
Miyuki: What if my brother finds out... What if Itachi finds out, *Giggle.*
Jiraiya: Let's worry about that if it happens... Besides they're all asleep by now.
Miyuki: *Pant* You're right... ahah... you're always right...
Gently putting her down on the bed, Jiraiya continued to kiss her neck and chin, before she helped him off with his shirt, revealing his muscular upper-body.
Jiraiya: Are you sure you want to do this Miyuki?
Miyuki: Yes, I'm ready... You've already been patient enough with me. Besides, I really want to do this... I feel safe with you, I trust you with my whole heart Jiraiya...
Jiraiya: I...
Miyuki: Hush, less talk...
Pushing him down on his back, Miyuki got on top of him as she removed her own shirt as well, revealing her bra. She then started to kiss his chest as she slowly moved downwards. Pulling Jiraiya's pants down, she tossed it on the ground as Jiraiya grabbed a hold onto her, and turned her around on her back.
Jiraiya: *Huff, Huff* Miyuki, I...
Kissing her lips, Jiraiya then pulled her pants down as well as they both were sitting there in their underwear.
Miyuki: *Pant* What is it?
Jiraiya: I... Love you.
Miyuki: Heh... I love you too Jiraiya.
Removing her bra, Miyuki revealed her gorgeous, soft, natural-looking breasts as Jiraiya gently kissed them both, moving down her body, slowly removing her panties, before removing his own underwear as well.
Miyuki: Jiraiya... *Pant* Take me.
Slowly submerging himself into her, the two were breathing heavily as Jiraiya was taking her to the promised land.
Jiraiya: Ah-hh...
Miyuki: *Pant, Huff, Pant.*
Miyuki then sat up to kiss him, as Jiraiya took her over to the wall, turning her around as he took her from behind. Shivering spread through her body as Jiraiya could feel her heart-rate raise, and her warm hot body leaning against his own. This was a feeling that was new to both of them, as they both acted out on their human instincts. Carrying her over to the bed, Jiraiya laid down as Miyuki seated herself on top of him as she began riding him. Reaching up to her perfect breasts, Jiraiya then seated up towards her as they kissed passionately.
Miyuki: *Pant* I'm almost the-... I Love you so much Jiraiya...
Grabbing a hold onto her, Jiraiya lifted her over to the wall again as the act continued till the Sun rose outside their window.
Jesus! I had no idea I took it that far XD This was sure "fun" re-reading, so I thought I would share it (once more).
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I see, so how much chance is there for you to use RoP?
1) I'll read when I have time.
2) I'm also working on my 8th.
3) I'll play Dragonball Xenoverse, man is that game awesome or what.
4) U no sleep, I sleep
I'll turn a blind eye to this obvious lemon scene, I wonder why this is accepted as suitable for family viewing xd
Question: Will you quit writing after this Master Timeline of yours is completed? Or are you going to write a new fic (which is what I want you to do)?
It's actually pretty big xD Looking at the 3 chapters, they are- despite the fact that I find them to be short, about the average size of some other writers on here in total, so why not. I don't think it can grab many votes though being that it's kind of "exclusive" to my long time readers, and reading it as a stand-alone would confuse the most experienced reader who are new to my stories...I see, so how much chance is there for you to use RoP?
1) I'll read when I have time.
2) I'm also working on my 8th.
3) I'll play Dragonball Xenoverse, man is that game awesome or what.
4) U no sleep, I sleep
I'll turn a blind eye to this obvious lemon scene, I wonder why this is accepted as suitable for family viewing xd
Question: Will you quit writing after this Master Timeline of yours is completed? Or are you going to write a new fic (which is what I want you to do)?
1: I know ^^
2: I know that too xd
3: The word Xenoverse reminds me of those Wii/Wii U titles Xenoblade, haha.
4: Good story bro XD
You read it, I know you did
You love this stuff And also, even if it's the most... 'explicit,' it's far from my only 'peculiar' scene throughout TLSoK series. Also, I did something extreme in my Zelda One-Shot, which I am now very intrigued to check out after going through every explicit scene found in TLSoK yesterday xd thanks for reminding me, although there was nothing you said or did that triggered that memory, lmao.That scene in particular though was present in chapter 27 of Returns, which still is the 3rd biggest chapter I ever wrote. Plus it was in dialogue, so the letters ended up in the 180 K zone xD No one can bother to go through all that to check for such things. Besides, it needs to be very extreme. I think I actually asked Lawliet about a similar scene between Jiraiya and Miyuki that I wrote before that, taking place after the above scene. She said it was fine back then, but some of my readers demanded more, even the females! That's how it came to this eventually, 26 chapters in the making xD
I've decided to go for Three Kingdoms for the National Novel Writing Month in November, and I'll probably write it as a stand-alone work, omitting the Master Sword references altogether (I'm thinking of having a sacred blade there though, or at least a renown or valuable one). I will however try to do draft versions of chapter 2 and 3 as I already finished the 1st chapter of Three Kingdoms four years ago in 2011, but I never released it. I did preview it though. I've been thinking that since its in dialogue, it should be fine to do just that, but considering the rules of NaNoWrMo, I can't exactly jump-start writing something before November comes (notes are allowed), which means I will have to rewrite the entire 1st chapter in narration (with new scenes and without some old ones most likely). I'll either just release that one chapter or make two more in dialogue and complete the first arc. I highly doubt I'll be releasing the real Three Kingdoms on the base though in the future if I ever get to complete it, envisioned as I first intended it to be (bigger than TLSoK Series). We shall see though. Other than that, I'll be revisiting the whole TLSoK Series once I'm done with TLSoSP and re-release the whole thing in one thread as a complete series thing, and then I might do something similar to the whole Master Timeline as well. Other than that, there's this one final thing I have in mind, and that is the collaboration I have mentioned I was thinking of doing with Ryan (Germanicus). That will most likely be my final work on the Base if he still wants to do it then. With that, I should be finished with all my plans before November, and then I'll probably join my last contest in December, which with luck, could be my 32nd award (26 + June (TLSoSP 7) + July (Recollection) + August (TLSoSP 8-10) + September + October (TLSoSP 11-13) + November (TLSoSP 14-16) + December (Three Kingdoms 1-3) = 33 - one month I can't compete). That would be a good way to call it a day, 5 and a half years after I started writing. With Recollection out of the way and only TLSoSP left to focus on, I don't find this plan that unbelievable to get through with. My planning in the past might have been off, but now I only have one work left that I'm half-way through. I still got 6 months to complete it, which should be enough time to do so.
