NarutAwesome Rap Battle Final Round: Halfmoonuzumaki v.s wridacule

[TheSiege]

ROUND 1: HalfMoonUzumaki

Your entry to the final round was nicely executed. you found some info on his profile and brought it up and used it against him. the only thing I'd worry about with this is if he likes wrestling, and knows a lot about it, he can easily flip it on you so hopefully you also have knowledge about wrestling to defend urself with (although from ur initial attack it looks like your good on that)

this part about made me laugh really hard
"You told us you had a lady, what's the name of that ***** again?
It wouldnt by any chance, happen to be Morr-i-gan?
Wrida's head over heels for this Bat Wing B*tch's nipples,
Those tits are not real..you're f*ckin fawnin over pixels!"

I like how you brought up the fact that wridacule had morrigan as his ava for a long time (and it's his profile picture). pointing out how pathetic it is for a person to be attracted to an animated girl is a strong hit. (although some people on here might get defensive considering how much love for hinata there is around here on the base)

now NA didn't like this part, but I actually thought it was really funny

"But Wrid, I'll give you props, you defeated the Hype, man,
But rest assured that n*gga dont bring the heat like i can,
You in for a real challenge, none of that Cold War weak shit,
Cause when im makin bombs im guar-un-damn-tee-ing that they hit."

yes it's more directed towards NvG, but it's still effective as a way to talk yourself up and make urself seem better than an amazingly talented rapper like he is. but please leave it with one reference, this extra line :"According to some, this aint even the real finals fight,
Maybe if these haters had won, i might consider 'em being right," is just unnecessary.

your ending was very nicely done, with a rhyme that you kept going for the last 9 lines. very well done!

 

[repulse]

ROUND 1


1. The thought of Wrida beating Half is straight f*ckin wrid-iculous,
Sorry for the wait boys, but now half's here to wrid us of this,


2. A peep at your page tells me you're a wrestlin fan,
Well son i run this shit, call me Vincent Mcmahon,
The Brahma Bull of Rap, Hit you with a Lyrical Elbow,
You think you can Beat The Streak? You Punk Nigga, Hell No!
Im here to take the Gold on this Grandest Stage of 'Em All,
And like Foley off that cage, You in for a helluva fall.
Aint nothin gonna Shield you from my white-hot wrath, Fella.
Imma make a f*ckin fool of you,#Santino Marella.



3. You told us you had a lady, what's the name of that ***** again?
It wouldnt by any chance, happen to be Morr-i-gan?
Wrida's head over heels for this Bat Wing B*tch's nipples,
Those tits are not real..you're f*ckin fawnin over pixels!


4. You in for a real challenge, none of that Cold War weak shit,
Cause when im makin bombs im guar-un-damn-tee-ing that they hit.




5. Cause now im f*ckin ready and ive made your end my f*ckin mission,
Set to spit pure fire with each and every emission


6. You rappin the verbal technician,lyrical rap magician,
The Linguistical Physician is in and he's dealin out rap prescriptions,
To silence all the doubt that i lack intuition,
Cause you can never expect my flow, shits like the spanish inquisition,
And imma win like i entered, without an ounce of competition.

1. I like the play on his name, but it's very strong in my point of view.

2. Hmm, I dig how you incorporate something he likes into your rhymes. Well done with the Mcmahon reference, but I've got to say, the 4th line was my favorite one. Thinking about that Foley fall makes me cringe, good stuff here....the last line, wasn't Santiago a championship belt holder once?

3. Now it gets a bit more personal...

4. You're more or less attacking NvG here, but he's not in the final. This isn't as strong as it could possibly be.

5. Why must everyone say they spit fire?! It gets repetitive.

6. You finish strongly, with a good use of multis! They way you dismiss every other opponent you have or could have faced has me expecting more of you in the next rounds.

