[Predictions] 660 no hope

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sorry for wrong spelling

start of with the 9 and 8tail beast getting pulled in to jubi

madara: u 2 well be extracted fealty beasts

naruto: this is more powerful then the one obito use.. damn im loseing my string don't give up kurama

bee: u heard him Gyuuki

Gyuuki: I don't know how long well I be able to hold on

madara: thinking (I should put up a barrier just to be safe) then he does few hand sings and barrier is put up between the tail beast and SA

SA: how well we help them now

the 5 kage, 2 and 3 hokage: land in front of the SA... we well break this barrier down

in side the barrier

kurama: is no good naruto these chains are too strong and they are sucking up my charka

naruto: don't give up kurama or any one of you we well win this war as one

tail beast: smile

bee: Gyuuki naruto is right we cant give up

Gyuuki: easier said then done

kurama and Gyuuki: in their head with out bee and naruto hearing their talk Gyuuki you know we well be extracted its only matter of time but we can let naruto and bee die

Gyuuki: I know but you know when ever tail beast is extracted the host well die. how do you supposed to save them

kurama: I don't know but we must full the old man last wish

Gyuuki: get a flash back of when the sage said that they will meet someone and he will bring true peace to the world

Gyuuki: kurama I know the old man was talking about naruto and you know that too and so does everyone of us

out of their head

kurama: is no use he got us

naruto: don't give up up guys their has to be a way

in a white room where naruto meat the tail beast

tail beast: is ok naruto our job was to guide you to become what you were meant to be, you help us and we well help you

naruto: I don't care about any of that. we must fight as one

4 tail: we could you could free us just like the old man if you can and this time we well give you a piece of us all of us.

kurama: naruto remember your dad have my other half, as he fist bump naruto

out side

tail beast start forming a tail beast bomb

madara: u think u could hit me with that

but the attack goes in different direction hitting the barrier, as the barrier is crumbling down the tail beast are extracted

madara: so he is still alive, I would expect no less from an uzumaki and he run toward naruto as the barrier fall. the barrier is completely fall the SA see madara standing over naruto with a sward through his chest

SA and everyone watches in horror

A: Bee.......

madara: so who is next

cut to obito

obito: sensei you two must go and help naruto, madara extracted the 9 tail from him he may die

minato and kakashi:!!!!!

black zestu: don't wory he is dead

minato and kakashi:!!!!! that is not possible

Dkurama: he is right but I also sense tail beast alive in him and trying to heal him but you must go now

minato: obito im sorry I couldn't protect you when you need me

obito: madara well not get his way today I well see that

as obito struggle to make hand sings

minato and kakashi : don't do it obtio you well die if u do those hand sing again

black zestu: I wont let u

as minato and kakashi go to help naruto obito fight to take control of his body again

who well win the battle of will

the end
 

UncagedkillaG

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Once you get past the spelling errors its a good prediction
 

Kishi Uzumaki

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It's a good prediction use a spelling and grammar checker that helps to less the errors and faster than checking errors yourself .
 

Mr Hiru

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You need to fix the spelling and grammar mistakes, and also you need to separate dialogues from actions.

"sorry for wrong spelling" is okay for your first prediction, but honestly, not improving in this is really annoying.

Try to keep this in mind.

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As for the prediction, I found it "ok". It had a good pace, but kind of predictable. Keep at the good work.
 

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Nice prediction
 
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