[Discussion] Sasuke NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!

[Zidestep]

This is just something I made up while bored.

Scene starts with Naruto bloody and Hinata dead and thrown like a doll. Kakashi is dead. Obito is dead. Guy is dead. Madara and Sasuke live as does the Ten Tails.

Sakura : NO SASUKE!
Naurto : *Tears flowing from his eyes* Please stop...
Sasuke : It's to LATE NARUTO!
Naruto : Just stop..Please. Just make everything stop. Someone please.. PLEASE HELP!
Sasuke : *Thrusts his final Chidori into Narutos side*.
Naruto : I'm sorry...
Toad Sage : NO ! No it wasn't supposed to be like this...

* 3/4th's of the Alliance Fodder are completely wiped out injured/killed.

Madara :*looks at Sakura* Fire Release Great Fireball Jutsu.
Lee : I WON'T LET MY CRUSH DIE LIKE THIS 8TH GATE OPEN!
Madara : This chakra...
Lee : *Epic Taijutsu moment*
Sakura : Hes moving as fast as Naruto!
Madara : What is this!
Madara : Susanno!
Lee : *Crushes Susanno with 1 kick*
Madara : This power!
Lee : *Rips Madara body in half with 1 kick*
Ten Tails : *Still trapped in the seal even tho all the hokages have died*
Lee : Falls to the ground.
Sakura : No! *Starts Healing Lee*
Sakura : *Hes barely alive*

*Back to Sasuke*

Sasuke : Your still alive Naruto, but barely.
Sasuke : Why don't you watch the ones you love suffer and feel the pain OF EVERY UCHIAH TO EVER LIVE!
Sasuke : KIRIN!
Naruto : SAKURA!
Naruto : No..Not everyone..Kakashi, Guy, Sakura, Tsunade, Neji, Ten Ten, Chouji, Bug Man, (and many more)

^^That was part 1 guys it was my first time ever doing this at all. Good or bad? If its good i'll make a part 2.

 

[NarutoSamaKama]

OMG noooooooooooooooooo!!!!!! It cant happen like this!

 

[Narutohokage7]

I enjoyed the appearence of Bug Man.

 

[Akira678]

This is so depressing.....:T_T:

 

[Mr Hiru]

It seems you want Sasuke to be bad, that badly...

I'll give you a tip:

Ten Tails : *Still trapped in the seal even tho all the hokages have died*

Actually, they are dead. Maybe you try to say 'disabled' or 'sealed'

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Maybe being more descriptive, less actions and more words, could make this more emotional and get readers in tension.

Overall, it's good. Keep it up.

 

[jdubb]

Apparently you believe sasuke can just take
Naruto down when ever he wants.... Not true

 

[FemmeFatale]

Lol at Lee Soloing Madara
And Sakura not being able to avoid a basic jutsu like that one.

 

[Hypemaster]

I liked two things about it:

1)Lee going ham on madara

2) Sasuke killing sakura (i thinks?)

 

[Zidestep]

Lol at Lee Soloing Madara
And Sakura not being able to avoid a basic jutsu like that one.

They are all bloody and severely wounded.

 

[RoguePatriot]

I liked it =D

 

[Zidestep]

Thanks guys for the tip. Next time i'll try to be a little more clear on the scene and whats actually happening.

 

[Punk Hazard]

I read the title in Kevin Hart's voice.

 

[Mypower]

Nice I liked the tension.

 

[dvmaz]

Yes yes yes....More deaths yes. Now this is a war. rep

 

[Nindo Protecter]

Oh man this is good but it cant happen like this

 

[Naruto D Luffy]

Bug man name is Shino

 

[Cooh]

Lee crushing Madara along with his Susanoo - roflcopter