 

[SonictheHedgehog]

ROUND 2- Half: You started up with a "hold it" kind of vibe which I liked because you were calling out how he was trying to call it early. I didn't really like how you brought out the rest of the first verse after saying you'd depart his head from his neck (the first time) because you repeated it in a way. I liked how you referenced Sgt Slaughter's weight and said he'd never hold a title belt around his waste, which could be taken more than one way, which I also liked. You did better on this verse, and you used the pixels line from your first round rap against him again, and compared it to you getting real action ("Getting your d*ck pulled"). Your next lines are what stood out to me here.

"You-consider-yourself-my-fatha?
Well-call-me-a-son-of-a-bitch."

I like how you took his previous line and used it against him with the "son of a bitch" comment. It was a good way to counter. You went on to tell wrida he wasn't anything special and countered his "failed imitation" comment. I did like how you came out with it, and I liked even more how you compared him to you in terms of actions/thill (Walk in the park, Superman Coaster). Your next lines didn't stand out as much to me, even though I did like the way you put them out there, because your ending was what interested me because it was well worded and you bumped your own title up saying you were a supernova. Really good ending.

Wrida: You started off good, but it didn't pop out at me like your next lines did. You took the son of a bitch line and put your daddy lines right back at him. You were putting out some lines like "You kiss your mother with those flaming lips?" and "I'll ground you" like a father would say. I liked your next lines because you went from the father lines to referencing the skeet lines in the same way. I like how you connected them here by using the old little brother jealousy scenario to your advantage. You even pulled a mom joke in there and made it literal before calling yourself the original double timer to counter Half's lines. Your next couple of lines were okay, but I did really like when you hit the play on with the "Luke Cage" line. Then you went on and said you'd break his hymen since he was p*ssy which I think was a good way to pull that kind of line. You continued with the "copy of me" type flow and said you have to take back your style from Half. I liked these lines:
"that's why even if you sold your soul to satan
the end result would still be you upon the pavement"

You brought that one out really well and pushed back his roller coaster line. I liked your next couple of lines because they were full of references and you said Half wasn't even any meal for you, then told him he'd be the next to disappear with a solid ending.

 

[SonictheHedgehog]

ROUND 3- Half: I liked how you began taking his daddy lines and called his "original" "traditional". You bumped yourself up well in the next couple of lines, and I liked your DMC reference. You pulled some good drug references and compared yourself as Superman to him as Batman, which was pretty good too. I like how you ended this verse. Your next verse's beginning was kind of good and bad at the same time. You kept referencing NvG and it felt like you were spitting at him more than Wrida for a minute. When you got out of that and hit your "hymen" counter, the verse got better. You started bashing his skill which was good too, and your next bar was good. You pulled some more drug references in a different way and turned around his Liberachi comment. However, what took me was this:

"Want me to call you daddy cause your gay lust is famished,
Motherf*cker ill Mummy you, leave you wrapped all up in badage,
Cause every word i spit is set to f*ckin do lethal damage,"

At this point your flow hit max and I liked how you didn't drop it, and finished with a hard insult.

Wrida: I liked how you began mostly because the way you countered his daddy counters with a mom joke without it being generic. I also liked how you said you'd clear it up for the doubters and referenced Half's name by calling him half of a man. Your rabbit line was great. This line stood out for me here:
"I aint NEVER been a guppy, BORN-in-shark-infested-water"
It was good not just because you gave off a hardcore vibe to counter, but because it relates to the life story you told in your battle with NvG. Your next bars were good, and you used some bomb lines and carried it out well. I really liked the "they might've made-it a hot-line, I MADE IT A HOT SONG" line. You even followed up by saying you made other inspirations into your own sh*t which was good, and then you killed it with this:

"call-ME suspect in a line then talk about my sore d*ck?!
a prime example how sh*t is always twisted in the streets
cuz which-of-us-JUST said he'd catch some sh*t up in his teeth?????".

