[Other] Needed to vent emotions

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I was feeling pretty shitty today because of, well, things. It eventually culminated into me writing this to vent my emotions a bit. I actually wrote it as a rap, but it's flow is very incoherent and unfitting at times and I won't be recording it. You can go ahead and call me a b*tch, or emo or whatever the f*ck you feel like, I just needed to share this, and where better than this place where I'm anonymous.

This is the instrumental it was written to, well, I was listening to the actual song while writing this, but yeah, you get the picture.
[video=youtube;EFFtOVxtsj4]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EFFtOVxtsj4[/video]

I'm feeling a block
Like the emotion in me has stopped
It feels like your care for me has dropped
Feeling? I cannot
I'm mentally in shock
Cuz your affection lessened
But I guess I learned my lesson
You were truly a blessing
You made me so pleasant
but you're a Goddess, I'm a novice, a peasant
I had so much hope that we could be together
Thinking about us made me feel so much better
Nothing else could make the depression let up
but I guess you got fed-up
Of my constant jealousy
I'm afraid of losing you, especially
Because I won't be able to handle that mentally
And I know that you can be flirtatious
And you said it's painless
But to me it's dangerous
Cuz when you flirt with the f*ck his name is
I get brainless
and I lash out aimless
Cuz there's nothing I can do to change this
And I hate this
But I guess that's the way it's
bound to happen
So forgive me for all my snapping
My head just feels like waves are crashing
Cuz when my emotions get in motion
They collide with the force of an ocean
So many words I've left unspoken
About how much I've felt broken
About how much I adore you
About what'd I do for you
About how the world could shatter
And if you were in my arms, it wouldn't even matter
About how much I must unnerve you
About how much I don't deserve you
Shit, you bring out my sensitivity
but you also bring out the best in me
I don't believe in destiny
But like a little b*tch, I almost felt like it was meant to be
You live so far away
Thousands of miles
Countless feet
How could I compete
With guys you see everyday, and we don't even meet
But as long as you're happy, I'll be fine
Even if you aren't mine
So promise me that you'll survive
No matter what, you'll stay alive
And I sincerely apologize
For the violent rap
I'm not really good at that silent crap
Writing has always been my outlet
Was feeling down, had to vent about it
The violence was just an ugly effect
Of my defect
I never even considered
how'd it make you feel, like that a snake that slither
I was feeling low
I did all I know
And I could've taken you down with my poison
I just tendency for destroying
By now, you must find me annoying
So I'll wrap it up
I just needed to get this off my chest
I forever wish you the best
And if you're ever depressed
Know I'm praying that you'll feel better
Cuz I love you, ******

The stars in the last line is a name, not profanity BTW, I censored it myself.
 
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You should go harder and just spit it. Nice poem though bro:cool:. I was thinking about starting to write my own rhymes as well. Although I have no talent, so it's just a thought for now.=D
 

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I appreciate the thought, but I'd rather not. You don't have to listen to the instrumental btw, it's words in the second spoiler. The instrumental is to be able to read it easier I guess.
Ok, I understand.

*facepalm*

I didn't even open the second spoiler.

Edit: Just read the whole thing, but I read it like Eminem was rapping it. It would be a nice rap.

o__o'
 
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Tired is I, looked good at first glance. Why stop at just a vent? rework it. First drafts are meant to be lousy (compared to what they will be in the end). May the Lord bless you with the wisdom and revelation to assist you in your troubles.

Side note: Things of Legend are not stumbled upon, they are crafted.
 
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