[Mystery] The Legendary Sage of Six Paths 5

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So Yukimura finally asked for Hagoromo’s assistance. I;m glad that Hagoromo accepted and revenge is taking full bloom within him! Yeah, I was kind of wondering about that, supposedly Hagoromo should’ve been acting towards peace but his hatred has taken control much like Sasuke. I didn’t expect the Azai clansmen to demand exiling the Sanada clan! I liked that Yukimura took charge the way that he did and ordered his people to remain silent. I was glad to see that Nagamasa chose to keep the Sanada clan with them ^^ It was also nice to discover that Nagamasa was a benevolent leader :) Oh, my bad, so it’s not completely decided then if the Azai would assist Sanada. I was surprised that Yukimura collapsed as a result of his wound worsening. To me, it kind of feels like he’s going to die but hopefully that doesn’t occur. It’s too bad that Hagoromo in that moment of weakness did he reveal important information about himself that should’ve only been shared with the people he deemed most trusted, if anybody. And of course, a spy took advantage. I was glad to see that Yukimura recovered ^^ It’s very unfortunate that it took for the Oda clan to attack the Asakura clan before accepting the Sanada. So Hagoromo is finally familiarizing himself with chakra =D Hagoromo’s resurrecting Trea was him only further giving in to hi weakness. Wow, this technique out him out for a whole month and by that time, the war was almost over! So much had changed throughout that month as well via the war. Thankfully, Hagoromo was able to help out rather than burden Yukimura ^^ It’s crazy how Hagoromo finally encountered the one responsible for his misery and he was unfortunately unable to fight him. However, it was wonderful to see that this alliance was able to more or less defeat Oda’s ally. And now, the Oda clan was their focus =D Yukimura’s last words before the decisive battle began were very deep indeed. So the cunning Oda thought ahead and used the fire as a means of distraction in order to escape. What a really phenomenal ending to this chapter! ;)

About your fun facts & author’s notes:

1: I was thinking in the beginning of this chapter how would you be able to end it all with just a couple of chapters remaining and then as I read on, I saw that the story was heading in a fast paced motion and now I see why. Yeah, I was kind of expecting Oichi to speak but I completely understand why you decided to go that route and that was perfectly fine.

2: Yeah, I could see this and I was completely acceptant of it all ;)

3: Oh so that’s what this link is about lol An anime, I had no idea and since you posted it I will attempt to check it out as soon as I can ;)

4: As always, I look forward to the next one! lol ;)
Oh my, where do I begin? xP =D

At this part of the story, you can clearly see that it's not his previous path of peace that he learned during his stay at the Sacred Sect that is driving him. That change in character and that change in determination is really what will set the stone for what comes next. I needed to have a struggle in Hagoromo's character, ever since the beginning. And seeing how mentally messed up he has become due to all the pain inflicted upon him over the years, it is easy to understand why he gives in under to the pressure, neglecting his previous established path. The next chapter will focus even more on this as he remembers his past self and the path he promised he would take to claim peace. The wizard did warn him to not go for selfish desires, and having already revived Trea, what more will he do in order to complete his goals, and what will be the result of this? Next chapter is going to be long for sure! ;)

Something else that I can reveal is that I'm going to name two upcoming characters after two honorable readers, haha. I've already talked through this with Dani, and I'm glad to announce that you are one of them, haha. Whether their role will be big or small, impact-full or not, good or evil, that is yet to see. Also, I will be having some deaths coming up, that will conflict Hagoromo even more, which should be great.