It was a good way to turn around his bars about you being suspect. I liked the way you followed up and then came with references from your battle with NvG as Half mentioned him by bringing back the bully lines and saying you'd be happy to fill in. I like how you pushed back the mummy lines:
"a mummy? A MUMMY?! fine I'm king tut
and bes' belive when the f*ckin coffin's sealed-up
NA will drop me down my belt cuz f*ck nigga guess-what
HALF of a moon just isn't nearly hot enough"

You just plain battered there, and then you continued with play-on when you said "f*cking with God's favorite SUN". I like how you used that to connect with your previous lines. You finished off really well stating your belt size, pretty much telling NA to go ahead and get the title ready for you. It was a good finish for an amazing finale.

 

[SonictheHedgehog]

OVERALL-

Round 1- Wrida
Round 2- Half
Round 3- Wrida

This Finale was amazing, and it was pretty hard for me to call because it seemed you guys were evening each other out and you both ended up making whatever flaws in your raps seem small

Incredible battle.

The Winner by a hair by my vote is Wridacule

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This battle was awesome, and you guys put forward some killer stuff for everybody. Really was fit for the Main Event.

 

[halfmoonuzumaki]

xD I appreciate the judging Youth, and im glad you finally finished because i didnt want to look like an asskisser before you voted, but did you draw that sig yourself? Its really well done

 

[SonictheHedgehog]

xD I appreciate the judging Youth, and im glad you finally finished because i didnt want to look like an asskisser before you voted, but did you draw that sig yourself? Its really well done

Thanks, good battle btw

And no, but funny you ask because I'm drawing my own sig right now. XD

 

[halfmoonuzumaki]

Thanks, good battle btw

And no, but funny you ask because I'm drawing my own sig right now. XD

Thanks Did anybody on the base happen to draw your current one? Or was it just something you came across? And good luck on the drawing process, Wish i had the patience to learn how to draw anything even somewhat decent.

 

[SonictheHedgehog]

Thanks Did anybody on the base happen to draw your current one? Or was it just something you came across? And good luck on the drawing process, Wish i had the patience to learn how to draw anything even somewhat decent.

Came across it on DeviantArt actually, don't know the artist myself but I'm tryng to learn from him.

 

[NarutAwesome]

sorry about the day late response but I will judge round 2 and round 3 before monday ends,

 

[repulse]

[video=youtube;HnysPxK995U]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HnysPxK995U[/video]


ROUND 1


1. hol'-up, f*ck nigga get your story straight
are you battlin me or askin nvg upon a blind date?!


2. I cobra clutch this microphone and command the troops
what's a man-made bomb when you're battlin ZUES?!!
and before you make a boast "like kratos I blah blah blah"
I sin cara flip this shit #huri-can-ran-ahhhh!


3. well I ron-do wit-this-flow as I do my thang
the more I think about it, that role could use your touch
cuz his game and your game are both in need of a crutch


4. turn this to a murder scene, no c s i
morrigans on my homepage that offends you why?
aint room on this site for-two b*tches that suck?
or is that the REAL title that you covet so much?


5. POP! thas the end of...HALF an uzumaki
or better yet the end of a failed wrida copy
member when you first came and tried to be-me so-bad
I feel like a proud dad..."they grow up so fast..."


6. little candy bars full of coconut fluff
with highlited punch-lines that are the oposite of tough



7. so get back to the side-lines and accept the hand that's dealt
and narutawesome please go and GET MY BELT!!!!!!

1. I was wondering the same thing. Clearly no bullsht, and straight to the point. Starting out strongly here.

2. Zeus, as in the Greek God who can make shit blow up with the destructive power of his lightning? There's no need for bombs here...And by dismissing a way to flip your Zeus line was good insurance....Sin Cara is known for his acrobatic moves in the air, and connecting it with your flip of his line is creative.

3. This is a great round for you so far. Comparing him to a person who isn't living up to expectations is good. Not only are you flipping his lines, you're attacking him at the same time!

