[Bleruto FF] The girl with blessed eyes: Chapter IV

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IV

The Sun has set his orange and pink rays to the horizon. A slight wind blew Northwest and the cold in the air has got sharper and heavier. Hisana and Itachi walked through the empty town streets pretending that today's event didn't affect them, yet, deep inside both of them were fighting battles of their own.

" How could I predict what was going to happen? It is completely weird... How come Itachi doesn't have it too...> Instead he has those tree midgets... Aren't we the same? Oh, why has Gin done this to us...? " those were just some of the thoughts wondering around ginger girls mind. She tried to gaze into his big eyes in desire of finding an answer or, at least, a comfort. Her look was flying chaotically over his face, searching, praying for a sign but it was all for nothing.
Itachi was plain serious, not even looking at her, like she wasn't a part of his worries and didn't have anything to do with his darkest secrets... As if she doesn't exsist. And that was what hurt Hisana the most. She felt betrayed and rejected; and by who- her best friend!

Covered in her own thoughts, she didn't even notice when they came to the orphanage door, climbed the stairs to the second floor, or even that they parted and she came into her boring room decorated with all shades of brown in existence. The only thing that got her attention was a soft pillow which she wanted to hug hardly in the lack of a living person's comfort.

...

It was around 2 a.m. when Hisana woke up from her tiring sleep. She dreamed of her parents whom she remembered only trough a thick foggy veil. Only this one was different; this wasn't a nice or warm, neither as foggy as usual. It was an event she has always wanted to forget- the night of their murder...

As she was opening her dark green eyes, some scenes were repeating in front of her eyes again causing her to feel the way she did that night. Fear was spreading all over Hisana's body, she wanted to scream but had no voice, she wanted to run but had no strength. And than, at the berry end of the terror, she remembered; she remembered her mother right before she was slaughtered: her long black hair in a mess yet still circling around her beautiful pale face, tears falling down those small cheeks and her lips- smiling... Smiling like everything's going to be fine, like she wasn't about to die and that tomorrow is just an ordinary day.
But, the smile wasn't what got Hisana's attention this time, it was her eyes. Even though she didn't remember her mothers natural eye color, she knew they weren't red, so, when she sobered up a bit, that made her think... " What if my mother had the same power as I do? I know mine manifests trough the eyes, so maybe it's the same thing! " she thought.

Immediately she got out of her bed and ran to the girls bathroom. When she was certain she was alone, the ginger girl came to the mirrors. She looked deep in her own eyes for a long time, and than she remembered- Momoko, Itachi's ''power'' , told her that her 'eye thingy' goes when she feels relaxed and safe, which means that if she wakes up her fear and the other negative things it will activate! So she got right to it and truly, her eyes did go red. She stared at her reflection for a while just happy because she could control it. Now, she adored her 'brand new eyes' , even a little black spot they had on the perfect blood red color; and all sorts of different things went through her mind: how to use her 'gift', how to hide it from the others...

But, her daydreaming was interrupted by a hard, yet tiny, calm voice coming from the window behind her.

"You are not going to help yourself by posing there you know?"

Hisana wanted to drop dead of fear, she immediately turned to the person and felt a small relief as she saw it was an unknown boy sitting there. He looked younger than her, but his turquoise eyes gave up a soul of an old man and that scared her.

" Who are you and how know about my 'problem'? " she asked in a cold tone while gazing at him. That was when she realized his clothes looked a lot like Gin's. She started to wonder if the two are connected but her thoughts were interrupted, again, but this time in a not-so-calm tone.

" Why are you looking at me like that?! Hitsugaya Toshiro isn't unusual is it? "

" Nooo, but your hair is. " she replied

"...what?.... -.-' " the silver haired boy said

" Hahaha, take it easy kid. "

"What? How dare you I could be your f..gr.. great grandfather!!! " he said obviously angered.

"Lol, if you say so. Oh, and why haven't you answered the other part of my question yet, Toshiro? "

He calmed down, closed his eyes and quietly said " First, call me Hitsugaya Taii-chan, I come from the Soul Society and I'm in charge for your safety. You needn't to know more, just promise me that you wont use your power. "

" How do you expect me to 'help myself' if I don't use it? " she said with anger on her face

" By 'helping' I consider waiting until we find out what exactly that is and not exposing it to anyone... Also, mind your soundings, even the Soul Society can't protect you if you act immature, Kurosaki- chan. "

Hisana wanted to growl at him for calling her 'chan' but the second she opened her mouth he banished.
Standing there, confused, she was shocked to see her friend Keane coming in with messy hair and in her PJ's asking her:

" Hisana, didn't you mention you had math pre-classes on Monday? "

"O shitz, o shiz, o shiz! " she jelled and ran to get ready for school, hoping that she will not fall asleep in any of the following hours.





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You have Toshiro and Itachi's personality down pack!

Also, you have a neat and grandiloquent way of wording passages.

The only thing that got her attention was a soft pillow which she wanted to hug hardly in the lack of a living person's comfort.

^ Now that's deep son! Kudos!
 

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Nice read, Gotta check out the chap 1 and 2 and 3 :omg:
Thanks ^_^
Ok, but I must warn you that my grammar was a bit rusty then :D
Very good .
Thank you
You have Toshiro and Itachi's personality down pack!

Also, you have a neat and grandiloquent way of wording passages.

The only thing that got her attention was a soft pillow which she wanted to hug hardly in the lack of a living person's comfort.

^ Now that's deep son! Kudos!
Oh my God! Thank you so much :T_T:
and here i was silently looking forward the new chapter and you just posted it :D time to read it 10 times again xD
That's telepathy my dear :D XD
I hope you liked it ^_^
This is cool. Haha, toshiro.
Thanks :)
Nice chapter ^^ Very nice descriptions overall as well :)
I'm glad you liked it. Thank you xd
 

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Hahah great read as always ....... Loved reading it ....
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Awesome just awesome .... looking forward for the next one hehe xd

man you are full of talents hina chan and you know how to make my day hehe :bouncy:

 

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I looked both ways and you seem to be getting better and better at this :]
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deep down in my heart.. I just know it... makes me feel something.
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Nice chapter :p All is fine , a bit to soft x) Now read 1-3 ;) :pxd Hope you make more ;) And forgot +1 rep :)
Ok, I'll work on that x) Thanks :D
I looked both ways and you seem to be getting better and better at this :]
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deep down in my heart.. I just know it... makes me feel something.
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Aw, thanks hun! <3
 

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I was surprised by Hisana’s reaction to what had just occurred as she appeared to be fearless but I suppose that was just an exterior and her interior was still that of someone still struggling. Itachi as well as he should have confided in her and he rather kept his feelings to himself. I liked that a little more of Hisana’s past was revealed. I loved that Toushirou made an appearance but what's more shocking is that Hisana seems to be the daughter of Ichigo/Rukia!!! This was another pretty short chapter but I like them short so XD Overall, I liked how this chapter revealed some more things and it will be interesting to see more questions be answered in the coming chapters :)
 
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