Have i improved my commentary?

[Donald J Trump]

Last one

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This Is My New Commentary

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I upgraded the quality

I Also Put thumbnails

Please Watch both and see if i have improved from last time!

More constructive criticism would be enjoyed in terms of commentating skills as well as positive feedback!

Like if you Liked !

If there is any topic you would like me to discuss, Please REPLAY! :c

 

[Matt]

no, no you have not

 

[omarsen]

So just in 1 day you are going to say that you improved? LOL

no you haven't ;dd go pratice more

 

[Donald J Trump]

no, no you have not

Ok thanks for feedback! + R E P! PLease tell me what you did not enjoy and how i can improve

So just in 1 day you are going to say that you improved? LOL

no you haven't ;dd go pratice more

Ok thanks for feedback friend! + R E P! Please tell me what you did not enjoy and how i can improve :c

 

[The Rower]

Not that much...to be liked by the masses you need a confident,easy maybe funny intro..don't stutter to much and just be a nice guy.

Being a nice guy and having an attractive or funny persona is the Basics. if you look at Piewdiepie he doesn't know shit about most games he plays and hes kind of dumb...but people like him because of has the nice guy attitude. (this probably isn't the best example. but you know what I mean)

It also helps to have some editing skills. anyways if you just be yourself you are doing it right, but just because your being yourself doesn't mean people will like you.

 

[Bastian]

You did improve slightly. It doesn't come off as natural at all though and that's OK you are new to doing this. The more you make the more comfortable you should feel. <-- obvious yes but you asked for feedback so whatever.

My advice make a months worth of videos or so, don't make them public though and don't watch any of them. Then watch the first and last ( you may be surprised at how much you have improved ) > then ask the forums for advice.