B.O.We apocalypse RP
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Walking down an alleyway, Mister was met with a large two-way street at the end of it. He spotted a young woman walking down the street. She was fairly pretty and obviously adolescent, but her eyes were an unnatural color. They could be contacts...or she could be a bio-weapon. Only one way to be sure
"Get on your knees, hands on your head!"
Mister said once the girl was close enough. He had his Glock 22 raised at her and would surely shoot if she didn't respond accordingly.
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(As the creator of this RP, you should provide obstacles, enemies and other NPCs to bring this place to life. As it is now, there's literally nothinfor us to do with our characters except walk around and meet each other, which leads to rapid declines in interest and ultimately a dead thread. So, yeah. Provide a main villain(s) and some plot along with what I mentioned above and take the role of a "dungeon master")
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(Do whatever you see fit. That was just my 2 cents. I hope the story's good)
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( naw it's not...your stories are good but I'm Tobi u.u good is not good enough for.me.u.u)
In fright, she instantly holds up her metal weapon prepared to bash whatever came at her. But to her surprise a tall, built male stood in front of her pointing a dangerous weapon, commanding her.
She being a coward drops to her knees. Rosemaria wasn't please with herself for given up so easily, but She could tell he was a person not to play with.
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Having served as a Marine for a few years before becoming a police officer, climbing up in the ranks and qualifying to become an essential member of the SWAT team, Officer Break was simply too trained for this.
The girl's first mistake was looking behind him and her obvious mouthing confirmed his suspicions about a hostile behind him. He simply waited until the unfriendly behind him got close enough for him to judge what kind of weapon he had, if any. The blade on his neck felt like a common switchblade. The highly trained officer responded thusly:
Swiftly freeing one hand from his Glock to grab Erlene's knife-holding arm, he yanks it down and away while shifting his upper body in the opposite direction to prevent it cutting him while his other arm delivers three lighting fast elbows to her ribs to stun her and weaken her grip on her switchblade. He wastes no time flipping her over his shoulder and kneeling on her back to pin her down.
In the mere seconds this would take the ex-soldier, he never took his eyes off of Deliciae
"Drop your weapons, both of you!"
He shouted to the two of them. He didn't plan to kill them, or even arrest them. They were not his true enemies. But one of them had just tried for his life and he wasn't just going to let that slide.
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Swiftly jumping to her feet, all the dreadful fear vanished from her orbs. Determined to injure the male before her. Even though he had displayed some dangerous, impressive skills, Rosemaria wasn't an intelligent female, always allowing her temper to get the better of her. Holding her pole above her head, with speed swung it down towards the his hand holding the gun, with enough force to break a bone.
Her pools glinted with malice.
“ Like hell I will! I'm sending you to HELL!" She had changed, drastically.
Rosemaria couldn't stand at how he had just crushed Erlene in a matter of seconds, although she knew she didn't stand a chance she still was firm on injuring this man.
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(That's fine, Tobi. Just act as if every post you make is a page in a literary novel. Spend a few sentences on your character's thoughts and what led up to them making the decisions that they make and you'll you'll notice you've typed a few paragraphs or one really large one)
Erlene would find it was hard to breathe let alone stand up with Officer Break's knee and entire body weight on her chest, pinning her to the ground.
Meanwhile, Rosemaria had gotten up and came running at him. He really did not want to kill her, but she wasn't giving him much of a choice. Thoughts raced through his mind as he tried to calculate the appropriate courses of action. There was no time to switch to a less lethal weapon, the girl would be on top of him by then.
"Dammit, girl!"
He hissed behind clenched teeth as with a titanic mental struggle, he pulled the trigger. The 450 caliber bullet would be shot out of the Glock at supersonic speeds simply graze the girl's bicep, lacerating the skin enough to cause her so much pain that she would drop her weapon. Because it was only a minor flesh wound, Rosemaria could not possibly die from it and would simply need to bandage it to stop the bleeding later.
For now, however, with Rosemaria racked with pain and and Erlene subdued, he bolstered his pistol and set to handcuffing both of the women.
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(ill try my best)
Erlene: *thinking he must be some Psycho and thinks of some way that i can get me and the new girl both out of this nightmare she keeps thinking why would he hurt humans in this mess and this time looks up at him with anger kneeling hands coughed on my back still hardly breathing over the hit my hair covering my face looks up with rage but fear at the same time*
what the hell is wrong with you !!! cant you see we're already screwed and youre killing more humans..? what hell do you want...!!? money ? food? weapons? or....or you feel you can just use us cause were weak ...do you need something sexual? Then just freaking do what the hell you want and take what you want and let us go!!
*shouts up shaking in rage and also in the fear of what the weird man would do next*
just....just let us go..
*looks down hair covering my face just drops head looking at ground miserable *
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(Great. Just some critique if you don't mind. When a character does something, it makes for a better read if you don't put it inside asterisks like
*plays with a ball of yarn*
Instead, you should just type out exactly what is going on as if you were describing it to someone and leave the symbols behind. You'll find it's much easier and less dictionaly restrictive. Also,if it is not obvious, you might want to explain how your character does this. For example:
Having nothing else to do, he begins to play with his ball of yarn, rolling it back and forth.
It gives the reader a better mental view of what's happening and your character's thought process. Secondly, I'd advise against using notifications like "Eris:". Those are mostly found only in scripts and also superfluous if you only have one character. Instead, simply put "She says" or "Eris says" after the quotation marks. It accomplishes the same thing, only more professionally. Also, there's no need for a space before punctuation.
Finally, I humbly request you reread whatever you type so as to make sure it's grammatically correct before you post it. I mean no offense but the first few seconds of that post wasn't the best thing I've ever read. Just remember to provide as much detail about the character and it's actions in your posts as possible and you'll be a 5-star RPer/writer in no time.)
As Officer Break listened to the girl speak, he could feel nothing but compassion. He had been trained not to pay attention to the pleading of criminals or unfriendlies, but he could tell Erlene wasn't just acting. Once he had finished handcuffing them, he got stood near them and took off his helmet so they could see his face and know the depth of his sincerity.
"My name is Mister Break. I am an ex-Marine, ex-FBI SWAT Team officer. After a SWAT mission, I came home to see my family and half of my neighborhood torn to shreds by what are called bio-weapons. I now search for the whoever caused all this so I can put a stop to it and bring him to justice."
He turned to Erlene to speak directly to her
"Your friend is not dead, she only has a flesh wound. She will be tended to. As for letting you go? No. You two are too ill equipped to deal with all those beasts out there. They'll tear you to shreds. You'll stay with me until I can find somewhere you'll be safe. I am not your enemy."
Gesturing for them to get up, the officer tells them to start walking and he puts his helmet back on.