Thanks for the read and for the great review my friend ;) You know how much I appreciate it ^^

1: Indeed. The thing is that, if you go by the background story provided by the Jubi In TLSoK Returns, it really hit the halfway mark after it was done explaining what happened up until the next chapter. After that he only briefly mentioned their battle, and the Rise of the Titans. So one thing is that I got less content to work with, another is that it's becoming less original, less samurai, and less Sengoku Jidai, and more Naruto and overpowered techniques starting with the 7th one. That is also why I'll be picking up the pace, as the concluding parts of this story doesn't hold as much interest to me as the first half. Still gonna try my best to make it decent enough to read though ;)
 

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The moment you start doubting yourself is the moment you start doubting your work and forsake your path as a writer. Relax, enjoy, and I'm sure it will be one heck of a contest no matter what happens, haha ;)

As for next chapter, I don't think I'll be able to release it until next week. I'm about 30 % though it, so I got some more writing to do. Also, I still need two readers to catch up and read this chapter (*Kremt*Dani*Kremt* & *Kremt*Kuroi*Kremt*).
On the good side, it should be huge and action packed like none other so far, which is good ;)
Yeah, you're right about that.

I'll look forward to it. Man do your chapters have incredible details or what.
 

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Good ^^

That's something I always strive for I guess. The next one is by far my favorite so far, so be sure to bring a tissue and popcorn, haha ;)
I think I'm about 60 per cent done with it now basically.
Does it really have that much feels. I wonder when Hagoromo will start using proper Ninjutsu.
 

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You sure do know how to keep someone expectant.
Like I told Trea, it should land around 10 k words, which would make it almost twice as long as the last one. For comparison, my 6 parts of the Series Finale of TLSoK average around 22 k words each, which again is twice the length of that. To be noted though, the Series Finale was written in Dialogue style, do a loooooooot of those words were spent writing the "names" of the characters who spoke, not to forget the amounts of "spaces" that gathered up in them.

Like I said in my other reply, I should try to push for release of the 6th one tonight being about 75 per cent done with it. That's the least I'll have to do if I really want to make it to the contest this month (it's starting to look bad) xD

PS: One more reply and this chapter reaches 30 posts O__o XD
 

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Oh my, where do I begin? xP =D

At this part of the story, you can clearly see that it's not his previous path of peace that he learned during his stay at the Sacred Sect that is driving him. That change in character and that change in determination is really what will set the stone for what comes next. I needed to have a struggle in Hagoromo's character, ever since the beginning. And seeing how mentally messed up he has become due to all the pain inflicted upon him over the years, it is easy to understand why he gives in under to the pressure, neglecting his previous established path. The next chapter will focus even more on this as he remembers his past self and the path he promised he would take to claim peace. The wizard did warn him to not go for selfish desires, and having already revived Trea, what more will he do in order to complete his goals, and what will be the result of this? Next chapter is going to be long for sure! ;)

Something else that I can reveal is that I'm going to name two upcoming characters after two honorable readers, haha. I've already talked through this with Dani, and I'm glad to announce that you are one of them, haha. Whether their role will be big or small, impact-full or not, good or evil, that is yet to see. Also, I will be having some deaths coming up, that will conflict Hagoromo even more, which should be great.

Thanks for the read and for the great review my friend ;) You know how much I appreciate it ^^

1: Indeed. The thing is that, if you go by the background story provided by the Jubi In TLSoK Returns, it really hit the halfway mark after it was done explaining what happened up until the next chapter. After that he only briefly mentioned their battle, and the Rise of the Titans. So one thing is that I got less content to work with, another is that it's becoming less original, less samurai, and less Sengoku Jidai, and more Naruto and overpowered techniques starting with the 7th one. That is also why I'll be picking up the pace, as the concluding parts of this story doesn't hold as much interest to me as the first half. Still gonna try my best to make it decent enough to read though ;)
Yes, I can indeed see that, you definitely set Hagoromo for that dark path with superb storytelling ;) So you provided a mini preview for the next chapter, eh :)

Wow, I’m shocked at this news! A character named after myself, I thought the day would never arrive XD And Dani as well! That you so much!!! =D You’ve just made me even more excited for the upcoming chapters! ^^

You’re very welcome and I was all too happy to provide you with one! ;)

