The Legendary Sage of Konoha's Legacy 1 [46]

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So one hundred years has passed-crazy! It was amusing when Naruto called Sasuke arrogant and then in the next second contradicts himself by being the same way lol I liked how you depicted these new genin and their personalities :) So Naruto actually thought that the first exam was easy and the three of them were able to pass. I’m eager to see how the last two tests will progress. Its interesting to note that Naruto has Rinnegan and all three siblings have a doujutsu. I wonder how he acquired it. Nice, I love to see unsupported villages/characters getting attention, like Kusa for example ^^ Well, at least these Kusa genin were decent enough to leave their team alone :) I liked the alliance between the two teams. I liked even more how although Naruto and Sasuke bicker quite a lot, there also able to calm one another down =D Awesome, I was definitely expecting a team possessing an Iwa genin but due to the peculiar occurrence on the rocky structure but it was Zetsu FINALLY!!! ^^ I loved Black/White Zetsu’s insight over Naruto’s family tree lol It didn’t really hit me until now but wow, Naruto the second is one hundred years old and still kind of there with his mind and memory. It sucks that his siblings had already passed and I’m interested to see what else will be revealed! ^^ Fantastic first chapter and I thought it was well thought out ;)

Fun Facts & Author's Note:
It was nice to see that you like a band that I also like such as NICO Touches the Wall! =D

1 You’re definitely correct as I didn’t think that this sequel would turn out like this but I like it and its a very interesting approach. So, The Hobbit was an inspiration-thats cool and I like your insight ;)

2 I enjoy your storytelling thus I’m happy with what you’ve decided ^^

3 I understand and what could ever really be fun about taking a written exam anyways, right? XD

4 Thanks for that bit of insight :)

5 I had wondered for a time if Zetsu would be the main or supporting antagonist for this sequel and well I have my answer now lol And that was some interesting insight for sure ^^

6 Yes, I definitely noticed that you had changed fonts and now I see why lol Oh, I see its almost unreal how quickly you get things done being able to release this chapter two weeks ago!!! What a feat! ;)

7 :p
87 to be exact ;) The fun thing to be noted, is that throughout this first chapter, I gave hints to tie the events of Naruto the 2nd's memories from the Chunin exam 87 years ago, with the events happening at the end of Chapter 30 of Returns. For example, Zetsu stating Naruto taking over as the new Great Toad Sage, which happened only just at the end of Returns and Minato, Jiraiya and Konohamaru visiting a farming village just recently, which Returns actually ended with if you remember the final scene.

I was looking forward to a review like this, thanks bro =p Good to see you being the first and only one so far ;) And yes! I found it intriguing when deciding who to have what doujutsu, as I knew I wanted one of them to have Sharingan and the other to have Byakugan. Then I thought, why not throw Rinnegan into the mix, and make a intriguing explanation on how that's possible, later on (I think it is revealed in Chapter 6 actually :p).

So the jumping in and out of present time layout wasn't confusing at all? I remember when I made the two first chapters of Returns, some people was confused on the timeline, so this time around, I thought I would alter the way I told the story through the present time (Naruto the 2nd and Ikari), and I found this way to fit perfectly.
Indeed, I did try to mix things up a bit in the first one, but the real action starts next time ;) There's so much I want to say at this point, but I guess I shouldn't destroy the surprise, haha :p Thanks bro, means a lot like always ^_^

1: Another funny thing is that judging by 95 % of this chapter, it is easy to think this is a stand-alone, completely original story working its own path. However, with Zetsu appearing at the end, and the events that will start to fall in place from Chapter 3 and onward, it will be easy to understand otherwise I suppose ;)

3: Yeah, glad no one complained about that part xP I mean, I've got complaints in the passed for leaving out or shortening scenes that has been mostly fighting orientated, but so far, no one seems to have complained about me skipping the first part of the Chunin exam in its entirety, which is good.

6: I released this one on Sunday, but I was indeed planning on releasing it two weeks ago, haha :p The next one will be up this week btw, but I'm not sure exactly when yet. Depends on when I get time to read over it one final time in its completed form (all that is left before release).
 

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lol I thought perhaps I may have gotten the timeskip incorrect. Yes, you’re skilled at being able to blend certain different events together ;) And yes, now that you mention it-that does seem very familiar.

You’re welcome and I’m glad that you liked my review ^^ Yes, the doujutsu was a wonderful theme to incorporate and I can’t wait for the explanation for Naruto’s Rinnegan :)

I have to admit in the Return saga, I had gotten confused here and there with the time shifts but with Legacy-I have no problem ^^ Thank you for holding your tongue and not spoiling XD :p

1 I completely agree with this comment and I’m eager to see what happens next! =D

3 lol Right? The majority of people can’t stand written exams and for me-always has been a nightmare XD

6 Wow, releasing the next chapter within this week already!!! You’re just that good ;)
 

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lol I thought perhaps I may have gotten the timeskip incorrect. Yes, you’re skilled at being able to blend certain different events together ;) And yes, now that you mention it-that does seem very familiar.

You’re welcome and I’m glad that you liked my review ^^ Yes, the doujutsu was a wonderful theme to incorporate and I can’t wait for the explanation for Naruto’s Rinnegan :)

I have to admit in the Return saga, I had gotten confused here and there with the time shifts but with Legacy-I have no problem ^^ Thank you for holding your tongue and not spoiling XD :p

1 I completely agree with this comment and I’m eager to see what happens next! =D

3 lol Right? The majority of people can’t stand written exams and for me-always has been a nightmare XD

6 Wow, releasing the next chapter within this week already!!! You’re just that good ;)
Hehe, well that is good to hear :p

As I was writing the chapter where it all gets explained, I was a bit unsure at first how I would make a detailed explanation that made sense, but in the end, I think the way I did describe it was understandable enough ;)

Yeah, the Return Saga (if you like =p) was very bold, ambitious and advanced in term of time-skipping. Tying the future of the 3 first chapters into the end of the sequel, over a whole year after I wrote the first one, was hard. I think I managed to make it as smoothly as I could though, but I technically had to overlap most of chapter 3 into chapter 30 for it to make sense. Even then, some people might not have recognized that from chapter 3, and thought of it as something completely new, forgetting all about what happened in the "future/present" time of the 3 first chapters all together. You however, were probably one of the few to notice my friend :p

6 - The chapter is already out by now, lol ;)
 

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i know it doesnt matter if i comment or not.....but still i would like to say ,i really like this chapter.....
apparently i kinda lost interest in fanfic but after reading starting few line i just couldnt resist to read the whole thing...!!
 
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