4. Addressing his attack on your fascination with Morrigan...you set up the question as a blow to his ego well.

5. Buuuuuuurn! This instrumental is working wonders for you. Got daaaaaamn

6. Hmm, clever way to "highlight" his bolded words like that...

7. You finished this Round STRONG.

 

[repulse]

Round 1 goes to wridacule. He was on-point, tackling your lines, flipping them, and rendering your attacks practically useless halfmoon. I felt you could have started off better

 

[repulse]

[video=youtube;KZKeH5k4JMU]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KZKeH5k4JMU[/video]

05)

ROUND 2

1. Go-and-get-your-belt? Nigga-we-just-gettin-started,
You-the-second-"Zues"-I-fought-and-you're-just-as-Re-tarded,
Tryna-f*ck-With-The-City-Of-Champs-Boy-Our-Final's-Wins-Are-Well-Charted
And-You-Act-Like-Double-Time-Is-Your's-and-you-try-to-guard-it
But-This-right-heres-the-part-where-your-head-gets-Departed...
From ya neck...
Mic Check Mic Check-
This is the part where half cuts your head from your neck,

2. Now Wrida,
I think its really rather proper,
Your washed up ass went called yourself Sgt. Slaughter,
Cause he a fat f*ckin waste, elderly and out of shape,
And never will he hold a title belt around his waist.



3. And just a second, did you just say i was competing with..
A video game girl over who you'd be skeetin with?
So i guess Wrida really is fudge-packer certefied..
Unless its over a vidya game, cause he aint even denied..
He's like "What of it? Yeah i jerk off to pixels,
Look at pics of princess peach while im gettin my d*ck pulled,
By a man..hopefully that man'll be Halfmoon,
Cause he spittin raw and dirty like uncut-National-Lampoon."



4. You-consider-yourself-my-fatha?
Well-call-me-a-son-of-a-bitch.
You-think-you-goin-any-farthah?
Nah-you-headin-straight-in-ditch.
Im-a-lyrical-f*ckin-scholah,
Spittin-lyrical-f*ckin-shit.
Think-you-can-do-it-bettah?
Then-You-better-start-to-spit.



5. Do you honestly think you're the base's only double timer?
The only one with metaphors packed with punchliners?
Failed imitation? More like the new updated version,
The one who has built in lyrical dispersion,



6. Your flow's like a walk in a park,while mines the Superman 'Coaster,
Im a Hill Top Mansion, you a shack for foreclosure,
Im a Royal F*ckin Flush, you just a wild-card Joker,
Im a Dark F*ckin Night, Wit lips 'quipped wit a flamethrower




7. You spittin vinegar sh*t, im spittin lyrical ammonia,
With a flow so sick its givin niggas pneumonia,
My flow is next gen, your's is stuck in the protozoa,
And im blowin up your whole spot, yeah this sh*t is over.
F*ck A Halfmoon you can call me Supernova.

1. Dope, dope way to set off the 2nd Round! I'm thoroughly enjoying what the Zeus line implies ha.

2. Vicious flip on his Sgt. Slaughter line! I found myself laughing at the last two lines...oh man hahaha

3. Nice, nice, nice! You somehow fit in something to accuse him of! The last line has me thinking yes, specifically because of this Round...

4. This double time is well-executed! You flipped his father line partially, but wrapped it up nicely with the double time.

5. The build-up to what you wanted to say in the last line is good. Lyrical dispersion? I'm enjoying your choice of words here...

6. The imagery you're using is interesting. I assume by walk in the park you mean his flow is routine, and not exiting. How you compare your flow to the Superman Coaster is great, making your flow adrenaline-pumping, full of action, the opposite of a walk in a park. The comparisons you use are amazing.

7. You started, maintained, and finished this Round beautifully. That's all I can say. There's no need for an explanation on the killer closing lines you wrote halfmoo....I mean, Supernova.