1 Ah, I see, well thanks for that clarification, it really helped me to understand what you meant and I’m more than sure that you’ll do perfectly fine in the remaining chapters ;)
 

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Yes, I can indeed see that, you definitely set Hagoromo for that dark path with superb storytelling ;) So you provided a mini preview for the next chapter, eh :)

Wow, I’m shocked at this news! A character named after myself, I thought the day would never arrive XD And Dani as well! That you so much!!! =D You’ve just made me even more excited for the upcoming chapters! ^^

You’re very welcome and I was all too happy to provide you with one! ;)

1 Ah, I see, well thanks for that clarification, it really helped me to understand what you meant and I’m more than sure that you’ll do perfectly fine in the remaining chapters ;)
Thanks ^^ I have a great feeling with the next one. It's already shaping up to be one of my all-time favorites, which is kind of crazy. I want it to be perfect though, so I'll be taking my time with it. I'm thinking tomorrow for a release as of now.

Yep, and to top it off, I can say that I named one of the antagonists after you ;)

I'm pumped for this next release, should be a great one! =D

Edit; The next one is finally up! ;):

 

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Wow, such a short chapter now that I scroll through it quickly to finally comment :xD: Okay, here goes nothing:

Damn Hagoromo getting drunk and spilling the beans! =D He's lucky as heck but maybe that stopped the assassin from killing someone important from the Azai or Yukimura's followers.

Now, onto the long awaited revival scene:
What, you were too cheap for some flashy lights? =D

Okay other than that, it was pretty much what I expected, big repercussions (that was actually a longer coma than I expected, which made it seem all the more severe so props on that), pretty freaked out Yukimura and poor Trea! She didn't know what was happening and then Hagoromo goes into a coma for a month... Zzz

I like how the Azai went about deciding their role in this war which we didn't see that much of but that's okay in my book.

Oh dear, poor Yukimura, he's really put all his money on Hagoromo, hasn't he? I would say "let's hope Hagoromo doesn't get too distracted by Nobunaga's revelation" but I've already read next chapter so I won't say it. I'm looking forward to reviewing your next chapter (not really :xD: I'm so lazy!)
 

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Wow, such a short chapter now that I scroll through it quickly to finally comment :xD: Okay, here goes nothing:

Damn Hagoromo getting drunk and spilling the beans! =D He's lucky as heck but maybe that stopped the assassin from killing someone important from the Azai or Yukimura's followers.

Now, onto the long awaited revival scene:
What, you were too cheap for some flashy lights? =D

Okay other than that, it was pretty much what I expected, big repercussions (that was actually a longer coma than I expected, which made it seem all the more severe so props on that), pretty freaked out Yukimura and poor Trea! She didn't know what was happening and then Hagoromo goes into a coma for a month... Zzz

I like how the Azai went about deciding their role in this war which we didn't see that much of but that's okay in my book.

Oh dear, poor Yukimura, he's really put all his money on Hagoromo, hasn't he? I would say "let's hope Hagoromo doesn't get too distracted by Nobunaga's revelation" but I've already read next chapter so I won't say it. I'm looking forward to reviewing your next chapter (not really :xD: I'm so lazy!)
I love your reviews bro!! Now that I'm pretty wasted too, even more!! XD =D

So anyways, you're the first to comment on him getting drunk with those guys but that did indeed happen so yeah xd

Flashy lights? xD What does even that mean, haha. The whole room was filled with light and Yukimura even got blasted backwards. Don't know if you need more than that, haha.

Yeah, that's probably the only thing that I think was a bit "sketchy" so to speak in the chapter. If I had a second go at it, I would probably have stalled Hagoromo going into coma for a bit so to allow them to at least converse some first, haha. I can only imagine what she actually did that month other than tending to Hagoromo.

Hah! Well good to know. The next one is really the one I want to hear from you at so yeah, can't wait for it! ;D And take your time, but no longer than a month! XD
 
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