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:wesobi: How typical of you to make extra entries for the contest.It's actually pretty big xD Looking at the 3 chapters, they are- despite the fact that I find them to be short, about the average size of some other writers on here in total, so why not. I don't think it can grab many votes though being that it's kind of "exclusive" to my long time readers, and reading it as a stand-alone would confuse the most experienced reader who are new to my stories...
1: I know ^^
2: I know that too xd
3: The word Xenoverse reminds me of those Wii/Wii U titles Xenoblade, haha.
4: Good story bro XD
You read it, I know you did
That scene in particular though was present in chapter 27 of Returns, which still is the 3rd biggest chapter I ever wrote. Plus it was in dialogue, so the letters ended up in the 180 K zone xD No one can bother to go through all that to check for such things. Besides, it needs to be very extreme. I think I actually asked Lawliet about a similar scene between Jiraiya and Miyuki that I wrote before that, taking place after the above scene. She said it was fine back then, but some of my readers demanded more, even the females! That's how it came to this eventually, 26 chapters in the making xD
I've decided to go for Three Kingdoms for the National Novel Writing Month in November, and I'll probably write it as a stand-alone work, omitting the Master Sword references altogether (I'm thinking of having a sacred blade there though, or at least a renown or valuable one). I will however try to do draft versions of chapter 2 and 3 as I already finished the 1st chapter of Three Kingdoms four years ago in 2011, but I never released it. I did preview it though. I've been thinking that since its in dialogue, it should be fine to do just that, but considering the rules of NaNoWrMo, I can't exactly jump-start writing something before November comes (notes are allowed), which means I will have to rewrite the entire 1st chapter in narration (with new scenes and without some old ones most likely). I'll either just release that one chapter or make two more in dialogue and complete the first arc. I highly doubt I'll be releasing the real Three Kingdoms on the base though in the future if I ever get to complete it, envisioned as I first intended it to be (bigger than TLSoK Series). We shall see though. Other than that, I'll be revisiting the whole TLSoK Series once I'm done with TLSoSP and re-release the whole thing in one thread as a complete series thing, and then I might do something similar to the whole Master Timeline as well. Other than that, there's this one final thing I have in mind, and that is the collaboration I have mentioned I was thinking of doing with Ryan (Germanicus). That will most likely be my final work on the Base if he still wants to do it then. With that, I should be finished with all my plans before November, and then I'll probably join my last contest in December, which with luck, could be my 32nd award (26 + June (TLSoSP 7) + July (Recollection) + August (TLSoSP 8-10) + September + October (TLSoSP 11-13) + November (TLSoSP 14-16) + December (Three Kingdoms 1-3) = 33 - one month I can't compete). That would be a good way to call it a day, 5 and a half years after I started writing. With Recollection out of the way and only TLSoSP left to focus on, I don't find this plan that unbelievable to get through with. My planning in the past might have been off, but now I only have one work left that I'm half-way through. I still got 6 months to complete it, which should be enough time to do so.
You know, your mind is too deep down in the gutter sometimes
. Zelda? Didn't read it. Oh, but I did trigger it, I used telepathy to make your mind believe that I didn't.You have some strange readers (I'm not included in them
). Wasn't there the risk of getting your thread removed, or an account suspension?National Novel Writing Month?
Everything is planned I see. You leaving the base is a given I presume?I'm not really doing that:wesobi: How typical of you to make extra entries for the contest.
You know, your mind is too deep down in the gutter sometimes
You have some strange readers (I'm not included in them
National Novel Writing Month?
Besides, you will have years after me to become the new King xPI know you didn't read it
I'm not even sure if you read The Forgotten Tale?? I'm pretty sure it was you I "got back" into reading for my new work being absent for my other works beside TLSoK.Nah, someone already set the standards for that (John) back in the days. He wrote about Lawliet being a stripper, Rei getting raped and killed and all sorts of crazy shit. Most of his chapters got closed/deleted because of the extremity in them. He found and used several ways to bypass the Bulletin censoring and the like. If you search for; "The Past creates the Future," you should be able to still find the first two or so chapters of his insanity that wasn't deleted xD He even started a war over it that brought every staff member in the mix. I was such a noob back then that I supported him too, which also got me caught in the chaos that followed xD Ahh, the good old days huh...
I've mentioned it plenty of times, even made a thread about it, which it would perhaps be a good idea to refresh my readers about now. Heck, Wolfsbane was interested to such a degree that he was thinking of joining this year's edition too:
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Mostly, yeah. Less active is the right word