 

[repulse]

[video=youtube;nXQV_Ii7g1I]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nXQV_Ii7g1I[/video]

ROUND 2

1. your city is...WELL-known for racism and twats.
bill got-yall hella rings and NO respect he got
ray gave yall the finger and went to the beach
the pats aint-won-sh*t since the league wont-let-em cheat



2. son-of-b*tch?! you kiss your mother with them flamin lips?(your words not mine )




3. I love it how these youngsters think they rattle my nerves
cuz I don't respond to every line, like I hang on all your words
if you must know, momma moon catches all my c*m
so it's really literal when I call you SON



4. I'm not the ONLY double timer but the ORIGIONAL ONE
the ispiration for "YOUR" style and where you're gettin it from!




5. bruce wayne aint SH*T witout the belt and the suit
come and bang wit luke cage and lose-ya-life-in-the-booth!
cuz no matter what you shoot, to-them-bullets I'm proof



6. your flows-a con-flict diamond! it's stolen how you're rhymin
since you wanna act a p*ssy, watch me break ya f*ckin hymen
paaaause.....lol keep your panties on f*cker
wirdacule is only here to make you suffer



7. I'ma "this" and I'ma "that", well you're a b*tch that's pretty wack
you're f*ckin up my style, I'ma have to take it back
there needs to be a "Q" if-you re-fer to me as shaq
since I broke your mothers rim when i got-up-in that crack
every line I spit is crack, thas why you try to make it
but the fiends get mad when the form-u-la's mistaken



8. that's why even if you sold your soul to satan
the end result would still be you upon the pavement



9. I'd never compare my lines to-a roller coaster
cuz the ride I take em on is NEVER over
it's Mr never sober, against half n half my-rhymes-r-sloppy
Mr coacaine against Mr liberachi
oh somebody stop me! I'm on my jim carey
wait that's the wrong movie, since I'm talkin to this fairy



10. it don't take a pet detective, to change your perspective
and understand I'm-not-the-man ANYONE should mess-with
you're not even breakfast! nor lunch or any meal
I kill more sh*t than drunk asians at the wheel
It's wrida copperfield, so huddle close and listen here
as I make a-NOTHER mother-F*CKER disapear!!!

1. :O smh, this is THE WAY to raise the bar! The sports team references draw out and expand upon what you wrote in Round 1 seamlessly.

2. Ahahaha, hilarious flip right here!

3. MY GOD. The first two lines serve as a perfect lead-in to your next two punchlines, and boy do they pack a punch!. There's NO way anyone could have missed that!

4. You just keep addressing his lines, and hitting him harder and harder.

5. Setting him up as Bruce Wayne, and yourself as Luke Cage, well, things won't be pretty for him...

6. Incorporating women's physiology like that is refreshing haha

7. This round is astounding. Both of you are definitely getting into your A-game. ****, oh man....

8. It's commonly thought that if you sell your soul, you gain success and become the best at what you practice..and the way you utilize it in this is great.

9. Starting out with a fantastic flip, strong filler, then topping it off with The Mask reference....

10. Playing with Jim Carrey's roles like these is good shit. Another hilarious punchline! Hahahaha! Astonishing way to close the round, wrida.

 

[repulse]

Round 2: Ok, Round 1 was somewhat close, but Round 2 is when things started poppin'. Halfmoon, you improved on your 1st Round. You brought it, up to wrida's front porch....but then wrida opened the door, took it inside, and improved on it some more. wridacule's entire Round was filled with A+ material, while yours halfmoon was an A-....

This Round goes to wridacule. Congrats!

 

[wridacule]

thank you's to youth and repulse for taking out the time and calling the battle!!!!!

 

[NarutAwesome]

sorry guys, family emergency yesterday which prolonged my judgement, I'll get to it today or wednesday, my sister had her baby yesterday and my mom and I went with her....sorry....I'll get the other judges on it as well

 

[halfmoonuzumaki]

Its all good charles dont even sweat it, congrats on being an Uncle my dude!

 

[NarutAwesome]

Go-and-get-your-belt? Nigga-we-just-gettin-started,
Round 2

Halfmoonuzumaki

You-the-second-"Zues"-I-fought-and-you're-just-as-Re-tarded,
Tryna-f*ck-With-The-City-Of-Champs-Boy-Our-Final's-Wins-Are-Well-Charted
And-You-Act-Like-Double-Time-Is-Your's-and-you-try-to-guard-it
But-This-right-heres-the-part-where-your-head-gets-Departed...
From ya neck...
Mic Check Mic Check-
This is the part where half cuts your head from your neck,

I really liked your beginning, the hypens were kind of odd but all in all it was solid. The Zeus line was great. You’re creating better ways to knock him down. I also liked the decapitation line. The only part you didn’t need was the mic check mic check part.....


Now Wrida,
I think its really rather proper,
Your washed up ass went called yourself Sgt. Slaughter,

lmao here, using the funny approach to knock down what he said is a good way to go......you’re making fun of him while saying he’s a washed up ass rapper, you’re doing better than round one, you seemed to be in the zone, I think it’s because you had to go first, but it doesn’t excuse you from some of your poor executions in round 1, you feel me

Cause he a fat f*ckin waste, elderly and out of shape,
And never will he hold a title belt around his waist.
And you can Sin-Cara-Botch-Flip your shit off the roster,
Cause much like Heyman on Monday, you a f*ckin imposter!
Dont get it twisted i aint dissin you on the wrestling,
Im just here to break your arm like Del-Rio the mexican

showing you know your stuff and I like how you’re going from topic to topic here, you’re not staying on wrestling for too long,

And just a second, did you just say i was competing with..
A video game girl over who you'd be skeetin with?

nic insult here, flaming his girl normally is good but it makes the opponent hella mad so I hope you keep going in here

So i guess Wrida really is fudge-packer certefied..
Unless its over a vidya game, cause he aint even denied..
He's like "What of it? Yeah i jerk off to pixels,
Look at pics of princess peach while im gettin my d*ck pulled,
By a man..hopefully that man'll be Halfmoon,
Cause he spittin raw and dirty like uncut-National-Lampoon."

didn’t really care for the dik pulled line, it was weird to me but everything before that was better, the princess peach line was nice

You-consider-yourself-my-fatha?
Well-call-me-a-son-of-a-bitch.

damn, you beat me to this phrase, I literally was planning on using this against someone,lol, great flip here, every rapper say something like I’m your father and etc, so great use here.

You-think-you-goin-any-farthah?
Nah-you-headin-straight-in-ditch.

heading toward no where, continuing the fire, you’re on a roll

Im-a-lyrical-f*ckin-scholah,
Spittin-lyrical-f*ckin-shit.
Think-you-can-do-it-bettah?
Then-You-better-start-to-spit.


Do you honestly think you're the base's only double timer?
The only one with metaphors packed with punchliners?
Failed imitation? More like the new updated version,
The one who has built in lyrical dispersion,

damn, this part was hot here, I really was into to it, waiting for the next line to match the fire of the last. and you kept that up, the updated version line was killer

That has the crazy shit that you just HAVE to see in person,
Like a 180 karat diamond, while you just, another zircon,
Judges watch, while i go B'Serk on... this poser,
Your flow's like a walk in a park,while mines the Superman 'Coaster,

I’m digging it, feeling the follow, and it’s like a roller coaster reading through your raps, can’t tell what you’ll say next

Im a Hill Top Mansion, you a shack for foreclosure,
Im a Royal F*ckin Flush, you just a wild-card Joker,

using card game reference, lol

Im a Dark F*ckin Night, Wit lips 'quipped wit a flamethrower
Cause everything i spit is fire, call youSouth Dakota,
You spittin vinegar sh*t, im spittin lyrical ammonia,
With a flow so sick its givin niggas pneumonia,
My flow is next gen, your's is stuck in the protozoa,
And im blowin up your whole spot, yeah this sh*t is over.
F*ck A Halfmoon you can call me Supernova.

the ending was really good, my only problem was the 2 lines before it, you didn’t need them so they killed the suspense of the ending, maybe it’s just me, but great ending verse none the less, you did better in round 2 than 1, I understand going first is tough but sometimes you have to be able to and spit fire

 

[NarutAwesome]

wridacule

your city is...WELL-known for racism and twats.
bill got-yall hella rings and NO respect he got
ray gave yall the finger and went to the beach
the pats aint-won-sh*t since the league wont-let-em cheat

good beginning but not a great way to start off round 2 of the FINALS, personally, I would have attacked him with everything I had, but this was more of a chill start than anything else, so you're beginning wasn’t as hot as it should have been

son-of-b*tch?! you kiss your mother with them flamin lips?(your words not mine )
keep it up and I'ma ground you and take your sh*t
take out the trash , cut the yard, and get off my d*ck!
before I make your f@ggot *ss go and get me a switch

lmao, putting yourself in the parental position again and halfmoon as the child, funny as hell, I was laughing throughout that entire verse, especially the switch part

such a defiant child! this reflects bad on me
so respect your elders 'fo I put you over my knee

again with parental over child lines, I’m still laughing too

you don't want no little brothers? your jealousy's sweet
cuz why else would you give a f*ck where I skeet?!
I love it how these youngsters think they rattle my nerves
cuz I don't respond to every line, like I hang on all your words

this was more of elaboration than attacking, wasn’t really needed

if you must know, momma moon catches all my c*m
so it's really literal when I call you SON
I'm not the ONLY double timer but the ORIGIONAL ONE
the ispiration for "YOUR" style and where you're gettin it from!

damn, it’s like your speeding up and then slowing down and speeding up again....this part was hot, the momma moon, orgininal one, and getting it from line was funny and hard hitters, you attacked 3 of his lines with 3 of your lines that quick, greta use of time, space, and words

oh and now you're del-rio? well listen mi amigo
I might be a throw back thas as old as coleco
but ya chance to-win-is-zero,a copy of-the-hero
I-been makin-devils-cry, you're just a mother-f*ckin nero

still bringing the fire, this was good here, not a lot of word play or metaphors and etc, seemed like you were going for the straightforward approach

bruce wayne aint SH*T witout the belt and the suit
come and bang wit luke cage and lose-ya-life-in-the-booth!

killer, just plain killer here, the bruce wayne part, i can’t say anything else

cuz no matter what you shoot, to-them-bullets I'm proof
your flows-a con-flict diamond! it's stolen how you're rhymin
since you wanna act a p*ssy, watch me break ya f*ckin hymen
paaaause.....lol keep your panties on f*cker
wirdacule is only here to make you suffer

damn, just damn, you’re maintaining the fire here and you kept it going for the last 3 verses too, impressive

I'ma "this" and I'ma "that", well you're a b*tch that's pretty wack
you're f*ckin up my style, I'ma have to take it back

saying he’s copying you, I think that’s the message of this rap, you mentioned you being his father and him copying you and how you’re the original one, great

there needs to be a "Q" if-you re-fer to me as shaq
since I broke your mothers rim when i got-up-in that crack
every line I spit is crack, thas why you try to make it
but the fiends get mad when the form-u-la's mistaken
that's why even if you sold your soul to satan
the end result would still be you upon the pavement

saying the devil can’t even help him, damn, that was the only line that stood out to me here

I'd never compare my lines to-a roller coaster
cuz the ride I take em on is NEVER over
it's Mr never sober, against half n half my-rhymes-r-sloppy
Mr coacaine against Mr liberachi

damnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn, this is getting good, can’t wait to hear the finisher

oh somebody stop me! I'm on my jim carey
wait that's the wrong movie, since I'm talkin to this fairy
it don't take a pet detective, to change your perspective
and understand I'm-not-the-man ANYONE should mess-with
you're not even breakfast! nor lunch or any meal
I kill more sh*t than drunk asians at the wheel
It's wrida copperfield, so huddle close and listen here
as I make a-NOTHER mother-F*CKER disapear!!!

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